Words you hate in a sex story

[ChuckWolf]

When a woman's ass is referred to as pooper, shitter, poop-chute, etc.

Also, not big on the word, anus.

 

[ScrappyPaperDoodler]

When a woman's ass is referred to as pooper, shitter, poop-chute, etc.

Also, not big on the word, anus.

What about calling it the the ol' chocolate speedway? Tradesman’s entrance? Cadbury cul-de-sac?

 

[ChuckWolf]

What about calling it the the ol' chocolate speedway? Tradesman’s entrance? Cadbury cul-de-sac?

Yes, those are all terrible also.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Instead of 'panties', I usually have characters wear boyshorts because I think they’re hot. What I imagine when someone uses panties are cheeky and bikini cuts. Not thongs or g-strings (or hipsters, which are a more mature look).

Underpants, bloomers, and drawers are good words, although they imply a fairly ample garment. But I do have female characters who buy retro underwear just for the fun of it. One of them has "pantaloons," which are definitely still available.

https://www.etsy.com/listing/869338039/victorian-flounced-lace-short-pantaloons?gpla=1&gao=1&

 

[MillieDynamite]

I'm guilty of using this but I hate it. She had skin like deep, dark-chocolate, the color of coffee with cream, she was vanilla ice cream with a few red sprinkles. Like chocolate truffle, I planned on eating her up.

Comparing people to food is somewhat disconcerting to me. When I've done it, and read it later, I cringe.

 

[yowser]

Throbbing
Perky
Bubble-butt

 

[NotWise]

Comparing people to food is somewhat disconcerting to me. When I've done it, and read it later, I cringe.

Bramblethorn brought that up once, and I've avoid it since. It's so common that working around it takes some thought and effort.

 

[MillieDynamite]

Bramblethorn brought that up once, and I've avoid it since. It's so common that working around it takes some thought and effort.

I know it does and the using food for comparisons is easy, or lazy, take your pic. There's a line in an old movie, I can't remember which one, with Spencer Tracy and Katherine Hepburn, "Not much meat on her, but what's there is prime." I laughed when he said, later I thought, he's comparing her to steak? That's not nice. Actually prime isn't the word, it's a grade of meat but can't remember the exact word and he said with NY accent.

 

[rescatooor]

Bramblethorn brought that up once, and I've avoid it since. It's so common that working around it takes some thought and effort.

Historically speaking it's been done a lot. I'd say it's really kind of a tradition. In Italian art you sometimes have the unusual combo of sausages and peaches showing up, sometimes on the same plate. It's a bit of a visual clue that the characters in the picture are gay and are probably going to get it on pretty soon.

And in lukewarm defense of chocolate eyes, I can't think of anything nice that is brown that I'd compare them to. Rust? Mahogany? Oak bark?

 

[MillieDynamite]

And in lukewarm defense of chocolate eyes, I can't think of anything nice that is brown that I'd compare them to. Rust? Mahogany? Oak bark?

He had deep brown eyes, so dark and deep it lent an air of danger to him. The kind of eyes, which stare into your soul and draw you to him. Despite, or perhaps, because of the threat, you perceive lurking just under the surface.

You don't have to compare the color to anything, you just have say what they do to the person viewing them.

 

[rescatooor]

He had deep brown eyes, so dark and deep it lent an air of danger to him. The kind of eyes, which stare into your soul and draw you to him. Despite, or perhaps, because of the threat, you perceive lurking just under the surface.

You don't have to compare the color to anything, you just have say what they do to the person viewing them.

But what does "deep brown" mean exactly? It seems like on of those descriptions that could mean anything.

 

[MillieDynamite]

But what does "deep brown" mean exactly? It seems like on of those descriptions that could mean anything.

Deep brown is approaching black. If you want to call them chocolate then do. I've used the term, limpid pools of blue, to describe eyes. Azure, whatever.

In certain light my skin is russet, in others more of brownish yellow,.

Synonyms for brown include bay, chestnut, roan, sorrel; rust, brick, terra-cotta; cinnamon, ginger, hazel, maroon; chocolate, cocoa, coffee, puce; mahogany, walnut; henna, auburn, brunette, dark; dun, fawn, beige, ecru; tawny, musteline, dusky, fuscous, umber; tan, khaki, drab; bronze, copper, gold; tanned, sunburned

Mahogany eyes would certainly say they were dark brown, but if you want Chocolate, cocoa, coffe, use them. I'm just saying that skin color and food comparison, to me, reduce the person to food. Just like comparing white or black skin color to bird or other excrement's sickens me. Yeah, I've used them, to show the racism of both sides, but that was the reason.

 

[Djmac1031]

agreed. but i can't stand a lot of what i read in the thread. i'm expressing an opinion. and, at least for now, i'm entitled to do just that.

i was put in mind of someone who might be thinking of writing that, when they see some of the comments here, might be stifled as they focus on not using whatever word flows naturally for them.

it's not a big deal, and i'm not going to get drawn into any protracted, pointless, probably frustrating debate.

horses for course and all that.

I'm not interested in debating or arguing either, and if it seems like I'm picking on people for using certain words I apologize because that's not my intent.

Some words just bug me, that's all. Personal preference.

Plus I fully recognize I'm a far less experienced writer. So maybe, and I fully admit this is possible, I just don't know what the hell I'm talking about lol.

 

[SimonDoom]

Comparing people to food is somewhat disconcerting to me. When I've done it, and read it later, I cringe.

It can be, but for some people, it aptly describes how they feel in sex or in the act of seduction.

"You look good enough to eat," for example. People really do feel that way and talk that way in real life.

I think there's a connection between food and sex, and certainly food and seduction, so this one doesn't bother me, but I can see how if one doesn't think this way it can have disturbing implications.

 

[JuanaSalsa]

Throbbing
Perky
Bubble-butt

Ouch! Guilty.

But, throbbing is what my clit does when I'm turned on! Or pulsing, but I got to have some synonyms. And perky, I mean, it's such a happy word, so bouncy and full of life. Bubble-butt, I accept that it was a trite, and not the most descriptive choice, mea culpa.

I'm laughing.

 

[Djmac1031]

Throbbing
Perky
Bubble-butt

Ok yup, I'm guilty of all three lol.

 

[MajorRewrite]

Throbbing
Perky
Bubble-butt

Perky is a wonderful word.

 

[yowser]

Throbbing
Perky
Bubble-butt

Ouch! Guilty.

But, throbbing is what my clit does when I'm turned on! Or pulsing, but I got to have some synonyms. And perky, I mean, it's such a happy word, so bouncy and full of life. Bubble-butt, I accept that it was a trite, and not the most descriptive choice, mea culpa.

I'm laughing.

To elaborate a bit, it is not the adjectives per se, but the phrases in which they occur that are so nails-on-a-chalkboard for me.

So no 'throbbing cock' or 'perky breasts' (boobs, etc) but maybe okay for other nouns.

These don't offend:

throbbing clit
perky navel
bubble-butt chest (?)

 

[MillieDynamite]

It can be, but for some people, it aptly describes how they feel in sex or in the act of seduction.

"You look good enough to eat," for example. People really do feel that way and talk that way in real life.

I think there's a connection between food and sex, and certainly food and seduction, so this one doesn't bother me, but I can see how if one doesn't think this way it can have disturbing implications.

Having been reduced to less than human by words, I think, has a lot to do with my feelings on the subject. People have called me little monkey, thinking they’re cute, or the comparison is somehow flattering, I suppose. And even more, racist comparisons have been used to describe me. She has the Fuzzies today, Millie’s just an Angry Black Woman, or all colored women are Jezebels. I want to feel your Thicklips on my dick. Not to mention, dark cup of hot chocolate, there’s a little cream in your coffee, and so on.

 

[TadOverdon]

Probably "dripping" to describe someone's vagina.

And I've used it. More than once.

"Asshole" is sure not a favorite, as an anatomical reference. As a characterization of behavior or a human personality, it's pretty useful in dialogue.

 

[Kumquatqueen]

Same. At least here in America, "panties" is just a generic term for women's underwear. I've never heard it thought of as associated with an age thing.

I know it's the generic American term, but in Britain where we wear pants under our trousers or skirts, it's one of those words that grates (without being as funny as a transplanted fanny).

If 'panties' is said here at all, it's describing those small bloomers that a toddler would have over a nappy (diaper), under a fancy dress.

In the opposite direction, I'm told Americans find the word 'knickers' totally unsexy and like a granny might wear.

 

[MillieDynamite]

I know it's the generic American term, but in Britain where we wear pants under our trousers or skirts, it's one of those words that grates (without being as funny as a transplanted fanny).

If 'panties' is said here at all, it's describing those small bloomers that a toddler would have over a nappy (diaper), under a fancy dress.

In the opposite direction, I'm told Americans find the word 'knickers' totally unsexy and like a granny might wear.

My adoptive mum, the first week I lived with them, told me, "Don't get your knickers in a twist," when I turned up my nose at something on the table. I tried it and loved it, and now I wish I could remember what the food was.

 

[Agiel]

I know it does and the using food for comparisons is easy, or lazy, take your pic. There's a line in an old movie, I can't remember which one, with Spencer Tracy and Katherine Hepburn, "Not much meat on her, but what's there is prime." I laughed when he said, later I thought, he's comparing her to steak? That's not nice. Actually prime isn't the word, it's a grade of meat but can't remember the exact word and he said with NY accent.

Spencer Tracy - Katherine Hepburn - 1952 - Pat and Mike. “Not much meat on her, but what there is is choice.” Spoken in a harsh New York accent.

Pussy is a nice way of describing a woman’s vagina, in a loving way, and sounds better than vagina which sounds very clinical. Cunt you use in a story in which the copulation is frequently rough sex not love.

I hate the size description used by many writers such as “DD tits” and “12 inch cock.” I think it’s better to infer such things than be specific. Leave it up to the mind of the reader. Unless the story is intended for Master Bates and his parents in which the story itself isn’t important.

I would welcome a more pleasing term than “fucked her in the ass.” Any suggestions?

 

[StrangeLife]

Member when it's referring to a penis/cock/dick, please use anything other than member...

Members of parliament often seem to be dicks, so it kinda fits though.

 

[Agiel]

Definition of knickers by Merriam-Webster:

Definition of knickers
1 : loose-fitting short pants gathered at the knee
2 chiefly British : UNDERPANTS

What did Oscar Wilde say? Two countries separated by a common language.