My Erotic Trail
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in the sun's new glow
off to work I go
brought to life by
the warm rays
lifts, night's haze
off to work I go
brought to life by
the warm rays
lifts, night's haze
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LeBroz said:Here's a sneak peek at M/W-V.
I'll go over it a couple more times later in the morning to see if I'm still satisfied before I submit it. And leave it to our Wanton Vixxxen to help me out in a pinch on that line about panties. I'd written it up four different times and each was so jarring and out of place. That's part of what took so long to get this thing done up to its present version. She came up with the line to help smooth the transition.
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A Man and A Woman - V
~Novelty~
Daily toil done, home for some fun;
She sets the rules, lays out the plan
"Tonight's your fantasy, let's take it slow."
Romantic meal sets the tone
A little wine for the glow;
Bed time comes early, she has him wait
Till she calls out, then they can mate.
Taking the stairs, two at a time
Anticipating his treat she says is divine;
There on the bed she lays panty clad
"Here's your dessert, come work your way up."
Sips at toes begins his quest
Licks and nips and gentle breath;
Feast upon her quaking legs
Panties wet by tongue's embrace;
Slides them off not using hands
And there revealed a shaved delight;
But no ... there's more;
instructions follow ~ a Post-It note says,
"Entrance in Rear."
Fantasy delight, always denied
Turns her over, control tossed aside
Pushing forward, he just can't stop
"Oh God, Oh God," all that he hears
As he soars with passion's hammer, he misses, "Stop dear!"
The rhythm now set, he's lost all control
The delight of the moment, all that he knows
Moment of ecstasy, too long denied
Collapses to sleep his sleep divine.
Next day at work
Clock's ticks are sweet torture,
Work runs too slow
With thoughts of an encore;
Reports are written, memos filed,
Finally clock's chime
He bolts out the door.
Home at last, meal so quiet
Took as a sign of his stellar performance;
Off to bed early, he just can't wait
Bolts up the steps again, two at a time.
There on the bed, lays on her side
Must not want foreplay, just a quick ride;
Panties pulled quickly for his sweet access
But no ... there's more;
instructions follow ~ a Post-It note says,
"Closed for Repairs."
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RhymeFairy said:Oh My !!
Leo this one is a lil hottie.
What a hoot. Sexy, ( romantic in parts hehehe),
and just plain fun. I love it !!
Creative is a word I have been using a lot,
I know, but heck why change what fits, eh ~
Very creative my friend ~
LeBroz said:Here's a sneak peek at M/W-V.
I'll go over it a couple more times later in the morning to see if I'm still satisfied before I submit it. And leave it to our Wanton Vixxxen to help me out in a pinch on that line about panties. I'd written it up four different times and each was so jarring and out of place. That's part of what took so long to get this thing done up to its present version. She came up with the line to help smooth the transition.
.
A Man and A Woman - V
~Novelty~
Daily toil done, home for some fun;
She sets the rules, lays out the plan
"Tonight's your fantasy, let's take it slow."
Romantic meal sets the tone
A little wine for the glow;
Bed time comes early, she has him wait
Till she calls out, then they can mate.
Taking the stairs, two at a time
Anticipating his treat she says is divine;
There on the bed she lays panty clad
"Here's your dessert, come work your way up."
Sips at toes begins his quest
Licks and nips and gentle breath;
Feast upon her quaking legs
Panties wet by tongue's embrace;
Slides them off not using hands
And there revealed a shaved delight;
But no ... there's more;
instructions follow ~ a Post-It note says,
"Entrance in Rear."
Fantasy delight, always denied
Turns her over, control tossed aside
Pushing forward, he just can't stop
"Oh God, Oh God," all that he hears
As he soars with passion's hammer, he misses, "Stop dear!"
The rhythm now set, he's lost all control
The delight of the moment, all that he knows
Moment of ecstasy, too long denied
Collapses to sleep his sleep divine.
Next day at work
Clock's ticks are sweet torture,
Work runs too slow
With thoughts of an encore;
Reports are written, memos filed,
Finally clock's chime
He bolts out the door.
Home at last, meal so quiet
Took as a sign of his stellar performance;
Off to bed early, he just can't wait
Bolts up the steps again, two at a time.
There on the bed, lays on her side
Must not want foreplay, just a quick ride;
Panties pulled quickly for his sweet access
But no ... there's more;
instructions follow ~ a Post-It note says,
"Closed for Repairs."
.
My Erotic Trail said:awww an excellent addition to the series. Thanks for the sneek peek leon. actually it was INSPIRATIONAL <grin I shall look for it to surface in the new poems list. (~_~)
LeBroz said:Finally got it submitted an hour ago. Now all there's left to see is how long it takes to be posted. And, for the record, Wanton Vixxxen helped on this; first by getting me off my butt on the series and second by helping me solve a problem I had at a transition point. Her help has made the final version much stronger then the first draft - that's why, perhaps, she's a Domme. And, after one last day of tweaking and playing, you will see there are a number of small changes even from the version I originally posted above.
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wildsweetone said:it's amazing how even the tiniest of changes can make a poem work better. i love the tweaking with poetry way more than i ever did with prose, the differences are huge.
interesting poem Leon.
LeBroz said:Tweaking and editing is more fun than the original writing. Writing is like digging the ore out of the ground; it's hard work and the thing doesn't look all that special. Editing is like polishing the jewels and gold and it's so much fun to work on it and see the sparkle come out.
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LeBroz said:Tweaking and editing is more fun than the original writing. Writing is like digging the ore out of the ground; it's hard work and the thing doesn't look all that special. Editing is like polishing the jewels and gold and it's so much fun to work on it and see the sparkle come out.
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quasar said:Zen is a method of rediscovering the experience of being alive. It originated in India and China around the 5th century, but was made known to the West by the Japanese, specificaly through the writings of D.T. Suzuki in the early 1900's. It is a form of Mahayana Buddhism but it is not a religion and more closely resembles Taoism in its lack of creeds or dogma. Its aim is to bring about a transformation of consciousness that would bring people to an awareness of what is so in all things. It is not taught, but transmitted through zazen (meditation and contemplation) and sanzen (student-teacher dialogues).
bluerains said:"When I open my eyes to the outer world, I feel myself as a drop in the sea; but when I close my eyes and look within, I see the whole universe as a bubble raised in the ocean of my heart."
- from Divine Symphony by Inayat Khan
My Erotic Trail said:some times the mind
is as clear as bottled sunshine
RhymeFairy said:liquidized gold
hues of amber
color me radiantly
in sunlight's ... burn.
sculpted to tempt
raising rays push forward
following my hearts
dream, down
sunshine lane ~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
let my mind wonder
it found a dead end
stuck in mud
sun has hidden
behind her cloud.
we can but try eh ~
My Erotic Trail said:that's right eh!
you know I always wanted to know how to spell eh,...eh! grin
vampiredust said:A web of raindrops
covers the window,
ignored by time
and even the whisper
of the sunlight
cannot make it fall
vampiredust said:A web of raindrops
covers the window,
ignored by time
and even the whisper
of the sunlight
cannot make it fall