New Poetry Recommendations

[Tathagata]

A Few Mentions

Little Minna has two from the 31st that I really like.

The One Who Knows - Little Minna

Erotic, honest , it digs into that place we all have but very few will admit.

No pretense , no bullshit , just pure thought.

and

Boxing Day - Little Minna

This has some great lines and images.
ex:

Oh, there’s always this promise that I won’t want weddings
that you won’t ask for a disappearing girl
this promise, this time—
how we’ll be slick, new creatures
before the invention of clothing

slick new creatures...I like it
Please read and give this new poetess a welcome


Guest Bedroom - dorksicle

This is like a painting to me
I can see everything frozen in that one moment
I liked it alot


Beneath His Table - Wicked Eve

There is a dish--blue,
if blues knelt in cream,
that passive shade.
I preferred red, vital

and hot with release.

If blues knelt in cream...
I can see the color of that dish perfectly.
Eve writes some of the best sub poetry I've ever read.
Give this a look.



There's some great stuff posted today too

two by another new poet Tzara

Goblet - Tzara
and
Unresolved Triad - Tzara

Are worth a few reads in my opinion..

 

[flyguy69]

Oh my! I have to reiterate Tath's recommendation of LittleMina-- this, folks, is poetry!

 

[PatCarrington]

Boxing Day - Little Minna

i'll triple up on this one.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

3rd August, 2005

Hello, poets-

I apologise for the tardiness of today's reading suggestions, but the new poems didn't appear until late, and at the worst possible time for me.

Still, I read all and commented most of the 23 new poems posted today, and here are some of my favourites, for those of you without the time to read them all:

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Lived Is To Devil as 6323 is to...
by Ancient117331 ©

A witty quasi-list poem with a side order of punch!

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Unresolved Triad
by Tzara ©

One of two poems posted today, the first two by this poet. It's a short and deceivingly simple piece, admirable in its precise use of language.

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Philip is moving away
by steve porter ©

A little jewel by a poet I wish would post more often, on a slightly different record from what I am used to. Simple and sparse language, but metaphorically loaded.

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Circles
by Curiouswife ©

Another poem that relies on a deceivingly sparse and clean language, and a structure that only becomes apparent on a second or third read. I'm keeping my eye on this one!

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Catching the clock and it is rusted I am blind
by annaswirls ©

Two twin poems by one of our finest regulars, they read almost like something out of the mind of a Benzedrine-free Kerouac - and I say that in the best possible sense.

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inventing the inventor
by annaswirls © http://no-troy.planetaclix.pt/images/laurenschoice.gif

In my opinion, the best poem posted today. Enough said.

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Crazy Bubbles
by tungtied2u ©

To anyone wanting to know how to write erotic poetry, with just the right balance between pure sensuality and witty seduction, this poem is a must-read. Particularly good, I thought, was the entwining of extended metaphors throughout.

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Handyman and a Paycheck
by lil_elvis ©

And finally, what I consider to be easily the best rhyming poem of today's crop, with great attention to rhythm, metre, musical tone.

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There were a number of other poems in today's list that could merit an appearance here, but any set of recommendations that lists more than half of the full range of choices, must be doing something wrong!

If you have any extra time available, though, I vividly recommend that you read all the new poems, as always.

 

[Rybka]

New Poems of Thursday August 4, 2005

There are 18 new submissions on the first Thursday of August to read, and I bring you one non-erotic "spinner" from the archives. - I am very happy to see that this practice of mine has spawned its own thread. Thank you, Liar et al.

Today's Archivity:
This poem I spun-up from January second of last year.

- It took me eight spins to find this poem by IrishWolfhound. This poet joined Lit. in January of 2002 and this is his most recent poem. He has not posted a poem (and only one more story) since then. This is a winter/New Years poem, but even in the heat of August it is a good one! Here are some wonderful words to write to a lover on a crisp clear night. If you agree, please go vote. It is rated at 4.60, but does not have enough votes to earn its H.

Upon the New Year

Look for me then
Upon the New Year
Not among others
But off on my own

I’ll be in darkness
On frost covered field
Skyward gazing
At Orion and Ursa

Come to me then
Stand there beside me
The chill will not touch us
Star’s fires will warm us

We’ll watch them journey
From horizon to horizon
Forever in motion
Sailing the heavens

Walk with me then
Into the future
A year to explore
New found adventures

New moons are rising
More stars await us
Beautiful diamonds
Seen in your eyes

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I have read all of today's poems and it must be me, because I find none I want to say that you "must read". There is plenty of "telling", and complaining about life or being lonely. There is also the normal amount of erotica that reads like the same poem that I have been reading here on Literotica for more than three years. New poets always need to reinvent the wheel. I guess we all need to get the egocentricity out of our lives. New poets' loves and hurts are always the deepest and most important. This is a universal truism of the young.
Having had my small rant I will give you three to start with today, but there are others you may want to find for yourself.

First in line today is WickedEve with hidden in space an erotic space poem. I would rate this poem much higher if the language was not to disparate. There is a difference between "erotic" and "dirty". In this poem WE displays both, and IMHO weakens the work by doing so. Anybody can scribble dirty words, but Eve is capable of excellent erotica. Perhaps

fuck your cunt.
i'd fuck your mouth.
baby, i'm dripping cum all over the place.
cum with me.

is for shock value, if so, I must be too jaded. I am disappointed not shocked with the schlock.

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The second is one by My Erotic Tale a poet I do not read except on Thursdays. Well, today is a Thursday and MET presents a humorous piece of prose titled Portal to the Vixen Planet II. It is a piece of good ol' boy country humor and ends with a twist. Now who's the country bumpkin?

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The third one is quite a surprise. Go read A Dead Tree In Summer. The title alone is enough to make you want to take a look, and when you do, I think you will like the simplicity and the well matched form. I am quite impressed by the first line of the last stanza. - Nicely done, Scott N. Leavitt. The master may learn from his acolyte.

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Taste is always an individual thing so there may certainly be other poems out there today that you will thoroughly enjoy. If you find ones you really like on the New Poems page, please come back and tell us about them!

And please remember that our poets need your support, so Read Vote Comment Feedback. It won’t come back around if you don’t send it out!

Regards, Rybka


To A Poet, Who Would Have Me Praise Certain Bad Poets. . .
You say, as I have often given tongue
In praise of what another's said or sung,
'Twere politic to do the like by these;
But was there ever dog that praised his fleas?
~ Yeats

 

[annaswirls]

New Poem Reviews: Friday August 5, 2005

Only seven NEW POEMS today five of which are illustrated. It is easy to run through all of them so recommendations are not as necessary as a day with 40! I will give my quick view on all of them.

All of them have something to offer, the highlight for me was Lauren Hynde's photo in her illustrated poem Al·Gharb·6 make sure you take a look today.

As implied, these are my opinions for you to embrace or ignore as you deem appropriate. Happy reading!

(I have this feeling that at 4:00 today 40 new poems will appear)



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Father of the Bride
Boxlicker101 ©

a sweet tribute to a family milestone, Boxlicker101 shares with us his soft side. Touching.



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Lauren Hynde © adds another to her Al·Gharb series. The photo is mystical, the rocks seem to be balanced between two levels of sky and floating on a dark ocean. Very surrealistic.

Al·Gharb·6

the serene profile the metal unchained sculpted
in these rocks the desolate confidence......

Personally I find the vocabulary to be weighty for such an etheral image, but they both stand on their own.



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] Hiding in the Shadows [/B]
sophia jane ©

sophia jane brings us a pensive embossed picture of a young woman whose face adds dimension to her words. There have been many poems of women hiding in the shadows. This one did a nice job in shedding some light on this topic.

That’s me in the shadows,
hiding my face now,
concealing my flaws,
because you saw the beauty in objects,
but not in me.

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head on
4degrees ©

I have always enjoyed 4degrees internal sound repetition/near rhyme, it adds to the rhythm of his words. This one starts dark, like the text color and cressendos to the collision at the end. Cool image at the bottom too!


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In the Shadows
missteez ©

missteez has her cool manipulated photo of flowers in the shadows as a metaphor ...

In the shadows
Away from the light
Flowers are hard to see
Such is a life
Lived in obscurity

I like the sporadic rhyme in this poem.


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Crap, Crap
by emileigh ©

Am I allowed to fall into a depression
Falling into a childhood regression
Casting aside all of life's sanctimonious lessons
Suffering through another self-analytical session

Much of this is twisted with the angst of youth. I am not sure if she is open for critique, but I would suggest that emileigh take these emotions and thoughts and put them into a scene that could make us feel what she is feeling.



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Tulips
skip.69 ©

Another love poem about internet/long distance love. I cannot help it, I have a prejudice against this topic as a topic in and of itself. I would rather read something that takes us there, into a moment of intimacy, as if we are hearing secrets.... But that is me. If you like the sweet love poems of e-love, then read this one, it is short and sweet.

We chat, though, and e-mail with words from the heart.

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I tried to send announcements to all of the poets, but I got the anti-spam block for sending too many in a short period of time. Damn it I am too quick for my own good.

Two have no pc's on, so if anyone knows emilie or mizteez pleeze let them know

 

[My Erotic Tale]

New Poems Reviews
for Saturday 6, 2005

the catapillar that never changes
into a butterfly

knows not that it would have had
wings to rise

18 poems posted this morning,
diving into hot java and literary creations~
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RED HOT erotic poetry,
lust's canvas by champagne1982

clip:
Fingerpainting I-love-you
in the slippery guache of my lust;
a dream spending leaving
pearlescent pools on my thighs.

I point a finger to this poem first off this morning because it is an 'excellent' erotic poem. And second, because I find this poem's TITLE alone to project images that we call poetry. If you are looking for a gripping, erotic read, start here. Paramount poem~
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I call for a lover by Jennifer C

clip:
I call for a lover to
Eradicate my wants,
To gratify my needs
And bedazzle me with vehemence.

I am blessed with some great reads this morning and this erotic poem, is very gripping and moving. Jennifer has written a RED HOT EROTIC POEM that is guaranteed to make your mouth water or drop open <grin> thanks JC

and thanks for being an inspirational soul in the poetry forum~ (~_~)
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Sogobias Dream by Du Lac

clip:
True pledging of love lacks the rules
no rings or forevers need to be shared
Wrongs of the past dissolve into shadows
holding no power over tomorrow
Truth now held in the dawn of the WE.

I happen to be blessed with the inside story of this poem, the Shoshone Indian influence comes to life when pointed out <grin> another great poem by Du~

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I would not by Alexis Haines

another gripping erotic read that I enjoyed the flow and style. Every one has different tastes, that is a given, like the various styles of music. I for one enjoyed this poem.

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support literotica poetry by reading, voting, commenting and creating,
our meadow of poetic flowers is rich with versitility and color.

 

[Du Lac]

Sunday Reviews

I have been blessed with a short list of poems today
So off we go...put your thinking caps on folks and open your hearts for it is one of those cryptic days that the poems leave you thinking.. hmmmm

Anninaki by bluerains

This poem is right up my alley starting with the title. Not familiar with the name I went hunting. Upon learning then I discovered the meaning behind the poem. I love this type of writing and to me it is what it is all about. A shared experience displayed through writing to spark our interest and to motivate us to explore other realms. Thank you blue for the spark and the simple lovely poem that spins a tale of possibilities.
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Satin Sheets by Rhyme Fairy

A lovely mixture of heat and coolness. Nature laced within the natural beat of our bodies. Hot and sultry. Many layers here day and night, hot and cool, nature and man all comparisions that make this poem work well.

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Awakening the Myth by quietpoet

mimic creation’s balance.
Trials of Job awaken dying
corpse of freedom,
twisted paths converge in

A deep rich read filled with many twists that reflect our lives and the world. I love this write. The poet sees outside of himself and allows the reader to view the greater truth of all things. bringing us back in and leaving you to question where do I stand?

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ZMP~little thoughts My Erotic Tale

I feel this is the best of Tales ZMP. Simple deep direct and thought provoking. The style and use of breaks allow the reader to stop the mental process and feel the work.

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weight of the mold by annaswirls

A deep probing read that deems at least 3 readings. It moves from a man to the self to humanity.

Immobilized, these chains
do not hold him here,
they hold him together.

Perhaps it is the wood
that births the man into feathered hats,
perhaps the face sees fate
unfold.

this is some of the best I have seen in a while. The flow is strong and the breaks in the stanzas breed reflection and deep breathing.

So those are this reviewers picks. As I always say if you see one that you like let the readers know. Share your insights and how you the reader experienced the work. We are all here to learn.

blessings
du lac~

 

[Jennifer C]

Mondays Reviews

I'm not sure wether Duckie is still around or not ~ If you are Duckie I apologise for stepping on ya toes...

There are 16 New Poems today on Monday 8th August and I have been blessed with some wonderful reads ~

Starting with My Window an audio poem by lindiana . A poem of all seasons which I really enjoyed, I could place myself there with every season she described and it brought back many happy memories.

Next is no forever words by Tathagata I really liked this when I saw it in the threads

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What will you do
with this lifetime of letters,
these tributes
that I've laid at your feet, or trapped you in, or hurled like
stone accusations?

This is a beautifully read audio poem from a wonderful poet.


Up next is a new poet here at Lit MagicWolf7 with his first poem Lost An inspirational ryhme poem that I think has alot of potential.

<clip>

Did this world of questionless answers
Seperate you from your soul?
Did you clutch at shadow-dancers
'Til there was nothing left that's whole?



Liar has three new poems today my favourite of which is Free Market Fantasies

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One day,
I will sell my soul on E-Bay,
see if I can squeeze
a foolish penny
from a paper tiger,

I love the underlying sarcasm in this and the tongue in cheek approach.
Also by Liar is Politik 2005-08-08 and Politik 2005-08-09 both worth an interesting read.

Then we have Shades of Grey by the wonderful Tristesse . A beautiful Garden poem, packed with flowers and bursting with colours. A nice twist at the end too.

Last up we have two poems by a relatively new poet cward2 with Normandy 1944

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As I step on the beach
I hear the rattling guns
And am thrown
Once more into the breach

and The Dole Man

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He sits
Dressed in a swathe
Of black and grey
Eyes swollen, full of dismay


Ok so these are the ones that caught my eye and obviously they are just my opinions. If there are any I have missed that you particually like please come back and post them here.

So go read, vote and comment on the wonderful poems on todays New Poems List

Thank you...

 

[duckiesmut]

My Window
by lindiana

I enjoyed your personification of each season, especially winter as ‘brash and frozen’ and spring as ‘bright-as-sun tulip petals’. My suggestion would be to incorporate the name of each season as it comes into the first line of the next stanza, so the reading and flow isn’t quite so broken up with the introduction of each.

no forever words
by Tathagata

Snipped from my e-mail re: this poem...

'You have the uncanny ability to express...pure, liquid emotion in your words, without overdoing it and crossing the line between expression and angst.'

It's killing you not to spell things out, isn't it? Hard as it is, you're doing a wonderful job.

Channelling the Leaf
by McKenna

The intermittent use of alliteration to shape the first two stanzas is done quite splendidly, in my opinion. I like the shape of this and its rhythm, the quiet, understated patterning that follows its topic.

Politik 2005-08-09
by Liar

Of Liar’s three postings today, one is a zinger, another is thought-provoking, but it’s the third that I would like to mention. The last two lines, in and of themselves, are what do it for me. I'll not spoil the read by posting them here, so please go and read it through.

Shades of Grey
by Tristesse

Her descriptive abilities are well-showcased in this, but the beauty, to me, is in its bittersweet nature. Simply lovely.

The Dole Man
by cward2

The play on words between ‘of black and grey’ and ‘grey eyes swollen’ and the change-up in the last stanza from the clichéd ‘signs away our lives’ to ‘signs away our lies’ is quite interesting. I’m looking forward to more from this poet.

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Those are the end of my thoughts for the day. I wish you all a pleasant week.

 

[flyguy69]

New poems

30 new poems today! Naturally you should go read all of them, but in this 24/7 bear-market bullshit world, who's got the time? I know you, you backward-baseball cap pinstripe thug, closing deals and text-messaging the pool boy to get his sexy ass into the kitchen this minute. You need it now, you want it fast, and you keep your shoes on in case something better struts past.

Alright, here's what you can't miss:

cward offers a short comemoration of the 60th anniversary of Hiroshima and a war-torn memory in Not quite a perfect date…

New poet PurrVersatility invites us between his/her lover's thighs in Shameless. This is the best of the three he/she brings today.

quietpoet bets on poetry with Wall of Dreams

tathagata ensnares us with Be Witched and Be Deviled

New poet bandruid has three poems, I liked the irreverent Fairy Tales best.

Liar flim-flams us with Politik 2005-08-07; a poem that feeds the poor, wins the war and doesn't raise taxes. He gets my vote for top dog today.

CuriousWife gives us Echoes of my Father: a reflective piece on family disharmony.

Some more new poets that need your attention: JerseyBoy; kellyraine; ElectricElektrum; taikutsana

Yeah, there's more, but you're on the clock and traffic's backed up to thirty-ninth street. Put the New Poems list on your blackberry and get to it during recess.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

10th August, 2005

Hello, poets-

There are 23 new poems posted today, many of which are worth any time you can spare them.

Here are some that caught my attention:

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And when...
by PurrVersatility ©

It is not perfect - its format feels sloppy, and there are a few hiccups in the structure - but I think this is probably the best poem posted today by this new author who has just started posting, and I see more than enough potential in it do earn a closer look and a warm welcome.

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Buried at sea
by tungtied2u ©

This one is a must read. The poem itself seems, using its own words, "frail and fractured / insuffiently bound", but very controlled and precise.

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Politik 2005-08-10
by Liar ©

Another installation of this cautionary series that Liar recently started. Very sober, with the usual quality and style.

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All The Colours Of Her Life
by Tristesse ©

The Colours Of Her Life struck me as the most poignant poem posted today, with the most intricate imagery. Beautiful.

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Evening Song
by b8dbreth ©

Another great poem - warm and cool at once, comforting.

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salaciously, snowmelt said to ocean
by Tzara ©

I'm becoming a great admirer of Tzara's work. Once again, a funny and unpretentiously intelligent poem by someone who respects and knows how to use language.

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That's it for today. Read, vote and comment on these and/or, if you have the opportunity, on all of today's poems.

 

[Rybka]

New Poems of Thursday August 11, 2005

There are 17 new submissions on the second Thursday of August to read, and as always I bring you one non-erotic "spinner" from the archives.

Today's blast from the past:
This poem I spun-up from the end of September of last year. - It took me 12 spins to find this poem by Tathagata. This poet joined Lit. in February of 2004 and has been proficiently prolific ever since. In this work he looks at New England's fall foliage with the jaundiced eye of a native beset by ogling tourists. But I think even Tath must grant that Autumn is our best season. . . and it's coming. . . it's coming. . . all too soon.

This poem is rated at 4.80 and has earned its H.

Froot Loop Zen

These gasping colors,
bloodless,
struggle against the inevitable grave,
the fall to earth,
return.

dust mote flecks
of ragged beauty,
and in their endless sleep,
taken ,
by the winds
of transience.

In their final hours
they mock the sky,
stone fireworks,
surreal landscape
of Monet and Gauguin.

Postcards of suffering,
and we display pictures
taken from specific locations,
of the slip into darkness.

We sigh ,
looking out from well padded bedrooms,
and over hot cocoa steam
finally see the beauty,
in death .

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Having grown up here in New England where people come from all over to view the fall colors..I got used to hearing a thousand fancy terms , like descriptions of wine, to explain the majesty of the colors.
Atop a scenic look out in my 20's I was looking out over a vast expanse of reds, yellows, and oranges with a mist obscuring the ground, only the tree tops were visible.
The out-of-towners "OOhed and Ahhed" and waxed poetic until I said.
" It looks just like a bowl of Froot Loops"
which, in fact, it did.
Check out the colors sometime...it's uncanny.
Needless to say that wasn't the image they wanted to take home...but you knew they were pisssed because it looked Exactly like that.

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Of the 17 new poems posted by today, three are by one of my favorite writers, annaswirls, and there are four others by established writers whose work I always look forward to reading, twelveoone, Liar, tungtied2u, and Savannah Skye, as well as a new work by a fairly recent addition to Lit's list of talent, Curiouswife. All of these are worth reading, but who has my favorite of the day?

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Of the less familiar names I suggest you take a look at PurrVersatility's lesbian lusting poem,
grrls, grrls, grrls. This new author has 10 poems posted in the last three days. Their quality is uneven, but I find today's work to be one of her better ones. She starts off with some nice alliteration to draw the reader in, then gives a series of strong descriptions, mixing in a soupcon of street language without resulting to vulgarity. I might only suggest that the poem might do better without the 'asides' (phrases in parentheses).

i want a lipstick lesbian
in a pinstripe powersuit
with high heeled pumps
someone who shatters glass ceilings
...

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Now here is an unusual poem that is worth reading for the rawness. Solid Muldoon, a Lit poet of six months has three posted poems. In this one, Got in the Hot, he uses the metaphor of the blues as a hot slutty woman and various geographical locations as parts of her body. I usually don't like poems that use vulgarity because most often it is not needed, and is a sign of a small imagination or a lazy writer. This one not only is justified in using earthy terms, but the metaphor demands it. I can hear this one read in a coffee house or jazz cafe.

Blues were got in the hot;
in the wet delta of North Mississippi,
they came sliding out of the ooze
of Itta Bena and Ruleville and Clarksdale;
That’s the Pussy of the Blues.

Cos you know Blues is a woman,
a hot, nasty woman,
a mean-eyed woman
with a cocky smile
and she’s on her hands and knees for you, boy
spreading her cheeks like a cat.
...

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taikutsuna, another new poet with three works to his Lit. name, today presents hollow. I find a couple of errors in this short work, but I like the inline rhyming and always enjoy word play like "Pray that the Son and heir, Is truely the Sun and air."

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Now of the eight poems by the five authors I mentioned above:
and the daily selection of hats,
beneath the finish,
first knight, (all by annaswirls),
Transcript by twelveoone,
Politik 2005-08-11 by Liar,
One mind, one body by tungtied2u,
Goddess of Rain (Sonnet) by Savannah Skye,
or
Someday by Curiouswife,
do I have a favorite? I know you are going to read them all, but because of its innocence, here is the one that touched me most.

first knight

by annaswirls

not everyone can claim to have
rescued a baby dragon whose
water logged scales gradually
became too heavy to carry

but this he does
and I do not question
nor expect an explanation

he rescues baby dragons
he must
who else would?

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Taste is always an individual thing so there may certainly be other poems out there today that you will enjoy. If you find ones you really like on the New Poems page, please come back and tell us about them!

And please remember that our poets need your support, and it won’t come back around if you don’t send it out!

Regards, Rybka


To A Poet, Who Would Have Me Praise Certain Bad Poets. . .
You say, as I have often given tongue
In praise of what another's said or sung,
'Twere politic to do the like by these;
But was there ever dog that praised his fleas?
~ Yeats

 

[PatCarrington]

Now here is an unusual poem that is worth reading for the rawness. Solid Muldoon, a Lit poet of six months has three posted poems. In this one, Got in the Hot, he uses the metaphor of the blues as a hot slutty woman and various geographical locations as parts of her body. I usually don't like poems that use vulgarity because most often it is not needed, and is a sign of a small imagination or a lazy writer. This one not only is justified in using earthy terms, but the metaphor demands it. I can hear this one read in a coffee house or jazz cafe.

as usual, Rybka not only points direction, but backs up his opinions with explanation.

and i will second this poem as an example of how raw vulgarity can be used to good effect.

it is purposeful in and to the poem, and not gratuitous at all, as is most often the case.

 

[tungtied2u]

Third times a charm

I hope. Solid Muldoon's Got in the Hot is a wonderful, atmospheric piece.

His choice of metaphor's lends an earthy, raw feel to what is essentially an earthy, raw subject. Very refreshing.

He better have an H by the next time I look.

 

[tungtied2u]

New Poem Reviews Friday 8/12

So far only 4 new poems today, all illustrated.

Three fall into the erotic category, and of the 3, I enjoyed Dirty Old Woman by Svenskaflicka the most, a fun, tongue-on-cheek romp.

The fourth illustrated poem is non-erotic by minsue, entitled smoke. The title, illustration and words all blend together well to convey what the poet is saying. Short, straightforward and worth a look.

That's it so far. I'll look back later, much later when I return from work and add more if additional poems get posted. In the meantime, feel free to post your own reviews.

And with such a dearth today, it gives you all a chance to catch up on the last few days offerings. Please read, vote and comment.

 

[annaswirls]

a second to Rybka's recommendation

Waiting for more new poems to come up, take the opportunity to read or re-read
transcript
twelveoone ©



I have read this poem at least six times, and every time I change my interpretation. Have you read it? What do you think?

It has many intense lines that will jolt you, that is for sure. Can you synthesize these emotions and images to come up with an overall meaning? Does it have one? Does it need one?

The poem itself took me on a series of rides, with short respite between that held a hummmmm and lyrical direction/background interludes where I could catch my breath, intermission, like the slow climb of the roller coaster between the drop....

Ever since his first poem here, I have been drawn to his writing. I always feel that he is several planes above me, looking down on the rollercoaster, he can see the gestalt of the ride while I am a mere passenger with my head being jolted around, lifted by surprise hills, never knowing what might twist me next.

no matter how many times I get right back in line, there is still the experience of something new, and he watches for the looks on our faces as we exit the ride, listens for which moves cause the loudest yells or looks of terror.

Expect to see this writing on a shelf (and hopefully in your shopping basket.) We are fortunate to have his writing delivered to us for free, right here. And if you have yet to read his latest (or any of the others!) go back and give them some time. His is not cotton candy poetry that melts in your mouth and fingers, that can be condensed into a little pile of sugar. It is a meal. Bon appetit!

(Subject shifts into Nu Yark midwestern drawl)
Now for my transit
for my passage
I traveled below sterrage
lived life like a stowaway
'til they caught me
'n' now they got me
pa-pumping bilge

 

[Reltne]

An Original Erotic Poem

If no one else will say anything about any of today's poems then I will point one out. Go read:

org as m
by mischievousgrin​

This is the first erotic poem by a fairly new poet. I find it fresh in metaphor and style with a surprisingly strong ending. I see one or two changes that might be made, butI am surprised that no one else has commented on this submission. For an erotic poem it is a solid 5.

 

[tungtied2u]

More new poem reviews Friday 8/12

Just as I suspected.....I come back from work, ready to hit hte rack, and the powers that be ambush me with 23 more new poems......bastards!

First off Sheepwash Lane by cward2.....I like the feel of this poem, but wish it was a bit more specific,i.e.
Brushed by her hand
They crumble and fall,
what does this refer to? Could be better if expanded upon.

Next up, Mornin' Muse by Rhyme Fairy. Those of us who have read this poet will sense a familiarity with the phrasing here.
Read by itself, it sets a very sensual scene, the images are vivid and alive.
There are some punctuation changes I'd make, and the sated...satisfied verse I'd probably try to come up with a substitute for one of the two.

powertothepeople gives us 5 poems today...or by now yesterday...the one I enjoyed most was Cold Pizza. I found his use of metaphor best in this one, to wit:
Love, what is thy name
if not a cold and soggy crust
humbly adorned with plasticine cheese
and the dry, curled slices of rapture past

2 rivers, sound, and sea by sandspike speaks of a special 3 way relationship with interesting images, fresh metaphors and true devotion:
She cradled my tiller
soft as a zephyr
feeling my power letting me run
He would ease then
Sexy and soothing..

Hmmmm- Sweet Geogia Peaches appears to be a self study by who else?, sweet GA peaches. What I like about this poem is how the author takes images most of us have seen before and through phrasing and format, gives it a fresh feel-
To touch just once,
the firmness in between
each line and crease,
To leave him weak,
with thought.
Just one taste
this side of Heaven
- and there's nothing better than fresh sweet Georgia peaches.

Curiouswife is Straightforward.....in a twisted sort of way.
My favorite to this point as I work down the list. Read it, you'll see why.

and as soon as I say it, who shows up but mischievousgrin with org as m. I'm not giving this one away either...suffice it to say , in a biblical way.....and the last shall be first.

I'm glad I made it all the way through....thank you all poets for a nice nightcap.
Readers, please reward these fine folks, with your time and consideration, comments and votes.

 

[annaswirls]

Midnitesyn ©

Today is just another day
by Midnitesyn ©

I missed this one

on my first read through....it is definately worth a read and a comment

I think this poem could use a new title, but a nice job on a truth we (or at least I) have to remind myself of from time to time.


tungtied2u, thanks for doing the reviews! I had a feeling the poems would come spilling out late, but I did not think it would be than late... thanks for being a real trooper!

 

[RhymeFairy]

OK a first here for me. A recommendation or two if you please.


Streahed Tightly by sensuall. An erotic read. I like the zinggy thoughts that spew forth within this read.


Morbid Dance by SnapTamedMe. A lil darker read here. A dance within a thought of frustration and ... Hmm ... a dark read, will not spoil the read for ya.


Just so ya know. I judge a poem on the read. How it feels to me. What thoughts, feelings it evokes. Just Me ~


Thank you. Read ... Vote ... Comment ~
Happy Writing to all ~

(wondering if I should hit the submit button. Grins)

 

[Kaishaku]

smoke

So far only 4 new poems today, all illustrated.

The fourth illustrated poem is non-erotic by minsue, entitled smoke. The title, illustration and words all blend together well to convey what the poet is saying. Short, straightforward and worth a look.

I wanted to step a bit further with minsue's poem smoke. The essence of poetry is to go beyond the words, the lines, and the stanzas to create an experience the reader can physically feel and truly understand. With wisps of smoke in the background minsue, in simple, straightforward language speaks of the loss of a lover, the pain of longing like the phantom pain the amputee feels in her missing limb.

We've felt the heartache of losing someone, yet, minsue takes it deeper, into ourselves, in the smoke we feel the intensity of loss so profound that we feel pain in a part of our body we no longer possess. Imagine that pain... that longing in the smoke, in the smoke, for the smoke...

I never smoked cigarettes and yet, I can feel the loss here and I gain at least an idea what it may be like to quit. A simple poem, an intensly haunting reading experience. Occasionally, amid all the writing here, we find a poem... minsue has written this one, smoke. Thank you minsue... for the experience.


k.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

This is not really a recommendation, but more of a heads up to the readers who have been following my Al·Gharb series: Al·Gharb·7 was posted today. The series was intended, from the start, to include only these seven poem, so that's it - for now, at least.

There are links all seven poems on my signature below. Thank you for continuing to come back for more, and for all the comments as well.

 

[Angeline]

This is not really a recommendation, but more of a heads up to the readers who have been following my Al·Gharb series: Al·Gharb·7 was posted today. The series was intended, from the start, to include only these seven poem, so that's it - for now, at least.

There are links all seven poems on my signature below. Thank you for continuing to come back for more, and for all the comments as well.

Well alrighty then. I'll recommend it.

Read this poem.

 

[Du Lac]

Sunday reviews

Well here we are another pleasant Sunday and a barrage of poems to shift through. Here are my likes :

Bin Laden's Reward by boxlicker101

Okay this is not the be all or end all of poetic writing. But if you want a good little experience and some poetic giggles hit the real player and listen to this nice little poem.

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Liquid Eurphoria by Rhyme Fairy

Yes she uses big words here. But the visuals of the work are fluid and I like the style of how the first word ends a sentence but continues onto the next finishing the stanza. This creates the flow of the work and allows the liquid to gush...

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No need to mention Laurens new in the series since it already has been done a couple of times. It is worth the read

there you go all...

You liked a poem not mentioned? Then let the others know about it here on the reviewers thread!

Have a great summer Sunday
blessings
Du Lac~