new poems

[Liar]

You missed one, sweetie. Ange's

And mine Plus 1 or 2 more, I think. I counted 11 weave-bobs earlier today. And that didn't include sibilaire's.

 

[BooMerengue]

Thanks for reviewing neo and mentioning my interlocked Weave bob. I tried to include the many feminine dieties that have a weaving myth surrounding them. Mostly, I drew on some buried knowledge of the story of Minerva and Arachne. Minerva created her tapestry and set it in the sky to remind mortals of the great deeds of the gods. Arachne shrivelled up in envy and became the spider, weaving endless tapestries of earthly beauty. I know that the weaving myths are as many and varied as there are stars in the sky. Just look to the weave bob challenge to sample some of the varied ideas locked into a strict form and theme.

Tathagata's Bob The Weaver

jthserra's Weave

BooMerengue's Weave

tarablackwood22's Weave

Tristess's Weave (Bob format)

champagne1982's Weave (an interlocked bob)

Syndra Lyn's WEAVE!

sibilaire's weave, feed, tease

All my apologies to those I missed!! I wondered why Ange wasn't there.. She's into everything!

I just wrote this... Comment on my Weave

better than putting it here again.

Sooo sorry to those I missed! Now you know why I don't do reviews!

 

[Maria2394]

Re: Sunday, May 23rd Reviews

My poetry-type friends, you've certainly been busy with the 40 fabulous new poems that greeted me this Sunday, May 23. I do believe I am jealous because I'm having difficulty in writing any sort of line let a lone a whole poem.

<~ See, this is me, a froggy emoticon demostrating my poet's envy.
~ ~ ~

Firstly, Maria2394 gives us a perspective of "wild" animals behind steel bars. Stark and real; Maria gives us all something to really think about in A Circle, Interrupted

Squatting for hours, deep in thought
she attempts to ignore the summer sky
is she aware of her spirit slowly dying?

~ ~ ~


~ ~ ~

[- neo
off to find
inspiration before it
finds me...

thanks neo for the mention, you know I sent that one to a really good friend for a preview <wink> and he knows how much trouble I had deciding whether or not to post it, so thank you dear FRIEND!! totally adore you, ya know

and I also want to thank each and every one of you who read it and commented and voted. I expected a flurry of hate mail, but i didnt get it, not even one..so I guess some one besides me sees something wrong with a for profit zoo

thanks again
( a relief from froggy poems I guess

oh yeah. wassup with minsue and neo eyeing us? I want an eye, a green one!! oohh, wait, didnt Lauren have a totally sexy blue one a long while back..I better go before I get myself in trouble..good to see you back echoes

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Re: Lauren's Newest Poem

I'm just now reading through the new poems and found this absolutely gorgeous poem:
Bathyl II
by Lauren Hynde ©

I hope you all take time to read it and comment.

Thank you so much for the recommendation and the PC you left, Eve. I wrote it as a companion piece to a friend's story, offering my take on its meaning and resonating its final words. You should take a look at it as well.

 

[ABSTRUSE]

Re: Re: Lauren's Newest Poem

Thank you so much for the recommendation and the PC you left, Eve. I wrote it as a companion piece to a friend's story, offering my take on its meaning and resonating its final words. You should take a look at it as well.

Plugged it in AH too!


Hi Lauren.

 

[jthserra]

Well, once again it is Monday...

I am a bit slow today, recovering from a Band Banquet Saturday night, who knew kids were such work... lol.


Tonight I started at the top of the list and a bright well deserved E on Wickedeve's When the Builder Leaves . Eve uses wonderfully simple language to say so much.

In a message to the lurkers, neonurotic urges them to Talk to me instead. Take a peek:

"You lurk through forums
under many names
voices and eyes".

With the exception of a couple of early birds (I still think Champagne and I got it right), today was the day of Weave's. In some excellent Bobs, poets weaved their words wonderfully...

BooMerangue tooks us to a starlight dance in childhood dreams with her Weave .

Then, in another wonderful step into jazz Angeline played a bit of a beebop Weave :

"rouged red, poured leggy into heels
tapping on 52nd Street’s foggy stage. Brush
high hat gold. Don’t drop no bombs tonight.
I’ll dream notes lashes down and cruise"


Tristesse brought us Weave (Bob format) in a pulsing dimeter.


Into the trees and into the storm, Tarablackwood22 took us into the heart of a twister with her Weave:

"Through dying shafts of twisted light
I watched you climb the cellar stairs
refusing shelter from the storm
that bent the corn and raised our hairs.

Refusing shelter from the storm
we walked and dripped across the farm
to climb and thread into the tree
and sat along its crooked arm."


Liar wove his Weave to the weaver. Read, comment and vote...


With an intense alliterative Weave Catbabe brings us one that's fun to read:

"Sapling searches skies for sunlight,
tender trunk tips to the wind,
linear length lined with leaves,
blossom burdened branches buzz."

Read that one three times quickly...


Tathagata brings us Bob the Weaver with a hint of Poe in a "dream within a dream."


In a poem with a Mythology of its own Syndra Lynn Weaves her tale inspired by Sue Monk Kidd (The Secret Life of Bees).

Zanzibar brings us a Weave in a kalidescope of words, a sparkling look into writing.


And now for something completely different... thegirlfriday11 wrote an interesting prose poem when I Came Across a Cigarette.

"I'm not sure which addiction made me light that cigarette; but I smoked it, one last fix I suppose.
It tasted so sweet I got teary eyed again;
but then I started coughing halfway through it,
being reminded of what smoking does to me.".


In an excellent example of why word choice and spelling is so very important in poetry My Erotic Tale mispels (sic) his way though critic this. His unique spelling and grammar here makes the poem work in a very humorous way.


Oysters by RazzRajen brings us a delicacy of words:

"Moors gently waving in
the winds,
the sloughing bough,
that verdant 'scape,
Birds are free butterflies too"

all that and oysters too... read, comment and vote.


Lauren Hynde brings us her incredible Bathyl II. Let her words speak for themselves:

"The truth is I haven't yet searched
the memory, or even the hidden figures in the sky
nor the segments, which divide on my map
the countries, gods, slaves, navigators.

Shapes lose meaning in a thunderstorm.

You listen to time."



UnseenChagrin brought a number of poems today, my favorite was How high can you fly.... Here uncomplicated rhyme and easy flow to the words made this an enjoyable read:

"I stand upon the edge and wonder
Though the sky is vast and mountains tall
And the world spins ‘round and ‘round asunder
If I wanted- I could fly away from it all."


And for my favorite poem of the day... in a poem laced in a razor edge of emotion, Lostandfounder brings us his Regret. It's a poem painful as a knife across cold skin, this is a poem you feel.


Those are the poems that grabbed me from today's New Poems. There are some other gems that I have missed, read them all and find some gems of your own. And that is Monday, May 24th...


So poets, let's be poetic out there...

jim : )

 

[Guest]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

In a message to the lurkers, neonurotic urges them to Talk to me instead. Take a peek:

"You lurk through forums
under many names
voices and eyes".

Thanks for the mention here in this thread and the read--also for pointing out that spelling error too.

Thanks to those who PC'd, I appreciate everyone's time as per usual. You're all fab for doing so


- neo

 

[UnseenChagrin]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

UnseenChagrin brought a number of poems today, my favorite was How high can you fly.... Here uncomplicated rhyme and easy flow to the words made this an enjoyable read:

"I stand upon the edge and wonder
Though the sky is vast and mountains tall
And the world spins ‘round and ‘round asunder
If I wanted- I could fly away from it all."

Wow, I'm honored to be mentioned by such an accomplished writer. I'm not sure what else to say to that, except thank you very much.

 

[My Erotic Tail]

Thanks jim~

You poets are to much, thanks jim...

I write a great poem and it don't get looked
at, I write this in a whim to help my friend
who needed to fullfill their addiction to critic
and I get on the new poems list, I'm shocked

but pleased, perhaps it depends on who is
doing the reviews?

Thanks jim,
your a gentlemen and a zen master of pen
bows humble~

(since I seen it three times today...
whats (sic) ???)

 

[JCSTREET]

(sic) means that the writer

is mis-using grammar, or mis-spelling but knows he/she is and is doing it for an explicit reason

don't worry it's an FAQ

 

[My Erotic Tail]

Thanks JC

Thanks JC~

Wow you got your AV finally..
so are you a pussy cat or a teddy bear its hard
to tell....lmao

figured you would use a dolphin...or a shark
diver or maybe in a tub...smiles....

thanks for the enlightenment..

 

[JCSTREET]

LOL-THANKS - it's a bear

my nic is carliebear in the wider world

 

[My Erotic Tail]

sic

well heck, I think every one knows by now

I'm a specialist at being sic...

(lmao)

I aint ben sic for a while
but i got da sick writin' down pax


Thanks again jim~
JC~

and the new poem list~

 

[lostandfounder]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

And for my favorite poem of the day... in a poem
laced in a razor edge of emotion, Lostandfounder brings us
his Regret.
It's a poem painful as a knife across cold skin, this is a poem you feel.

Thank you, everyone, for all the feedback. It's forcing me to become a
better writter.

 

[thegirlfriday11]

Thankyou Jim, Tathagata, Merrymaker, Wicked Eve, and Jthserra for all of the very nice comments

 

[Tathagata]

Thank you Jim for the mention.

I won't attempt that form again any time soon
lol

 

[Liar]

Re: Thanks jim~

You poets are to much, thanks jim...

I write a great poem and it don't get looked
at, I write this in a whim to help my friend
who needed to fullfill their addiction to critic
and I get on the new poems list, I'm shocked

Hehe. Happens all the time to me, and to other here as well, I've heard. Things I thought was just my crap on a screen gets the good votes and the rain feedback, and things I put effort into barely gets noticed.

 

[Angeline]

Re: Re: Thanks jim~

Hehe. Happens all the time to me, and to other here as well, I've heard. Things I thought was just my crap on a screen gets the good votes and the rain feedback, and things I put effort into barely gets noticed.

This happens to me, too. The poems I think are my best efforts get a so-so response, while the stuff I dash off gets raves. What does it all mean...

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: Re: Thanks jim~

This happens to me, too. The poems I think are my best efforts get a so-so response, while the stuff I dash off gets raves. What does it all mean...

I think it means we need a drink
no wait..
that's not it..
we need more ass from Eve..
nope...

I'll get back to you

 

[Angeline]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

I am a bit slow today, recovering from a Band Banquet Saturday night, who knew kids were such work... lol.

Then, in another wonderful step into jazz Angeline played a bit of a beebop Weave :

"rouged red, poured leggy into heels
tapping on 52nd Street’s foggy stage. Brush
high hat gold. Don’t drop no bombs tonight.
I’ll dream notes lashes down and cruise"

Thank you Jim and those who commented and sent feedback.

And Champ, I'll email later--my email is screwy just now--but jazz poetry is a major interest for me and the reason I write so many of them (I think I have 30 or 40 all told now). Book number three will be all jazz/blues poems (book one is with publisher, book two is being worked on--poems based on fairy tales and, with any luck, in a few more months the jazz series will be ready for editing).


Ange

 

[tarablackwood22]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

Into the trees and into the storm, Tarablackwood22 took us into the heart of a twister with her Weave:

"Through dying shafts of twisted light
I watched you climb the cellar stairs
refusing shelter from the storm
that bent the corn and raised our hairs.

Refusing shelter from the storm
we walked and dripped across the farm
to climb and thread into the tree
and sat along its crooked arm."

Thanks, Jim..............a great job on the reviews, as always.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

Lauren Hynde brings us her incredible Bathyl II. Let her words speak for themselves:

"The truth is I haven't yet searched
the memory, or even the hidden figures in the sky
nor the segments, which divide on my map
the countries, gods, slaves, navigators.

Shapes lose meaning in a thunderstorm.

You listen to time."

Thanks, Jim.

Also to everyone who commented and sent feedback.

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Thanks for Bob comments

Thanks Jim for doing a great job on Monday reviews and weaving through all the Bobs. We love and appreciate you

Thanks to all who read, commented, and sent fb.

I love you all. I thought Bob was fun. May do him again.

Syn

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Thanks for Bob comments

Thanks Jim for doing a great job on Monday reviews and weaving through all the Bobs. We love and appreciate you

Thanks to all who read, commented, and sent fb.

I love you all. I thought Bob was fun. May do him again.

Syn

I gotta change my name to Bob

 

[RazzRajen]

Re: Well, once again it is Monday...

I am a bit slow today, recovering from a Band Banquet Saturday night, who knew kids were such work... lol.


Oysters by RazzRajen brings us a delicacy of words:

"Moors gently waving in So poets, let's be poetic out there...

jim : )

Thanks jim once again for the time energy and views you bring to the reviews Gives a perspective to the plethora of work that is shown at lit. daily.

appreciated as always

Razz