Pretty please, play with me.
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Lauren Hynde
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Stop foolin' around you three!
You'll be disappointed to know that the vote count for our two last poems stands thus:
Love Lies in the Rain
rating: 4.67 votes: 6
Romeo Is Bleeding: an hypersonnet
rating: 4.60 votes: 5
Red? When are you going to start the next one?
You'll be disappointed to know that the vote count for our two last poems stands thus:
Love Lies in the Rain
rating: 4.67 votes: 6
Romeo Is Bleeding: an hypersonnet
rating: 4.60 votes: 5
Red? When are you going to start the next one?
WickedEve
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Well, that sucks, but I'm not surprised. I've seen crap poems that basically consist of "Boy fucked girl" and those poems have 4,000 votes within 5 seconds and they hit #1 a minute later! Okay, I exaggerate a little.Lauren.Hynde said:
(I'd love to spank you, Red, but I don't think you could take it. I tend to get carried away. I could end up spanking an entire butt cheek off.)
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Free verse serendipity
Well, Lauren ("Ms. Prissy Neo-Classicist"), I guess we can get started about anytime. This one will be free verse, no fixed length of stanzas, or number of stanzas. You may use rhyme and/or formal meter, but they're optional. I'll exercise final editorial control ("final cut"). I'll also get it started:
I never realized
that your brains were scrambled
that your insides were churning and twisted
or that I
was perpendicular to your plane
Obviously, this is a poem about a relationship of some sort, but I want to leave it as open as possible for now. It could be a love relationship, a friendship, a relationship with an animal (pet, etc.), whatever. I have no idea where it's going, but I hope it'll at least be a fun ride getting there.
(Yeah, Eve, that doesn't sound too groovy. Maybe it'll be better if I spank you. I promise to be very gentle, a light spanking only.)
Well, Lauren ("Ms. Prissy Neo-Classicist"), I guess we can get started about anytime. This one will be free verse, no fixed length of stanzas, or number of stanzas. You may use rhyme and/or formal meter, but they're optional. I'll exercise final editorial control ("final cut"). I'll also get it started:
I never realized
that your brains were scrambled
that your insides were churning and twisted
or that I
was perpendicular to your plane
Obviously, this is a poem about a relationship of some sort, but I want to leave it as open as possible for now. It could be a love relationship, a friendship, a relationship with an animal (pet, etc.), whatever. I have no idea where it's going, but I hope it'll at least be a fun ride getting there.
(Yeah, Eve, that doesn't sound too groovy. Maybe it'll be better if I spank you. I promise to be very gentle, a light spanking only.)
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Poetry is breathing...no wonder I rhyme in my sleep..haa
Cool stuff...Im shaking off the work bug ..I need some time to write again...but here is a Blarneystoned classic
The Poet’s Soul
There are some in life who have the gift
Those brave souls that can cross the rift
Of space and time, reason and love
Without end and without vice and sometimes even rise above
The twisted world of death and fear
Of losing face and losing limb, for they know God is near
In every flower and every tree
In every heart of man they see
The rose that lies within the thorns
And the quiet rage before the storm
They know that life is merely a dance
Whose swift, swift steps react only by chance
To a twirling lilt of joy and sorrow
For it is life itself that indeed we borrow
It is through laughter and madness that we keenly see
That the world is a strange little symphony
Of sights and sounds, triumphs and dreams
Of tragedies and comedies both alive and serene
And in the end, when the curtains close
The crowd goes home and the lights turned low
We should reflect upon the closing scene
Because all poets know that life is a dream
From the mind of Neil McCann
Long Live the Storm Clan
Cool stuff...Im shaking off the work bug ..I need some time to write again...but here is a Blarneystoned classic
The Poet’s Soul
There are some in life who have the gift
Those brave souls that can cross the rift
Of space and time, reason and love
Without end and without vice and sometimes even rise above
The twisted world of death and fear
Of losing face and losing limb, for they know God is near
In every flower and every tree
In every heart of man they see
The rose that lies within the thorns
And the quiet rage before the storm
They know that life is merely a dance
Whose swift, swift steps react only by chance
To a twirling lilt of joy and sorrow
For it is life itself that indeed we borrow
It is through laughter and madness that we keenly see
That the world is a strange little symphony
Of sights and sounds, triumphs and dreams
Of tragedies and comedies both alive and serene
And in the end, when the curtains close
The crowd goes home and the lights turned low
We should reflect upon the closing scene
Because all poets know that life is a dream
From the mind of Neil McCann
Long Live the Storm Clan
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Re: Free verse serendipity
This one will be free verse, no fixed length of stanzas, or number of stanzas. You may use rhyme and/or formal meter, but they're optional.
Obviously, this is a poem about a relationship of some sort, but I want to leave it as open as possible for now. It could be a love relationship, a friendship, a relationship with an animal (pet, etc.), whatever. I have no idea where it's going, but I hope it'll at least be a fun ride getting there.
REDWAVE
I never realized
that your brains were scrambled
that your insides were churning and twisted
or that I
was perpendicular to your plane
WickedEve
I was clueless,
despite a precipitous trail of hints
trampled over,
and left to writhe in obscurity.
TheDR4KE
I didn't think
to ask, to look, to question.
Not so much you,
although it is you to whom this apology goes out,
but rather me.
Should I not have searched my soul and known ... ?
This one will be free verse, no fixed length of stanzas, or number of stanzas. You may use rhyme and/or formal meter, but they're optional.
Obviously, this is a poem about a relationship of some sort, but I want to leave it as open as possible for now. It could be a love relationship, a friendship, a relationship with an animal (pet, etc.), whatever. I have no idea where it's going, but I hope it'll at least be a fun ride getting there.
REDWAVE
I never realized
that your brains were scrambled
that your insides were churning and twisted
or that I
was perpendicular to your plane
WickedEve
I was clueless,
despite a precipitous trail of hints
trampled over,
and left to writhe in obscurity.
TheDR4KE
I didn't think
to ask, to look, to question.
Not so much you,
although it is you to whom this apology goes out,
but rather me.
Should I not have searched my soul and known ... ?
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In the throws of passion..
Backed against the wall
Heat pouring from your red whine lips
I took you through waves of passion
Without restraint, an unbridled fall
Rhythmic slamming motion in your hips
Listening to your moaning confession
Your legs wrapped around me body and soul
Chest heaving, waist grinding trip
I look into your eyes obsession
Dilated pupils you slide and call
My name as your juices slip
Down my leg in recession
From the throws of passion
Backed against the wall
Heat pouring from your red whine lips
I took you through waves of passion
Without restraint, an unbridled fall
Rhythmic slamming motion in your hips
Listening to your moaning confession
Your legs wrapped around me body and soul
Chest heaving, waist grinding trip
I look into your eyes obsession
Dilated pupils you slide and call
My name as your juices slip
Down my leg in recession
From the throws of passion
WickedEve
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Re: In the throws of passion..
By the way, this isn't a feedback thread. You need to start a new one for your poems. Go do that, then come back here and participate in what we're doing now. You may want to add a stanza to the poem that's already started, or wait for a new one.
Hi. Just want to let you know that it should be "throes" not "throws." Unless you plan on tossing passion.Blarneystoned said:
By the way, this isn't a feedback thread. You need to start a new one for your poems. Go do that, then come back here and participate in what we're doing now. You may want to add a stanza to the poem that's already started, or wait for a new one.
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Throes and throws....haha
sorry didnt know there were rules to the cite....and I had an internal debate about throes or throws myself when I zapped it out...haha....I think I will post elsewhere...too many rules for this poet...keep smiling..Blarney out...I thought throes sounded too much like death throes...
P.S. Lasciviscious..haha..remind me to ask another dictionary..haha
sorry didnt know there were rules to the cite....and I had an internal debate about throes or throws myself when I zapped it out...haha....I think I will post elsewhere...too many rules for this poet...keep smiling..Blarney out...I thought throes sounded too much like death throes...
P.S. Lasciviscious..haha..remind me to ask another dictionary..haha
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Re: Throes and throws....haha
Oh, come on. You don't have to leave. There aren't that many rules. Honestly. It's just that we're playing a little poetry game on this thread. Just start a new thread. It's easy. If you don't know how, PM me and I'll help you out.Blarneystoned said:
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damn I cant spell tonight...down dyslexia...down boy..haha
Lascivious even....I think all you english majors should take a German class ..it does wonders for your spelling...haha.
Ein, Swei, Drei, Fier ....Wir trinken mehr Bier !!!!
Barbarians Unite "Down mit der Englisch Lehrerin !!" haha
Pogues Me thoin ! haha
Lascivious even....I think all you english majors should take a German class ..it does wonders for your spelling...haha.
Ein, Swei, Drei, Fier ....Wir trinken mehr Bier !!!!
Barbarians Unite "Down mit der Englisch Lehrerin !!" haha
Pogues Me thoin ! haha
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Eve thanks so much for your input ..
I couldn't have made a new thread without you...please read through my new thread...Lessons on Poetic Civility For the Uncreative Mind ...thanks so much for the help
Yours,
Blarneystoned
I couldn't have made a new thread without you...please read through my new thread...Lessons on Poetic Civility For the Uncreative Mind ...thanks so much for the help
Yours,
Blarneystoned
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Re: Eve thanks so much for your input ..
For your info, I was being sincere. Some people don't know how to start a thread at first. I wasn't sure if you did or not. And the reason I told you about starting a thread for poetry was to help you out. If you leave your poems on this thread, they will get buried under a heap of posts in no time, and not many will get a chance to ever read them.Blarneystoned said:
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Nice ass-- er, I mean av!
Just had to comment on your new av, Eve. Very interesting. It would be fascinating to go to the church you attend. Might be enough to make a true believer out of me!
Thanks for your contribution, Drake. Also, welcome to the board, Blarneystoned. I hope this poem will draw in some new people, not just the usual suspects.
Speaking of which, I hope you and Judo aren't miffed by my teasing of you, Lauren. You know I was just kidding-- I really love you both!
Just had to comment on your new av, Eve. Very interesting. It would be fascinating to go to the church you attend. Might be enough to make a true believer out of me!
Thanks for your contribution, Drake. Also, welcome to the board, Blarneystoned. I hope this poem will draw in some new people, not just the usual suspects.
Speaking of which, I hope you and Judo aren't miffed by my teasing of you, Lauren. You know I was just kidding-- I really love you both!
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Re: Nice ass-- er, I mean av!
Red, I never would have guessed that Satan was so hung!
Now I have a bone to pick with you Red. You didn't thank me for my contribution. Didn't like it? And you didn't tell me that you loved me. I'm hurt, RedRage. Ohhhh... the pain.
As for new people, this a great poem for everyone to add to. We can make it as long as we want. You do like them long don't you, Red? Everyone jump in and add a stanza. Let's give Red lots of editing to do. Red, can I add another stanza? I want to add a "swollen belly" stanza.
E.
Hello, Chief Commie Cocksucker! lol I see you finally got to 1,000.REDWAVE said:
Red, I never would have guessed that Satan was so hung!
Now I have a bone to pick with you Red. You didn't thank me for my contribution. Didn't like it? And you didn't tell me that you loved me. I'm hurt, RedRage.
Ohhhh... the pain. As for new people, this a great poem for everyone to add to. We can make it as long as we want. You do like them long don't you, Red? Everyone jump in and add a stanza. Let's give Red lots of editing to do.
Red, can I add another stanza? I want to add a "swollen belly" stanza. E.
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Sorry, Eve!
Of course, it goes without saying I'm grateful for your contribution, Eve, and I do love you! I just forgot to mention it before. Can I lick your asshole to make amends?
Feel free to add another stanza. I'm thinking of doing that myself. And again, I'd like to invite those who haven't participated before to jump in now.
Of course, it goes without saying I'm grateful for your contribution, Eve, and I do love you! I just forgot to mention it before. Can I lick your asshole to make amends?
Feel free to add another stanza. I'm thinking of doing that myself. And again, I'd like to invite those who haven't participated before to jump in now.
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Re: Sorry, Eve!
How about toes? Do you do toes? There's no better way to say you're sorry than a good toe job. You're not bothered by bunions, are you? Are you okay with warts and ingrown toenails? How about hammer toe? Toe jam?REDWAVE said:Of course, it goes without saying I'm grateful for your contribution, Eve, and I do love you! I just forgot to mention it before. Can I lick your asshole to make amends?
Feel free to add another stanza. I'm thinking of doing that myself. And again, I'd like to invite those who haven't participated before to jump in now.
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Chewing Tobacco..haha
I missed the spittoon again ..dang it..haha
All the tobacco spitting has generated an editor..haha
Send me your 8 track and I will burn you a CD from it....for three easy installments or 99.95 plus shipping and handling. You may want to check the good doctors blood pressure..haha
I missed the spittoon again ..dang it..haha
All the tobacco spitting has generated an editor..haha
Send me your 8 track and I will burn you a CD from it....for three easy installments or 99.95 plus shipping and handling. You may want to check the good doctors blood pressure..haha
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Hammer toes
Get a pair man...smack her ass instead of sucking her toes..haha
Incidently a hammer toe is when the toes are compressed...usually in shoes that are too tight over long periods...the tissue and bones become compressed and resemble a hammer on a piano....next time I am charging for the medical advice..haha
Get a pair man...smack her ass instead of sucking her toes..haha
Incidently a hammer toe is when the toes are compressed...usually in shoes that are too tight over long periods...the tissue and bones become compressed and resemble a hammer on a piano....next time I am charging for the medical advice..haha
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