The New Poems List

[littlekateyes]

Thank you land. Yet again another great poem.
I enjoyed Prez
by Angeline ©,

and Daddy
by someones dream ©

 

[kotori]

Re: september 8th

Doisneau
by kotori ©

This is simply a must-read.

Eve

Wow, thanks so much for the kind words, guys. I've never been over to this part of the island. Spend most of my time on the General Board. It's very encouraging.

I have a question about the voting thing (of course I look): when I checked this morning, it said that there were two votes, but only one read. How's that work? I did a double take, and went back and checked the column headings again, and sure enough.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Re: Re: september 8th

Wow, thanks so much for the kind words, guys. I've never been over to this part of the island. Spend most of my time on the General Board. It's very encouraging.

I have a question about the voting thing (of course I look): when I checked this morning, it said that there were two votes, but only one read. How's that work? I did a double take, and went back and checked the column headings again, and sure enough.

Welcome to the poetry board, K.

The views count is only updated once or twice per day, but the votes are immediately.

 

[kotori]

Thank-you, Lauren, for the greeting and the explanation.

I wondered if maybe I had stumbled across a broken slot machine or something--the kind that doubles your money every time.

Seems like an entirely different dynamic here than over on the G.B.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

We move slower here, so anything you post will surely be read by everyone in here. It's a nice place.

 

[Hot4Heels]

This seems like a knowledgable group

So I figured I would try and get some feed back.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=138883

Out of the 4 Hair of Fire is new the others are older stuff I had in my notebooks.

 

[Senna Jawa]

Re: Re: september 8th

I have a question about the voting thing (of course I look): when I checked this morning, it said that there were two votes, but only one read.

The inexperienced Literotica participant first read your poem, then voted. The experienced one used ESP and voted without reading.

Best regards,

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: september 8th

Doisneau
by kotori ©

This is simply a must-read.

Yup, agree absolutely. Kotori captures that certain mood so beautifully. Great work.

Drake

 

[Senna Jawa]

Re: _Land / Re: SJ

the average of the 8 votes is: 2.65

Sorry )) for a typo--8 votes cannot average 2.65. This average is only 2.625. It was an honest typo, I didn't try to falsely impress you with the poem's high average vote.

Regards,

 

[kotori]

Re: Re: september 8th

Yup, agree absolutely. Kotori captures that certain mood so beautifully. Great work.

Drake

You guys keep this up, and I may not go back over to the G.B. But Dr4ke, a little bird's told me all about your work. Well, duck actually.

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: Re: Re: september 8th

You guys keep this up, and I may not go back over to the G.B. But Dr4ke, a little bird's told me all about your work. Well, duck actually.

lol ... she's completely biased, take no heed of any of it.

Quack

the D

 

[kotori]

Re: Re: Re: Re: september 8th

lol ... she's completely biased, take no heed of any of it.

Quack

the D

Biased? I thought you were "just friends."

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: september 8th

Biased? I thought you were "just friends."

hahahaha


Oh yeah. Of course.


Reminds me of the 'um-friend' label.

"This is Kelly, she's my ... um-friend."

LOL

Quack

the D

 

[Angeline]

Land, thanks again !

i appreciate your mentioning my poems. I should also mention how wonderful i think it is that you've been doing this list each day. Like I said before--a giver! Thank you Land.

And lilkateyes thank you, too, and welcome. This is a very cool place--I was new here myself not so long ago. Lots of nice peple here, like that what's his name--oh yeah Land.

 

[Senna Jawa]

Re: Re: _Land / Re: SJ

.........more like your wedding poem.......

The curiosity got the better of me. _Land, do you mean

    Marriage     or     Speak now or forever hold your peace     ?

The second one is a small story but the first one is more interesting, atypical.

Regards,

 

[_Land]

Good morning

Now that the Hoooplah is over, we are left to ponder the meaning of it all. Hope that each of you that reads this post is doing well, and that grief of the last year has not resurfaced, Why cant the media leave it burried? I doubt the honorability, of Re-hashing the events in "memorium"! I quite think a wake would have been more appropriate. Ok I'll get on with Life now.



Perfection from Imperfection
by littlekateyes ©


Lilkat, this is a well crafted poem, full of meaning and hope
thank you for sharing it with us.





Granny
by EVOL_BONE ©

A prose of memorys
Thanks for sharing _Bone






Gleaning The Golden Moments
by Blue Dolphin ©

I enjoyed the read Blue, but i think if you put it in to stanza's it would be a lot better





Untethered
by just pet ©

"this picture
nestles in a secret corner "



Possession Litany
by kotori ©
Possession Litany


Help Help Im possessed



Bud of a Smile
by TheDR4KE ©

a simple fragrant smile






Summer 2002
by WickedEve ©
Creature comforts terminated I love this Line




Ya'all have a great day and be prolific.........ummmmmmm that doesnt sound right does it....... Write a bunch

 

[_Land]

Re: Re: Re: _Land / Re: SJ

The curiosity got the better of me. _Land, do you mean

    Marriage     or     Speak now or forever hold your peace     ?

The second one is a small story but the first one is more interesting, atypical.

Regards,

I was refering to marriage, SJ....

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Good morning

Summer 2002
by WickedEve ©
Creature comforts terminated I love this Line

Thanks!

 

[littlekateyes]

Thank you -Land.
The poems were all great reads. I am really beginning to love it her at lit.

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: Good morning

Bud of a Smile
by TheDR4KE ©

a simple fragrant smile

Thanks _Land.

I did notice though that you left out another wonderful short poem. I found it a lovely counter to mine for that day...

Twilight of Waiting by _Land ©

Short, but oh so long....



Quack,

the D

 

[_Land]

Re: Re: Good morning

Thanks _Land.

I did notice though that you left out another wonderful short poem. I found it a lovely counter to mine for that day...

Twilight of Waiting by _Land ©

Short, but oh so long....



Quack,

the D

Thanks for the mention DR4KE, dont feel right tooting my own horn


This is a fun thread to participate in.

 

[kotori]

thanks from me too, for the kind mention. this is a fun thread. sure, there's a little log-rolling, but it's nice to know someone's noticing.

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: Good morning

Possession Litany
by kotori ©
Possession Litany


Help Help Im possessed

I had a read of this, and (given that this part of the board is about discussion and feedback ) I would say that it was good, I loved the twist of the last line, but the constant "I want"s hurt. They are too weak for a poem that would otherwise be strong. Want, at least to me, doesn't express need enough.

I would edit the poem and take them all out, thus:




Possession Litany
by kotori

you.
to hold you, keep you, hug you, kiss you.
to possess you.
to enfold you, enter you, fill you, behold you.

you.
your independence - depend on me.
your self-reliance - rely on me.
your heart: to open your chest and feel it beat in my hands.
your soul: the breath of your life to fill my lungs.
to possess you.
to come to you, take you, fuck you, love you.

to make you my good girl.

you.
your brain - I'll think for you.
your skin, to wrap myself in.
your hair, to dry my tears on.
your eyes, to see my fears.
your fingers to wrap around my own.
your lips to cool my burning flesh.
your voice to soothe my pain.
to possess you.
to come to me, be with me, fit me, come for me.

to be my good girl.

you.
your cunt to make my home in.
your breasts to feed me.
your ass to brand you as my own.
your womb to carry on my blood-line.
to possess you.
to take you away, keep you where you are.

you.
to want me.
to possess you.
the way you possess me.




Quack

the Drake

 

[_Land]

Re: Re: Good morning

I had a read of this, and (given that this part of the board is about discussion and feedback ) I would say that it was good, I loved the twist of the last line, but the constant "I want"s hurt. They are too weak for a poem that would otherwise be strong. Want, at least to me, doesn't express need enough.

I would edit the poem and take them all out, thus:




Possession Litany
by kotori

you.
to hold you, keep you, hug you, kiss you.
to possess you.
to enfold you, enter you, fill you, behold you.

you.
your independence - depend on me.
your self-reliance - rely on me.
your heart: to open your chest and feel it beat in my hands.
your soul: the breath of your life to fill my lungs.
to possess you.
to come to you, take you, fuck you, love you.

to make you my good girl.

you.
your brain - I'll think for you.
your skin, to wrap myself in.
your hair, to dry my tears on.
your eyes, to see my fears.
your fingers to wrap around my own.
your lips to cool my burning flesh.
your voice to soothe my pain.
to possess you.
to come to me, be with me, fit me, come for me.

to be my good girl.

you.
your cunt to make my home in.
your breasts to feed me.
your ass to brand you as my own.
your womb to carry on my blood-line.
to possess you.
to take you away, keep you where you are.

you.
to want me.
to possess you.
the way you possess me.




Quack

the Drake

Heyas duck now there are to many you's at the front LOL, maybe alternate or use a pattern

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: Re: Re: Good morning

Heyas duck now there are to many you's at the front LOL, maybe alternate or use a pattern

It wasn't the repetition that was the problem, but the attitude that "I want" portrays.

Winners don't 'want', they take.

the Alpha-Drake LOL