ANDTHEEND's Highlighted Stories

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And The End by Algonquin Twit

Here's a new story that posted today by a new writer who has moved from writing poetry to now writing stories. This story posted in the Transsexuals and Crossdressers category.

The link is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480290

Seriously, how could I not highlight this story? Did you notice the title of the story, And The End? Did you notice who created this thread, Andtheend?

No, I didn't write this story, but let's see if this story is worthy of my namesake.

Boston? Nonsensical short stories? I get it and the joke is on me. Yet, this is a decent story, enough for me to recommend.

It has so good character description and development and the dialogue is good with an nicely paced narative.

Especially for those of you who enjoy reading stories posted in this category, you may enjoy this story. Good job, Algonquin Twit.

I hope this highlight of attention will garner you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Shower Attack by Acal

Here's a new story by an accomplished writer that posted today in the Interracial category.

The link is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480232

Accept for the Loving Wives category, this is a tough category crowd, one that has a devoted fan base.

A warning to those writers wanting to post here on in the Loving Wives category, don't, unless you know how to write well.

Well, this is a short little story with a nice little sex scene. The characters are described and developed enough to envision them, somewhat. Perhaps, if this story had be a bit longer with a bit more back story and foreshadowing, the reader could have gotten into the story more.

Yet, for those looking for an interracial story with a nice sex scene, you may enjoy this story. The dialogue, something that gives some writers a headache, is nicely done and the narative is not invasive.

I recommend this story.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners your story more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck on your story.

 

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Island Bear by danielblue

Here's a story by a longtime writer, who has disappeared from Literotica for a while. The story posted today in the Gay category.

Welcome back danielblue.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480216

Well...the story was told in the first person and even though the main character was described a bit, the story lacked any character development. Moreover, the person, from whose point of view the story was told, wasn't described at all.

We, the reader, are left wondering what this person looks like.

For a story so short, it is weighted down with way too much narative making the story feel longer and ponderous. I prefer more dialogue in a story this short. Besides, any time a wrier inserts too much narative he or she is telling the reader instead of showing the reader.

Read the work of F. Scott Fitzgerald, if you need help in showing the reader and in creating rich imagery.

Still, all is not lost. For those of you who enjoy the gay category and don't care much about character development and a story laden with too much narative, this story may be for you because it has a decent sex scene. It plunges right into the sex, if you know what I mean.

I hope this spotlight of attention gets you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck on your story.

 

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Wondrous Shower by zannica

Here's a new story by a new writer that posted today in the Erotic Coupling category.

Welcome to Literotica zannica.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480296

This story begins in the first person, which doesn't work well, at all. Immediately, as a reader, I feel distanced, as if the writer is holding out her hand and pushing against my chest for fear of me getting too close to her and too emotionally attached to her story.

Then, she switches to the second person, back to the first, and back and forth from first to second. Definitely, as do most stories, this story needed to be told from the third person.

The little bit of dialogue that the story had was hidden within the paragraph. Dialogue, unless its internal monologue and, even though, should always be broken out.

The story has too much black space, too many words, that just get in the way of the story. A few lines of dialogue could easily replace paragraphs of narative.

Always, anytime there is too much narative, there is too much of the author telling the reader what is happening, instead of showing the reader with imagery, what is happening.

Certainly, there is a story here and it could be a good one, if this writer choses to rewrite this.

This story has a nice shower scene that could be a hot shower scene, if the story was told in the 3rd person, if some more character description, character development, and imagery was added, along with a spattering of dialogue.

It's not enough for the writer to tell me. I want to feel and see for myself what is happening in that shower.

Yet, don't take my word for it. Read this story yourself. One reader made a nice comment about the story being erotic and maybe you will, too.

I hope my spotlight of attention will garner you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Secrets Spill in a Threesome by ua315

Here's a new story that posted today in the Incest/Taboo category by a new writer

Welcome to Literotica ua315.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480229

I don't know about you, but I'm a sucker for mother-in-law and sister-in-law stories. This story is about the writer's mother-in-law. Oh, boy. Only, right off the bat, the writer puts me off. Why? You tell me.

"Let me tell you something about myself."

Then, he goes on about 'telling' you about himself, instead of 'showing' you about himself.

Figuring that this is a good way to tell his story, he uses the same technique with his mother-in-law.

"Now let me tell you about my mother."

Apparently, the story is told from the daughter's point of view about what happens between her husband 'K' and her mother.

K? Why K as a name instead of a different letter of the alphabet or why not just give your character a number, instead of a letter, 11 or 14?

C'mon, name your character. If you are afraid that someone may recognize you and those who you are writing about, guess what, use a ficticous name, but not a letter for a name.

I just can't bond with a letter, unless we are talking about, Mr. T or Mr. X.

Now, this story is weighted down with so much narative and very little dialogue that (yawn), I'm getting sleepy.

What could have, should have, and would have been a hot story is slowed to a snail's pace by the author telling and not showing, not carrying the story with dialogue, but weighing it down with narative, and no character development.

We don't even know the name of the person telling the story, not to mention that we don't know Mom's name either. I figure their names may be A and M, since the younger sister's name is P. Dunno, I could be wrong.

What makes this story worse, is that even the dialogue or what should be dialogue is written as long paragraphs of narative.

Is this story worth reading? Yes. Is this story still hot? Yes.

For those of you who love incest, for those of you who love reading about a son-in-law taking advantage of his mother-in-law, so long as you can ignore the mechanics of the story, you may enjoy it.

I hope this spotlight of attention will garner you more votes, reads, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

[zannica]

Thank you for taking the time to read and respond to the story I wrote. I appreciate your insights and will endeavor to improve the quality of my writing.

 

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Thank you for taking the time to read and respond to the story I wrote. I appreciate your insights and will endeavor to improve the quality of my writing.

It was my pleasure. I enjoyed your story. With a rewrite and some tweaking you may have a hot story there.

Good luck.

 

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Crimson and Clover by BrooklynObserver

Here's a story that posted yesterday in the Erotic Couplings category by an established writer.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480244

Even though one commentor to this story felt he or she was there, I didn't. The story started off enticing and even had some good character discription of the roommate, yet, there was no description of him, the one telling the story. We are left with a faceless voice, not a good thing for a reader to have in his or her mind, when reading a story. Chances are we won't finish it.

Yet, this story was short enough for me to continue. The prerequisite sex scene was certainly there, but not much else. Devoid of any character development, but for the first paragraph of the story, "My new housemate is a bohemian by her own admission. She sunbathes in our backyard naked. That kind of bohemian."

The first paragraph is what caught my interest. Yet, the rest, except for the sex scene, was disappointing. With a few grammatical and spelling errors that knocked me out of the story, the writer added a good piece of imagery when he or she wrote, "A few days ago I came home from work to Bri wrestling with a bottle of wine, trying to get it open."

Don't you just love that line? Had he better describe Bri, I could have seen her just with that line. The imagery is what saved this story.

For such a short story, it's a teaser. I'd like to see this written as a longer piece with a bit of backstory and some foreshadowing. This could be good, even as a novel length piece. Bri, the Bohemian, is a good character. I'd like to read more about her.

I hope this spotlight of attention gets you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Animalistic by Acal

Here is a story that posted yesterday in the Exhibitionist & Voyeur category. I realize that I highlighted a story by Acal yesterday, but this one caught my attention.

The linke to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480231

"She knew that she shouldn't be in here, it was wrong."

Don't you just love that line? Don't you want to know who this is, where is she, why she shouldn't be there, how she got there, and why it's wrong to be there. We, the reader, haven't even started reading the story and we have all these questions that evoke our interest. I love it.

We watch the story unfold through the eyes of Sandra, a maid, hiding in her employer's bedroom closet.

Unfortunately, some of the long winded and extraneous narative gets in the way of the story. I would have preferred the characters having sex on the bed exchanged a bit of dialogue to rid the story of some of the narative. And if you must laden the story with narative, make it more full of images. The imagery is what keeps the reader interested. This story was short enough that one or two nicely placed images would have been far better than two full paragraphs of narative.

Less is always more, especially in a story, such as this, when it comes to narative. Still, I liked the premise of this story and so much more could have been done with this story. Maybe we can conjole the writer to rewrite this story, as a longer version. Perhaps, this particular servant gets in the habit of watching her employer from his bedroom closet, until one day, he takes her and this story turns from an exhibitionist/voyeur story to a reluctance/non-consent story.

Let's have a raise of hands. How many of you would love to read about the servant getting her just due for spying on her employer? Can't you just feel her clothes being torn from her body? Sorry, I digress.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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White Grandma For Black Man by SamuelX

This story posted yesterday in the Anal category.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480241

I don't know about you, but I just love SamuelX stories. A day doesn't go by that I can't wait to get my fix of SamuelX. The most prolific writer of stories, but for Bostonfictionwriter, who has written more words, he is an amazing writer, who stays through to what he knows, which is pretty much every category (lol).

I'd love to see this guy enter the Survivor Contest. He'd win. He's blow Bakeboss right out of the water. At least SamuelX writes stories and not random words. At least SamuelX's stories have a beginning, a middle, and an ending with even some good character description and a bit of character development.

For all of you readers who have not discovered SamuelX, his sex scenes won't disappoint you.

Unfortunately, this story was not a typical SamuelX story. Devoid of any dialogue, it was just narative and read so much like the writer's internal monologue. Certainly, this story could have been made better by breaking up the narative and speeding up the flow of the story with some dialogue, but his trademark sex scene was still there.

I recommend this writer for those who have not read SamuelX.

I hope this spotlight of attention gets you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Electricity by subnoire

Here's a story that posted today, by a fairly new writer, in the BDSM category.

Below is the link to the story.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480451

Well, we have talking heads immediately in the beginning of the story. We have no idea what's going on, who is talking, and why they are talkng.

There is no character description, no character development, no plot or back story. What there is a sex scene for those who enjoy the BDSM category. Other than that, it's not much of a story.

That's not to say that it couldn't have been a story, had the author paid more attention to developing his charactes than just to give them words to speak.

This story would do with with a rewrite. The author has a good sense of dialogue. I'd rather see dialogue, white space, than narative, too much black space in a story and the dialogue in this story isn't bad.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Tales of the Desperate Amateurs by DeperateAmateurs

Here's a new story that posted today in the Humor & Satire category by a new writer.

Welcome to Literotica Desperateamateurs.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480554

Why did I choose this story to highlight? It was short, barely 750 words and in was in the humor category. I haven't highlighted a story from this category, yet.

Those of you who have been reading my story highlights know that I love character description and character development. Yet, I don't want a writer to describe his character as, she was 5'4" tall, weighed about 120, had blonde hair, blue eyes, and big tits. Boring.

Read how this writer described two of her characters.

"She had been pretty once. You could tell that life had been really hard on her."

"The guy that was with her had seen better days. He looked like a biker without a bike."

She or he was able to tie not only character description but also imagery. Great. I love it. Without even describing the character in full, I have an idea of what they look like and for this short story, that's enough. It works.

Now, here's the thing. The story is told from the producer's point of view. She's the one that I'd like to know more about. She's the story. Yet, we, the reader, are left in the lurches. She's gone and the story is over. Too bad.

It's a cute story but it's a story that I could see becoming a novel length work. There's more to this story, much more than 750 words. This was just the tease. This was just the beginning. I'd love to read more from this author, especially about this subject. Great job.

Those of you who have been reading my highlights know that I don't give up grades lightly. Yet, in this case, I give this story an A minus.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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After the Pool by PnkOcelot

Here's a new story that posted today from a writer who's been around for a couple years. The story posted in the First Time category.

Below is the link.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480565

Here's a cute story for all you country boys and gals. It's all narative mind you, but I can picture the writer sitting on the porch whittling a piece of wood, while gnawing on a blade of grass with all of us sitting around the front porch drinking a bit of moonshine and listening to him tell us the story of his first time.

Great job. Good story. Loved it.

It just goes to show you that you don't need dialogue to carry a story. So, how much narative do you need, then, if you don't need dialogue? Well, that's the same question, as how long should the story be?

To answer those questions, as much narative as necessary without it getting in the way of the story and as long as the story needs to be is plenty long enough.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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First Time with My Indian Fuckbuddy by everydayboy

Here's a new story that posted today in the Gay category by a new writer.

Welcome to Literotica everydayboy.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480487

Let's see what we have.

Well, for those who enjoy reading this category, you might not be disappointed, it does have a sex scene. However, the sex scene is all telling and no showing.

There is absolutely no character description or character development, even though there are three characters present. It's obvious to me that this writer was so wrapped up in the sex scene that he forgot to write the rest of the story. Yet, that's okay everydayboy. I'm sure there is an audience out there for what you have written.

I hope this spotlight of attention gets you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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More Fun at the Rally by leftysqueeker

Here's a new story by a relatively new writer that posted today in the Erotic Coupling category.

The link is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=479777

Well, there are three characters in this story, Mandy, Rita, and Wayne with the story being told from Wayne's point of view.

For those of you who enjoy reading about women having sex, Mandy and Rita have a short sex scene, as this story is very short. Later, Wayne gets involved in the action, too.

Other than the sex scene, the story is flat. Why? There's absolutely no character description or character development. This writer was eager to jump right into the sex scene. Unfortunately, without developing, describing his characters, we, the reader, feel distanced and detached. We don't feel the action because we are unable to see the characters.

This story could have been much hotter, if the writer had instilled a bit of imagery to allow us to imagine the characters as he sees them. Maybe he can rewrite this story, even add a chapter, only, this time, describing and developing his characters.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck on your story.

 

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Gratitude by antixsocial

Here's a new story by a new writer that posted today in the Gay category.

Welcome to Literotica antixsocial.

Below is the link to the story.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480795

Well, we are thrown in the middle of the story right at the good part for those of you who enjoy reading stories posted to the Gay category and you won't be disappointed with the sex scene in this.

The best friend taking his revenge on his friend's ass for being unable to pay him back the money that he borrowed.

Only, the story fell flat. The author took a stab at character description. We know that the Gabe has brown eyes and a nice body, that's about it. We have no idea what the other character looks like.

A little bit of character development and imagery would have gone a long way with this story. I would have enjoyed reading it more, if I could have seen the characters in the way that the writer was seeing them.

Show me, don't tell me. Whenever a story doesn't have character development, character description, and imagery, then it always falls into the author telling what is happening, instead of showing what is happening.

A show me story is always better than a tell me story. We, the reader, want to imagine the character ourselves, without the writer telling us. Yet, if the story is devoid of any character description, then the reader cannot feel that he is there watching the action.

I'll give you a brief example.

"I had sex last night with a woman. She was hot. Wow. The sex was great."

So? Yawn. I'm bored.

Now, what if you read this.

"You know Amanda, right?"

"The stripper?"

Already, with just two lines of dialogue and without a lot of extraneous narative, we have an image of what Amanda must look like to be employed as a stripper.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Birthday Wishes by fuckbunny21

Here's a new story that posted today in the Erotic Couplings by a new writer.

Welcome to Literotica fuckbunny21.

Below is the link to the story.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480786

After highlighting several dozen stories, too many of these stories read like a scene in a porn movie. Maybe that's okay for some people who are holding their cocks in their hand hoping to get off by reading a sex scene, but it's not enough for the rest of us, who actually enjoy reading erotic writing.

This story starts off with Devi masturbating, while thinking about Tony. Yeah, for such a short story, there's plenty of sex, two sex scenes after all, one a blowjob.

Yet, we have no idea why Devi is masturbating over Tony. Is he good looking? Is he rich? Does he have a nice body? W dunno.

And what about Devi? What does she look like? I can't tell you that either because the writer decided not to give his or her characters descriptions, never mind any character development.

This story reads like a fragmented sex scene ripped out of a page of a book and all taken out of context. It's not so much a story, as it is a scene.

Yet, for those of you readers who are just looking for sex, this story may be for you.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and feedback. Good luck with your story.

 

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A Week with Him by Lyca_Griffin

Here's a new story by a new author that posted today in the Romance category.

Welcome to Literotica Lyca_Griffin.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=479568

Well, for those readers looking for a romantic story with a sex scene, you may enjoy this story. It's short enough to read it in a few minutes.

There were some flaws with the story, though, but nothing that couldn't be fixed with a rewrite.

The story starts out in the first person than abruptly switches to the second person and back and forth through out the story. This story would have worked better if the author stayed in one person, first, I'd pick.

Unfortunately, we don't have any character description, character development, or even character dialogue. The entire story is narative.

Because there is no attention paid to the characters and with the author of the story, just concentrating on the sex scene, the reader is left reading the action without imagining anything. The author tells us all that is happening and doesn't show us anything. A little bit of imagery would go a long way with this story in helping it to engage the reader to make it better.

Well, as this is the author's first attempt at story telling and since he or she did give us a decent sex scene, let's give this author a chance by reading the story to see what you think.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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In the Afternoon by mjw2577

Here's a new story by a new writer that posted today near the bottom of the pile in the Erotic Couplings category.

Welcome to Literotica mjw2577.

Below is the link to the story.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480975

Hmm...It's a very short narative filled story that is devoid of dialogue, except for two small lines of conversation that is buried and lost within the narative.

Let me start off with what's good about this story. It has a good sex scene. That's enough for most readers, who come here to read a dirty story, I mean, of course, erotic literature.

Now for the bad part, which, I'm afraid, outweighs the good about this story.

There's no character description at all. Told from the first person point of view, I would have like to know that Gen looked like, so that I could envision her and so that I could become more involved in the story.

Except for the author telling me, not showing me that he enjoys oral sex, there's no backstory or character development. Whenever characters are not described and whenever characters are not developed, stories, even those stories with decent sex scenes, tell the reader what is happening, instead of showing the reader what is happening.

We readers want to see the action. We don't want the writer getting in the way of the action by telling us. Our mind is busy trying to get a picture of the characters in the story, only we can't because there's no character description.

I dare say that this could have been a much better story. Perhaps, the writer will take some of my suggestions constructively and rewrite this or use my suggestions in his or her next story.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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You Try and Save Me by sweepthefloor

Here's a new story that posted today by a new, yet, already prolific writer in the Non-Erotic category. He/she already has 17 poems and 3 stories that posted within the last couple days.

Welcome to Literotica sweepthefloor. I think I know your sister, washmycar. They must be native American Indians, no doubt, sorry Cloudy, no offense intended.

Cloudy is a little sensitive about Indian jokes.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=481127

Well, maybe it's just me, but I'm wondering if this writer is less than 18-years-old. Hold on, there. Wait. I can see all the dirty old men running to read this story.

There's no sex in the story, so stop the stampede.

The story, of course, is Non-Erotic. It reads like a journal entry. There are six paragraphs of narative thick with black writing. I can see a story emerging from out of each paragraph.

The writer, no doubt, has a talent for description and I can feel the sensitive nature of this writer. It's a short story and I recommend those looking for something to read to read this.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

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Filthee by vixxenFoxdragon

Here's a new story that posted today by a new writer in the BDSM cateory.

Welcome to Literotica vixxenFoxdragon.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=481169

For those who enjoy the BDSM category, I recommend this story. It is written with you in mind. There's lots of sexual action and if you are into spanking, then this is a must read.

Alas, again, this is another story that does not have a description of the character being spanked. How hot would that be, if only I could have envisioned the woman bent over, while her ass was spanked red raw. If only for a bit of imagery to go along with a character description, this story would have been really hot.

The story is all narative, unfortunately. There's not even a line of dialogue for you to hear the character protesting or enjoying being spanked. The reader is abandoned in this story for the enjoyment of the writer. Yes, the writer, no doubt, was eager to write his or her spanking scene and chose not to include us in her story. It's like the rest of us are watching the action over the back fence.

If only the writer chose to show us, instead of tell us what is happening, I would have truly enjoyed reading this story, but I didn't.

I hope this bit of spotlight of attention will garner you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

 

[sweepthefloor]

Here's a new story that posted today by a new, yet, already prolific writer in the Non-Erotic category. He/she already has 17 poems and 3 stories that posted within the last couple days.

Welcome to Literotica sweepthefloor. I think I know your sister, washmycar. They must be native American Indians, no doubt, sorry Cloudy, no offense intended.

Cloudy is a little sensitive about Indian jokes.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=481127

Well, maybe it's just me, but I'm wondering if this writer is less than 18-years-old. Hold on, there. Wait. I can see all the dirty old men running to read this story.

There's no sex in the story, so stop the stampede.

The story, of course, is Non-Erotic. It reads like a journal entry. There are six paragraphs of narative thick with black writing. I can see a story emerging from out of each paragraph.

The writer, no doubt, has a talent for description and I can feel the sensitive nature of this writer. It's a short story and I recommend those looking for something to read to read this.

I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.

I appreciate your words, thank you so much for this wonderful encouragement! I have to go find my sister "washmycar" now.

*i most certainly am, over 18 years, and I am just beginning to learn to write of a more erotic nature

 

[Samuelx]

I'm getting positive reviews now ? I'm speechless ! Thank you so much. I mean that. I had just about given up that even a single one of my MANY stories would ever be liked by anyone on Lit.

 

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I'm getting positive reviews now ? I'm speechless ! Thank you so much. I mean that. I had just about given up that even a single one of my MANY stories would ever be liked by anyone on Lit.

Hey, man, you deserve every praise you get an more. You're a truly dedicated writer.

Why you don't sign up for the Survivor Contest and make a bit of extra cash is beyond me. You definitely write enough stories to win the contest.

Still, I can't go a day without getting my dose of a SamuelX story. You keep writing and I'll keep reading.

Peace.

 

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The Machine by kingdodo

Here's a new story by a new writer that posted today in the fetish category.

Welcome to Literotica kingdodo.

The link to the story is below.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=480460

Interesting little story about Becky and 'The Machine', literally a cum machine.

There were a few grammatical errors but not enough to knock you out of the story. Although the writer did give a description of the character and tried developing her character, somewhat, I was still unable to see Becky. 'Twas a shame that I couldn't imagine her.

Well, let me say this, the story is a different one and for those who enjoy reading the fetish category, this is one story you may enjoy, as there are some of you into machination and machines. If you are, then this is the story for you.

Only, I was left with a question. What does Becky do with this rather large machine, when he parents return from their world cruise. Perhaps, she'll loan it out ot Sarah.

Well, I hope this spotlight of attention garners you more reads, votes, and comments. Good luck with your story.