I'll read yours...

[The_Darkness]

Hey, I'm having problems figuring out which story to finish. Here's the options:

The final chapter of Moving Day

The next chapter of The New Mysteries

A new story about making a Succubus

One of Two (or both) new Everyday Screw editions

A new multi-chaptered pirate story

A modern-age (and twisted) sci-fi story

OR

a mind control story (magic/telepathy) set in a mid-western University.

HELP! Too many projects....and I'm too damn indecisive right now. What would you, the readers, like to read from me?

 

[The_Darkness]

HELP!!!

Hey, I'm having problems figuring out which story to finish. Here's the options:

The final chapter of Moving Day

The next chapter of The New Mysteries

A new story about making a Succubus

One of Two (or both) new Everyday Screw editions

A new multi-chaptered pirate story

A modern-age (and twisted) sci-fi story

OR

a mind control story (magic/telepathy) set in a mid-western University.

HELP! Too many projects....and I'm too damn indecisive right now. What would you, the readers, like to read from me?

 

[niyah2]

which story

Ohhhhhhhhhhh greetings Darkness Sir..........please finish the last chapter of moving day. That way one story is completely done!!! And a few of the others sound delicious!

niyah

 

[The_Darkness]

Moving Day 3 it is.

This chapter's going to be longer, but it'll be worth the read. Promise.

 

[cloudy]

The second chapter to Atlantis Revisited is up, if anyone's interested.....(link in my sig)

 

[BlackShanglan]

Slouching toward completion ...

I have a monstrous beast of a text (roughly 60K words) and am struggling with the ending. I realize how immensely unappealing this sounds, but I will not attempt to sugar-coat it, confining myself merely to pleading that it is coherent and relatively clean in terms of grammar - not an inchoate barf on the .doc file.

I realize that my only real hope for editorial help is this offer: I seek another writer in similar circumstances. If you've got something long enough to scare off most of the proles, I'm the horse to take it. Contact me and we can trade up. I am not looking for spelling or grammar checking, but for an objective view of whether the problem is the proposed ending itself or some earlier point at which I've written the ending into a corner through injudicious plot choices.

The story is an historical piece set in London in the late 1880's. It is a romance. I loathe frilly wedding endings. So does the male lead. This is becoming a problem. Are you, perhaps, the clever boots to solve it?

Shanglan

 

[The_Darkness]

The story is an historical piece set in London in the late 1880's. It is a romance. I loathe frilly wedding endings. So does the male lead. This is becoming a problem. Are you, perhaps, the clever boots to solve it?

I dunno about clever boots, but I'm 1/3 Irish...that pretty much guarantees that I think I can do anything. Coupling that with my 1/3 German, I'm stubborn enough to stick with anything I start, and my 1/3 Scottish makes me prone to accept challenges.

Send it to my e-mail; theirish79@yahoo.com and I'll take a look at it for you.

By the way, Literotica denizens, I have two more stories submitted with two more that will probably be submitted tonight. I may or may not complete another 2 sooner or later, if I can talk Ravishing and Destinie into editing for me (bats his manly eyelashes)...

Cloudy, I haven't read your stories yet, but I will tonight and let you know what I think.

 

[cloudy]

Cloudy, I haven't read your stories yet, but I will tonight and let you know what I think.

Thanks!

 

[The_Darkness]

Cloudy, hot damn girl!

Cloudy, I just finished reading both Atlantis stories....and I gotta say they're remarkable.

First off, I didn't see any editing mistakes. That's very cool....too many stories (including mine) on lit have them and they make my brain pause for a second and it ruins the mood for that brief instant.

Secondly, I love the dream-real life duality thing. The dream device is one of my favorite ones to incorporate...hell, my Everyday Screw stories are daydreams. You pull it off marvelously.

The sex (as some of the comments pointed out) is really good. Though, I did notice that the dream sex is markedly better than the sex she has with her real-life Alex. I don't know if that was intentional or not, but I know I like it.

Both stories got a 5 from me. I got what I wanted from each chapter and I want to keep reading more! Well done!

 

[The_Darkness]

Cloudy, hot damn girl!

Cloudy, I just finished reading both Atlantis stories....and I gotta say they're remarkable.

First off, I didn't see any editing mistakes. That's very cool....too many stories (including mine) on lit have them and they make my brain pause for a second and it ruins the mood for that brief instant.

Secondly, I love the dream-real life duality thing. The dream device is one of my favorite ones to incorporate...hell, my Everyday Screw stories are daydreams. You pull it off marvelously.

The sex (as some of the comments pointed out) is really good. Though, I did notice that the dream sex is markedly better than the sex she has with her real-life Alex. I don't know if that was intentional or not, but I know I like it.

Both stories got a 5 from me. I got what I wanted from each chapter and I want to keep reading more! Well done!

 

[cloudy]

Thank you! I really appreciate you reading (and voting)! The second chapter was a new category for me, so I've been kind of anxious about how it would be received, but so far, all comments have been favorable. I'm working on the third chapter now, but you know how it is - I have no idea when it'll be finished.

Thanks again!

 

[BlackShanglan]

I dunno about clever boots, but I'm 1/3 Irish...that pretty much guarantees that I think I can do anything. Coupling that with my 1/3 German, I'm stubborn enough to stick with anything I start, and my 1/3 Scottish makes me prone to accept challenges.

Send it to my e-mail; theirish79@yahoo.com and I'll take a look at it for you.

Darkness, I shall take you up on your kind offer, and I hope that I don't make you regret it. Many thanks for braving the challenge. The rough beast is slouching toward your yahoo account as an .rtf attachment. Let me know if you would like it some other way, but I think it's best as a file (rather than an email paste) because of the size and the use of italics in the text.

I stayed up far too late last night drafting the ending on sudden inspiration. It might be a wretched ending, but it is at least an ending. Slings and arrows are welcome.

Shanglan

(And dear me, I am an awful pushover for the batting of manly eyelashes. Do it again )

 

[destinie21]

Okay guys I have a new story out by the name of Angela. Please check it out. It's a lesbian love story and I want a little feedback on the storyline and such. Thanks in asdvance

 

[destinie21]

Bump and what not

 

[impressive]

Just read your "Dream A Little Dream" piece & sent feedback via e-mail. You have an enormous body of work! It was difficult to choose. Do you want to post your personal favorite in my "First Impressions" thread at:

https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=276369

(I'm collecting favorites.)

 

[she_is_my_addiction]

POEM

Would it be possible to get some um....feedback on this one?

Am I supposed to read one of Imp's now....?

 

[The_Darkness]

she is my addiction, well, just kinda read someone's stuff, be it poetry or whichever and post whether you liked it or hated it or what ever the deal is. I'd read yours just for ressurecting the thread, but poetry's really not my schtick and I don't think that my opinion would be all that helpful.

Welcome to the little group though!

 

[Guest]

 

[The_Darkness]

Vamp, just read your Heroin story and holy crap! it was excellent aside from like 3 editing errors. I play a lot of World of Darkness RPG's and I must say that you more than captured the feel of the genre!

Awesome job!

 

[bogey102]

I love your stuff! Here's mu only story so far.....

 

[The_Darkness]

Bogey102....read your story and you did a good job! I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the future!

I must say that this thread has attracted some awesome authors lately. Thanks to everyone for sharing with us and especially thanks to Destinie for starting the thread!

 

[The_Darkness]

Stupid Deadlines!

Here I was all geared up to finish my holiday story tonight and I see that the contest ended already.

Damnit, I can't wait to go back to work on Monday....being unemployed makes me lazy.

For all those interested, the story will be submitted right away in the morning, and it'll probably be up Saturday/Friday night.

 

[Guest]

 

[destinie21]

Raine and Sheri ch 05 is up and I'd love some feedback. I haven't been salcking off per say just fucking around here and there so ya know. Anyway I finally got off my ass and wrote something and I'd love some feedback send it to renzasbaby@yahoo.com cos my aol is all effed up. Btw to anyone who's read the Angela series I'd like you to know I have part two pending. So yay

 

[Winemaster]

THE BITCH

I just read the bitch and have to say it was a good one...left a comment...loved the way the bitch is enthusiastic and the teacher inside can't wait to have her...looking forward to reading more...and the board here is giving me good recom's