Anyone care to join in a daisy chain?

[driphoney]

I'm new, but I'm in...! I must go to church to ask for forgiveness but then when I get back I'll have a clean slate to catch up on all the stories you've written... I'll make sure to RCV each. MMM can't wait to get back home!

I only have one story so far... (been told I posted it in the wrong category ... oh well) below is the link. Hope you enjoy!!!

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=453037

Hmm. Wonder where I've read a similar story.

Okay. RVC'd.

 

[jeleane]

heres mine

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=452947

 

[Ginger_Girl]

Hmm. Wonder where I've read a similar story.

Okay. RVC'd.

... ?!?! really? point me to it. Seriously. I just came upon literotica and smut stories... part of re-invinting myself after divorcing a very emotionless marriage. This story is a modified version of a story I wrote about 6 months back while trying to save my marriage. He didn't even read it until after I asked for the divorce (ASS!)

 

[driphoney]

... ?!?! really? point me to it. Seriously. I just came upon literotica and smut stories... part of re-inventing myself after divorcing a very emotionless marriage. This story is a modified version of a story I wrote about 6 months back while trying to save my marriage. He didn't even read it until after I asked for the divorce (ASS!)

I wasn't accusing you of anything, just not common to find first/second person in present tense stories/stokers. Also, perhaps an overabundance of ellipses, too.

Though an ellipse gives the intended lengthened pause effect, it rubs some people the wrong way. I'm not sure if I'd do them again, though an ellipse is longer than a comma, and is perfectly legit, especially when a period is inappropriate.

You're style reminded me of one I did, that's all.

And sorry about your divorce.

 

[Ginger_Girl]

I wasn't accusing you of anything, just not common to find first/second person in present tense stories/stokers. Also, perhaps an overabundance of ellipses, too.

Though an ellipse gives the intended lengthened pause effect, it rubs some people the wrong way. I'm not sure if I'd do them again, though an ellipse is longer than a comma, and is perfectly legit, especially when a period is inappropriate.

You're style reminded me of one I did, that's all.

And sorry about your divorce.

Drip... LOL... I wasn't feeling accused.!! I genuinely wanted to know. I do like the ellipse... I guess i really pull it from Mamma Mia... "dot dot dot." he he.

ALSO.... no apologies about the divorce!!! BEST thing i've ever done!

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

Drip... LOL... I wasn't feeling accused.!! I genuinely wanted to know. I do like the ellipse... I guess i really pull it from Mamma Mia... "dot dot dot." he he.

ALSO.... no apologies about the divorce!!! BEST thing i've ever done!

I agree with Driphoney. Ellipses--IMO--are okay in moderation. Found there were just a bit too many.

I RVC'd. You really put yourself out there for a first story. Gotta give you props for that. Hope you find someone special to give all that sweet loving to now that you're free

 

[driphoney]

Drip... LOL... I wasn't feeling accused.!! I genuinely wanted to know. I do like the ellipse... I guess i really pull it from Mamma Mia... "dot dot dot." he he.

ALSO.... no apologies about the divorce!!! BEST thing i've ever done!

I agree with Driphoney. Ellipses--IMO--are okay in moderation. Found there were just a bit too many.

I RVC'd. You really put yourself out there for a first story. Gotta give you props for that. Hope you find someone special to give all that sweet loving to now that you're free

I shouldn't post comments when I'm tired. I meant to be suggesting that both of us in our second person stories used too many ellipses, or might be perceived as overusing them ... (tee-hee) though some writers and reviewers seem to hate them no matter how they're used. And, in my case, if I were to do it again, I might eliminate some of them.

And Bianca, I really am going to finish your story, but it's more than a stroker. Even now I'm listening to a lecture while posting (good thing I only need a 75% to get my "A".) But this week, I have a break between classes, so plan to do a lot of reading between baking, etc. Promise! I know how hard it is to get votes and comments on later chapters.

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

I shouldn't post comments when I'm tired. I meant to be suggesting that both of us in our second person stories used too many ellipses, or might be perceived as overusing them ... (tee-hee) though some writers and reviewers seem to hate them no matter how they're used. And, in my case, if I were to do it again, I might eliminate some of them.

And Bianca, I really am going to finish your story, but it's more than a stroker. Even now I'm listening to a lecture while posting (good thing I only need a 75% to get my "A".) But this week, I have a break between classes, so plan to do a lot of reading between baking, etc. Promise! I know how hard it is to get votes and comments on later chapters.

Don't worry sweetie. I appreciate that you want to read through it at all. Fantasy isn't for everyone and since it's not just a stroker some people just aren't interested. No comments on part 6 yet (decent votes though) but I had some nice ones are part 5.

I really got to get around to working on that series again. I've taken on so much my head is spinning. Awakened got a lot more attention so I'm more motivated to work on that, but even so I want to finish it soon because I feel bad when I get emails asking when the next part's coming out.

 

[BradBigBrain]

... ?!?! really? point me to it. Seriously. I just came upon literotica and smut stories... part of re-invinting myself after divorcing a very emotionless marriage. This story is a modified version of a story I wrote about 6 months back while trying to save my marriage. He didn't even read it until after I asked for the divorce (ASS!)

I read the story, but I didn't comment. I'm just not into the you/me methodology, so I wouldn't want to pass judgment on an otherwise well written story, elipses are OK in moderation and if they're used to convey an unwritten thought or ....

Thanks for posting.

 

[Ginger_Girl]

Thanks for the comments! I have been reading more, so I am starting to see everyones point about the elipses (sp) and writing from my point of view... i will definitely work on that!

Bianca... what is the title of the story Drip is referring to, sounds interesting and I'd love to start reading it.

I'm working on a new story... stemming from a very steamy discussion I had. Going to take all these notes I've received into consideration so that I can please even more readers!

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

Thanks for the comments! I have been reading more, so I am starting to see everyones point about the elipses (sp) and writing from my point of view... i will definitely work on that!

Bianca... what is the title of the story Drip is referring to, sounds interesting and I'd love to start reading it.

I'm working on a new story... stemming from a very steamy discussion I had. Going to take all these notes I've received into consideration so that I can please even more readers!

Driphoney's reading my Stolen Magic series. It's fantasy, with a lot of erotic elements, but it's not a stroker. It's also not short--except for the first page--but if that kind of story interest you, I'd love some more eyes on it. Like DH mentioned, later chapters are harder for getting votes and views.

Just out of curiousity, what POV are you planning on using for your new story? Have any idea of what cat it's gonna be in?

 

[Ginger_Girl]

Driphoney's reading my Stolen Magic series. It's fantasy, with a lot of erotic elements, but it's not a stroker. It's also not short--except for the first page--but if that kind of story interest you, I'd love some more eyes on it. Like DH mentioned, later chapters are harder for getting votes and views.

Read it all... fantastic! Love the whole storyline. The last part especially was great! and... may not be a stroker, but... after reading it all I definitely could use a big strong man like Slater.

Just out of curiousity, what POV are you planning on using for your new story? Have any idea of what cat it's gonna be in?

I don't really know, the premise of the story is highschool sweethearts meet after not seeing eachother for 10 years... both now married, but "unsatisfied." They act out the dirty dreams they've always wanted their spouses to do, with eachother.

Category is something I screwed up on for my first... any suggestions?

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

Read it all... fantastic! Love the whole storyline. The last part especially was great! and... may not be a stroker, but... after reading it all I definitely could use a big strong man like Slater.

I'm glad you liked it. Nice to finally have a comment on part 6. I worked my ass off because people commented on part 5 and wanted more, but then with part six IDK what happened. Then again most of the series was on the top list for weeks and got bombed right out. *shrug* Could be worse, the people that enjoyed it make me want to keep going.

As for Slater ITA. I've got a thing for alpha males.

I don't really know, the premise of the story is highschool sweethearts meet after not seeing eachother for 10 years... both now married, but "unsatisfied." They act out the dirty dreams they've always wanted their spouses to do, with eachother.

Category is something I screwed up on for my first... any suggestions?

Not LW, whatever you do! Maybe Erotic couples...not sure. Depends how dirty the dreams

 

[driphoney]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=452947

I think we're a little confused here. Are you wanting to participate in the daisy chain?

By doing so, you agree to read other people's chapters and stories and vote and COMMENT on the chapters/stories they are asking for comments on, and in turn, hopefully they'll do the same for you.

Unfortunately, it doesn't always work out that way.

If you're wanting to join in just post back and let us know.

 

[kromen]

This is to bump the tread back up, and also to say I RCV's Thug Passion the other day.

Bianca, I really am going to finish your series.

Just taking a study break now. Final tomorrow, then fun reading for a whole week!

Thanks for the RCV. I took a look back at Thug Passion and wholeheartedly agree about the "I's". You were generous with the vote and I thank you for that. I keep procrastinating when it comes to using an editor.

 

[kromen]

it's okay kromen. I've been crazy busy too. Take all the time you need.

Have a great weekend everyone. *Early, I know, but I probably won't be on again for a few days.*

RCV'ed a pleasant fright. Nice piece of work for my first Insect/Taboo. Didn't see the end coming. Sweet. I'll have at your longer series soon.

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

RCV'ed a pleasant fright. Nice piece of work for my first Insect/Taboo. Didn't see the end coming. Sweet. I'll have at your longer series soon.

It was fun and different, but not my best work. I learned my lesson and that's why I didn't join the winter contest. I have two series going on right now on lit. Too much with my other projects. Doing anything else is just insane.

Anything you want eyes on?

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

Thanks for the feedback Honey. I rvc'd on another one of your but it was a rough day and now I can't remember which one!

 

[kromen]

It was fun and different, but not my best work. I learned my lesson and that's why I didn't join the winter contest. I have two series going on right now on lit. Too much with my other projects. Doing anything else is just insane.

Anything you want eyes on?

3 A.M
It was an experimental piece in which I tried to write a story with little character background. I would like some feedback on that. Even though it scored high for the little amount of views it received, I wanted to see if a detailed scene could fare just as well as a story.

 

[driphoney]

Thanks for the feedback Honey. I rvc'd on another one of your but it was a rough day and now I can't remember which one!

Understand that!! And thanks, especially if it was a rough day! I'll go look right now.

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

3 A.M
It was an experimental piece in which I tried to write a story with little character background. I would like some feedback on that. Even though it scored high for the little amount of views it received, I wanted to see if a detailed scene could fare just as well as a story.

RVC'd on 3 A.M

 

[driphoney]

Thanks for the feedback Honey. I rvc'd on another one of your but it was a rough day and now I can't remember which one!

What an evening, but finally read your feedback. You know, that was an interesting comment, and is the only reason I'm coming back with an additional post. So many people have read that chapter and never pointed it out. In all honesty, chapter 2 is the 'real' chapter 1. I wrote it first and it sat as the beginning for months, but I felt pulled to write about when they seriously got together. The problem was I didn't know where to stick it! I'd already written a flashback and felt it was over-kill to do it twice. Anyway, considering I'd never written anything in my life, it's bound to be messy sometimes, I guess. Everything I was doing was an experiment in seeing what worked.

Again, thanks for making the effort and voting so nicely.

 

[kromen]

RVC'd on 3 A.M

Thanks. Anyone else care to give an opinion?

 

[Bianca_Sommerland]

What an evening, but finally read your feedback. You know, that was an interesting comment, and is the only reason I'm coming back with an additional post. So many people have read that chapter and never pointed it out. In all honesty, chapter 2 is the 'real' chapter 1. I wrote it first and it sat as the beginning for months, but I felt pulled to write about when they seriously got together. The problem was I didn't know where to stick it! I'd already written a flashback and felt it was over-kill to do it twice. Anyway, considering I'd never written anything in my life, it's bound to be messy sometimes, I guess. Everything I was doing was an experiment in seeing what worked.

Again, thanks for making the effort and voting so nicely.

I try to read with a more critical eye, since feedback's not very helpful if you don't, but it's hard sometimes when you enjoy the story to find anything more than grammar. Mine's not beyond reproach--as you know --but I will remark if it's distracting.

I was thinking over the story again and I recalled a comment I forgot to make...like I said, I was tired I kinda liked his arrogance attitude. I know some people didn't, but I find making certain characters so obviously flawed makes them more real and easier to relate to. I'm going to keep reading the series, I'm really curious to see how it develops.

 

[OnlyByMoonlight]

Hey, read some of your stories and left some comments.

Here's mine, if you'd like..

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=310346