Icingsugar
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Friday Feb 20
Not much today, 14 poems and not a single one that curled my toes. Some made me nod in enthusiastic approval though, and that's not too shabby either.
First, a little spotlight on a not entirely new, but fairly unnoted contributor.
Passion by BigTri is a strange poem. On one hand it's a cliché humping poem, like some of his earlier efforts. But on the other hand, this is one that sticks out from the crowd and offers some very good imagery. While I cringed on "my thrusting stake of love" (!) other lines are instead very well balanced and much more erotic:
...
Entwined like wool
Tangled on a skein
Hearing like bats
Sounds in the night
...
Then we have RazzRajen with Uncharted, which is not at all uncharted territory. This is vontage Razz, with a good flow and imagery just out of reach, unless you read slow and think one extra second about it. Strong, vivid images of the Longing Game. I had a little problem witht he firts half of the poem, but I forgive that for the running water ease and brilliance of the second half.
Winter: A Cinquain by CrimsonMaiden is a cinquain about, well, winter. Well written at that, with cute x-mas-like decoration.
bridgetkeeney has been making out. And wrote a darn erotic poem about it. Let her french your reading nerve with Perfect.
jtghserra claims: I Sleep 10,000 Years. And still he have time to write poetry about it? This reply to HomerPindar's challenge is a delightful read at times, but Jimmy Boy can do much better than this.
That's all, folks. Have a splendid Firday night.
/Ice
Not much today, 14 poems and not a single one that curled my toes. Some made me nod in enthusiastic approval though, and that's not too shabby either.
First, a little spotlight on a not entirely new, but fairly unnoted contributor.
Passion by BigTri is a strange poem. On one hand it's a cliché humping poem, like some of his earlier efforts. But on the other hand, this is one that sticks out from the crowd and offers some very good imagery. While I cringed on "my thrusting stake of love" (!) other lines are instead very well balanced and much more erotic:
...
Entwined like wool
Tangled on a skein
Hearing like bats
Sounds in the night
...
Then we have RazzRajen with Uncharted, which is not at all uncharted territory. This is vontage Razz, with a good flow and imagery just out of reach, unless you read slow and think one extra second about it. Strong, vivid images of the Longing Game. I had a little problem witht he firts half of the poem, but I forgive that for the running water ease and brilliance of the second half.
Winter: A Cinquain by CrimsonMaiden is a cinquain about, well, winter. Well written at that, with cute x-mas-like decoration.
bridgetkeeney has been making out. And wrote a darn erotic poem about it. Let her french your reading nerve with Perfect.
jtghserra claims: I Sleep 10,000 Years. And still he have time to write poetry about it? This reply to HomerPindar's challenge is a delightful read at times, but Jimmy Boy can do much better than this.
That's all, folks. Have a splendid Firday night.
/Ice
It's got a nice rolling jazz phrasing and a tongue-in-cheek lyrical style I enjoy. Some of the poem is extremely awkward ("a tender Tom Hank-ish geek"...this is wrong for many, many reasons, not just grammatical ones 
) but on the whole it's cute and breezy and left me tapping my toes and wishing it were a song I could crank up.
Sibilaire's work has that new poetry smell, being here less than a week already.
