bitslinger
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Duplicate post deleted. One of these days I'll learn not to use the browser back button.
I'll read yours...
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Pornofan420
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*BUMP*
Hey, all. A little thread bump. I've got a new story just approved and I'd love to hear some feedback on it. It's titled "The Best Head of my Life" (link below in my sig). My wife was both subject of and editor of the story. She's also a bit interested in what people have to say.
Thanx in advance & be well.
PF420
Hey, all. A little thread bump. I've got a new story just approved and I'd love to hear some feedback on it. It's titled "The Best Head of my Life" (link below in my sig). My wife was both subject of and editor of the story. She's also a bit interested in what people have to say.
Thanx in advance & be well.
PF420
destinie21
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Re: *BUMP*
I was just looking around and I decided whjat the hell I'll do a little reading and send some feedback. I really enjoyed your story it is well written and thought out. (Not something I've necessairly come to expect.) The only thing that threw me of a bit was the woman not having a name. Now I understand that the story is about your wife or what have you, but you could have used a fake name. Half the stories are write are about my wife and at times I use her name (or some such manifestation ) Otherwise the story was great. :}
If anyone is at all interested please check out The Bitch 5
click on my sig link.
Pornofan420 said:
I was just looking around and I decided whjat the hell I'll do a little reading and send some feedback. I really enjoyed your story it is well written and thought out. (Not something I've necessairly come to expect.) The only thing that threw me of a bit was the woman not having a name. Now I understand that the story is about your wife or what have you, but you could have used a fake name. Half the stories are write are about my wife and at times I use her name (or some such manifestation ) Otherwise the story was great. :}
If anyone is at all interested please check out The Bitch 5
click on my sig link.
champagne1982
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Destinie
Dear Des,
I just read your story Bitch 05. i am not a lesbian nor bisexual. (yet) but your story did stir some very sensual feelings within. It is well written. A few typos but we are all human. You mention love and submission but it seems the student was submitting more when she said she would do anything for Madison. The story was very compelling and I will check to see if you write a part 6 for sure. Thanks for this thread I think it is a wonderful idea. I also placed a vote for the wicked bitch
always
niyah2
Him
Him2
My Stories and Poetry
Dear Des,
I just read your story Bitch 05. i am not a lesbian nor bisexual. (yet) but your story did stir some very sensual feelings within. It is well written. A few typos but we are all human. You mention love and submission but it seems the student was submitting more when she said she would do anything for Madison. The story was very compelling and I will check to see if you write a part 6 for sure. Thanks for this thread I think it is a wonderful idea. I also placed a vote for the wicked bitch
always
niyah2
Him
Him2
My Stories and Poetry
bitslinger
Dear Bit,
In the Spirit of Things was great to read. Kept the reader's attention for sure and had some surprising twists and turns. It was very erotic and hot. Here I thought destinie's had gotten me all bothered then yours. Between you both I just don't know I might be bi yet. smiles. A few typos. But structure is good, paragraphs are simple not to long or to short. BUT i do hope you continue this story. I think Sam and Anne have another few plays. Peg on the other hand probably has a few other men to do. smiles. Great reading. thanks for writing.
niyah 2
My stories
Dear Bit,
In the Spirit of Things was great to read. Kept the reader's attention for sure and had some surprising twists and turns. It was very erotic and hot. Here I thought destinie's had gotten me all bothered then yours. Between you both I just don't know I might be bi yet. smiles. A few typos. But structure is good, paragraphs are simple not to long or to short. BUT i do hope you continue this story. I think Sam and Anne have another few plays. Peg on the other hand probably has a few other men to do. smiles. Great reading. thanks for writing.
niyah 2
My stories
Where did We all go???
Dear All,
This is a great thread that helps everyone that participates to get feedback on their story. But no one is saying anything. So I think I will go back through some of the recent posts and read other stories by that author and comment. Hope Others will start reading and commenting to. I think it really helps the author feel welcomed here and it helps them get a honest (most times) grip on their writing. Thanks destinie for keeping this link on your posts I am adding it to mine as well.
niyah 2
My Stories and Poems
I'll read yours.....
Dear All,
This is a great thread that helps everyone that participates to get feedback on their story. But no one is saying anything. So I think I will go back through some of the recent posts and read other stories by that author and comment. Hope Others will start reading and commenting to. I think it really helps the author feel welcomed here and it helps them get a honest (most times) grip on their writing. Thanks destinie for keeping this link on your posts I am adding it to mine as well.
niyah 2
My Stories and Poems
I'll read yours.....
CharleyH
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Niyah,
Read 'Your Bath' since it is the newest that you've posted. There is a careful gentility in the actions of the characters, and I like that very much. There are also certain techniques used that I enjoyed, and I believe you could use them more powerfully in this particular story. I did notice a number of grammatical errors.
I'd be happy to give you a more detailed critique if you choose. Just PM me.
Read 'Your Bath' since it is the newest that you've posted. There is a careful gentility in the actions of the characters, and I like that very much. There are also certain techniques used that I enjoyed, and I believe you could use them more powerfully in this particular story. I did notice a number of grammatical errors.
I'd be happy to give you a more detailed critique if you choose. Just PM me.
SouthSkyEyes
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Inviting / wanting objective feedback.
Charlie, Niyah and other recent posters in this thread ...
Count me in.
Been tracking this thread, waiting for my first stories to appear before jumping in.
Charlie - will read your story this evening and offer my feedback/critique.
Niyah - haven't read your most recent story - looking forward to it.
I'm welcoming your feedback / critique of my first two stories to appear here:
Of two friends and 30 fingers
Category: Group Sex - Massage given by couple given to intentionally gender ambiguous friend turns sexual.
Shopping for that special gift
Category: Toys - Humerous story of my visit to an adult novelty store to buy my wife a ... you've probably guessed it - but I would not have imagined how that evening turned out, when Sir O'gate joined in.
What do you like / dislike? What would make it a more enjoyable / tantalizing read?
Please be frank (my wife can't be very objective, but she knows how to graciously tend to my sometimes undeserving ego).
Thanks,
SouthSkyEyes
Charlie, Niyah and other recent posters in this thread ...
Count me in.
Been tracking this thread, waiting for my first stories to appear before jumping in.
Charlie - will read your story this evening and offer my feedback/critique.
Niyah - haven't read your most recent story - looking forward to it.
I'm welcoming your feedback / critique of my first two stories to appear here:
Of two friends and 30 fingers
Category: Group Sex - Massage given by couple given to intentionally gender ambiguous friend turns sexual.
Shopping for that special gift
Category: Toys - Humerous story of my visit to an adult novelty store to buy my wife a ... you've probably guessed it - but I would not have imagined how that evening turned out, when Sir O'gate joined in.
What do you like / dislike? What would make it a more enjoyable / tantalizing read?
Please be frank (my wife can't be very objective, but she knows how to graciously tend to my sometimes undeserving ego).
Thanks,
SouthSkyEyes
CharleyH
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Re: Inviting / wanting objective feedback.
SSE,
FINALLY! Someone responds to this thread. I have two stories up, and while in my little vain authorial eyes, The Screening, is impeccable, other than fixes I've made, and quite frankly already sent off for publish . . . Expressway causes me pain. Please read that one. I respect serious critique. First person is a tricky write without the other pov, and I know, I know what I need to do, but your opinion on top is a welcome one.
As for Niyah, well - I am still waiting for whether she wants the graze or the dirt? LOL. "I am always gentle, fear not!"
T
SouthSkyEyes said:
SSE,
FINALLY! Someone responds to this thread. I have two stories up, and while in my little vain authorial eyes, The Screening, is impeccable, other than fixes I've made, and quite frankly already sent off for publish . . . Expressway causes me pain. Please read that one. I respect serious critique. First person is a tricky write without the other pov, and I know, I know what I need to do, but your opinion on top is a welcome one.
As for Niyah, well - I am still waiting for whether she wants the graze or the dirt? LOL. "I am always gentle, fear not!"
T
The_Darkness
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All I want for Christmas
Just read this story, and while it (being bluntly honest here) wasn't arousing for me, I do have to say that you have a fairly well written piece here.
There's only a few grammatical errors in there, and while I have a difficult time in finding them in my own work (I know what I mean, damnit...) they jump up at me in other people's stories...the bi-product of more than a few Creative Writing assignments in college and high school.
There are some details that I would have included that would have made the story flow a little better, such as referencing to the mirror a little better that the hair brush apparently sailed through...
Other than a very small glitch with the double dialog line at the begining of the second page, there wasn't anything hugely wrong with the story on a technical level...just little things here and there that most people (presumably) over look or just don't notice.
As I said before, it's not the bed-slamming hardcore stuff that I usually like, but it was nice. I almost felt geniune attachment to the characters, and that's hard to do in a 10 to 14 page story without it being sappy.
Just read this story, and while it (being bluntly honest here) wasn't arousing for me, I do have to say that you have a fairly well written piece here.
There's only a few grammatical errors in there, and while I have a difficult time in finding them in my own work (I know what I mean, damnit...) they jump up at me in other people's stories...the bi-product of more than a few Creative Writing assignments in college and high school.
There are some details that I would have included that would have made the story flow a little better, such as referencing to the mirror a little better that the hair brush apparently sailed through...
Other than a very small glitch with the double dialog line at the begining of the second page, there wasn't anything hugely wrong with the story on a technical level...just little things here and there that most people (presumably) over look or just don't notice.
As I said before, it's not the bed-slamming hardcore stuff that I usually like, but it was nice. I almost felt geniune attachment to the characters, and that's hard to do in a 10 to 14 page story without it being sappy.
S
Sirens Bane
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CharleyH, I just finished Expressway. Now, I'm not a great judge of content, as I rarely read from that category, but I found it quite enjoyable, and the plight of the narrator is one that most people can sympathize with.
There were a few grammatical mistakes, but that happens to everyone (myself especially, it sometimes seems), and they didn't really detract from the story. Also (as I'm not really a master at grammar), some of what I perceive to be grammar mistakes could be correct, but may sound a little awkward to me.
You did first person pretty well. You didn't seem to stray into the no-no realm of first person, where you start writing other characters as if they were third person, getting into their head and explaining things that the narrator shouldn't know.
I also really liked the attention to detail you showed in some passages, especially the ones in which you were describing Kelly. You went very in depth there, sticking to descriptive words and phrases rather than the bland "She had blonde hair and was a c-cup" type thing.
An overall enjoyable story on all fronts (in my own opinion, at least).
There were a few grammatical mistakes, but that happens to everyone (myself especially, it sometimes seems), and they didn't really detract from the story. Also (as I'm not really a master at grammar), some of what I perceive to be grammar mistakes could be correct, but may sound a little awkward to me.
You did first person pretty well. You didn't seem to stray into the no-no realm of first person, where you start writing other characters as if they were third person, getting into their head and explaining things that the narrator shouldn't know.
I also really liked the attention to detail you showed in some passages, especially the ones in which you were describing Kelly. You went very in depth there, sticking to descriptive words and phrases rather than the bland "She had blonde hair and was a c-cup" type thing.
An overall enjoyable story on all fronts (in my own opinion, at least).
S
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Well, I have a new story posted. After my last one (which was not met with praise, to put it lightly), I decided to go a little more light-hearted and a lot less violent, and to drop the first person for the first time. So, here's my offering up to the criticism of all of you, a Loving Wives story I'm calling Duplicity. I hope whoever reads it enjoys it, and let me know what you all think about it. It's a little whimsical in parts (especially the beginning), so I guess I'll apologize up front for the parts that are disjointed because of that.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=126853
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=126853
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Sirens Bane
Your story plot was ok. I found it a little dry to read. It was interesting but I guess the it was not very erotic to me. I think whatever critisism you received on a story made you hold back to much. You have to not allow that here. I read the Trials story which was submitted before this one. I saw one bad review i am sure you got many via pm. I thought the story was very well written. Very realistic in that if you think about it it probably has happened. Did it turn me on? No. It was a little to hard core for that. But the piece was still very well written. A few grammar, spelling and etc problems. One spot it says her cock instead of His. But these are normal and expected. I would suggest you go through the volunteer editor's list. Read their bios and find one for you. It is very useful and helpful. I have started using an editor again as well. It does help alot.
niyah2
Your story plot was ok. I found it a little dry to read. It was interesting but I guess the it was not very erotic to me. I think whatever critisism you received on a story made you hold back to much. You have to not allow that here. I read the Trials story which was submitted before this one. I saw one bad review i am sure you got many via pm. I thought the story was very well written. Very realistic in that if you think about it it probably has happened. Did it turn me on? No. It was a little to hard core for that. But the piece was still very well written. A few grammar, spelling and etc problems. One spot it says her cock instead of His. But these are normal and expected. I would suggest you go through the volunteer editor's list. Read their bios and find one for you. It is very useful and helpful. I have started using an editor again as well. It does help alot.
niyah2
destinie21
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I haven't been neglecting this thread I just haven't had any stories that were low on feedback.
Today my story
Ranie and Sheri got posted so I figured I'd ask for a bit of FB as well as bump this thread. I realize the story contains some grammatical errors and the like and I have already gotten some help from an editor and will be posting the edited version shortly. What I need FB on is the storyline, plot and character development.
Thanks in advance and if you have a story you want reviewed don't be afraid to post here.
(BTW the story is lesbian incest so if either of those topics offend I'd advise you not to click the provided link.)
Regards D21
Today my story
Ranie and Sheri got posted so I figured I'd ask for a bit of FB as well as bump this thread. I realize the story contains some grammatical errors and the like and I have already gotten some help from an editor and will be posting the edited version shortly. What I need FB on is the storyline, plot and character development.
Thanks in advance and if you have a story you want reviewed don't be afraid to post here.
(BTW the story is lesbian incest so if either of those topics offend I'd advise you not to click the provided link.)
Regards D21
Kirk482002
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Great story!
destinie21,
I read your story and found it to be excellent. Yes, there are grammatical mistakes and missing punctuation, but I ignored that. I could feel that the tension had become so thick and intense, that it cut be cut with a knife. I felt that the characters were developed well. Certainly the bit of Sheri having to live up to Raine’s ‘perfectness’ is a running theme in many families. You captured the emotional change of hate or dislike into lust or love and passion quite well. It’s a strange but true concept. The love scene at the end was very erotic and well done. I can’t wait to read the next chapter.
Having said that, I would love for an author to review an older story that I posted before there was public comment. It was one of the first stories I wrote, but to this day, I believe it to be the best-developed story I’ve written. I kind of hold it up as a litmus test for my later stories. Please read and hopefully enjoy.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=112830
These are the rest of my stories.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=261623
Kirk482002
KIRK19055@aol.com
destinie21,
I read your story and found it to be excellent. Yes, there are grammatical mistakes and missing punctuation, but I ignored that. I could feel that the tension had become so thick and intense, that it cut be cut with a knife. I felt that the characters were developed well. Certainly the bit of Sheri having to live up to Raine’s ‘perfectness’ is a running theme in many families. You captured the emotional change of hate or dislike into lust or love and passion quite well. It’s a strange but true concept. The love scene at the end was very erotic and well done. I can’t wait to read the next chapter.
Having said that, I would love for an author to review an older story that I posted before there was public comment. It was one of the first stories I wrote, but to this day, I believe it to be the best-developed story I’ve written. I kind of hold it up as a litmus test for my later stories. Please read and hopefully enjoy.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=112830
These are the rest of my stories.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=261623
Kirk482002
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Re: Great story!
Kirk...I read "Angelina" and I must tell you it was one of the best stories I have read on Lit. A few spelling errors but I didn't care! It was well written and the characters were well defined. I will be reading all of your stories as soon as possible. All in all it was a wonderful and you are now on my "author list." I will read your older story but I don't consider myself good enough to offer constructive criticism. Nice to meet you...
Cookie
Kirk482002 said:
Kirk...I read "Angelina" and I must tell you it was one of the best stories I have read on Lit. A few spelling errors but I didn't care! It was well written and the characters were well defined. I will be reading all of your stories as soon as possible. All in all it was a wonderful and you are now on my "author list." I will read your older story but I don't consider myself good enough to offer constructive criticism. Nice to meet you...
Cookie
Kirk482002
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Summer Swim!
Cookiejar,
I want to tell you that your story, Summer Swim, was one of the best situational stories I’ve read on Lit. To me, the description of the event gave me the ability to see the two on the beach as if I was there watching. Over the next week, I’ll be checking the others.
Kirk482002
Someone, give this a read. One of my first stories.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=112830
KIRK19055@aol.com
Cookiejar,
I want to tell you that your story, Summer Swim, was one of the best situational stories I’ve read on Lit. To me, the description of the event gave me the ability to see the two on the beach as if I was there watching. Over the next week, I’ll be checking the others.
Kirk482002
Someone, give this a read. One of my first stories.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=112830
KIRK19055@aol.com
Ravishing
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Kirk482002 & "Aunt May"
As per this thread line and the hint to read it in the feedback you sent to me. I did. I found Aunt May, to be a wonderfully touching read. *grins* I wouldn't call myself as remotely qualified to critic it, but I'll easily give my willing opinion on it. I would it well worth the read.
~ Ravishing ~
As per this thread line and the hint to read it in the feedback you sent to me. I did. I found Aunt May, to be a wonderfully touching read. *grins* I wouldn't call myself as remotely qualified to critic it, but I'll easily give my willing opinion on it. I would it well worth the read.
~ Ravishing ~
jthserra
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Ravishing's A Mist of Whispers Ch. 01
Ravishing:
I found "A Mist of Whispers Ch. 01" an interesting beginning
to the story... I will have to read on. I liked the style, and aside from a couple of typos found the execution flawless. I like the development of characters, but look forward to seeing more.
Overall,
Excellent story.
jim
Most of my stories could use a read, but this would be a good start, in non-erotic:Tenderness Echoes
Ravishing:
I found "A Mist of Whispers Ch. 01" an interesting beginning
to the story... I will have to read on. I liked the style, and aside from a couple of typos found the execution flawless. I like the development of characters, but look forward to seeing more.
Overall,
Excellent story.
jim
Most of my stories could use a read, but this would be a good start, in non-erotic:Tenderness Echoes
Ravishing
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Re: Ravishing's A Mist of Whispers Ch. 01
Thankyou for the feedback. It's appreciated.
~ Melting Ravishing. ~
Jim,jthserra said:Ravishing:
I found "A Mist of Whispers Ch. 01" an interesting beginning
to the story... I will have to read on. I liked the style, and aside from a couple of typos found the execution flawless. I like the development of characters, but look forward to seeing more.
Overall,
Excellent story.
jim
Thankyou for the feedback. It's appreciated.
~ Melting Ravishing. ~
Ravishing
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jthserra's Tenderness Echoes
Jim,
"Tenderness Echoes" was just so deep, meaningful. You expressed the emotion so clearly, the pain, it's just wow. But I do agree with the other comment I could see. It could have been a wonderful beginnning chapter to something so much more.
~ Melting Ravishing ~
Jim,
"Tenderness Echoes" was just so deep, meaningful. You expressed the emotion so clearly, the pain, it's just wow. But I do agree with the other comment I could see. It could have been a wonderful beginnning chapter to something so much more.
~ Melting Ravishing ~
Wicked-N-Erotic
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Kirk,
I just read "Violet". It was a great read. There were a few missing words but they were hardly noticable because the story itself was so captivating. I don't do a lot of reading on lit anymore but, from what I have read here this was different from any other. Very well done, I will read some of your other work soon.
Wicked
I just read "Violet". It was a great read. There were a few missing words but they were hardly noticable because the story itself was so captivating. I don't do a lot of reading on lit anymore but, from what I have read here this was different from any other. Very well done, I will read some of your other work soon.
Wicked
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Tenderness Echos~
First of all this was a great Idea for a thread.
I can't seem to get the feed back (good or bad)
on my stories...and I love to read others too...
So this thread should provide both for many!
.........................Destinie21............................
I read Tenderness echos because it was singled
out as a read. If I was suppose to have read...
.......Wicked-N-Erotic's or Ravishing.............
I wasn't sure which they wanted READ!!
I would be more than happy to read any of them.
.....................................................................
....................Tenderness Echo's.......
First of all I love a story to reach out and grab
my attention right off. Some stories may be
great but if I can't get an intrest right off...
then I won't finish the tale...This story did
grab my attenion and held it all the way till the end.
But...It was short. Seemed like it skipped a lot
of details. Perhaps they weren't needed. But
as a reader I wanted more. (sorry)
A good story..I was left wanting more so yes
it was good. If there comes a part 2 I would
surely read it....Thanks Jim !!
one last thing seem to be some things missing?
Perhaps it was my own way of reading but
I cut this for an example... I think there were
three places I had to stop and re-read...to see
if I had read it right...here is one of them.....
...((("I never had occasion to." Ben said, )))
I loved the idea and the tale itself...(good read)
paranormal is an attention grabber with me..lol
..........................................................................
................I am looking for feed back on .........
....Crotching Tiger & Ridden Dragon
I have a part 2 pending and hopefully it will be out
soon that I think is even better... but I have a few
that are pending..so I hope to be back for feedback.
(If you want me to read any story...let me know)
.................Thank you.........Art.....................
First of all this was a great Idea for a thread.
I can't seem to get the feed back (good or bad)
on my stories...and I love to read others too...
So this thread should provide both for many!
.........................Destinie21............................
I read Tenderness echos because it was singled
out as a read. If I was suppose to have read...
.......Wicked-N-Erotic's or Ravishing.............
I wasn't sure which they wanted READ!!
I would be more than happy to read any of them.
.....................................................................
....................Tenderness Echo's.......
First of all I love a story to reach out and grab
my attention right off. Some stories may be
great but if I can't get an intrest right off...
then I won't finish the tale...This story did
grab my attenion and held it all the way till the end.
But...It was short. Seemed like it skipped a lot
of details. Perhaps they weren't needed. But
as a reader I wanted more. (sorry)
A good story..I was left wanting more so yes
it was good. If there comes a part 2 I would
surely read it....Thanks Jim !!
one last thing seem to be some things missing?
Perhaps it was my own way of reading but
I cut this for an example... I think there were
three places I had to stop and re-read...to see
if I had read it right...here is one of them.....
...((("I never had occasion to." Ben said, )))
I loved the idea and the tale itself...(good read)
paranormal is an attention grabber with me..lol
..........................................................................
................I am looking for feed back on .........
....Crotching Tiger & Ridden Dragon
I have a part 2 pending and hopefully it will be out
soon that I think is even better... but I have a few
that are pending..so I hope to be back for feedback.
(If you want me to read any story...let me know)
.................Thank you.........Art.....................
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Kirk482002
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Thanks
Wicked-N-Erotic,
Thank you for your kind words on "Violet'. I did try to make that story a bit different. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I noticed that most of your stories posted all around the same time. I wanted to
read your latest story, but I found that I just needed to take a pick.
I chose Moonlight Romance.
I found it to be well written and you told the story of Alex and Michael's moonlight romp quite well. I found it very erotic. Your style of writing eludes me, as I write more dialoge driven stories. If I could marry the two together, I would quit my day job.
I say, good job and post something new!
Thanks again, Wicked-N-Erotic
Kirk
MY Stories:
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Wicked-N-Erotic,
Thank you for your kind words on "Violet'. I did try to make that story a bit different. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I noticed that most of your stories posted all around the same time. I wanted to
read your latest story, but I found that I just needed to take a pick.
I chose Moonlight Romance.
I found it to be well written and you told the story of Alex and Michael's moonlight romp quite well. I found it very erotic. Your style of writing eludes me, as I write more dialoge driven stories. If I could marry the two together, I would quit my day job.
I say, good job and post something new!
Thanks again, Wicked-N-Erotic
Kirk
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