New Poetry Recommendations

[wildsweetone]

today's treasury is the 30/30 poetry thread. some great poets are nearing the finish line, so get your fix quick!

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no great words of wisdom from me today other than to check your work for errors before you submit, edit to enhance the message in your poems, use concrete imagery and poetic language... oh yes, and ENJOY WRITING!



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31 new poems up today.

my favourites today chosen for one or several reasons, interesting poetic writing, concrete imagery, line breaks, stanza breaks, formats, and most importantly, an interesting read:

Kerouac a first poem submission for bwilson

Life never found by emaalr.

When I first told her about you by Under_Sun.

Spilled erotic, measure by bluerains.


spilled erotic measure by MungoParkIII.

1/4 of Life by Artificial_I.

Molly by Tristess2.

Wedding night by DarkBee.


Lullaby by swallowedscream

Waiting by beautyandwine.



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those that nearly made the cut for the above are placed here because of one or two slips, for example a spelling error, or wording that did not quite make sense for me. they also might be placed here because i found them an 'okay' read. a quick proofreading for errors, or an edit to improve poetic language and they'd be bumped up a level. they're here basically because they deserve a reading and they kept my attention long enough to finish and be a little intrigued.

Similies a new submission to poetry historymajor and the second submission, To Hell with Kant.

Just a stone's throw away by robert12.


Keep on Sinning by ramonathompson. and second submission, Your Wife's A Highway.


The Last Laugh by new Lit. member Lustykitten.

Deceit: A Villanelle by LadyStFreknBed.

Thief by swallowedscream.

The Story After Goodbye by CeriesNoire.







special request on the poem Bound and Gagged by MistressDarkness for some feedback.


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there are a fair few worthy of a read today which makes a nice change. go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[LeBroz]

Tuesday's Review

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Filling in again this week for the incomparable Joisey girl. This week we've a number of poetry recordings to play back. There're a total of 19 poems today of which 9 are audio, so let's see what's good and if any of 'em knock me off my bar stool.

AUDIO POEMS


Sapphire_O starts us off today with two audio poems, Taking the Dreamer, a quite lengthy piece, and Incomplete Aubade, another lengthy piece and my favorite of the two. It's a prose piece and is compelling with its romantic feel mixed with tragedy. Give it a try!


MungoParkIII has several audio poems posted today, but it is Grandpa's Chair that snared my attention. I liked the way he applies human characteristics to the chair.


unpredictablebijou has a pair of audio poems here. In A Curse, it sometimes seems as though the author reads on and on without stopping to take a breath, leaving me breathless. Much better of the two is Crush, a well done erotic piece without the overdone cliché phrases so often used. She could have slowed down the reading of this piece just a tad and given it more omph. Give it a read and then listen to the audio and see what you think.


EROTIC/NON-EROTIC POEMS


seannelson has an amusing piece out. Based on its creatively edited Shakespearean phraseology, you may just enjoy To Be Or Not To Be.


Finally, RhymeFairy has a brief, though intense, poem posted, Stimulate.


Okay — you've got my opinion on today's postings. And while these I've mentioned are rather good, nothing really knocked me off my stool today. Maybe I need a couple drinks to warm me up next time. See what you think and read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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Here I am again on another Wednesday. Today I find 20 poems on my platter, so let's see if any of 'em set off my fireworks.


manipulatrix leads off today with three varied pieces. Her lost has a bit of a darker feel in its prose, while in Fucking Statues you've got to wonder, who's having the difficulties, the artists or their sculptures? And then of course there's the best of her lot, Spilled Erotic Measure

. That same title challenge must have inspired her here; this is loaded with imagery without becoming crudely vulgar. Nicely done job and congrats on that greenie.


twelveoone has a more cerebral offering for us this morning in dawning.... Give it at least a couple reads.


LadynStFreknBed has posted today a soft romantic piece that appeals to the hopeless romantic in me; check out her Eternal Sunrise.


RhymeFairy has in interesting piece posted today. In Your Eyes is more complicated than appears on first reading. There's some dense writing here.


Bill Dada shows us his wicked humor in a short piece exploring the wealth generating possibilities of writing poetry. Check out Cobweb Blues for a quick little chuckle.


My Erotic Trail gives an anthropomorphic feel to the natural world in his light and easily read, Padre.


That's it for today. There were a couple that I had thought would appear here, when I noted the author's name, but which just didn't click with me today. Give some of those I didn't mention a quick look-see and decide for yourself. In the meantime, remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

Thursday, Thursday, Thursday

Greetings and salutations fellow poetry lovers. It’s Thursday, so you know that means… another unapologetic review.

Maybe it’s because of what is happening in my personal life, but Divorce by LargoKitt really struck a chord with me. This piece took a different perspective that turned an ugly thing into something approximating beauty. (Two other submissions from this poet were also posted today, and both of them - Sixty Eight and Love July 4th - are worth your time.)

I’m a fan of anything by this poet, but this one is especially wonderful. Maybe it’s just because there is something about hmmnmm’s newly posted prose poem August Two that puts me in mind of a grown up version of The Giving Tree, but I really like it.

Another one of my favorite poets, Tathagata had a submission up today that is really worth your time. Make sure to read Who'll shuffle the cards?, even though there’s a couple of spelling errors (devine/divine & shouln’t/shouldn’t) and a typo (there needs to be a space after the comma in the second line).

There were others that were decent, but these stood out the most to me. Add your two cents if you’d like. See y’all next week.

 

[vampiredust]

The Sunday Review

It's Sunday the 5th of August and time for another new poems review

12new poems are up today

My picks:

hmmnmm gives us the imaginative Scents, Orange one

Excerpt:

Over the rise the dawn mates with summer molecules, they spray, they flick, and sprites patter against my cheek, since I was asleep

I enjoyed reading this. The imagery is quite rich and paints vivid pictures in the mind (I especially liked the opening image) The senses have been incorporated quite well in the poem and you can feel and smell everything that's going on. Quite well done. It accomplishes everything that an erotic poem should do and I thought the poem ended well, with the softness of 'reach for the sweet note, then fall'

Good stuff

Tristesse2 gives us Shifting Sands

Excerpt:

We can't go back
for fear of getting lost
again

I enjoyed reading this. It felt quite personal, as if the speaker was sharing a transition that was happening with the reader. The idea of 'moving on' can be quite cliched sometimes in poetry but I think it was handled well here and the personal style of the poem made it different. The language is concise and everything fits together neatly.

Good stuff

 

[My Erotic Trail]

Saturday's Poems... (~_~)

Tongue by bogusbrig...

...this poem, simply rolls off 'a' tongue... (grinin')


have a quality day!!!

 

[wildsweetone]

today's gem - quotes:

Charles Simic's Favourite Poetry Sayings:

"Poetry tries to bridge the abyss lying between the name and the thing. That language is a problem is no news to poets." - Charles Simic

"I'm in the business of translating what cannot be translated: being and its silence." - Charles Simic

"Even as I concentrate all my attention on the fly on the table, I glance fleetingly at myself." - Charles Simic

"A poem is an invitation to a voyage. As in life, we travel to see fresh sights." - Charles Simic



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this review contains some constructive criticism that is intended to help some poets with their writing. there is a limitation on the use of smilies in posts on Literotica and therefore i am unable to include what i would like. my intention is to encourage and help by giving suggestions to poets.



22 new poems today.

Toxic Love: Bridge by dr_mabeuse. i recall reading this poem before and wish i had the other to compare what you did. i feel that the language mirrors the twirling nature of love itself. i am not sure that the formatting/line breaks are the best they could be. i think the mixed punctuation and capitalisation is not enhancing the language. the imagery certainly works very well.

Eyes by goliathtamer. i found this poem a little 'list-like' and i'm not sure that was the intention of the poet. i think i have a different meaning for the word 'shenanigan' to the poet. the form used here was adhered to well by the poet.

Shards of Life by beautyandwine. i found this submission interesting. it made me realise again, how important both the first word and the last word can carry great importance in a centered poem. i think there are a few wasted chances here, of, to, here, as that could have gained greater impact.
Fried Bananas has an interesting use of words. i'm not sure i am comfortable with it (some of the words seem to me slightly forced to make sure they sound different/poetic).

Worshipped by the Sun and Sex on a Cell Phone by MagicaPractica are both worth a read.

Awaken by Lustykitten has an interesting feel about it, however i think it is too wordy. i think cutting back the extraneous adjectives would help make this a smoother read, or perhaps tripling the size of the poem by filling in more information around each adjective without adding more to the poem.

Threesome by winktwice . i quite liked the sing-songy feel of this poem. the rhyme works well and i only tripped once or twice when the metre changed. it was a light and easy read. i'm not a fan of speech marks in poetry, i prefer italics.

Drifting away by cavu182. i read this poem three or four times, enjoyed the sound and the thoughts. i liked the imagery but would like to see more concrete imagery within the poem.

Laughing Matters ardentforce. i like the near-rhyme of some words and think the poem could be further enhanced with the use of more of them.

Cam Whore by CornishBabe is an example of a poem in that it uses rhyme, good metre, correctly chosen line breaks (with only two or three words per line this means every word needs to count). however, i personally didn't find it poetic. maybe i need to be in the right mood to read this one.

Empty by The Fisherman. i like this one and am not sure why. i think it is because it could say a lot in a few words. to improve... hmmm... i think i'd take out the first 'well'. ('well worn' and 'worn' say the same thing). i think i'd consider more stanza breaks, or perhaps adding in punctuation to complete and give pause between important thoughts. thank you for making me think.
i must read more of this poet's poetry.

A Spanking by WriterDom. i read this poem several times. i like the sounds, the alliteration, the rhyme. i like the line breaks. the lack of punctuation suits this short poem. the imagery is clear and concise.

quest by Alessia Brio nice line breaks, nice stanza breaks, both the first and last word in many lines contain good impact. to improve? perhaps some concrete image in stanza two?

August, 3 by hmmnmm caught my attention. my attention waned a little around the 'one o five without' because i didn't understand it. i enjoy this kind of stream of consciousness, prosy type writing. i do find myself looking for alliteration and reading the writing out loud to hear the sounds.



and from the previous day:
R & R, I can play too, and Fight Night all by Rumpleteaser, are MUST READS.





those poems i did not choose for this review either contained typing errors or simply did not stand out to me. please note that these are my opinions on poems, it is up to you as a reader and/or writer to form your own. go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[Angeline]

August 7, 2007

I’m back from New Jersey, and I seem to have brough the mid-Atlantic muggies all the way to northern New England with me. Ugh. I need to chill with some new poems. These are just the ones that appealed to me. There may be others you prefer, so please find some time to read, vote and give feedback if you can.

After You Are Gone and Year are two of four poems submitted by a new poet, LadyCassolette. She has an eye for detail and an interesting, sensual vocabulary. These were my favorites of the four, but I saw things I liked in each of her submissions.

CeriseNoire gives us Shower Watching, a short poem with just a few clear images. It’s a little taste of imagery that makes a strong impression.

I also like Spiders in space, one of two poems posted today by hmmnmm. I don’t like to spend much time thinking about spiders and their encroaching presence in my world, but hmmnmm has somehow made flight from a spider bite into a freedom song. Good stuff.

And please read ugly, an illustrated poem by the talented and prolific 4degrees. It’s also a short poem but it’s compelling and works very well with the image that illustrates it. And it has the added bonus of a comment from Wicked Eve that compares it to an orgasmic butterfly. I don’t know what that would look like (how would you know?), but maybe I just need more coffee.

For today’s spinner selection, I went to the audio poems in honor of Eluard’s search for intelligent recordings in the galaxy of modern poetry. I found A Rebirth by Decayed Angel, a very gifted writer imo, and a great reader, too. He maanges to take abstract images and weave them into a clear picture about the death and rebirth of patriotism. Okay, he uses jazz as one of the key images, but honest officer I wasn’t even trying to find a jazz poem. They find me.

Peace. Over and out.
Angeline

 

[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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Another sticky Wednesday here in the backwaters, though they do promise a nice dry weekend. Let's see if anything brightens the outlook from among today's 23 new postings.


MungoParkIII has a very brief and sad piece out in empty chapel. Go with the imagery and see how you feel.


bogusbrig has a piece out today you simply must read. When Dogs Bark has a certain primal feel to it as summer's needs assert themselves. Describing these needs in terms of a dog's conduct helps underscore the primal nature here.


hmmnmm has another prose piece out in August Four, another seemingly stream of consciousness piece that paints a picture of the summer season. Enjoy.


beautyandwine has some enthusiastic under the covers action happening in Crash. Oh well, nothing lasts forever. Perhaps this lamp is a last piece in a set — bedrooms can be such dangerous places.


That's it for today. At least from me. Today's just too warm and sticky. Give 'em a look and you might find something out there that interests you. Just remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

Bad News

No new poems up yet, so no fodder for another one of my oh-so-witty reviews. I'll check back later this morning to see if anything's been added, but if new poems don't go up until tonight then the review might not be up until tomorrow.

Update: No new poetry at 8:00 pm EDT, so I'll catch you next week.

 

[My Erotic Trail]

New Poems Reviews
Saturday 11th

I read the poems offered this morning and decided to come back and select a few to offer but when I came back there were more poems posted. A lot of good ones caught my eye. (grinin') I did not mention them all so do your self a favor and read today's poems offered.

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Man and Woman by bogusbrig ... I enjoyed this poem and read it as a humourously-serious write... (~_~) (grinin')

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Rapunzel by Swxytgrlly ... an erotic, 'hair-pulling' read that I liked very much.

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Droves by oregon_gal

excerpt:
They come in droves
Not that I’m so special… just female

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Rain Voyeur by bluerains ... soul pearls mirrored... written with a powerful pen!!!

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Bug Out
by Tathagata ... ('Shit-eater' = chuckleboned grinin')...I really liked this poem's meaning as well as the way it was played out... (~_~)

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New Erotic Poems ... a fine selection of reads!!!!


(~_~) have a quality day!

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Thanks for pointing out Tath's Bug Out which I missed on my morning rounds. I'd like to put Chronicle by Art himself in the daily spotlight as well as On The way To Tar Beach by emaair.

 

[wildsweetone]

today's choice:

Tree at my Window

Tree at my window, window tree,
My sash is lowered when night comes on;
But let there never be curtain drawn
Between you and me.

Vague dream-head lifted out of the ground,
And thing next most diffuse to cloud,
Not all your light tongues talking aloud
Could be profound.

But, tree, I have seen you taken and tossed,
And if you have seen me when I slept,
You have seen me when I was taken and swept
And all but lost.

That day she put our heads together,
Fate had her imagination about her,
Your head so much concerned with outer,
Mine with inner, weather.

Robert Frost


just a word of warning, i have noticed many many poems on the 'net that i've looked up are incorrectly typed when compared to the originals that are published. if you're reading or using online poetry, then check several sources before committing yourself to one version.

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here we are again dears... are you ready for a radical WSO change?

i've decided to hunt down a maximum of the five poems submitted for the day and talk about them here. doing lots each week is diminishing my time and as i like reviewing and writing, i'll alter it to suit me.


this review contains some constructive criticism that is intended to help some poets with their writing. there is a limitation on the use of smilies in posts on Literotica and therefore i am unable to include what i would like. my intention is to encourage and help by giving suggestions to poets.


there are 13 new poems on your 13th of August day. let's see if i can find five...


Twelve Notes Written on Thirteen Ways... by MungoParkIII.
i enjoyed this submission of 'notes'. there were a couple that i have yet to make sense of, VIII and IX. that they are 'notes' means they could be connected to the birds in any form, but i can't see the connection with those two, yet. i found the audio to be good, there are a couple of places where the poet's breathing interfered with the sound, but mostly it was good.

Strings, Under_Sun's fifth poem submission to Lit. i found i liked the repetition in this poem. there are many lines in this poem that i like. the rhyme in various forms, the alliteration, assonance etc. great. no suggestions for improvement.

Caress by RhymeFairy. i liked this poem but think that it could be enhanced by improved line breaks. eg i like the line break on line 4, but don't feel line 3 is right. (line 6 'destines' should be 'destiny's' i think).

untitled by emaalr . (i have yet to see more yellow 'N's on a submission page.) there's a sprinkling of concrete imagery and a sprinkling of abstract wording and both work well in this poem. i am uncertain that the stanza breaks chosen are the best ones.

Photo Prey 2 by Jamison is excellent and is today's MUST READ. excellent imagery, alliteration and assonance. excellent enjambment. i don't think it's called enjambment but the effect in stanza 2, line 2 is also one i love (somebody please enlighten me as to this technique's name). i love 'Then forgot;' perfect fragment and great rhyme with 'shot'. lots for me to learn here. thank you for sharing this poem Jamison.




those poems i did not choose for this review either contained typing errors or simply did not stand out to me. please note that these are my opinions on poems, it is up to you as a reader and/or writer to form your own. go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[Angeline]

August 14

There are only seven new poems today. An easy day for me. Of the seven I only really liked a few anyway. Maybe when you’ve done these reviews for a while (and I have, off and on, for years) you become very discerning. It’s usually hard for me to find much that resonates in the new poem list.

I was prepared to not like anything by emaaler because I tend to agree with Rybka. Posting too many poems at one time dilutes a reader’s ability to respond to them. Better to bring them to the light of day slowly. But he has two poems today I really enjoyed reading. When Dreams Pay the Cost and The undeserving both have fairly similar, simple rhyme schemes. Dreams is a cautionary tale about the price of giving up love. It reads like a lyric to me. I think it would make a very good song lyric. Undeserving is a rather cynical antiwar piece. Both are well written and the quality of the writing overcomes the ABAB rhyming, which could be trite but is saved, in both cases, by the poet’s nimble way with words. He has other poems posted today (two others, I think), but these two were the best of the lot, imo.

And then there’s Winters Blush by RhymeFairy. The missing punctuation aside, this strikes me as a very good poem that needs to be reshaped and edited a bit. There’s a lot that’s good and interesting here, but it isn’t being shown off to its best advantage and, maybe it’s me, but I can never get past “lil” in a poem. I trip over it every time and lose my disbelief. Cute diminutives in writing that is otherwise profound seem incongruous to me. Don’t overlook this poem though. It just needs a little rehabbing.

For my spinner selection, I found Julie by ExcitableBoy. Maybe it’s me but there’s something lingering and familiar to me in his writing. Alts, anyone?

Please read, vote and give feedback if you can make some time for it. These recommendations are only my opinions and you may have other poems you prefer.

Happy Tuesday.
Angeline

 

[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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Another busy Wednesday, with 24 posted. Let's see what's out there before I have to run out this afternoon on some errands.


Remec has a very brief, emotionally charged piece in Unexpected . Rather a haiku-like poem on steroids.


vampiredust also brings us a brief piece in Letter writing . A piece also packed with emotion. I like Eve's suggestion in her comment; gives that first sentence a better feel of balance.


RhymeFairy brings us Elicit Endeavors. I've enjoyed watching the evolution and maturation in her writing. Here again, Eve's suggestion has merit. The phrase, "button of thriving need," seems a bit contrived and this part might come off better with a little reworking and understating — let the reader imagine where the tongue is glued.


Jamison has posted another visual piece in Photo Prey 3 . A visually powerful piece that illustrates why this man can create such wonderful illustrated poems.


That's it for today. There are a number that might deserve mention but they need more work. Look over today's listing and see what might appeal to you; it doesn't take long to either get intrigued or to let out a groan. Just remember to read, vote, comment ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

It's the unapologetic show, with your host... unapologetic.

emaalr had quite a few poems post today, some good, some fair, but in my opinion the best was Speechless. The rhyme didn’t seem too forced, and I really liked the last stanza.

Representing me by Wolv_Project is wonderful, but read it without the explanation… I found it detracted from my enjoyment of the poem.

Doriansnow has a couple up today. The Room Where You Bathe was well worded, and very hot. Enjoyed it thoroughly. I also want to point out that this is a brand new poet.

Ode on a Summer Day is quite possibly one of the best poems I’ve ever read on Literotica. It is evocative and erotic, and compelling. Bravo to AnonAndAnon.

I have as yet to read a poem by hmmnmm that I didn’t like, and Isles is no exception.

That’s all for this week, kiddies. Aunty unapologetic will return with more fun next week.

 

[WickedEve]

Oh, wow, go check this one out! ---> Come Stomp With Me by Doriansnow©

 

[My Erotic Trail]

New Poem Reviews


24 poems came out today!

if a goose is one and geese many...
is a herd of moose, meese?
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Canvas by emaalr ...opening the mind like a can of paint and the brush strokes brought this poem to life. (~_~)

also... Heavy Skies

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Ambush by Dr_Mabeuse ... a gripping read that I enjoyed... the 'Doc' also has another poem out this day... What she has to give

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The Book Of Fire (Prologue)
by Rumpleteazer ...this author had several poems surface this day but I found this one... interesting! (~_~)

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New Poems


(~_~) have a quality week!

 

[vampiredust]

The Sunday Review

Only 5 new poems up so far
Repose by twelveoone is the only poem that got my attention this Sunday. The imagery reminds me a little of Poe. A well thought-out piece with concise language and a well-honed metaphor.

Good stuff

 

[wildsweetone]

The reverse side also has a reverse side - Japanese Proverb.


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this review contains some constructive criticism that is intended to help some poets with their writing. there is a limitation on the use of smilies in posts on Literotica and therefore i am unable to include what i would like. my intention is to encourage and help by giving suggestions to poets.

10 new poems today.

Geometre of Nature and Imagination by lustybard. i enjoyed this prose poem. i don't know much about them, but i liked the sounds that run through this writing. i liked the description and the similies work well although the mountain peak seemed a little like reverse psychology (at least the image seemed that way for me). the whole poem reads smoothly, i wonder if an improvement could be to have greater impact at the end.

Toddler Fodder by Rumpleteazer. i like this poem. i read through it and it wasn't until i went back that i realised the formatting wasn't different to other poems. it's the language and the use of the keyboard that makes this look different. this poem makes me want to know the story behind it. (there is an edit to this poem, waiting in the submission queue.)

Never hail a cab by emaalr. this is the one of the five submissions today by this poet that i preferred. i think it has a good basis, but could do with an edit to 'clean up' the punctuation; also to change 'new york' to 'New York'. it feels odd not having the initials capitalised when looking at the rest of the poem. i'm not sure the last line fits comfy with the rest of the message of the poem.



those poems i did not choose for this review either contained typing errors or simply did not stand out to me. please note that these are my opinions on poems, it is up to you as a reader and/or writer to form your own. go read, go comment and keep writing!

 

[Angeline]

There are a baker’s dozen of new poems posted today, and while there’s nothing that bowled me over, there are a few poems that are definitely worth your time to read and vote, perchance to comment.

Three of the new poems are illustrated. None of them are poems that would stand on their own, but the illustrations instill more meaning in them and make them interesting. This, I thought, is especially true of virgin2267’s Our Shadow. The photo is great and frames the mediocre poem well. I might have turned the photo around so that the couple isn’t sideways, but that’s a nitpick. darkerdreamer’s Perspective, Again is only one line (albeit a good line), but the shrunken font and the shift to larger bold font makes it very clever. MagicaPractica’s Painted Toes is the least successful of the three, and that is because the photo is not very exciting. Some people don’t like illustrated poems because the photo or fonts take up the slack where language fails. I’m not such a purist.

My Mother’s Sister by starrkers is a spare and tight tribute to a lost aunt.

James Cody’s Hmm…Nookie is such hack writing that I should be ashamed to recommend it except that I found it very funny. How can you not with lines like “Moanin' and groanin' like a horny wookie”? Eve, read this poem.

And there are four poems from the prolific emaalr. Each of them has potential, but each needs a good editing. I think I like A Walk Along the Beach best because the images are vivid, but if you read it you’ll see it needs some serious pruning and tightening.

I went to the spinner and on my first try found this lovely poem by jd4george:

Whispers at Two Lights
by jd4george©


On this misted afternoon,
rain is hidden in the sand…

the alabaster house is silent,
lifeless shadows haunting in the fog…

sea creatures stretch out their arms,
drifting, strengthened by the tide.

In this trinity of voicelessness,
I fear my name is being whispered.

Good, isn’t it? If you find the time this is a great poet here to read. A very gifted writer.

Some of the best poetry at Lit these days is not posted, but is being produced here at the forum.

That’s it for this week from me. Please take some time to read, vote and give feedback. You may find you prefer other new poems than the ones I mentioned. If you do, please feel free to mention them in this thread.

Peace,

 

[LeBroz]

Wednesday's Review

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You have got to be kidding me! Only 5 poems today and all from that writing machine, emaalr, who's now gotten 75 postings up in less than a month and a half. You can cover all 5 of today's postings to decide for yourself if any are hot or not. My thoughts are that A short story....in ink has a bit of an odd quirky rhyming feel to it and Master...? has a surprise twist to it.

Not too bad, but my butter hasn't melted. Give 'em a go and see what's your reaction ~ it's the least you can do. Above all, remember to comment ~ a fair exchange for the pleasure of reading free poetry.

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[unapologetic]

Thursday Again?

Doriansnow gave us more than one poem today, but the one that I found most compelling was The Morning. Very evocative.

I hate the word “yon” in the first stanza, but other than that I love August Nine by hmmnmm.

That’s it for this week. I’m in a poopy mood, though, so there might be others out there.

Have a good week.

 

[champagne1982]

There are 33 new poems today. I'm just going to get a tea and sit down for a read.

 

[LeBroz]

Friday Night Special

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While Carrie's busy dealing with life, here's a quicky condensed version to get the ball rolling:


hmmnmm ~~ Thine ~~ at last, an erotic piece written in a completely new way.


dr_mabeuse ~~ Nativity ~~ thought provoking piece.


Rybka ~~ Old Fred Barnes ~~ I just thought it has a New England feel to it.


ghost_girl ~~ off course ~~ just read this — the Monarch perhaps?

Okay, that's my contribution for tonight. Have a go at 'em and see what melts your butter.

And then get a buzz on - it's a Friday night after all!

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