NC needs creative Help

Weak power supply = made his own because its ment to run on the heat based owners power.

Tumble and I were talking about the Gas Mask issue last night oddly. She has a few early drafts of Beth Black she has done, and they look very good seeing as the costume is still under development. (We are unsure of pants or skirt... Simple problems but completely new drawings.) Other characters have no sketches yet.

I like the stun button which is the simple way to explain the stun sword.

As for what the gauntlets do, I would assume they let him shape shift to his "True" form. (That could be a big four armed bruiser or dragon or what ever.) It can be explained he thinks his shape shifting is a curse.
 
I don't like the shape shifting curse, the ideal that the gauntlets allow him some kind of uber hybrid form is interesting. Shiva's 6 arms, Chinese Dragon's scales, Raven's flight or however you choose to mix them but I do think that some kind of ideal "super" form is ideal. (though it makes me a bit sad to be using him for the first arc but still.

The weak power supply because the suit was meant for somebody who had powers is great. But it means that we should push Deciple's appearance later and maybe start off with somebody weaker, like Tremayne. Somebody that powering down mid fight isn't a death knell.
 
We can hold powering down until the filler comics. The disciple is important as a hook to draw people in. (I am a firm believer in hooks, especaily given this site and my time here.

Hey any feedback on the air elemental being poisonous?
 
Hey, i agree about the power,,,we'll save him powering down for a later...perhaps that could be how he gets hurt in the seocnd story, resulting in him hving to visit taunt.

I looked at tumble's concept, and I don't particularily like the style, and don't think it would work. Stylewise i'm after something more classic comic-ish, or maybe evn perhaps the same style found in the TV show, The Batman. I have told her this, and I have said if she can draw like that then brilliant, i just don't think the current style will work.

oh well.

Episode two plan coming soon.
 
The Doctor to whom KC visits, the one who's always sarcastic ect ect...i'm sure he was mentioned earlier on....Doctor Taunt is simply the code name i gave him
 
I was more checking for a bio, I'd seen the name tossed around but I didn't see a bio, and since you were expressing some displeasure with the charachter I was considering giving it a once over to see if I could improve it.
 
No worries, if he's gonna be a minor charachter a stand in for Leslie Tomas of Batman then a name is plenty. I'd rather focus on "main" charachters. Also I'm willing to give a thumbs up to a toxic air elemental. Heck we can kill two birds with a single stone and be creative at the same time if we make the toxins acidic so it feels like your on fire.
 
Well just make sure you tell her nicely NC.

The trouble is she isn't familiar with comic heroes or the animated batman. Although her style didn't seem to different from that of The Batman cartoon, at least not to me. Then again I haven't watched much of that series.
 
Yes but Tumble and I go out there fore I have to say politely inform her. Its a cosmic by law or something.
 
Hate to be all pushy but episode 2 plan is where or are we focusing Episode 1 first draft?

I think we are better off having all of the episode plans before any of the drafts so we can start setting up continuity. Defining some of the major locales and their "rough" relationship, not to mention just charachter interactiona and so we can build on friendships and reveal things about certain charachters.
 
Will do, the past few days have being quite busy, had a 9 hour train ride on sunday, and these past few days i've just started my new job (which is just for two weeks lol - I need the money) Luckily I have being doing a bit of work and i'll post it asap.
 
Just trying to keep things moving, I understand your busy it happens to the best of us. I also know what happens if you let projects, particualrly projects with more than two people stagnate for more than a few days.
 
Episode III

EPISODE III -- DR. TAUNT

Starts with KC breaking into a drug bust, leading into a firefight. Unfortunatly his suit's battery suddenly dies and he is attacked ruthlessly, and can't escape when a large weapon is shot at him...His armour protects the blast but he is still badly hurt. He manages to escape by climbing into a nearby car, and drives himself to Dr Angus Taunt, who helps him reluctantly afer KC basically blackmails him. Taunt works out who's behind the mask.

FLASHBACK -- Shows taunt's history, how he lost his medical liscence, and what he did after losing it, only to be stopped and caught out by Nate Crowe.

Back in present time - Taunt helps Crowe, and when Treymayne's men come knocking (they saw the CAR outside) and offers a temp fuel solution, and Crowe goes outside and take out the men, while one gets away. (not sure what wuld happen as they'd know taunt helped him..or would they?)

Ends with the one surviving thug going to trymayne who reveals that KC maybe useful with disposing him off his competition, and elavating him to the top of the mob ect ect.
 
EPISODE III -- DR. TAUNT

Starts with KC breaking into a drug bust, leading into a firefight. Unfortunatly his suit's battery gets hit with a lucky shot and powers down the suit as he was flying at the time he falls and is injured during the fall (twisted ankle or something), and can't escape when a large weapon (It needs to be clearly illegal maybe it even misses and he's only hit by the explosion or shrapnel, mostly I want the gangs to have atleast one weapon that makes them a legit threat later) is shot at him...His armour protects the blast but he is still badly hurt. (How does he get a car? Does he summon it a la Bats, does he high jack a car *perhaps with the sparks of his damaged battery?* Does he just car jack an innocent?) He manages to escape by climbing into a nearby car, and drives himself to Dr Angus Taunt, who helps him reluctantly afer KC basically blackmails him. Taunt works out who's behind the mask. (What precautions were taken to keep the thugs from following him?)

FLASHBACK -- Shows taunt's history, how he lost his medical liscence, and what he did after losing it, only to be stopped and caught out by Nate Crowe.
(What was he doing? I like the idea of genetic experiments, maybe even clones)

Back in present time - Taunt helps Crowe, and when Treymayne's men come knocking (they saw the CAR outside) and offers a temp fuel solution, and Crowe goes outside and take out the men, while one gets away. (not sure what wuld happen as they'd know taunt helped him..or would they?)

Ends with the one surviving thug going to trymayne who reveals that KC maybe useful with disposing him off his competition, and elavating him to the top of the mob ect ect.[/QUOTE]
 
How about if Dr. Taunt has some sort of synthetic adrenaline cocktail that he gives KC? Leading into Taunt being the one who potentially suplies him with the pain killer and physical enhancement drugs?

You could have a whole addiction arc with that.
 
Could be an interesting angle, I don't know if I want to have him be an addict though. There is already Tony Stark ya know. I loved that in the movie btw, that fucker was ALWAYS drinking.

We would have to change some of the story around (namely the final confrontation or at least hint that Tremayne is in trouble at the end) but perhaps Dr. Taunt is one of the Sanctuary spots in the city, something that the criminals and perhaps even police have a agreement of sorts that we don't fight here. Real life gangs have designated no violence zones, even in a war it's nice to be able to trust that the messenger won't get shot, literally.
 
Sorry, Yeah, I agree, and i like the idea that Taunt could be in the sanctuary area of the city.

EPISODE II -- DR. TAUNT

Starts with KC breaking into a drug bust, leading into a firefight. Unfortunatly his suit's battery gets hit with a lucky shot and powers down the suit as he was flying at the time he falls and is injured during the fall (twisted ankle), and can't escape when a large weapon is shot at him...His armour protects the blast but he is still thrown by the explosion and dislocates his shoulder. He manages to escape by climbing into a nearby car (belonging to one of the mobsters), and drives himself to Dr Angus Taunt, who helps him reluctantly afer KC basically blackmails him. Taunt works out who's behind the mask. (He only drives to the local park, after which he runs through the park to Taunts house)

FLASHBACK -- Shows taunt's history, how he lost his medical liscence, and what he did after losing it, only to be stopped and caught out by Nate Crowe.
(He had being performing illegal operations for patients as well as being an addict - Nate discovers this when trying to get help for his brother.)

Back in present time - Taunt helps Crowe, and offers him an alternate power source. KC then goes to the park and taakes out the mobsters one by one, ala batman begins style.

Ends with the one surviving thug going to trymayne who reveals that KC maybe useful with disposing him off his competition, and elavating him to the top of the mob ect ect.
 
Questions.

1. What kinds of illegal procedures was he performing? It is kind of important to the charachter.

2. I don't think we should give him a new power source this early (we shoud probably wait until the second arc for that) instead let him McGuyver something to get him through the night.

3. Again you used the term "survived" does Crow kill normally, does he kill when he's desperate, or did you mean to say "escaped criminal"

4. The more I'm thinking about Tremayne the more I'm think it would be fun to build him up slowly, his first job we should have him mid level (like he seems to be here) and the end result of this fight will have him in deep shit for violating the sanctuary. Then we can use the majority of our filler arcs with him sorta behind the scenes manipulating Crowe and the cops to take out his competition but slowly rising. Well split filler between him and Havoc.

Opinion:

1. I didnt' really think about this earlier but now that I'm looking at the structure of your story arcs I think we might want to have less "filler" and more charachters. If you think about Batman, Superman, the X-Men pretty much anybody but Spawn who seems to have like four villians period, each of those heros could go twelve months without punching the same face twice. (Bat's rogue gallery is easily the most recognizable but if you sit and think on Supes or the X-men I'm sure you can come up with a dozen easy) My point is that we need to establish the guys quickly so I opt to move Dr. Taunt or at least the power down of the suit till later and instead put a major charachter here, atleast the first say three or four should all give us a villian to explore.
 
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Lol, I'm sat reading this and i'm thinking about doing a complete redux on what we've got....

I'm beginning to think about doing something similar to a team of heroes, like the JSA, JLA, Avengers ect ect.

The reason for this being i'm sat here reading it all and all i caan think of is batman whenever i read it.

Whats everyone's opinion? I'd like input...

A) We stick with KC as it is.

B) We take on this new idea of a team based comic.

C) We attempt to do them both.
 
Ultimately I think we should go with C, a super hero team is an entirely different dynamic than this but I would like to get farther in this before starting anything else even in a potential way.

I seriously think you need to stop being worried about it being batmanesque though, it's a fucking comic book story so it's gonna be batmanesque. You just don't worry about it.

Batman, Darkwing Duck, Spiderman, Green Arrow, all basically the same hero. Add Zorro to that list.

Superman, Green Lantern, Thor, to a lesser extent Ironman are all very similar once you look at them.

Besides if we build a superhero team they are mostly the same anyway. X-Men, Justice League, Avengers.

The exception to this rule is guys like Hellboy where it's Hellboy & friends, they really aren't a super group they are a support team that happens to have powers of their own. There is a certain formula here and I see no reason to consciously deviate from it by so much.
 
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True and you know i think i'll make an executive descision.

We will do both. This thread will be for Knight Crowe Only, and I will make another Thread for the superhero team idea.

You guys again are all welcome to help.
 
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