djrip
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I liked the story! But I don't know if the commenter felt tricked, so much as left hanging. Personally I felt like the story ended right when it was about to get started. I take it hubby bought out part of the bid and earned himself entry to the room. But what's going to happen now? Could be Kayla turns Livy down and they all play cards, could be Livy turns on the charm and seduces her--which would be a good scene in itself because nothing has to happen, so Livy would have to make it happen if she wants it, especially with hubby's presence and moral support probably making Kayla feel more able to say no to unwanted advances. If so, does hubby participate or have to sit there watching? Etc etc. Now there's a certain charm to leaving it a bit open like this, gives me, the reader, the chance to enjoy wondering about these things. But a reader who wants that closure feeling like you didn't finish the story also makes sense to me.Some of the most fun stories to write have been AF stories with a surprise twist at the end. After writing a few over the years, I have come to realize that the readers frequently don’t like these twists. On my current story Kayla’s Charity Auction (https://www.literotica.com/s/kaylas-charity-auction) one comment opined if I wasn’t going to finish the story, I shouldn’t have posted it. I guess it is OK to fool a character, but don’t fool the reader.