The Poets' Collaboration Thread

[Angeline]

Don't Know the Two Towers

but I took a year-long Shakespeare course as an undergrad, which had a truly horrendous final. You were shown quotes and had to name play, act (for god's sake), character who spoke it, explain its thematic relevance, blah, blah, blah. One of the quotes was from the "drunken porter" scene in MacBeth, and I recall that Banquo was right around there and there was a "what ho," too.

The same prof, in another class, made us memorize the prologue to the Canterbury Tales in Middle English. What a doofus.

Also I "was" the drunken porter in a really bad college production (rendered worse by my role in it) of MacBeth, so that was what came to mind.


(O horror, horror, horror! Tongue nor heart
Cannot conceive nor name thee!)

oh yeah and

WickedEve, Kdog, Ted & Angie. (Yeah, it's old, but still in the public consciousness, no?)

the mind reels

 

[JUDO]

Re: Don't Know the Two Towers

oh yeah and

WickedEve, Kdog, Ted & Angie. (Yeah, it's old, but still in the public consciousness, no?)

the mind reels

After hearning numerous stories like yours, I'm incredibly thankful that I didn't realize what field I wanted to be working in until after college! Whew!

And as for the above...

"Tennis, anyone?"

 

[TheDR4KE]

Re: Re: Don't Know the Two Towers

"Tennis, anyone?"

No, we're here for this



Quack

the D

 

[JUDO]

Re: Re: Re: Don't Know the Two Towers

No, we're here for this



Quack

the D

True, Q, we kinda ran away with the thread, but then no one was around. This huge place has been so empty all week. Well, hard to say to you since you've been one of the few who've started contributing lately. Thanks, by the way, it's much appreciated.

Now, if we could just get some of the normal hangers-on to show up more often. I can't imagine where they've wandered off to.


- Judo

 

[_Land]

Beneath The Sheets

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves,
Blood flows too fast between skins --
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
egged on by the toiling slaves,
as tongues of cold water seek out,
little crevices of the mysterious caves.

[Drake]
At dinner, in the open light
she implored him that he behaves
himself - later, draped over her thighs
with endless moans now, she raves.

[_Land]

mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore
satin skies rain mists overhead
as I explore my erotic whore

 

[_Land]

[_Land]

mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore
satin skies rain mists overhead
as I explore my erotic whore

I saw no detail for the poem, outside of the first stanza itself, so if i need to chang this to make the secone and last line rhyme with the previous stanzas let me know, if we dont change rhymes it will get old fast........ IMHO _Land

 

[JUDO]

I saw no detail for the poem, outside of the first stanza itself, so if i need to chang this to make the secone and last line rhyme with the previous stanzas let me know, if we dont change rhymes it will get old fast........ IMHO _Land

I say we let it move on. I rhymed the 2nd and 4th lines, and that was all I intended. Now we have three opening stanzas with "-aves" rhymes. Shall we call that the first trilogy and move into the second trilogy (rhyming the next 3), then the final three with another rhyme. Nine stanzas in all?


- Judo

 

[_Land]

Sounds good to me, i wasnt sure if I was missing what your intentions were. Of course its dark between the sheets


_Land

I say we let it move on. I rhymed the 2nd and 4th lines, and that was all I intended. Now we have three opening stanzas with "-aves" rhymes. Shall we call that the first trilogy and move into the second trilogy (rhyming the next 3), then the final three with another rhyme. Nine stanzas in all?


- Judo

 

[Rybka]

Stanza Two, Trilogy Three

I say we let it move on. I rhymed the 2nd and 4th lines, and that was all I intended. Now we have three opening stanzas with "-aves" rhymes. Shall we call that the first trilogy and move into the second trilogy (rhyming the next 3), then the final three with another rhyme. Nine stanzas in all?


- Judo

I cannot find a consistent metre among the various stanzas, so please feel free to alter or reject my lines as you want.

Beneath The Sheets

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon 7
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves, 8
Blood flows too fast between skins -- 7
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves. 8

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow 8
egged on by the toiling slaves, 7
as tongues of cold water seek out, 8
little crevices of the mysterious caves. 10

[Drake]
At dinner, in the open light 8
she implored him that he behaves 8
himself - later, draped over her thighs 9
with endless moans now, she raves. 7

[_Land]
mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles 8
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore 11
satin skies rain mists overhead 8
as I explore my erotic whore 9

[Rybka]
Diving down and deep beneath 7
downy weight and towards the core 8
finding things beyond belief 7
our salty wet emotions soar. 8



Regards,                       Rybka

 

[Zhuk]

Revision of my stanza

I dont know a thing about metres!! Somebody help me please.

 

[dragonhearted]

Undulating silken waves
Ebbing, flowing like the tide
Bodies rise toward ecstasy
As currents of passion guide...

 

[_Land]

AHHHHHHEMMMMMMMMMMMMMM

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves,
Blood flows too fast between skins --
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
egged on by the toiling slaves,
as tongues of cold water seek out,
little crevices of the mysterious caves.

[Drake]
At dinner, in the open light
she implored him that he behaves
himself - later, draped over her thighs
with endless moans now, she raves.

[_Land]
mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore
satin skies rain mists overhead
as I explore my erotic whore

[Rybka]
Diving down and deep beneath
downy weight and towards the core
finding things beyond belief
our salty wet emotions soar.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
egged on by the toiling slaves,
as tongues of cold water seek out,
little crevices of musky caves

[dragonhearted]
Undulating silken waves
Ebbing, flowing like the tide
Bodies rise toward ecstasy
As currents of passion guide...

 

[_Land]

bump

 

[WickedEve]

I was thinking about adding to this but I'm not sure what's going on with the rhyme scheme.

Judo said: I rhymed the 2nd and 4th lines, and that was all I intended. Now we have three opening stanzas with "-aves" rhymes. Shall we call that the first trilogy and move into the second trilogy (rhyming the next 3), then the final three with another rhyme. Nine stanzas in all?

But this doesn't appear to be happening.

 

[WickedEve]

In Drake's stanza it's he/she but in Land's it's me/I.

I see where I'm getting confused. Land when you put it all together, you put Zhuk's stanza in there twice. If you take that out then we still have Judo's trilogy idea... until we get to dragonhearted. There needs to be a stanza with "ore/oar" rhymes before dragon's stanza. Right?

 

[WickedEve]

Does this look right?

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves,
Blood flows too fast between skins --
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
egged on by the toiling slaves,
as tongues of cold water seek out,
little crevices of musky caves

[Drake]
At dinner, in the open light
she implored him that he behaves
himself - later, draped over her thighs
with endless moans now, she raves.

[_Land]
mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore
satin skies rain mists overhead
as I explore my erotic whore

[Rybka]
Diving down and deep beneath
downy weight and towards the core
finding things beyond belief
our salty wet emotions soar.

[an "oar" rhyming stanza]

[dragonhearted]
Undulating silken waves
Ebbing, flowing like the tide
Bodies rise toward ecstasy
As currents of passion guide...

["ide" rhyming stanza]

["ide" rhyming stanza]

 

[WickedEve]

This can go between Rybka's and Dragon's stanzas

plunging over and again
stroking wetter than before
drenched beneath the sheets
drown in me once more

or

plunging over and again
stroking wetter than before
drenched beneath the sheets
drifting toward the shore

or

neither one...

 

[JUDO]

Re: Does this look right?

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves,
Blood flows too fast between skins --
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
egged on by the toiling slaves,
as tongues of cold water seek out,
little crevices of musky caves

[Drake]
At dinner, in the open light
she implored him that he behaves
himself - later, draped over her thighs
with endless moans now, she raves.

[_Land]
mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore
satin skies rain mists overhead
as I explore my erotic whore

[Rybka]
Diving down and deep beneath
downy weight and towards the core
finding things beyond belief
our salty wet emotions soar.

[an "oar" rhyming stanza]

[dragonhearted]
Undulating silken waves
Ebbing, flowing like the tide
Bodies rise toward ecstasy
As currents of passion guide...

["ide" rhyming stanza]

["ide" rhyming stanza]

Yes, this looks correct. The meter is all over the place, but let's wait until all nine stanzas are finished, then see what, if any editing is needed.

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves,
Blood flows too fast between skins --
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
egged on by the toiling slaves,
as tongues of cold water seek out,
little crevices of musky caves

[Drake]
At dinner, in the open light
she implored him that he behaves
himself - later, draped over her thighs
with endless moans now, she raves.

* * *

[_Land]
mounting pleasures, from hidden Isles
cozy caverns for me to deftly explore
satin skies rain mists overhead
as I explore my erotic whore

[Rybka]
Diving down and deep beneath
downy weight and towards the core
finding things beyond belief
our salty wet emotions soar.

[WickedEve]
plunging over and again
stroking wetter than before
drenched beneath the sheets
drown in me once more

* * *

[dragonhearted]
Undulating silken waves
Ebbing, flowing like the tide
Bodies rise toward ecstasy
As currents of passion guide...

["ide" rhyming stanza]

["ide" rhyming stanza]

 

[Zhuk]

.

.

 

[Rybka]

BUMP!

Just bringing this thread forward. Where does the poem stand at the moment? - How are the other poems holding up?

Regards,                       Rybka

 

[JUDO]

Re: Re: Re: Does this look right?

I've added the last stanza (in order to get this going) and suggested a title. I've also marked some changes, printed in red. Please let me know if they are okay with you. Thanks. - Judo

Luffing Sheet to Point Break

[Judo]
Filtered soft glow, blue with moon
'Neath a ceiling so low with waves,
Blood flows too fast between skins --
Naked, sweating and swelled from craves.

[Zhuk]
Crests and troughs in stationary flow
Egged on by the toiling slaves,
As tongues of cold water seek out,
Little crevices of musky caves.

[Drake]
At dinner in the open light
She implored him that he behaves
Himself - later, draped over her thighs
With endless moans now, she raves.

* * *

[_Land]
Mounting pleasures from hidden isles,
Cozy caverns for me to deftly explore,
Satin skies rain mists overhead
As I discover my erotic whore.

[Rybka]
Diving down and deep beneath
Downy weight and towards the core,
Finding things beyond belief,
Wet and salty emotions soar.

[WickedEve]
Plunging over and again,
Stroking wetter than before,
Drenched beneath the sheets --
Drown in me once more[/color=red].[/color]

* * *

[dragonhearted]
Undulating silken waves
Ebbing, flowing like the tide,
Bodies rise toward ecstasy
As currents of passion guide...

[Zhuk]
One on top, then the other,
Now sliding side-to-side,
Sluice gates gushing open,
Raging river ready to ride.

[Judo]
Fluttering ripples sing so loud
As sticky we are to not abide
Or sail again thus sandwiched proud
For we are only a little died.

 

[TheDR4KE]

reads well to me :-D

Quack

the D

 

[Zhuk]

OK

The changes seem ok to me

 

[WickedEve]

Look what I dug up from the depths of the poetry board...

Here's where The Poets' poems stand at the moment:

A Dildo for All Seasons: Rowdy Ted
4.00 4 282 Erotic Poetry 10/17/02 approved


For the Love of Luna's Light
4.88 8 218 Erotic Poetry 07/04/02 approved


Ghosts No Description.
4.29 7 175 Erotic Poetry 07/31/02 approved


Love Lies in the Rain
4.67 6 227 Erotic Poetry 07/10/02 approved


Romeo Is Bleeding: a hypersonnet
5.00 9 157 Erotic Poetry 07/20/02 approved


Severed Time In A Row
4.83 6 78 Erotic Poetry 08/23/02 approved


Okay, what happened with Luffing Sheet to Point Break?

 

[JUDO]

Looks like it's done. Post the sucker!


- Judo