Ravishing
..lost in my reality
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MaxSebastian said:"I have a great idea for improving your dialogue," she said, taking a bite from her toast and marmalade as she closed the morning newspaper.
He sighed, "Right now I could use any tips you've got. My editor says my characters sound like kids in a nativity play. Where's the milk?"
"Sam finished it this morning - have some toast or something."
"I don't want any toast," he said. "So what's this great idea for saving my dialogue?"
"Well... I mean... I'm not the expert - you're the writer, honey," she smiled deferentially. "But there was this review in the paper this morning that praised a book for its dialogue, and what it said was - "
"Is there anything to drink in this house apart from water?"
"Sure, honey, there's some orange juice in there if you hunt for it. It said what this writer did was - "
"Found it!" He interrupted with a brief burst of triumph. "Damn, it's got bits in - you know I hate bits in orange juice."
"Bits are good for you. You listening to me?" That slight barb in her voice, usually reserved for her students.
"Yeah, I'm listening. What did it say?"
"It said the thing this writer did was, he basically acknowledged that people rarely think about one thing at a time. They have a whole lot of issues going on at once."
He took a sip of orange juice, silent for a moment as his wife's words sank in. "I guess I see that," he said then. "But in a fast moving story, there's no time for messing about."
"I guess so," she shrugged, feeling a little unappreciated. "but if you add in the odd distraction of everyday life - it might add some depth to your characters."
Receptive to her tone, he moved to plant an affectionate kiss on her cheek. "Maybe I'll give it a try," he said.
*smiles* Well, thats one interesting and good way of showing the example, by giving the example IN the exmaple.
*thinks* Now if only those words make sense to everyone else...
~ Melting Ravishing ~