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Those were pretty funny.. I liked the lime one.. have to pass that a long..My Erotic Tale said:
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Re: Re: Taking notes
Wow. I didn't know that was what the purpose of what the breaks were supposed to do. I've always set the breaks to give points of impact and thoughts to stand out. Here's an example of what I've used breaks for (coloring the thoughts that I wanted to impact stronger):
It sat there for years and years
Otherwise inanimate.
As I stare at it now
The picture, small and dated
Explodes and impales me
With life.
Her face splashed with joy
Whose lips turned crooked
Concealing anger and constant pain
As slyly as it appears.
If only I could again once
See that smirk
On my mother’s face.
Perhaps, Liar, you could show me how you would break this so I can see the difference? Please?
Liar said:
Wow. I didn't know that was what the purpose of what the breaks were supposed to do. I've always set the breaks to give points of impact and thoughts to stand out. Here's an example of what I've used breaks for (coloring the thoughts that I wanted to impact stronger):
It sat there for years and years
Otherwise inanimate.
As I stare at it now
The picture, small and dated
Explodes and impales me
With life.
Her face splashed with joy
Whose lips turned crooked
Concealing anger and constant pain
As slyly as it appears.
If only I could again once
See that smirk
On my mother’s face.
Perhaps, Liar, you could show me how you would break this so I can see the difference? Please?
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Hi ,
Well thanks for the good review of my poem on this thread .It was just something i wrote to amuse myself lol .I have been looking for somewhere to work on my writing , which is not limited to christmas poems and dirty limeriks by the way .(But arent they fun ).I love the site and hope to be around here haunting corridors a bit longer .What has really amazed me is the writer support .It's really a great surprise to find that , and you all have my appreciation .Hopefully my more serious stuff will be met with approval also , but even if its not I'm sure it will atleast be met with a little constructive critacism .welcome to my weird life , and a big thanks to all for welcoming me into yours.
Well thanks for the good review of my poem on this thread .It was just something i wrote to amuse myself lol .I have been looking for somewhere to work on my writing , which is not limited to christmas poems and dirty limeriks by the way .(But arent they fun ).I love the site and hope to be around here haunting corridors a bit longer .What has really amazed me is the writer support .It's really a great surprise to find that , and you all have my appreciation .Hopefully my more serious stuff will be met with approval also , but even if its not I'm sure it will atleast be met with a little constructive critacism .welcome to my weird life , and a big thanks to all for welcoming me into yours.
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hmmmm
Hello all ^^ I'm so very very new to this site, so like...yeah...I'm confuzzled LOL
I'm also a really new poet...I honestly didn't start writing poetry of any kind until the beginning of the summer, and I didn't even consider anything erotic til about a week ago LOL It's rather quite fun...it's weird how poetry makes my mind work...it like helps me concentrate really well on everything else too LOL
I wrote a couple poems and someone said that whenever I write a poem like the ones I've been writing, I should post links of them up here....okie dokey ^^ Here they are:
At Last
And my submission for the holiday season:
Best Christmas Ever
Hope you guys enjoy ^^
Hello all ^^ I'm so very very new to this site, so like...yeah...I'm confuzzled LOL
I'm also a really new poet...I honestly didn't start writing poetry of any kind until the beginning of the summer, and I didn't even consider anything erotic til about a week ago LOL It's rather quite fun...it's weird how poetry makes my mind work...it like helps me concentrate really well on everything else too LOL
I wrote a couple poems and someone said that whenever I write a poem like the ones I've been writing, I should post links of them up here....okie dokey ^^ Here they are:
At Last
And my submission for the holiday season:
Best Christmas Ever
Hope you guys enjoy ^^
Christina O. Leigh
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Originally posted by cutiepanda
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Hello all ^^ I'm so very very new to this site, so like...yeah...I'm confuzzled LOL I'm also a really new poet...I honestly didn't start writing poetry of any kind until the beginning of the summer, and I didn't even consider anything erotic til about a week ago LOL It's rather quite fun...it's weird how poetry makes my mind work...it like helps me concentrate really well on everything else too LOL
I wrote a couple poems and someone said that whenever I write a poem like the ones I've been writing, I should post links of them up here....okie dokey
Sometimes this happens when we're on the net too long. I'm excited to go read! Welcome and have fun
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Hello all ^^ I'm so very very new to this site, so like...yeah...I'm confuzzled LOL I'm also a really new poet...I honestly didn't start writing poetry of any kind until the beginning of the summer, and I didn't even consider anything erotic til about a week ago LOL It's rather quite fun...it's weird how poetry makes my mind work...it like helps me concentrate really well on everything else too LOL
I wrote a couple poems and someone said that whenever I write a poem like the ones I've been writing, I should post links of them up here....okie dokey
Sometimes this happens when we're on the net too long. I'm excited to go read! Welcome and have fun
champagne1982
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Re: Re: Re: Taking notes
It sat there for years
otherwise inanimate.
I stare, now
the picture,
small and dated
explodes
impaling me
With life.
Her face splashed
with joy
lips turned crooked
Concealing anger
constant pain
As sly as it appears.
once again,
if I only could see
that smirk
On Mother’s face.
I took the liberty of removing some words that I saw as superfluous. You can edit your text as you would prefer though. I just wanted to illustrate how I would break it.
Can I?average gina said:
It sat there for years
otherwise inanimate.
I stare, now
the picture,
small and dated
explodes
impaling me
With life.
Her face splashed
with joy
lips turned crooked
Concealing anger
constant pain
As sly as it appears.
once again,
if I only could see
that smirk
On Mother’s face.
I took the liberty of removing some words that I saw as superfluous. You can edit your text as you would prefer though. I just wanted to illustrate how I would break it.
My Erotic Tale
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this "Rocks"
Thumbs up neo~
"Ditto"
~~~~~
Hello~
average gina~
yep liar lie's
he really is a good teacher...<grin>
~~~~~
woodnymph_O~
welcome and ho ho ho poems and stories
are an A+
"POST A LINK ANYTIME"
that goes for all...smile~
~~~~~
cutiepanda~
welcome...
ditto on the posting,
ho ho ho...
chuckle...love those kind of poems
~~~~~~
christina o leigh~
right behind ya...going to read (~_*)
~~~~~~~
champagne1982~
the professor worked their magic
<<<big grin>>>
you too...liar...Thanks!
Thumbs up neo~
"Ditto"
~~~~~
Hello~
average gina~
yep liar lie's
he really is a good teacher...<grin>
~~~~~
woodnymph_O~
welcome and ho ho ho poems and stories
are an A+
"POST A LINK ANYTIME"
that goes for all...smile~
~~~~~
cutiepanda~
welcome...
ditto on the posting,
ho ho ho...
chuckle...love those kind of poems
~~~~~~
christina o leigh~
right behind ya...going to read (~_*)
~~~~~~~
champagne1982~
the professor worked their magic
<<<big grin>>>
you too...liar...Thanks!
average gina
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Re: Re: Re: Re: Taking notes
Okay, I get the word removal. I guess I'm going to have to compare again. You broke down the poem and set it in stanzas. Would you explain why you broke it the way you broke it?
Are the stanzas like thoughts? That's the way I'm reading them. Of course, I would have never seen them separately like that. It's amazing. You turned my single thought into a faceted poem.
...and I thought it was good as is...
champagne1982 said:
Okay, I get the word removal. I guess I'm going to have to compare again. You broke down the poem and set it in stanzas. Would you explain why you broke it the way you broke it?
Are the stanzas like thoughts? That's the way I'm reading them. Of course, I would have never seen them separately like that. It's amazing. You turned my single thought into a faceted poem.
...and I thought it was good as is...
champagne1982
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Re: Re: Re: Re: Taking notes
1.
It sat there for years
otherwise inanimate.
2.
I stare, now
the picture,
small and dated
explodes
impaling me
With life.
3.
Her face splashed
with joy
lips turned crooked
Concealing anger
constant pain.
4.
As sly as it appears,
once again,
if I only could see
that smirk
On Mother’s face.
1. This strophe introduces the subject. I chose to double break here because of your emphasis line.
2. Now, the focus shifts to the picture, what it is, what happens when you see it. Your emphasis, again, decided the double line break.
3. The face, the smile. This so important to your poem that it needed to stand alone. Without the pain and anger the smile isn't a smirk, just a mere water colour of the vivid acrylics of real life.
4. Your ending strophe is the impression you want the reader to carry with them after they've finished reading, make it the most important in your poem and it holds the emotion and keeps your poetry in their thoughts long after the reading is done.
Gina, you wrote this poem in strophes, you just didn't break it into them. Look at the blue in your solid version again. See where you decided to break it up? In the future, maybe, you can colour your important lines like that and then insert double breaks like I did. You may surprise yourself.
Now, my ride is here and I must go. Take care!
1.
It sat there for years
otherwise inanimate.
2.
I stare, now
the picture,
small and dated
explodes
impaling me
With life.
3.
Her face splashed
with joy
lips turned crooked
Concealing anger
constant pain.
4.
As sly as it appears,
once again,
if I only could see
that smirk
On Mother’s face.
1. This strophe introduces the subject. I chose to double break here because of your emphasis line.
2. Now, the focus shifts to the picture, what it is, what happens when you see it. Your emphasis, again, decided the double line break.
3. The face, the smile. This so important to your poem that it needed to stand alone. Without the pain and anger the smile isn't a smirk, just a mere water colour of the vivid acrylics of real life.
4. Your ending strophe is the impression you want the reader to carry with them after they've finished reading, make it the most important in your poem and it holds the emotion and keeps your poetry in their thoughts long after the reading is done.
Gina, you wrote this poem in strophes, you just didn't break it into them. Look at the blue in your solid version again. See where you decided to break it up? In the future, maybe, you can colour your important lines like that and then insert double breaks like I did. You may surprise yourself.
Now, my ride is here and I must go. Take care!
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A Poem Academy~
Encouragement Inspiration and LEARN
ABOUT POETRY !!!
I've said this from day one and that's why
the thread got started, to "encourage"
new poets, most know already but for the
"RECORD" I have the worst grammer of anyone
and no nothing of punctuation, have never
hidden the fact I know absolutly nothing
about writing...
That's why it's a learning thread!!!
second: my comments were.."Superficial"
My comments are encouraging...I like to
think that some people build things while
others tear them down!
I haven't read to much I truely disliked and then
I leave no comment at all..."Sorry" thats me~
I believe in the yin and the yang in everything
and I except negative feedback and I can't please
everyone, I have compassion for ignorance ...
well because I'm ignornat number #1 student
at "A Poem Academy"...grin~
onward~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I ask for a link if you want your stuff read by
this unknowing redneck country boy and I'm
glad I did cause I got sent this way...
Everything is Everything: by average gina
Another poem "nothing is nothing" is just as
cute and clever...
thanks~
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lies deciet and mistrust: by templeminded
really grabs ya...
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perfection: by LilDarlin
PERFECT~
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victim : by woodnymph_O
touching~
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Dancing to the end : by Annora
very moving...
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Be careful with me: by Christina O Leigh
clever writer~
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Gypsie's Lair: by gypziedoll
a glimpse at gypzie~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Literary Lizzie: by lonpoet
this was short and sweet...
my opinion of course...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I tryed not to be to "Superficial" with my comments
...hehehehe...but these were fun I will continue
reading some more but this was an "encouraging"
start...
Art~
Encouragement Inspiration and LEARN
ABOUT POETRY !!!
I've said this from day one and that's why
the thread got started, to "encourage"
new poets, most know already but for the
"RECORD" I have the worst grammer of anyone
and no nothing of punctuation, have never
hidden the fact I know absolutly nothing
about writing...
That's why it's a learning thread!!!
second: my comments were.."Superficial"
My comments are encouraging...I like to
think that some people build things while
others tear them down!
I haven't read to much I truely disliked and then
I leave no comment at all..."Sorry" thats me~
I believe in the yin and the yang in everything
and I except negative feedback and I can't please
everyone, I have compassion for ignorance ...
well because I'm ignornat number #1 student
at "A Poem Academy"...grin~
onward~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I ask for a link if you want your stuff read by
this unknowing redneck country boy and I'm
glad I did cause I got sent this way...
Everything is Everything: by average gina
Another poem "nothing is nothing" is just as
cute and clever...
thanks~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
lies deciet and mistrust: by templeminded
really grabs ya...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
perfection: by LilDarlin
PERFECT~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
victim : by woodnymph_O
touching~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Dancing to the end : by Annora
very moving...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Be careful with me: by Christina O Leigh
clever writer~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Gypsie's Lair: by gypziedoll
a glimpse at gypzie~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Literary Lizzie: by lonpoet
this was short and sweet...
my opinion of course...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I tryed not to be to "Superficial" with my comments
...hehehehe...but these were fun I will continue
reading some more but this was an "encouraging"
start...
Art~
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Christina O. Leigh
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I thought...I thought...where's my name??! Aren't I special?? Huh, huh, huh???!! ::sniffles:::
Then, then, then I SAW MY NAME!!! Jumps up and down. I'm special!!!
Glad you liked, Art. Tickled me pink, wet and highly aroused
Thanks so much for commenting. It means a lot. Hey, read me, comment, kill me, say something....I'm lonely (blushes) No, please don't kill me. I'm leaving now before I say something more stupid
Then, then, then I SAW MY NAME!!! Jumps up and down. I'm special!!!
Glad you liked, Art. Tickled me pink, wet and highly aroused
Thanks so much for commenting. It means a lot. Hey, read me, comment, kill me, say something....I'm lonely (blushes) No, please don't kill me. I'm leaving now before I say something more stupid
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thanks
thanks for the mention of my poem "lies,deceit & mistrust" and thanks for the kiind comments that you two left. by:templeminded
thanks for the mention of my poem "lies,deceit & mistrust" and thanks for the kiind comments that you two left. by:templeminded
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Art,
I had to Thank you again, for the mention of my poem *Perfection*~ I pulled my hair out writing this one.
I was searching for that one perfect word....to go in that one perfect spot..yess..right...there...~~
It was like a jigsaw puzzle with this one.*Grins*...
Thanks again for the mention and the great comments..
I deeply appreciate it..
*Big Smiles*
I still say we all have a Gem in Art~!!!
I had to Thank you again, for the mention of my poem *Perfection*~ I pulled my hair out writing this one.
I was searching for that one perfect word....to go in that one perfect spot..yess..right...there...~~
It was like a jigsaw puzzle with this one.*Grins*...
Thanks again for the mention and the great comments..
I deeply appreciate it..
*Big Smiles*
I still say we all have a Gem in Art~!!!
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Re: thanks
(~_*) hey S~
well you usualy say whats on your mind...
<grin>
great poem!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
reading and reviewing these peoms
varry's on days there are only a few
to day's there's a bunch...I could use
all the help I can get...so if ya have a poem ya
like or want to advertise feel free!!!
Art be better~
templeminded said:
(~_*) hey S~
well you usualy say whats on your mind...
<grin>
great poem!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
reading and reviewing these peoms
varry's on days there are only a few
to day's there's a bunch...I could use
all the help I can get...so if ya have a poem ya
like or want to advertise feel free!!!
Art be better~
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Thank you, Art! "Everything Is Everything", "A View on Nothing" and "Who Anger Does" are definitely a play on words. The other poems vary from inhumanity to sensuality to pain on a couple of different levels. Enjoy.
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thanks gain for a mention
am doing my best right now to keep on writing , yet im having a trying week .My computer ate two pages during a fit it threw yesterday , and my headaches ,but its always a boost when you get some mention/recognition .I guess we're all going through the trials of life right now .Lots of hugs to all of you , who like me , are giving your computer mean looks , and keep threatening it with a newer model.
am doing my best right now to keep on writing , yet im having a trying week .My computer ate two pages during a fit it threw yesterday , and my headaches ,but its always a boost when you get some mention/recognition .I guess we're all going through the trials of life right now .Lots of hugs to all of you , who like me , are giving your computer mean looks , and keep threatening it with a newer model.
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huh
nope not sure what you're talking about art....i don't see anything different.love sandra
nope not sure what you're talking about art....i don't see anything different.love sandra
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ok
i got it now..thank you
i got it now..thank you
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Christina
RE:
Why must I go for hours
And sometimes days
Without being touched?
Then it seems the fondling
Never stops.
Hot, cold, and other times
Warm, sticky, greasy or grimy,
Feeling abused
And sometimes used
By these hands
I really like the image you presented here.. you can feel the cold then the hot.. the lonely skin craving for touch then being overwhelmed by non stop use. Being used in every way possible. The on and off.. of relationships.. I am sorry but it came over as a selfish lover... one whom did not take the time to explore and listen to your body...this poem actually hurt my skin..this means it was good girl...
blessings
Du Lac
RE:
Why must I go for hours
And sometimes days
Without being touched?
Then it seems the fondling
Never stops.
Hot, cold, and other times
Warm, sticky, greasy or grimy,
Feeling abused
And sometimes used
By these hands
I really like the image you presented here.. you can feel the cold then the hot.. the lonely skin craving for touch then being overwhelmed by non stop use. Being used in every way possible. The on and off.. of relationships.. I am sorry but it came over as a selfish lover... one whom did not take the time to explore and listen to your body...this poem actually hurt my skin..this means it was good girl...
blessings
Du Lac
Christina O. Leigh
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Du Lac, my darling! Thank you!
I think you missed a few lines
Why must I go for hours
And sometimes days
Without being touched?
Then it seems the fondling
Never stops.
Hot, cold, and other times
Warm, sticky, greasy or grimy,
Feeling abused
And sometimes used
By these hands.
It’s haunting.
Sliding up and down
My shaft,
Never knowing
If it’s going to be
Gentle, rough,
Fast or slow.
I don't like it aggressive,
And I don't need to be
Replaced
Because I kind of like
My place,
But please be careful with me
As I take a few days rest.
I need to put a sign up that says,
"Give the handrail a break!"
It's the life of a handrail. Too bad they can't speak, eh? LMAO!!
I think you missed a few lines
Why must I go for hours
And sometimes days
Without being touched?
Then it seems the fondling
Never stops.
Hot, cold, and other times
Warm, sticky, greasy or grimy,
Feeling abused
And sometimes used
By these hands.
It’s haunting.
Sliding up and down
My shaft,
Never knowing
If it’s going to be
Gentle, rough,
Fast or slow.
I don't like it aggressive,
And I don't need to be
Replaced
Because I kind of like
My place,
But please be careful with me
As I take a few days rest.
I need to put a sign up that says,
"Give the handrail a break!"
It's the life of a handrail. Too bad they can't speak, eh? LMAO!!
My Erotic Tale
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howdy...
I'm gonna ,make sure I'm right here by a
~~~~"prose"~~is a write...just wording
in no order or ryhme?
question for the teachers...or I'll look it up
cause I read a lot of those lately...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
new stars are flickering while annora had
three poems burst out at once...
this one was powerfully moving...
A Farewell to a soldier : by Annora
touching read, but her other poem about an "ER"
is a spot light on reality~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Teardrop : by irishcatsameow
CLIP:
This poem was written by Lostandfounder and irishcatsmeow; each writing a line a day and passing the work in progress back and forth through email. L&F wrote the odd numbered lines and irish the even; neither knowing where the poem would go or when it would end. After a final edit by both and a title by L&F, we deemed the poem finished.
This is an interesting writing experience ...try it with a fellow poet. Sounds like an idea for a Poetry Challenge.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
what did I do by templeminded;
life is a yin yang...grin
good bad rough smooth hard soft grin frown
push pull now then rights wrong then wrongs
right now no yes question answer start finish
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
orgasim in fake slumber by Christina O Leigh
eroticly witty!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
okay just got in ran through the list...those
that I saw I know...now Ill clean up eat and
finish reading the list...and find lessons in poetry
new poets are shining, learning and posting POEMS.
Art~
I'll be back I'm sure...
I'm gonna ,make sure I'm right here by a
~~~~"prose"~~is a write...just wording
in no order or ryhme?
question for the teachers...or I'll look it up
cause I read a lot of those lately...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
new stars are flickering while annora had
three poems burst out at once...
this one was powerfully moving...
A Farewell to a soldier : by Annora
touching read, but her other poem about an "ER"
is a spot light on reality~~
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Teardrop : by irishcatsameow
CLIP:
This poem was written by Lostandfounder and irishcatsmeow; each writing a line a day and passing the work in progress back and forth through email. L&F wrote the odd numbered lines and irish the even; neither knowing where the poem would go or when it would end. After a final edit by both and a title by L&F, we deemed the poem finished.
This is an interesting writing experience ...try it with a fellow poet. Sounds like an idea for a Poetry Challenge.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
what did I do by templeminded;
life is a yin yang...grin
good bad rough smooth hard soft grin frown
push pull now then rights wrong then wrongs
right now no yes question answer start finish
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
orgasim in fake slumber by Christina O Leigh
eroticly witty!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
okay just got in ran through the list...those
that I saw I know...now Ill clean up eat and
finish reading the list...and find lessons in poetry
new poets are shining, learning and posting POEMS.
Art~
I'll be back I'm sure...
Christina O. Leigh
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Thank you, darling Art for your comments.
I am not very happen with the poem ::sigh::
I posted a new thread for some advice due to the length.
Anyone care to give some advice, I would REALLY appreciate it.
Thanks, Christina
P.S. I still can't figure out this link thing. Frustrated!!
I am not very happen with the poem ::sigh::
I posted a new thread for some advice due to the length.
Anyone care to give some advice, I would REALLY appreciate it.
Thanks, Christina
P.S. I still can't figure out this link thing. Frustrated!!
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poem lesson 101
killing beauty: by Tathagatta
Lesson in poetry...
this was so awesome...yep superficial comment
but the TRUTH~..
I started this thread to read and encourage others
to continue and grow as well mostly by reading
the poems offered by the list of great poems...
well this poem's a lesson poem!
anyone find that prose yet?
is that the same as free verse?
(~_*)
killing beauty: by Tathagatta
Lesson in poetry...
this was so awesome...yep superficial comment
but the TRUTH~..
I started this thread to read and encourage others
to continue and grow as well mostly by reading
the poems offered by the list of great poems...
well this poem's a lesson poem!
anyone find that prose yet?
is that the same as free verse?
(~_*)
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poem lesson101
pictue window :by postobitum
I hope I spelt the name right if not Ill change...
but this poem is way cool...
first some one needs to ask posto...what kind
of poem it is...is it Haiku type cause its out a number
syllable different...BUT
the poems of what a window see'
well that what I got out of it...any other views?
class...CLASS...listen up!!!...hehehe homework!
pictue window :by postobitum
I hope I spelt the name right if not Ill change...
but this poem is way cool...
first some one needs to ask posto...what kind
of poem it is...is it Haiku type cause its out a number
syllable different...BUT
the poems of what a window see'
well that what I got out of it...any other views?
class...CLASS...listen up!!!...hehehe homework!
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