Angeline
Poet Chick
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April 11--Danger Will Robinson
My computer is acting verrrry ill, so you are getting an abbreviated version of the new poems reviews for today. Yes there's more to come and it may come later tonight or tomorrow, depending on my laptop's state of health. Grrrr.
A Tale of Real Life by 03sp
I wanted to meet partially nude women
so hung around artists and glass doors
facing east, sometimes west or south
if cold
Well you know 03sp--he's just not like the other boys: he wants to meet *partially* nude woman. And where does it get him, hmmm? Slapped and bruised in a poodle puddle muddle. (Maybe you can stand in a black light next time and meet fully clothed, but glowing women. ) Thank you for this terrific and quirky little slice of prosetry, 03--I loved it!
a felt bump by 03sp
personality has texture
able to be felt
further down
kneaded deeper
than look or reach
may glean
There's an old saying about 03sp poems: If you don't like this one, look a few poems down the list. (Ok, it's not an old saying; I just made it up.) In fact, I never met an 03sp poem I out and out didn't like--the range seems to run from decent to ****ing brilliant, IMHO. Anyway. Beauty is skin deep, but personality is "kneaded deeper" than knee deep as our friend cleverly points out. And what the hell--while you're at it, check out this other poem, look in there , in which 03 seems to be sneaking around, hiking things, and uh there's um ice and, for all I know, alka seltzer tablets, and um it's a good poem, so read it.
Late Tonight by FabMax
I am writing to myself
SEARCHING for
THE un of the answered
HOW delicious most dreamlike
TO figure
THE constant mystery
MY mentor, my mate.
Fabmax has posted a few poems as well today, and they are lovely love poems indeed, but this is the quirkier of the pair, which appeals to me. I especially love the stanza reprinted here. Fab, I spend most of my life searching for the "un" of the "answered--that line just delighted me because it is yes a muy delicioso cosa to ponder, as is the rest of your poem.
simple then by OT
bumping down gravel roads
on smooth bench seats
well suited for sliding close
leaning tight around corners
letting shy jostled hands slip
from knees to inner thighs
love and lust were same
Here's a cool poem from OT. He writes a lot of poems that have this effect--they seem very understated, but there's alot going on in a spare, quiet way. Look how he has, in seven short lines, created a scene that is not only visual, but active--can't you just *feel* that car bumping over the gravel? And aural--I hear the sound of the wheels on the gravel. And then you have a young couple shy but boy oh boy determined, lol. Who hasn't been there? (Well, ok not there in OT's car, but you know what I mean. Hey! OT! Stop that! hehe)
Really, read his poems--they are subtly delicious.
Oh well. Read the entries from T.M.D. and Silken Dreammaid--they're really good, too.
(I'm back, having tossed children--helter skelter--from this destop comuputer, which let me tell you was *not* easy even though I was the one who paid for this thing darnit, but I digress. Two points:
1. T.M.D.--I think stands for *T*his *M*an *D*oes cool things with alliteration, cause he does.
2. Silken_Dreammaid has a whole name and not just initials, but if she did they would stand for *S*he *D*oes cool things with verse.
Each of these gifted writers has particular strengths, which they use to good effect in their poems. Check it out.
Ok. NOW I'm done with the reviews.)
Stomping off Angry and Laptopless,
Angeline
I'm meltin.....
Be back sometime.
My computer is acting verrrry ill, so you are getting an abbreviated version of the new poems reviews for today. Yes there's more to come and it may come later tonight or tomorrow, depending on my laptop's state of health. Grrrr.
A Tale of Real Life by 03sp
I wanted to meet partially nude women
so hung around artists and glass doors
facing east, sometimes west or south
if cold
Well you know 03sp--he's just not like the other boys: he wants to meet *partially* nude woman. And where does it get him, hmmm? Slapped and bruised in a poodle puddle muddle. (Maybe you can stand in a black light next time and meet fully clothed, but glowing women. ) Thank you for this terrific and quirky little slice of prosetry, 03--I loved it!
a felt bump by 03sp
personality has texture
able to be felt
further down
kneaded deeper
than look or reach
may glean
There's an old saying about 03sp poems: If you don't like this one, look a few poems down the list. (Ok, it's not an old saying; I just made it up.) In fact, I never met an 03sp poem I out and out didn't like--the range seems to run from decent to ****ing brilliant, IMHO. Anyway. Beauty is skin deep, but personality is "kneaded deeper" than knee deep as our friend cleverly points out. And what the hell--while you're at it, check out this other poem, look in there , in which 03 seems to be sneaking around, hiking things, and uh there's um ice and, for all I know, alka seltzer tablets, and um it's a good poem, so read it.
Late Tonight by FabMax
I am writing to myself
SEARCHING for
THE un of the answered
HOW delicious most dreamlike
TO figure
THE constant mystery
MY mentor, my mate.
Fabmax has posted a few poems as well today, and they are lovely love poems indeed, but this is the quirkier of the pair, which appeals to me. I especially love the stanza reprinted here. Fab, I spend most of my life searching for the "un" of the "answered--that line just delighted me because it is yes a muy delicioso cosa to ponder, as is the rest of your poem.
simple then by OT
bumping down gravel roads
on smooth bench seats
well suited for sliding close
leaning tight around corners
letting shy jostled hands slip
from knees to inner thighs
love and lust were same
Here's a cool poem from OT. He writes a lot of poems that have this effect--they seem very understated, but there's alot going on in a spare, quiet way. Look how he has, in seven short lines, created a scene that is not only visual, but active--can't you just *feel* that car bumping over the gravel? And aural--I hear the sound of the wheels on the gravel. And then you have a young couple shy but boy oh boy determined, lol. Who hasn't been there? (Well, ok not there in OT's car, but you know what I mean. Hey! OT! Stop that! hehe)
Really, read his poems--they are subtly delicious.
Oh well. Read the entries from T.M.D. and Silken Dreammaid--they're really good, too.
(I'm back, having tossed children--helter skelter--from this destop comuputer, which let me tell you was *not* easy even though I was the one who paid for this thing darnit, but I digress. Two points:
1. T.M.D.--I think stands for *T*his *M*an *D*oes cool things with alliteration, cause he does.
2. Silken_Dreammaid has a whole name and not just initials, but if she did they would stand for *S*he *D*oes cool things with verse.
Each of these gifted writers has particular strengths, which they use to good effect in their poems. Check it out.
Ok. NOW I'm done with the reviews.)
Stomping off Angry and Laptopless,
Angeline
I'm meltin.....
Be back sometime.
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