New Poetry Recommendations

[unapologetic]

This Thursday brings 15 New Poems for you to experience.

However, I'd like to draw your attention to one poem in particular that I found interesting. In my opinion, I Wait is a good erotic poem. I liked its description and mostly the pacing, which projected a sense of excited anticipation as intended by this new poet, dorkybutcute. (I get the same feeling after downing several lattes and gawking at women in Starbuck's all day.)


That's it folks! Check out Today's poems and if you see something you like, go ahead and mention it here in this thread.

Thanks for doing this. It helps me ease back into doing the reviews, being able to just add my bit onto yours.

I'd add that Mostly skin by ColdArmor is also worth a read. It's a bit rough, but I enjoyed it.

 

[champagne1982]

This Friday, the 6th of July brings us 11 new poems. There are works by some of the regular posters to the forums and poetry submitters on offer today. Take a minute and read through the list in case I fail to mention one of your personal favourites.

The poems I've highlighted today are merely a reflection of my preferences, if you have a poem you'd like to mention, please don't hesitate to do so.

AudreyHepburn sings us to sleep in her lovely lullaby, Nocturne. Some of you may not like the more formal language used in this poem but I think the subject warrants the style.

I was left with a smile after reading our favourite fish, Rybka's poem, Distant Thunder. He needs your comments since mine are woefully inadequate due to my not being a fan of the less verbose forms of poetry.

Have a great long weekend, neighbours!

 

[vampiredust]

The Sunday Review

11 new poems up today

Nothing has grabbed my attention so far. I'll let you know when more appear.

 

[wildsweetone]

for today's delectable morsel, read the GREAT POETRY thread. more poets have joined in and each poem is like reading a novel in a day. wonderful! keep up the great writing! i know i can't get enough of reading you all.




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this review contains some constructive criticism that is intended to help some poets with their writing. there is a limitation on the use of smilies in posts on Literotica and therefore i am unable to include what i would like. my intention is to encourage and help by giving suggestions to poets.





11 new poems up today.

l8bloom has submitted Love Poems from the A&P. An audio submission in which the sounds come across very clear and easy on the ears. I found it slightly distracting as the words, in my opinion, didn't seem to fit the music that has a soft romantic feel. Talk of broken bags of sugar and cake mix seemed out of place. I also don't feel there is any poetic language apart from the rhyme. Sorry, that's just my take though.

new poet Jacob_L_Reed posted his first poem today, The first... i found the presentation of this submission, interesting. something a little different. it could be reworked as a List Poem, but it seems to work well this way. i'm not understanding what happens between lines 5 and 6, i think in this case the poem errs slightly on the side of 'too little' information. i'd like to know more and to see this filled out a little. i like how her 'smile crosses the room' - nice image that one. Welcome to Literotica.

new poet Tarakin submitted Passion today. this poem seems to create so many questions in my mind that i think it also errs on the 'slightly too little information' scenario also. why was the light 'long buried'? why is the vulcan, dormant? what deed? why does the lyrical subject experience jealousy? Welcome to Literotica and thanks for making me think.

Haiku Bomber was submitted by evelyn_carroll. a haiku that isn't, in my opinion.

new poet kerker_meister submitted A wonderful man. a couple of improvements to start you off, 'Your' should be 'You are' or 'You're', and line 11 is missing 'man'. i think the rhyme works well here. Welcome to Literotica.

Goldeniangel submitted Inside today. i like this poem. i think a suggestion for improvement would be to add punctuation and perhaps stanza breaks.

first poem by ardentforce is Doubt. i found this read a bit choppy sounding. i would like to see more concrete imagery in this poem.

anniebug brings us amongst the lupins. should it be 'among'? sorry i'm not sure on that one. this poem raises many questions. for a start, is 'she' alive, or dead? the sounds and smoothness of read might be deceiving. if the poet wants clarity for this, then perhaps the title could be used to an advantage - i see no problems with the wording of the poem, except that i want to know more.

new poet, death_osito has three submissions today. And Then came the calm, Broken Heart Mended with XoX, and Dust Ash Desires. each of these three poems has problems of punctuation, spelling etc. a quick proofread, even spellcheck, would pick up many of them. i don't like the use of text speak that is sprinkled lightly through one, i find it distracting. in the third poem, i like the unusual beginning. it caught my attention. unfortunately what followed didn't keep my attention, but it was a good start. Welcome to Literotica.

Please note that these are my opinions on poems, it is up to you as a reader and/or writer to form your own. Go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[Angeline]

Tuesday, July 10

There are ten new poems posted today. Here are the ones that caught my eye.

rachlou is the author of two poems, both extended metaphors. Petrol Blues casts the memory of love lost in the rainbow swirl of an oilslick, while Barbed Wire meditates on a sharp division that rips lovers apart. Both are simply constructed and make good use of images.

LadynStFreknBed gives us a terzanelle, Caught Between Two Worlds. The poem explores the division between logic and insanity and, while a bit abstract for my tastes, is a good and faithful take on the form.

Rumpleteazer also has two poems up today My Jimmying Leg and Nihilists. Both are spare, ironic, and well written. Nihilists is especially good with flashing images and a Clockwork Orange sensibility that fit the theme perfectly.

You may have other poems you’d like to recommend. If so, please mention them in this thread.

Ever feel like you’re talking to a wall when you try to explain poetry to someone? Liar understands. Read his Trying to read poetry to basalt, which came up on my first golden oldie spin today, and you’ll see that he has been there, too.

 

[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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An insane day today; let's see if there're any in this batch of 22 that'll calm the nerves and sooth a ravaged soul.


AuthorityGriffith has a bit of a quirky piece out in Lost and Found. You might just wonder what is lost; is he speaking of himself or of an object that's been lost as he speaks:

Hidden under someone's unrequited mitten,
Fumbling with the tattered edges
Of a skirt I picked out just for you.

Curiouswife has three out today, but it was My Glass that piqued my interest with its opening:

My glass is half full
emptied by the promises
undone,

lindiana has a bit of an odd piece in Seamless Whispers. Maybe my mind's been warped by the day but this piece has a strange attraction for me today and I just had to go and reread it. Give it a shot.


UnderYourSpell has a very short piece out today that caught my eye, all about Socks. No snippet will do it justice; just go read it and see if it applies to the man in your life {or if you're driving your woman crazy like this}.


RisiaSkye gives us an expression of love in Quiet Eye that doesn't overwhelm with sickly sweet sentimentality.


Finally, JadeCat, a new name here at Lit, has her first submission in Apollo's Mistress. It's a rather long piece, especially for a first submission, but is highly literate. It doesn't beat you over the head with crudely graphic eroticism. Just look at how it opens:

We are far from Olympus, folded into our Tennessee green
But the gods have been known to visit

Again, an interesting first submission. Take some time and give it a shot. It's sure to beat quite a number of those other submissions you come across. {And I will admit to thinking that it wouldn't hurt if this one was given a little trim.}



That's it for this week's late voyage of discovery. Some rather interesting pieces to choose from. Don't limit yourself to my odd picks of the day. Go on out there and explore and remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

Thursday's Review

Hey folks! It’s me again. (Please keep the groans down to a minimum, if you don’t mind.)

I’m in a splendid mood today, having been carded at the grocery store a couple of days ago. Wonderful what being mistaken for someone under 21 can do for a 34-year-old woman’s mood. Anyway, here’s today’s review:

You may or may not remember, but I can be a bit of a punctuation harpy. tungtied2u’s piece Words may be the thing to get me over my fixation, though. I especially had fun saying this part aloud over and over again:

which exist only with moonlight
three glasses of wine and want

emaalr is a new poet, and I enjoyed the first thing I read quite a bit. His poem Smorgasbord had some wonderful word play.

I absolutely adored the way that 4degrees played with clichés in inveterate.

This is by swallowedscream is a fun erotic piece.

But the erotic piece that really captured my attention was owned by Ms. skittles_lm. Needed to fan myself after that one.

Quite a bumper crop for my first real day back in the review chair, and it was fun. See ya on the flip side kiddies!

Thanks, , & for the wonderful neonurotic & Eluard for taking up the torch while I was taking care of my life.

 

[champagne1982]

Friday, July 13, 2007

Good evening, today's 10 new poems have finally given me something to read.

First mention is another look at the summer month through July studies #6. Tihmmnmm has embraced the prose poem and does them quite well. #6, however, may have made a bigger splash if formatted in a more traditional manner with line breaks instead of punctuation, even. Still, worth a minute.

Diane is a tongue-in-cheek look at losing a lover to an unlikely adversary. Have a read of this poem by lionshell and see if you don't share a smile. This poet doesn't have Public Comments enabled on this poem, but you can still send feedback through his biography page.

That's it for Friday the 13th (scary stuff). Have a fine weekend, even though it promises to be a very hot, fine weekend here in the southwest and midwestern parts of Canada.

 

[vampiredust]

The Sunday Review

7 new poems up today

My picks:

manipulatrix has two poems up today: mythology and Palms become Psalms

I enjoyed reading them both. mythology's use of classical references is a nice touch and I esp liked the image in the first stanza ('The pillars of my sacred temple seducing you'). Palms become Psalms has a good rhythm and is suitably emotive in terms of language and what it expresses to the reader, but I feel that it lacked a punch with its imagery. Still, good stuff.

 

[wildsweetone]

today's morsel from PoemHunter.com



Good and Evil XXII by Khalil Gibran

And one of the elders of the city said, "Speak to us of Good and Evil."

And he answered:

Of the good in you I can speak, but not of the evil.

For what is evil but good tortured by its own hunger and thirst?

Verily when good is hungry it seeks food even in dark caves, and when it thirsts, it drinks even of dead waters.

You are good when you are one with yourself.

Yet when you are not one with yourself you are not evil.

For a divided house is not a den of thieves; it is only a divided house.

And a ship without rudder may wander aimlessly among perilous isles yet sink not to the bottom.

You are good when you strive to give of yourself.

Yet you are not evil when you seek gain for yourself.

For when you strive for gain you are but a root that clings to the earth and sucks at her breast.

Surely the fruit cannot say to the root, "Be like me, ripe and full and ever giving of your abundance."

For to the fruit giving is a need, as receiving is a need to the root.

You are good when you are fully awake in your speech,

Yet you are not evil when you sleep while your tongue staggers without purpose.

And even stumbling speech may strengthen a weak tongue.

You are good when you walk to your goal firmly and with bold steps.

Yet you are not evil when you go thither limping.

Even those who limp go not backward.

But you who are strong and swift, see that you do not limp before the lame, deeming it kindness.

You are good in countless ways, and you are not evil when you are not good,

You are only loitering and sluggard.

Pity that the stags cannot teach swiftness to the turtles.

In your longing for your giant self lies your goodness: and that longing is in all of you.

But in some of you that longing is a torrent rushing with might to the sea, carrying the secrets of the hillsides and the songs of the forest.

And in others it is a flat stream that loses itself in angles and bends and lingers before it reaches the shore.

But let not him who longs much say to him who longs little, "Wherefore are you slow and halting?"

For the truly good ask not the naked, "Where is your garment?" nor the houseless, "What has befallen your house?"




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this review contains some constructive criticism that is intended to help some poets with their writing. there is a limitation on the use of smilies in posts on Literotica and therefore i am unable to include what i would like. my intention is to encourage and help by giving suggestions to poets.



northern hemisphere Monday has 15 new poems posted.

CornishBabe has three submissions posted today. Love, Surreal Dreaming, and Amber and Blaine. of the three i enjoyed Surreal Dreaming best. to improve i'd suggest correcting the spelling error in line 3, i think it's line 7 that i tripped over (i.e. the syllable count changed). i'd watch the use of 'But' and i also noticed in one of the other poems that the poet seemed to alter the sequence of wording to make the rhyme fit which meant the line didn't flow as a normal read.

bluerains has game stalker up today. for three lines of 5, 7, 5, syllables and a title like this i am in awe. there is so much this poem doesn't say. i like the double meaning. to improve... hmm write another 20 lines in addition to what's here. i.e. i'd like to read more.

kiten69 submits I Thought of You, her second poem submission here on Litland. i don't know quite what it is about this one, but it had me reading rhyme to the very end. it's under the erotic category and fits there well. as a suggestion for improvement, i think i'd like to see some poetic language i.e. if i took away the line breaks and rhyme, i could be reading prose. add a little something more to what is here and it could be a great read.

Snap TamedME posted You Don't Get... today. from reading this title i've just learnt that i like my titles to be complete. this one was a little off-putting (for me). to improve this poem i'd suggest the poet adds in some concrete imagery. i like the phrase 'you cast curses'.

manipulatrix has two submissions up today. Song and haiku. i liked 'Song' for it's short sweet sound. the repetition works okay. interesting impact with the last line.

swallowedscream submitted Thank You today. now this poem i liked. there is a touch of poetry within the lines. the line breaks are great. the stanza breaks work well. this is one poet whose work i will definitely be looking for. i'd go so far as to suggest this is a MUST READ. to improve, watch the use of the apostrophe for 'its' and 'it's', and the odd rogue , . i understand about sending out a poem straight from the rough draft stage, but if one quick edit can correct those tiny errors then it'll be a step up from a rough draft and well worth the effort. keep writing!

UnderYourSpell submitted Garden gone to pot!. i like the imagery that this poem throws up, but i stumbled in a few places where missing words would have helped make the read smooth. eg in line 3 'have' is missing. also correcting the initial capital for a new sentence would help with the read - i suggest that to keep consistency with the first word capitalised.

Clayton Long submitted a second poem today, looks like a returning Lit writer. Boom! contains a last line with a lot of impact though i'm unsure how it relates to the onomatopoeia sound of the poem's title. the poem contains an interesting concept that caught my attention.

Rumpleteazer submitted two poems today. The Hair Down There and So Sayeth the Mighty Rock God:. with these poems i feel like i'm on the edge of understanding and then i get twisted up and turned about. the first poem seems quite a disjointed read. it reads fast and the & seems to fit in well though the odd capitalisation of some words and not others seems to add to the disjointed feel. i like the line 'had hair like a funeral pyre'. in the second poem, i feel the last line doesn't add anything to the previous lines. maybe i just don't get it.

new poet and Lit member sweeteuphoria submitted Master today. a rhyming poem of submission. i found some lines weren't smooth reading because of what i think is called 'forced rhyme' i.e. making the words fit the line to ensure the rhyme is there. also i would suggest using italics or some other visible difference in the type when writing the spoken word, i had to re-read the stanza to understand what was being said. i love the last word. Welcome to Literotica.

death_osito submitted The Valentine. there is no personal comment option open.


Please note that these are my opinions on poems, it is up to you as a reader and/or writer to form your own. Go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[Angeline]

July 17, 2007

There's a big old bunch of new poems today, but only one appealed to me. RhymeFairy's The Graveyard is rather short, honest and--befitting it's cemetary theme--a little spooky. I'd edit it down even more. I think a more spare construction and brutal tone would make this pack more of a punch.

Other than that, I couldn't find any poems that really engaged me. There's a lot of angst, amorphous explorations of "love," and prosey moralizing. None of it my thing, but maybe it's yours so give it a read, and don't forget to vote and comment if you do.

The golden oldies spinner gave me BooMerengue's Sonnet to a whiskey bottle. Dear Boo. She hasn't been here in a while, and I hope she's faring well and will pop back (as she is wont to do) soon.

If you want to be assured of some good poetry reading, check out neonurotic's 30/30 thread. Some of the Lit's best poets are currently writing in there.

And that's it for me for a few weeks. eagleyez and I are heading off to the wilds of New Jersey next Monday, so LeBroz has kindly offered to fill in for me. (Thank you Mr. LeBroz!) Take good care of each other.

Peace,
Angeline

 

[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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Running late — again — with 15 offerings up for display. Let's see if there's anything out there that stands out.

Was beginning to despair as I faced the cliché and the forced rhyme, until the day was saved by today's offerings from skittles_lm. She has some very fine {though somewhat dark} pieces out in Crumble, bitter fruit, fade, and sweet torture. Of these four, it is fade that I consider the best of today's offerings. As unpleasant a tale as it offers, I felt that I wanted to hear more; a rather compelling read.

That's it for today. You might find something else out there more to your tastes. Give them all a try and see what you think and don't forget to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

Thursday's Review with your host, unapologetic

Hey folks. No snappy comments to make today since I’m kind of in a blah mood. Here are the pieces that caught my attention.



Circumference of Us by MungoParkIII is a bit sappy romantic for my taste, but has some nice language.

To his “Hesitating” Mistress by waltermittyjr was well done and funny and erotic at the same time.

skittles_lm did it to me again this week with cold desire. Need a cold shower after reading her stuff lately.

Whisper Woman by relatively new Lit author LadynStFreknBed also caught my attention.

bogusbrig’s Mad was my favorite today, though. This is the kind of poetry I wish I could write. One line I especially liked was “Reinvent my phrenology”.



Percentage-wise, it was a good day for poetry. Catch ya on the flip side, or next Thursday, whichever comes first.

 

[champagne1982]

There are only 3 new poems posted this Friday, July 20th. I can't recommend an individual one on this thread, but there's only these to sample, so take a minute and read. Your taste is not mine so check 'em out.

Have a great weekend.

 

[My Erotic Trail]

New Poem Reviews...there are 11 poems out this 'fine' Saturday.

Vacation was great... fun in the sun
with excellent company
my little ones bring the house alive
hoping they don't bring it crashing down <grin
finding poetry in every moment (~_~)

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July studies #7 by hummnmm ... I enjoyed the poetry in this poem <grin
excerpt:
The bulls are slow peeling awake, quick
to march away beating patriotic drum,
red white blue sailormen remember
the real music, class dancers clowns, and eggheads

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The Playground by Rumpleteazer this poet has two poems out today, I enjoyed both.

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(~_~) have a quality day!

 

[Tathagata]

I wanted to mention

2 poems that are out today.
Both by 1201.

Blackbirds
Broken down into 8 different segments, stanza, vignettes...what have you.
At least one or two would appeal to almost anyone.
Interesting read to say the least.
Go and pick your favorite.

and
What??

where 1201 channels Basho right before your eyes.
A deceptively simple poem that hides a wealth of meaning.
Is it a challenge, a question, or a means to understanding?
Give it a look

Now back to Lits Sunday Movie
TMV in " One Flew Over the Cuckoos Nest"

" Martini this is a dime, when you break it in half you don't get two nickles, you get shit . Thus spake the bard you knavish miscreant."

 

[twelveoone]

thanks tath,
But this one blows me away
Fancies in Free Flight
by Rybka
we don't see eye to eye on things sometime, one possible flaw. An excellent study in formatting, and the words...

I will not fight your ways
nor the fruits you place on paper
away from her days
and fragile wings

Thank you Rybka! It reminds me a little of my current fav Holderlin.

 

[vampiredust]

The Sunday Review

9 new poems up this Sunday

Rybka got a shiny green E today with Fancies in Free Flight

Excerpt:

I will not fight your ways
nor the fruits you place on paper
away from her days
and fragile wings

I enjoyed reading this piece. Quite playful language which feels almost musical-like when read out loud, coupled nicely to some colourful imagery.

Great work

hmmnmm gives us July studies #8

Excerpt:

From senseless haze her ghost appeared
bucketed grit over carbon shoulders
each stone thundered applause

I liked the imagery in this poem which reflected the tone of the speaker and helped create an effective atmosphere for the reader. My only chagrin is that the second stanza should begin with a capitalised first word, to continue what has come before.

Good stuff

tricked by skittles_Imis my favourite of the two poems she has up today

It feels more solid, both in terms of content and structure, than the other poem she has up today and there is a good rhythm stemming from its well thought out base.

twelveoone has two poems up today

Blackbirds is a playful, well-honed piece that echoes Wallace Stevens' Thirteen Ways of Looking at a Blackbird, whilst What?? is an elegant, concise piece of pure poetry.

Have a great Sunday, everyone.

 

[skittles_lm]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=320981

by twelveoone is amazing. Just had to toss up my personal favorite from his newest:


II
Makes up the words
As he goes along,
So the bards of euphony
Cry over the cacophony
Of blackbirds.

 

[wildsweetone]

Haiku by Matsuo Basho




Winter solitude--
in a world of one color
the sound of wind.






Translated by Robert Hass




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this review contains some constructive criticism that is intended to help some poets with their writing. there is a limitation on the use of smilies in posts on Literotica and therefore i am unable to include what i would like. my intention is to encourage and help by giving suggestions to poets.

18 new poems today.

Illustrated Poetry
MungoParkIII has three up today, the first Truth does not open. (perhaps that's the idea, perhaps Truth is non-existent) if so, very interesting concept.
Fourth of July, 2007 does exist. taking photos of fireworks is not easy for many people, the key is a very steady camera and hmm long exposure time i think. i found the words and the image work well together, though i'd have preferred to have clarity in the image.
and third, Above the Potomac, i like both the words and the image, again. read several times, i believe the poem can stand alone without the image, and the use of the image enhances the words. so, well done.
just a quick note also, please don't forget to sign your illustrated poetry.

darkerdreamer submitted The Internal Monologue of Summer i love the words in this, and love the image, however 'they called her orchid' makes me believe i'm about to see an orchid and it was a little odd seeing a rose instead. purposely done, no doubt, so i wonder why. and then realise, it simply is meant to be. check out this one yourself. darkerdreamer does it to me again. excellent.

Picodiribibi submitted To Coriolis, In A Bathtub. i love it. can't think of a thing to suggest as an improvement.

bearlee submitted Passionate Dance. this one i found slightly difficult to read and had to concentrate harder. i think the italic words were to blame more than anything else. that or my monitor... i also cannot tell what exactly the image is. is it perhaps something as simple as a look alike piece of paper? or is it more. sorry, again i think my monitor isn't helping me. apart from those things, the only other thing i would suggest for improvement is the first word on each line. i personally think that in illustrated poetry, not only the last word, but also the first word become very important. are there any better choices that could have been made here?

Rumpleteazer submitted Jello Wept. i think this is a great poem, however the setout seemed too jerky and the line breaks didn't quite work for me i.e. Danny/Boy would have been better together. i'd like to see the poem with a different presentation.

lindiana submitted There. i found the font a little 'heavy-set' in this one. i think something slightly 'lighter' would have suited the butterfly image and the words more. some of the white letters become lost against the image, perhaps a black font may have sorted that out, or darkening the image slightly. the title and the last line give me food for thought. i wonder if the title should have had a question mark also. thanks for making me think.


Erotic Poetry
FifthFlower submitted Both of Them, however it has no ability for personal comments or voting.

new poet sl_dave brings us The Ties That Bind, a rhyming couplet poem that has given me food for thought of the mechanics. some of the rhymes work really well, and then there are a couple of metres that make me stumble in the read. i think i'd work a little on those as an improvement suggestion. i like how the last stanza relates to 'ties' again that gives the poem a circling back to the beginning. Welcome to Literotica.

Non-Erotic Poetry
hmmnmm submitted two poems today. topica lumina okay for me, this one has concrete imagery my mind can grasp but i can't quite connect the dots. i think i'll need to read it many times and maybe have a little more information to understand what it's about.
July studies #9. now to be honest it took me two reads to fully grasp the meaning of this and boy it was worth the second read. i love it.

bluerains submitted erased. i like the succinct language here. the 5, 7, 5, syllable form suits the poem well. the poem reminds me of a book i've just read on the memory removal of one of the characters. for a split second everyone realises she exists, and then they forget as their memories have been erased of her existence. odd possibilities with this idea. thanks for giving me food for thought blue, you always do and i grow as a reader and poet because of it.

CeriseNoire submitted Cupid's Bow. i think i would have put 'salivate' on the end of the line above for a slightly smoother read. wrong category selection i think. i like this poem.

AnonAndAnon submitted What can be more at peace i liked this poem very much. the only improvement i'd suggest would be to add a question mark in the title. thank you for the walk through the cemetery.

bednhead13 submitted Light in the Mist today. i like this poem. suggestion for one improvement would be to change 'mists' into 'mist' in most places it occurs. at first i didn't like the use of 'thru' but on second and third readings it does fit with the lack of punctuation and capitalisation of initial letters. i enjoyed the near-rhymes and the rhymes. i enjoyed this read.

CornishBabe submitted The Inner Child. excellent rhyme scheme (what form is this? i feel i should know it.) i think some one and some where should be single words.

first poem by bigpapabare . Someday i like the near-rhymes in this poem. a suggestion for improvement... i think a little more poetic language could be used.

Please note that these are my opinions on poems, it is up to you as a reader and/or writer to form your own. Go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[LeBroz]

Tuesday's Review

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Filling in for the Jersey girl, this week and next. Let's see what's out there on this Tuesday's nice light offering of 10.


hmmnmm evokes some interesting imagery in Button with such colorful language as in:

reality is rice paper,
the imagined magnetic
lime light blues
secret whispers call

ABSTRUSE offers up her 3rd piece in 4 years in Possessive Rapture, an almost spiritual piece of eros composed with an economy of words; just witness:

gentle touches
brushing of soft skin
bring me down from
fevered kisses and bites
against throbbing flesh

That's it for now. While I found only two worthy of mention {subjective opinion, of course}, I did notice that today's offerings were at least rather literate. So go ahead and give 'em a quick scan. Who knows, something might tickle your tummy. Just remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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A few more than yesterday — 18 prospects to check out this evening. So let's see what's out there.


Curiouswife has three pieces out today, the wildly open to interpretation, His Beauty, the so not politically correct look for a knight in shining armor in To Sleep {I like this one; it has a certain clean feel to it}, and a bit of a quirky little piece in You Failed To Protect Me.


LadynStFreknBed offers up another of her villanelles in Dream from Grandpa. The two critical lines are well put together and are put to good use rather smoothly in this sweet piece about, well, the title says it all.


UnderYourSpell offers us a couple pieces, Giving up smoking, a well written and humorous look at the subject, and Haunted a darker look at childhood lost {though I do wonder if that question mark should appear at the end of the second line}.


icey_hearted, a newbie to Lit's scene, offers up a rather compelling piece in The Beat of a Lovers Heart. It's a bit prosey and could use some trimming but still shows promise.


Honey123 is back after a too-long absence. I found her Not The Only One pulling me in, fascinated by how she manages to write this one so well without it degenerating into a list-like poem.


Well, that's it for now. A rather good selection this Wednesday. Good enough, at least, that I found myself reading most of the pieces through to the end. Give 'em a look and see what you think. And remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

Thursday Review

Howdy and hello.

Only one thing really caught my fancy today, and that was Shakespeare and I Canto 6 by iqespresso. It was well crafted, with great word choices.

Please add comments about other poems, 'cause I know it's my mood as much as anything else that's making me picky. Of course, there weren't so many there in the first place.

See you next week, kiddies.

 

[colddiesel]

Not the Thursday review.

"Desert Sunset" by twelveoone is the most interesting item today (I think).

 

[vampiredust]

The Sunday Review

23 new poems up this Sunday

My picks:

Rybka gives us the appropriately titled Minimalism/
Excerpt:

Minimalization
Reductionism
ReDEduction
ReDeduce

This is a cleverly designed and well thought out poem. The descending length of the lines contrast neatly with the subject of the poem.

A thought provoking piece that tackles the subject well

beautyandwine gives us Absence

Excerpt:

Splashes of infrared sparks
accost my eyes
as I fail
to drown out
this internal roar

I enjoyed reading this. The language in the poem is quite raw and conveys the speakers feelings well. Likewise, the imagery presented mirrors this as well. Loved the image of 'Splashes of infrared sparks/accost my eyes
as I fail/to drown out/this internal roar'

Good stuff

Sapphire_O has two poems up today that caught my eye: Oasis and The Basket-weavers Wife

Both show good economy of words and concise images. I liked The Basket-weavers Wife the most, with its imaginative description.

Finally, hmmnmm gives us Picnic play

Excerpt:

Dignitaries visit, with wingtips write poetry on the airwaves, their resilience an amazement, music teachers showing life goes as it does

This is an imaginative piece that I enjoyed reading. The language is quite musical with a good use of alliteration here and there. The imagery is quite playful and almost surreal in parts, transforming the scene into something magical. I liked the images 'wingtips write poetry on the airwaves' and 'shaded corners coo'

Good reading