Chain Story - Bathtubs and Broomsticks

[Tio_Narratore]

"When I was a young boy, and drove my mother wild,
I met a maiden in the wood and she said, "Child,
Look deep into my green eyes and at my Autumn hair;
When you're a man you'll never see a girl quite so fair.
Remember me. Remember me.
Remember for the rest of your life."

(American folk song)

 

[pink_silk_glove]

Is this thing still on?

 

[AlinaX]

I hope so.

 

[Erozetta]

@Tio_Narratore status update on the story opening?

 

[Tio_Narratore]

@Tio_Narratore status update on the story opening?

Sorry, I've had some setbacks. The chapter is outlined; I should have time to write it this weekend. Again, my apologies for the delay.

 

[Erozetta]

Sorry, I've had some setbacks. The chapter is outlined; I should have time to write it this weekend. Again, my apologies for the delay.

No worries on my end. I have been trying to finish a project of my own and keep getting stalled on it 'cause work is a bitch.

I personally think our story lends itself quite well to an October start date.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

It does have that sort of an ambience, doesn't it?

 

[AlinaX]

We were talking about setting the story at that time of year.

 

[pink_silk_glove]

If we're doing roughly a chapter a month for six months, I wouldn't worry about the timing.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I've posted an introduction, but I'm in the process of rewriting a part. Please take a look at the Google Doc and let me know what you think. I have two more sections to write.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I've edited it and shared with all of you, but I'm not sure if it worked. And some one named Lizette Monroe apparently has invaded my text. How do I get rid of her?

 

[Omenainen]

I've edited it and shared with all of you, but I'm not sure if it worked. And some one named Lizette Monroe apparently has invaded my text. How do I get rid of her?

Invaded how? That’s Erozetta.

 

[Erozetta]

I've edited it and shared with all of you, but I'm not sure if it worked. And some one named Lizette Monroe apparently has invaded my text. How do I get rid of her?

I was reading. Also, Lizzette*

 

[AlinaX]

Are you doing any more podcasts?

 

[Erozetta]

Are you doing any more podcasts?

as soon as my co-host and editor gets his computer to stop being a dick. We've had some technical difficulties, lol. But we have a few recorded, he just can't edit them right now.

I should probably stop watching movies with him until he edits the next few.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

I was reading. Also, Lizzette*

Sorry about that, Lizette [sic]. I didn't know it was you. My concern stemmed from finding a marker in my text for Lizzette; I didn't know what effect it might have on the formatting.

 

[Erozetta]

Sorry about that, Lizette [sic]. I didn't know it was you. My concern stemmed from finding a marker in my text for Lizzette; I didn't know what effect it might have on the formatting.

Absolutely none. If I see anything that is wrong or feels off, I can make a comment that will be placed outside of the text itself. The marker is just where I was in the document and reading. I *could* edit directly as I have editing access like everyone else in the doc, but I never do that. I only make comment suggestions. Which can be deleted once the suggestion is observed and acted upon or ignored as you, as the author of this section, sees fit.

And no worries, it would be jarring to see that for the first time if you aren't familiar with shared Google docs.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Thanks, Erozetta. I've posted Lucy's job interview. I'll have some more later or tomorrow. I'd welcome any comments.

 

[AlinaX]

Comments left. Enjoying it so far.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Thanks! Good with most of it, particularly the Britishisms suggestions. Putting the monetary sign after the amount is French. I'm in Québec and often unconsciously follow that practice. No American University offers a "summa cum laude with congratulations;" UCL does. I've stayed at a hotel around the corner from Chenies Street, on Gower, when I was at UCL for conferences. As far as POV, Lucy is the protagonist, not the narrator, but if it ends up fitting better with others' narration, I'll change it. And Charlie placing his hand on her thigh at the interview? I guess that's a North American thing.

 

[AlinaX]

No American University offers a "summa cum laude with congratulations;" UCL does.

Ah, interesting.

The POV seems very much in Lucy's head, so it does get a little distracting when you hop.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Ah, interesting.

The POV seems very much in Lucy's head, so it does get a little distracting when you hop.

We both may be right on the Bachelor's degree - It's UCL's "Global University" that offers the cum laude.

Lucy is the focus, but the narration is about her, not by her. If she were telling the story, I would keep it from her POV.

 

[AlinaX]

Tell the story you want to tell, the way you want to tell it. I get overexcited sometimes.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Overexcited? Sounds more like an asset than a liability.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Anyone other than AlinaX for comments on my chapter so far?