Comments That Make Your Day

[StillStunned]

A raft of new comments on Too Early Not to Fuck.

From @Kormakur:

Enjoyed to hear about their fuck...amazing how him ate sisters Pussy

From @stoopinghawk:

I love how these are developing. I'm not sure where this all ends up, but I love watching it go there.

(I'm not sure either, but like our narrator, I'll enjoy the ride.)

Anonymous was kind enough to comment twice:

Very nicely written. The narrative of the final sex scene was terrifically erotic, yet warm and loving.

and

Not often I read such a well written offering.
Nicely done!

Thanks for all the positive feedback, everyone!

 

[gordo12]

Some gracious email feedback on Homeless:
She gave her name and email address, so it was wonderful to be able to write back and thank her!

Comments:

I found your name and story Homeless on another authors favorite's page. I have just finished reading it. So much to enjoy. Thank you for sharing your talent. I shall be reading your other stories over the next few weeks and am looking forward to doing that. Readable events by realistic characters. Thank you

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Not a comment, but I love when these pop up in my Activity Log

 

[StillStunned]

The ever-supportive @Smuttyandfun was kind enough to offer the following comment on You Know You Shouldn't, my experiment with second person POV:

5 Stars! Well done! So evocative, especially in so few words.
Now we'll have to see what he gets up tomorrow night, while mom is sleeping...

Thanks! The story is struggling, but it's nice to know that at least one person besides me enjoyed it.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

i'm quite partial to LW comments. they often make me chuckle. then, at other times, i'm concerned for some people's mental well-being. i'm also worried that some of them are free to roam... and breed.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

My latest story A Tale of Two Christmases is clearly pissing off some readers, with my lowest score of 59 stories, even below the 750 word ones. Not quite sure why - the only comment says it was 'too British' for them to get beyond page 1...

So I particularly appreciated this email:
Hi
Just wanted to thank you for your latest. As ever, just elegant, evocative, natural storytelling.

I always look for your work.
Regards

 

[MelissaBaby]

My latest story A Tale of Two Christmases is clearly pissing off some readers, with my lowest score of 59 stories, even below the 750 word ones. Not quite sure why - the only comment says it was 'too British' for them to get beyond page 1...

So I particularly appreciated this email:
Hi
Just wanted to thank you for your latest. As ever, just elegant, evocative, natural storytelling.

I always look for your work.
Regards

You got 5 stars from me.

 

[Smuttyandfun]

This one made the year it took me to write 'Just Roomies' worth while.

Wow, what a great story! Absolutely amazing; well thought out and executed with just the right amount of tease and sex. This must have taken considerable time and work to construct and is one of the most well-written and entertaining stories I've read here. Every character seemed to have their own individual idiosyncrasies and life to them with Gunther being a pleasing surprise toward the end. THIS IS erotica!

 

[StillStunned]

More comments coming in on You Know You Shouldn't.

From @Rob_Royale:

Very cool idea! Well done.

From @Paul_Chance:

Five stars from me. An excellent little vignette.

And @Devinter seems to have caught the 2P POV bug:

You read the latest StillStunned story. You realize it's written in the dreaded second-person-point-of-view narrative. You know it shouldn't work. You know it really shouldn't. And yet, as you finish reading it, you feel the need to quote a line from the text: "There it is!"

Thanks, all!

 

[lc69hunter]

It REALLY juices me (ok, sometimes even literally!) when I reach other couples.

From:
https://literotica.com/s/torys-emergence

“Such a hot story! I HAD to roleplay it with my husband tonight, and it was some of the HOTTEST sex we’ve had in a while. Y’all should write more stories.”

That story is listed among my favorites, and occasionally re-read it

 

[lc69hunter]

Proving that people on Loving Wives can have an opinion I disagree with, but still express it politely. From anon:

—

Sorry. You write well and that alone made this a pleasure to read. But “wife” or no, this story should be in the gay category, subsection lesbian. It is not what I want to read, and whether this is biased or not, I think “Loving Wives” is an implied hetero category, which is what I was looking for. I am NOT judging sexual preference here, to each her own, just asking for respect for the categories and traditions of Lit., and the readers. That being said, you are a terrific and very sensual writer and I wish you well.

—

About Harper’s Reckoning

I found this encouraging.

Em

I remember reading that comment and just shaking my head

 

[EmilyMiller]

I remember reading that comment and just shaking my head

It was at least polite. And no one got called a deviant or polluter of good hetero folk. I can that a win.

Em

 

[gordo12]

i'm quite partial to LW comments. they often make me chuckle. then, at other times, i'm concerned for some people's mental well-being. i'm also worried that some of them are free to roam... and breed.

That's why we try to keep their right hands busy (apology to lefties) and keep them from breeding. Besides, who wants to sleep with a troll?

 

[StillStunned]

"You Know You Shouldn't" is slowly creeping up, from around 3.5 yesterday to 3.8 today. Thanks largely, I'm sure, to the positive comments. @samhasstories added this one today:

Still Stunning. Well done.

Thanks!

 

[Rob_Royale]

"You Know You Shouldn't" is slowly creeping up, from around 3.5 yesterday to 3.8 today. Thanks largely, I'm sure, to the positive comments. @samhasstories added this one today:


Thanks!

Honestly, I'd ignore the scores on this. Because too many readers are just hung up on the 2nd person and the shortness of it. As a writer, I can see that it was a really cool experiment in out-of-the-box writing and character conflict. It's a great story that deserves much better than it's going to get from most readers.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Honestly, I'd ignore the scores on this. Because too many readers are just hung up on the 2nd person and the shortness of it. As a writer, I can see that it was a really cool experiment in out-of-the-box writing and character conflict. It's a great story that deserves much better than it's going to get from most readers.

Yeah, I've got a story rated 4.78/239 that I feel the same way about.

Seriously, I gave @StillStunned a lot of grief about even trying this as I hate 2nd person. Still checked it out and popped him a 5* rating. he did a great job with a difficult(and in my opinion completely futile and worthless) task. LOL

 

[StillStunned]

Honestly, I'd ignore the scores on this. Because too many readers are just hung up on the 2nd person and the shortness of it. As a writer, I can see that it was a really cool experiment in out-of-the-box writing and character conflict. It's a great story that deserves much better than it's going to get from most readers.

Thanks! I'll admit I had pretty high hopes, but they were dashed within minutes when the first ratings came in. Since then I've realised that it's never going to be a great success - more a writer's story than a reader's story. But the appreciation is improving, and if it stabilises at around a 4 I'll be a very happy writer. If not, oh well. Like you say, it's a good story, even if it's not to the general public's taste.

 

[StillStunned]

Seriously, I gave @StillStunned a lot of grief about even trying this as I hate 2nd person. Still checked it out and popped him a 5* rating. he did a great job with a difficult(and in my opinion completely futile and worthless) task. LOL

Thanks for the stars, and for being big enough to admit your prejudices.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Thanks for the stars, and for being big enough to admit your prejudices.

Consider yourself lucky. I hate canned beets too and I will never, even under eminent threat of having to read 2nd person prose, ever eat them.

 

[gordo12]

Thanks! I'll admit I had pretty high hopes, but they were dashed within minutes when the first ratings came in. Since then I've realised that it's never going to be a great success - more a writer's story than a reader's story. But the appreciation is improving, and if it stabilises at around a 4 I'll be a very happy writer. If not, oh well. Like you say, it's a good story, even if it's not to the general public's taste.

First ratings are almost always the trolls, along with the nighttime denizens that inhabit the halls here. Daytime readers are more amenable to stories, and the ratings start to rise. There is a rhythm to the voting here.
But some stories put the readers off and suffer accordingly, no matter how well written or plotted.
I did try an experiment where I disabled voting from the start till around noon the next day. But then I realized it was stupid because I had nothing to measure it against.

 

[onehitwanda]

On my latest:

How come Annemarie has a scar that never healed despite being a vampire?

 

[Devinter]

On my latest:

 

[StillStunned]

@Devinter took out those vampire teeth long enough to leave some lovey feedback on Too Early Not to Fuck, together with some constructive suggestions:

This was my favourite part of the trio thus far. The lovemaking during the second half especially. If you want some constructive criticism, I think you used the word 'cream' one or two too many times, personally - but that's me nit-picking. Also, I love how Sal's personality shines through in every scene, every bit of dialogue. The main character, however, feels far more plain in contrast. It's a common thing when writing first-person-POV to be fair! Just something to consider for part four. I do hope there will be a part four! Easy 5-stars, as usual.

Absolutely right, I probably do overuse "cream". I'll have to start looking for an alternative. Anything but "juices", though.

You're also right that the narrator is bland. I'd like to say that's deliberate, because Sal is the focus of the stories, but it could just be laziness on my part. Either way, Sal is more interesting than her brother.

Thanks!

 

[EmilyMiller]

Have only just discovered your stories but will be reading all of them. Very well written and well developed characters and very hot.

— A Good Girl Gone Bad Ch. 01 : Ella

 

[onehitwanda]

Anything but "juices", though.

Flange Flan?

I should be locked up away from you guys until I'm cured