Rumple Foreskin
The AH Patriarch
- Joined
- Jan 18, 2002
- Posts
- 11,109
Boxlicker,He inserted his turgid member into her vagina, which had become quite moist, and repeated the act numerous times. She expressed her appreciation of his action and urged him to continue and to do it well.
You really know how to get a guy's blood boiling; not to mention his member turgid.
Now about the second exapmple: "Over and over, he rammed his big, stiff cock into her dripping wet pussy. "Oh, God," she cried, joyously, "that's good. Fuck me. Fuck me good.""
Obviously, that's a tad more stimulating. However and IMHO, there are too many adjectives. The double adjectives "big, stiff" and "dripping wet" are overkill and slow the pace. The same is true of "cried joyously."
Of course, the last time I checked, the Nobel folks still hadn't gotten around to giving me their prize for literature-so what the hell do I know?
Rumple Foreskin