new poems

[Maria2394]

Re: Hey, Happy Wednesday!

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If you're in the mood for a nice bit of alliteration and rhyme, look here: (It's too short to quote, and besides, you'll want to go give feedback or vote or something anyway, right?)
sex dance by Maria2394

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Thanks for the mention OT!! I was tryin to get cultured here, and almost called it Right To Spring, but thought it waaaay too corny
always appreciative, Maria

and yep, I overdosed on commas...blech

 

[Rybka]

I'll mention a couple that bubbled to the top of my like list, but this is one of those days when you'll want to just go to the new poems page and make sure you don't miss anything.

I interpret that to mean that there are an unusual number of poems that are above average today.
I must say that I agree with you. I just don't know why they don't post on Sunday.

Re perdita's "Giselle in Hell": She does tie it together at the end, but I would prefer to see it as two separate poems, or at least two sections of one work. We all admire her work and look forward to her next submission, but like all of us, perdita can always improve.

Heck! Some people didn't even appreciate the spacing of my last submission. Couldn't understand how to read it I guess. (By the way, I was not thinking Poe when I wrote it!)
I always try to have a reason for my word placement on a page (not that it is always consistent). I try to use line breaks and alignment instead of punctuation. For instance, in A Song of the SeaSon, the first five lines could be read several times with several different ways. (See the poem for proper spacing.)

Smells of sea and advance in sun went
by
the way
the pictures of her still
form
...

Possible readings:
"Smells of sea and advance in sun went by..."
"Smells of sea and advance in sun went by the way"
"Smells of sea and advance in sun went...
by the way,
the pictures of her still..."
"by the way, the pictures of her still form,"
"the pictures of her, still form the face..."
Etcetera and in combinations.
And, of course, the title is a pun.

Thanks to the ladies for calling it well written. I guess I am a "pigfish", but hopefully not feeding on slop.

Regards,                                 Rybka

 

[BooMerengue]

Making note to self... "Save the next 47 posts 'til Sunday!"

 

[Lauren Hynde]

3rd - July - 2003

Not many great poems in the new list, but we do have some jewels (and absolutely no pussy poems for two days in a row).

My favourites were:

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Petals
by RazzRajen ©

[...]

fields of
           hot coals
shards of glass
           mica cuts
deep as
           barbs
Words alone
           cannot suffice
deeds are
           nigh         .

I must say that to me, this is easily RazzRajen's most enjoyable poem, so far. His poems are always filled with superb imagery and layers of meaning, but here he does it with a style and lucidity like I hadn't encountered before.

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Soular Flare
by Maria2394 ©

My kisses being stars, too many now to count
I've sent them by a messenger,
through glittering comet trails and solar sighs.
[...]

Another poem with some very good visual highlights. The mixed metaphors bring it down a bit toward the end, I felt, but it's still a great read. Also, check out Maria's good humoured rant, Alphabet Soup

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Tide Flow
by neonurotic ©

[...]
Go and come
levitate in the rush.
Come and go
flow with the gentle ebb.
Here, I want to stay,
with me in you .
Waves caress our flesh.

The tide flow rolls out

Obviously, neonurotic read my post in the female orgasms thread and wanted to one-up me.

On a completely different note, you should also read his Nightmares in Sorrow.

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hello
by oxalis ©

I'm going to quote his poem because it's very short. It's also just a little bit mad, but that's how I love 'em. Brought a smile to my face, after making me read it three or four times.

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[Angeline]

Obviously, neonurotic read my post in the female orgasms thread and wanted to one-up me.

Sometimes you really crack me up, you know?

 

[Maria2394]

Thanks Lauren

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Soular Flare
by Maria2394 ©

My kisses being stars, too many now to count
I've sent them by a messenger,
through glittering comet trails and solar sighs.
[...]

Another poem with some very good visual highlights. The mixed metaphors bring it down a bit toward the end, I felt, but it's still a great read. Also, check out Maria's good humoured rant, Alphabet Soup

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Tide Flow
by neonurotic ©

[...]
Go and come
levitate in the rush.
Come and go
flow with the gentle ebb.
Here, I want to stay,
with me in you .
Waves caress our flesh.

The tide flow rolls out

Obviously, neonurotic read my post in the female orgasms thread and wanted to one-up me.

On a completely different note, you should also read his Nightmares in Sorrow.

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[ [/B]

Dear Lauren,
Thanks a bunch for the mentions today! I really have fun attempting to make people laugh, sometimes it works, sometimes no. The link To Alphabet Soup however, comes up as a pretty good story titled Oh Susannah. ( and the same story comes up on Neo's Tide Flow as well) weird...
But thanks again! always very much appreciated to be recognized by the talented poets on this board!! makes me feel soo good and I will admit, I love to be slapped, er, slopped with feedback, good or bad..thanks to everyone who takes the time to email me

have a great day, all, Maria

PS Rybka, I didnt realize it ( soular flare) was reminiscent of ( or seemed influenced by)Cummings, was not my intention, but thanks for the compliment

 

[RazzRajen]

Re: 3rd - July - 2003

Not many great poems in the new list, but we do have some jewels (and absolutely no pussy poems for two days in a row).

My favourites were:

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Petals
by RazzRajen ©


I must say that to me, this is easily RazzRajen's
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words of praise indeed, Lauren....Most appreciated

convoluted are the skeins of My mind.
sometimes they wander ,
sometimes meander,
Sometimes they even string words
together
That speak to another
Touch that place and bring a
smile to their
Face.

Thanks for the mention

Razz

 

[Rybka]

Re: Thanks Lauren

PS Rybka, I didnt realize it ( soular flare) was reminiscent of ( or seemed influenced by)Cummings, was not my intention, but thanks for the compliment

I think I mentioned your phrase "undreamt dreams" where I read "undreamt" as a verb.
I was thinking of this poem (which should be center justified).

1 x 1

XV1

one's not half two. It's two halves of one:
which halves reintegrating, shall occur
no death and any quantity; but than
all numerable mosts the actual more

minds ignorant of stern miraculous
this every truth-beware of heartless them
(given a scalpel, they dissect a kiss;
or, sold the reason, they undream a dream)

one is the song which fiends and angels sing:
all murdering lies by mortals told make two.
Let liars wilt, repaying life they're loaned;
we (by a gift called dying born) must grow

deep in dark least ourselves remembering
love only rides this year.
All lose, whole find

E.E. Cummings (1944)

 

[Maria2394]

Re: Re: Thanks Lauren

I think I mentioned your phrase "undreamt dreams" where I read "undreamt" as a verb.
I was thinking of this poem (which should be center justified).

1 x 1

XV1

one's not half two. It's two halves of one:
which halves reintegrating, shall occur
no death and any quantity; but than
all numerable mosts the actual more

minds ignorant of stern miraculous
this every truth-beware of heartless them
(given a scalpel, they dissect a kiss;
or, sold the reason, they undream a dream)

one is the song which fiends and angels sing:
all murdering lies by mortals told make two.
Let liars wilt, repaying life they're loaned;
we (by a gift called dying born) must grow

deep in dark least ourselves remembering
love only rides this year.
All lose, whole find

E.E. Cummings (1944)

Rybka,
I had never seen that poem by Cummins, it is indeed beautiful and thought provoking.. thank you fo rthe turn on M

 

[oxalis]

LH

Thank you for mention,

~~

my dog barks
at a lady on a bike
he wants to eat her
like a shank of buffalo
he has brought down
with no help from the pack

it’s why he runs in his sleep
paws twitching sideways on the patchwork carpet
made from Kanga® remnants

 

[Angeline]

my dog barks
at a lady on a bike
he wants to eat her
like a shank of buffalo
he has brought down
with no help from the pack

it’s why he runs in his sleep
paws twitching sideways on the patchwork carpet
made from Kanga® remnants

LOL!!!!

 

[Guest]

O envy

Tide Flow
by neonurotic ©

[...]
Go and come
levitate in the rush.
Come and go
flow with the gentle ebb.
Here, I want to stay,
with me in you .
Waves caress our flesh.

The tide flow rolls out

Obviously, neonurotic read my post in the female orgasms thread and wanted to one-up me.

On a completely different note, you should also read his Nightmares in Sorrow.
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Aww, but I still have female orgasm envy...

Thanks for the mentions and the reads Lauren.


neonurotic

 

[Angeline]

Happy July 4th USA

Have a good safe holiday, everyone. Here are my picks for the day.

Du Fu (and a passenger's thoughts) by Senna Jawa



if this
metallic bird
were a writer
and lost
its small ones in fog
it'd be a poet
after a million miles
like Du Fu
a thousand and more
years ago
sailing up and down
chinese rivers
merging
into the other
ocean



Du Fu (and a passenger's thoughts) is one of four pieces posted today by senna jawa, one of Lit's best poets. They are all very good, but I preferred this one.


with eyes closed to boot by Palau


making love to you is like
wearing twin monoculars
of varying focal length
while driving,
quivering

I really like this poem and think it and particularly the excerpt shown above both giggly and tres insightful. In fact it seems a pretty apt description of love in general, lol.


another new stranger by oxalis

I know you are an old house fly in an old house.
you are an obese fly and clumsy with those bifocals
and cane bumping into things.
I have hated your kind but sad to hear the defeat of yet
another health care package for senior
Musca domestica Linnaeus

This is a terrific poem and I like the whole thing, but those first three lines are just perfect: it's a very funny image, yet at the same time I know exactly the kind of house fly oxalis means.


Ode to my Toes by Ellisyn


My toe got up and left today,
It didn't even say goodbye,
What was I think or say,
Or walk the same with just the nine?

I guess it was unhappy,
But how was I to know?
After all who ever thinks of,
The feelings of a toe?

Ellisyn is another new poet to Lit (or to me in any case). I noticed a poem of hers once before and really liked it. This rather surreal poem is well written and clever--It made me think of Nikolay Gogol's wonderfully absurdist short story The Nose. Keep your eyes, nose, and toes open (?) for new posts from her.

to savor your wetness upon my face by steve porter

i go outside and open my mouth
wanting your rain to drench me
to trickle down my tongue
to fill my mouth to spill down my chin...
to savor your wetness upon my face.

This was my favorite of two posts today from steve. The image of rain as a bridge between distant lovers is beautifully sustained.

the sad bunny by smithpeter

the sad bunny

aside from his whiskers
back folding knees and tall ears
he appeared as human as you and I
a compliment to you
(plus paws)

his breath sweet as lettuce
fermentation,
his walk-away
mellowed irregulation

It's my pick of the day; how could it not be? smithpeter's bunny, sad in this iteration, may be my favorite poetic character. With each poem we get another glimpse into his quirky world. Best new bunny factoid for me? He has lettuce breath, lol. The poem and illustration are really well integrated, too.

 

[smithpeter]

Thank you,

Thank you,
Angeline
~
3 times we are
grateful and grinning
mention at the bunny
will be reported to him upon
his return from the western regions
near the meeting point of coast and coast ver. 2

more blonde now,
more conspicuous,
his gamble habit is
quenched, chippied on in,
chippy 123

 

[Guest]

smithpeter:

This is a wonderful piece; have read nothing like it, ever. I will read more of you.

Thanks to Angeline for bringing it to attention.

best regards, Perdita

 

[Angeline]

dear friend perdita

smithpeter, whose poetry I adore and whose friendship I value, is very very prolific. He has a daunting collection of postings here at lit--hundreds of poems. I love skipping through his page and randomly reading because so much of it is so good--I'm sure you will, too. Here are a few of my favorites by him. Anyone else have any to add?

A Romantic in Hell

Blue Feeling

Brown

Dogwood

it's what happens to liberals

mona spice

Pirates of Love

Radon Daughters

Spending Time Near Her Face (my all-time favorite)

Squirrels Playing Saxophone

The Longness of Liz

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Double Teamed

Eve and Angeline:

Tres kind, medemoiselles. Merci Beaucoup!

More to come Eve, always.

A Saxophone Motif, perhaps? Or how 'bout a vignette featuring that infamous Conga Player (see Female Orgasm Thread)!?!?!

And Eve, although I can certainly be swinish, at times, I prefer to think of myself as an "attention slut" who likes to be "feedback slapped."

Thank you both again.

An attention slut who likes to be feedback slapped? Oh, I'm going to go read more of your poetry right now. lol

 

[WickedEve]

Re: dear friend perdita

smithpeter, whose poetry I adore and whose friendship I value, is very very prolific. He has a daunting collection of postings here at lit--hundreds of poems. I love skipping through his page and randomly reading because so much of it is so good--I'm sure you will, too. Here are a few of my favorites by him. Anyone else have any to add?

A Romantic in Hell

Blue Feeling

Brown

Dogwood

it's what happens to liberals

mona spice

Pirates of Love

Radon Daughters

Spending Time Near Her Face (my all-time favorite)

Squirrels Playing Saxophone

The Longness of Liz

ess-pea, why don't you just suggest your faves? What do you suggest that a new smithpeter fan should read? How about a required list of smithpeter poetry? Oh, how about a smithpeter newsletter with your top 2,000 poems. hee hee

Anyway, I love paper airplane poem. I have to go find the link, though...

 

[Angeline]

How about a required list of smithpeter poetry? Oh, how about a smithpeter newsletter with your top 2,000 poems. hee hee

I know, I know--talk about feedback slopping/slapping whatever. But's there's goddamn 500 poems there. I was just trying to help, lol.

 

[smithpeter]

take pause

consider your huge mistakes
take a ride in july in a hot air
misconception

cool natural urge
tell us all about it in words
with pause and juicy gap

all bubbles and this may burst, someday

 

[Lauren Hynde]

It's a slowish day for new poetry, with only 11 poems, so you might as well read them all. Here are my selections:

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for dual independence
by Palau ©

[...]

now read aloud-
cool and linked
two at a time for clench,
nervous for the first
the reach for wet and grin
satisfied, a delicious smile
worth eating again twice
at once


- The perfect 4th of July celebration, worth reading thrice.

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just little
by oxalis ©

important things, jars stapled to the underside of shelving,
darker eyes than intent, smooth things that will not
be mentioned here in this word pattern,
this mox, this mox of pathy pitch

never mind it’s sending
messages not for anyone
just, never mind again

[...]


- Here we have a poem in three parts, intimately connected, that will have you looking for the hidden messages. Delicious bittersweet read.

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A Star Is Born
by denis hale ©

On the morning of the Fourth
Breeze Girl cried:

"Oh proud flagpole, please unfurl
Your Prize for me!"

[...]


- This is what I usually call a what-the-fuck...? kind of poem. You might like it, you might not, but I urge you to read it and figure it out for yourself.

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Bells Toll
by RazzRajen ©


- I'm not quoting RazzRajen's poem, because it deserves to be read has he conceived it. Find all the ways this poem can be read, discover its intricate images and meanings. It's my pick of the day.

 

[Palau]

LH

if thanks were weeds in my garden of needs
you would be a dandy pluck and table decoration,
arranged stalks, slim, green
tender hollow straw stems
pollinated and fruitful
full bloom nightfall silver
sliver in the darkest sky ever

 

[steve porter]

thanks angeline for your insightful attention...

 

[BooMerengue]

If but one wish were left to me
I would say it'd have to be
To write a line like Emily.

Or better yet to make you jump
while in the night you hear a bump
And quickly give my book a thump!

But there are no illusions here.
By writing daily for a year
I might make just one shed a tear.

Ha! I winged that one- 3 and a half minutes! And yes, I'm sure it shows!

Does anyone here know any hints and/or tricks about writing a Sestina? I'm determined- but at a loss... If you do please share! Or better yet- maybe I'll start a thread... hhmmmmmm

 

[RazzRajen]

It's a slowish day for -------------------------------------------------
Bells Toll
by RazzRajen ©


- I'm not quoting RazzRajen's poem, because it deserves to be read has he conceived it. Find all the ways this poem can be read, discover its intricate images and meanings. It's my pick of the day.

Thanks again Lauren....for the mention and your kind words.


Razz