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Pure said:
These are the comments on my two LW stories, Pure... I kept the "bad stuff"
I'll Be Your Superman
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All These Years
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SelenaKittyn said:These are the comments on my two LW stories, Pure... I kept the "bad stuff"
I'll Be Your Superman
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All These Years
*sighs* It's an age old argument. Why do they always insist on commenting upon the direction the story took rather than the quality of the writing? At least one of yours had the balls to leave a name rather than hiding behind the 'anonymous' cloak, although the other did take the cowardly road.
Trolls...can't live with 'em....yada yada.
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The author control panel works off your login cookie Box, you'll have to go to the last page of your story, click on the "view all comments" link, and copy that url to link to just the comments.
http://english.literotica.com/stories/storyfeedbackboard.php?id=290899&pagehint=6 Mine, even though I don't have any of the venom spitting comments common to the category.
http://english.literotica.com/stories/storyfeedbackboard.php?id=290899&pagehint=6 Mine, even though I don't have any of the venom spitting comments common to the category.
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Darkniciad said:
But how did you avoid getting the usual LW readers reading and commenting, I wonder???
Hm. Interesting!
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i love the way one of the comments made it sound like it was your, the author's, husband that you were 'disrespecting'. how amusing.
Places rather a lot of emphasis on his own importance too, insisting that the author should be banned for not meeting his needs. Twit.
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Places rather a lot of emphasis on his own importance too, insisting that the author should be banned for not meeting his needs. Twit.
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SelenaKittyn said:But how did you avoid getting the usual LW readers reading and commenting, I wonder???
Fortunately, it was exactly what I wanted to write anyhow... but I did avoid several landmines.
First, no wimp husband. He's far from a strong character, and certainly packed with flaws, but in the end he doesn't stand for the cheating, he gets out.
The cheater gets beat up for her cheating, too. Even though the husband isn't the one taking revenge, she does get hit pretty hard over it.
Jackie has at least a fathomable reason for cheating. She's been doing without for six months. It gives at least a little sympathy for her actions. I think that may have helped avoid turning off female readers and making them think "just another vindictive male writer"
Likewise, things don't turn out well at all for Jackie, but she does end up getting her job back and returning to some semblence of a normal life. I don't completely destroy her... other than emotionally.
I don't make it a world where only the women are cheating. Roger's cheating, Dan's cheating...
I think I just managed to dance through the minefield. It was what I was aiming for, although I honestly expected to get some knee-jerk nasty "wimp husband" comments from trolls who didn't even finish the story. I purposely put in vague hints that Chris might wimp out at one point, hoping to laugh at trollish comments to that effect when the ending obviously shows that he doesn't.
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Darkniciad said:
No offense, but I dunno if it was the story itself that avoided the usual comments... I didn't see the "usual suspects" commenting at all, one way or the other... it just seems odd that they wouldn't show up either for or against, that's all... *shrug*
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Darkniciad said:
OK. It works now. On "Annie's Neglected Pussy" I think I got more comments than on any other story.
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SelenaKittyn said:
I didn't delete anything from the comments, if that's what you might be thinking. The only thing I would delete would be attacks against another author, ignorant racism, and that ilk. They can spit venom at me, the category, the story, or whatever and I'll leave it up. I left up the two harsh and painful comments on "Karen", even though it was in the middle of the contest.
It may simply not have been the cup-o-tea for many of the usual suspects, not good enough or bad enough to warrant a comment. I'm not saying it's the height of literature for the category or anything
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I was tempted to put my newest submission (yet to be approved) in Loving Wives.
But I like it too much and wimped out. It'll be going in Erotic Couplings.
One day I'll write one specifically with LW in mind. Then I won't mind so much when it gets slammed.
But I like it too much and wimped out. It'll be going in Erotic Couplings.
One day I'll write one specifically with LW in mind. Then I won't mind so much when it gets slammed.
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A cuckold is simply a husband whose wife has been sexually unfaithful. Comes from the old French word for cuckoo, a bird that lays its egg in another bird's nest.
There is no equivalent word for a wife whose husband has dipped his wick away from home.
Surely we need to split the LW into 3 - 'Cheating Wives', 'Wimp Husbands' and 'Marital Bliss'.
Innocently stepping in, I got a lot of criticism for an LW story of a marriage with no infidelity, a few problems and a happy ever after ending. Apparently you can really commit adultery in your mind.
There is no equivalent word for a wife whose husband has dipped his wick away from home.
Surely we need to split the LW into 3 - 'Cheating Wives', 'Wimp Husbands' and 'Marital Bliss'.
Innocently stepping in, I got a lot of criticism for an LW story of a marriage with no infidelity, a few problems and a happy ever after ending. Apparently you can really commit adultery in your mind.
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I never got a single bad feedback on my other story up on Lit, from the EC category. My first five feedbacks on the first No Harm, No Foul chapter were brutal. Of course, I LOVED it! Being berated for something you wrote by someone who is misspelling every other word is pretty entertaining for me.
One of those first feedbacks, which I'll paraphrase, went:
"I hope thta cheeatig hore fucking DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
For some reason that makes me smile when I think of that one. If I had known LW was so much fun I would have written in that category a lot sooner.
A lot of my public comments make little sense to me. Many of them are complaining that I didn't address issues in the chapter they had just read when clearly, to anyone who actually READ it, that was the primary topic of said chapter. I keep hearing about how I never give a reason as to why the wife cheats. Apparently there is no reason good enough in their eyes to count as a real reason, but being neglected and ignored over a long period of time seemed good enough to me.
On the other hand, I have also gotten some of the best feedback I've ever had from Lit. The people who get it have been very good to me in their feedback. As much as I enjoy the rambling and illiterate insults, the good feedback is still better.
One of those first feedbacks, which I'll paraphrase, went:
"I hope thta cheeatig hore fucking DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
For some reason that makes me smile when I think of that one. If I had known LW was so much fun I would have written in that category a lot sooner.
A lot of my public comments make little sense to me. Many of them are complaining that I didn't address issues in the chapter they had just read when clearly, to anyone who actually READ it, that was the primary topic of said chapter. I keep hearing about how I never give a reason as to why the wife cheats. Apparently there is no reason good enough in their eyes to count as a real reason, but being neglected and ignored over a long period of time seemed good enough to me.
On the other hand, I have also gotten some of the best feedback I've ever had from Lit. The people who get it have been very good to me in their feedback. As much as I enjoy the rambling and illiterate insults, the good feedback is still better.
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God - the more i hear about this kind of vindictive feedback the more I want to provoke a little of it. Sounds like fun!
Do you reckon a woman cheating on her hubby with another woman would do it, or does she need to get done by another bloke to really set the naysayers off?
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Do you reckon a woman cheating on her hubby with another woman would do it, or does she need to get done by another bloke to really set the naysayers off?
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Well I wrote this story....http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=129087
I got some good feedback on it.... I have been hosed on other stories in this category... but this one came out well
I got some good feedback on it.... I have been hosed on other stories in this category... but this one came out well
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Pure said:
Wimp husband who meekly watches and masturbates while another man is fucking his wife. This alone will do it.
For added screaming, make the other man a black man. That will add the racist assholes to the mix.
Give the black man a twelve inch cock in order to bring out ( much more legitimate ) screaming about stereotypes and realism. Have him speaking the worst stereotypical ghetto talk for added fun, taunting the wimp husband.
The woman should be cheating just because she's a slutty bitch, no other reason. In fact, it's best if the husband is a model man and she's like this.
If you really want to go whole hog, have the cheater get raped at some point in the story, and love it. Have her bring him home to join in the fun too. It would be best if he was yet another racial sterotype. This should add death threats to the standard rants.
A female writing all this doubles the criticism.
We'll assume perfect grammar and spelling, but any errors that can slip through the submission process with help too.
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ooh, it's tempting to create one like that. Who wants to do a joint effort? We each write a paragraph each until we get to 1000 words, then post it under a joint author name and see what kind of response we get!
I'll start and if anyone wants to play, just carry it on. I'll copy/paste all entries into a word document, then we can try submitting. Yes?
Ok...
Jessie sat on the edge of the bed taking off her jewellery. She took as much time as possible, hoping that Nick would be asleep by the time she actually got into bed. They hadn't had sex for almost a week now and his patience would start running out again soon. She sighed as she brushed out her hair and french-braided it into a long plait. He was so sweet and thoughtful that it made her feel even worse when she denied him, but she honestly couldn 't face it. It wasn't the sex so much, as the way he gazed into her eyes the whole time and kept telling her how much she meant to him. She loved him too, but vocalising it made her uncomfortable and 'making love' just made her cringe. She slid carefully under the covers and sighed as she felt an arm snake around her waist. Closing her eyes she tried to ignore the things he whispered and focus on her own imaginings...
I'll start and if anyone wants to play, just carry it on. I'll copy/paste all entries into a word document, then we can try submitting. Yes?
Ok...
Jessie sat on the edge of the bed taking off her jewellery. She took as much time as possible, hoping that Nick would be asleep by the time she actually got into bed. They hadn't had sex for almost a week now and his patience would start running out again soon. She sighed as she brushed out her hair and french-braided it into a long plait. He was so sweet and thoughtful that it made her feel even worse when she denied him, but she honestly couldn 't face it. It wasn't the sex so much, as the way he gazed into her eyes the whole time and kept telling her how much she meant to him. She loved him too, but vocalising it made her uncomfortable and 'making love' just made her cringe. She slid carefully under the covers and sighed as she felt an arm snake around her waist. Closing her eyes she tried to ignore the things he whispered and focus on her own imaginings...
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Darkniciad said:
You will have to have the husband wimpily objecting to it, and begging her not to, but the wife and her black lover just laugh at him. If he likes the idea of watching, it would take away something. You might even have him forced to lick up the creampie, unless that would be going overboard. The couple would have some very WASPish names, such as Percy and Lindsey, and the black lover would have a stereotypical name, such as Sambo.
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Boxlicker101 said:
Very good points! I more or less was thinking about the objections and implied them in "wimpy", but the creampie part is critical. That's certainly not overboard when we're going for maximum venom spit potential.
Good idea on those names too
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