My Erotic Trail
Literotica Guru
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wildsweetone said:Hi Huntsman and welcome
i picked up a haiku anthology from the library this very morning and have just read three different versions of your Basho quote.
of the ones i've read so far i like:
Upon the temple bell
A butterfly is sleeping well.
i think the simplicity zones the mind in to the two specific images perfectly. compare it to:
The butterfly sleeps well
Perched upon the temple bell....
..Until it rings! (Dr Curtis Page's translation of Buson's butterfly haiku.
i'm not sure who originally wrote the haiku or if there were several poets who wrote about butterflies on temple bells, but it certainly makes for interesting variations - in my opinion.
and i like your haiku! i hope you post more.
I like that, (~_~)
I was toying with this today (true story)
Trash can shakes
opossum trapped within
running in circles