Challenge: The perfect ten.

[Bedazzler]

Oops. Missed the word count there.
But that last line is the whole poem's focal point. Can't leggo offit, sorry.

die by my hand
or hold it
your call

thx,
-Lin

Die by my sword!
Or give me a hug.
Your call.

~ just eliminate the word ' or ' it serves no real purpose anyway
~

~ nothing wrong with ' your call ' its how people talk ~ short and to the point ~

 

[Bedazzler]

~ Many
A
Lass
Escaped
From
Eternal
Monotony
And
Lived
Ecstatically ~

~ ~ ~

~ many asked
many unanswered
questions

what role does gender play ~

~ ~ ~

~ take a letter Maria
and another one
make a point ~

these bits are dedicated to my new friend, Maria ~

 

[darkmaas]

Wot zot

"Daddy
Wot should I draw?"
"How bout a zot."

.......

"k
she eats only
blue grass
under purple skies"

......

"Looks like a horse"
"Her cousin was Ponytail"

......

"I like the spots"
"Not dots
Bug bites"

......

"Well, nice stripes"
"Racy stripes daddy
She's fast"
"Hot zot"

......

 

[Maria2394]

probable cause
to search my soul
is warranted
but pointless
****************

ty bedazzler

 

[Bedazzler]

~ never is pointless pointless

take a chance and

lets dance ~

~ ~ ~

~ probable cause warrants

are unofficial

passes for fun and profit ~

~ ~ ~

~ search a soul or bedazzle

a decision meant to frazzle ~


~~~~

 

[The_Fool]

Fortune is your smile coined
Your love
means eternal life


****************************

Honesty is no virtue
when used
to inflict pain

****************************

Hey baby
wear that dress for me
with nothing else

****************************

Today is a loss
I did not say
something nice

****************************

The color of her underwear
says nothing
about her passion

****************************
The color of his underwear
says
he mixes darks, whites.

****************************

There is no pattern
to her madness
unless it's iambic

****************************

my dream
got dirty
when I played with it
outside

****************************

Yesterday means nothing
today means even less
without you here

****************************


Fool

 

[Senna Jawa]

Re: "your call"

Ok, [...]. Why is that not poetry?

Ok, what does "your call" contribute poetically to the text?

Regards,

 

[Senna Jawa]

Storm in a teacup...
  unfolding
words express
meaning
  Senna Jawa

~~~

Thank you, Debbie, for

Best regards,

 

[eagleyez]

first snow
moonless nite

collar turned up
walk slow
whistling.

 

[darkmaas]

love those shifty paradigms
twenty three cents in change

 

[darkmaas]

Thanks neo for the main theme...

Collectively,
we are crystalline,
but single-minded
in our hazed perceptions

Collectively we are anisotropic
Therein lies our perfect beauty

Crystalline is for Barbies
Old porcelain crazes
Life mapped fine.

Single minded
marches to a
wailing piper's
misted vale:
Culloden

 

[Angeline]

*

 

[darkmaas]

drift smooth
wave
snow angels
crisp
crystal
morning

 

[Guest]

Pale ghost
Gazes down
Through the naked
Cottonwood.
The moon.

 

[Angeline]

*

 

[Angeline]

*

 

[eagleyez]

the snow ceases
the clouds part
viola
luna up there.

 

[Linbido]

Re: Re: "your call"

Ok, what does "your call" contribute poetically to the text?

A breakoff from cliché and pretenciousness. A tonal shift.
But hey, you're the reader. At least one of them. Eye of the beholder, and all that jazz.
My question remains unanswered though.

Now, back to the poultry.

pax,
-Lin

 

[Linbido]

Send, travel, recieve -
a full duplex analog transmission:
A conversation.

 

[Linbido]

left           right

      below

   the climax
  or anticlimax?

  I'll never know

 

[Guest]

Angst attitudes, thier MTV,
all uninspired—
clichés of wasted youth.






editted because... uhm, never you mind

 

[Bedazzler]

~ pompous panderers
peruse
pointless poetry
perfidiously pissing
'pon players ~

~pahhhhh ~

 

[perks]

long fingered blond
slices cinema
into Tarantino treasure

 

[denis hale]

Huh?

Ducks
in a barrel

beaks clinging

to fart bubble
buoys...

 

[Guest]

Take it
On the chin.
Water off a duck's back.