The General Commentary Thread

[Winter_Fare]

By the time I was 8 I’d tasted
blood from my own face
gnawed at it as if it were steak
to try a quell the growl of my stomach

the beady eyed stares of people looking down on me
I was dog shit they had to scrape from their feet

treated like the mange riddled dog
that’s hackles are always up
milky eyes glaring murder

didn’t want to be poor
didn’t want to have torn clothes
didn’t choose to be beaten

I didn’t get to have the fair fights

my story is a dime a fucking dozen
in the ghetto no matter
what colour or creed you are

No war but class war

 

[todski28]

No war but class war

I wonder about that too, if everything else these day is simply semantics, but since I only know what I know and that isn’t much, easier to keep quiet and work

 

[todski28]

Thanks to you and GP for giving my muse a nudge with your poems.

And todski, your poem is powerful! I truly love how we inspire each other here.

It’s full of my typical verbiage and in ability to shut the hell up, but I appreciate the kind words Angie, you’re too kind to me

 

[Angeline]

It’s full of my typical verbiage and in ability to shut the hell up, but I appreciate the kind words Angie, you’re too kind to me

I think both our poems are honest because we wrote what we experienced. And since it's the Writing Live thread I won't get on your case about editing.

 

[Angeline]

I wonder about that too, if everything else these day is simply semantics, but since I only know what I know and that isn’t much, easier to keep quiet and work

I agree. I've about had it with social media cause I'm sick of the endless arguing over semantics (at best).

 

[todski28]

I agree. I've about had it with social media cause I'm sick of the endless arguing over semantics (at best).

I find it easier to not exist on social media aside from here, and enjoy the sun on my face and not arguing a point with someone who isn’t listening to what I’m saying and how I’m presenting it

 

[Piscator]

One of the good features of the new format is the like button. Use it.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

I'm still finding my way around, feeling like a noob.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

In Illustrated Poetry...

Thanks, Piscator, for recommending that little niche category. It's always a pleasure to draw the poetic picture with words and more. Really hope we see some new works in that category soon.

 

[HarryHill]

Very nice live write by GP. I should go back and put a like on it.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Thanks, Harry.

 

[Winter_Fare]

...

So much stuff got published in poetry today, your sonnet was at the top but the link is broken!
Alas I am still in limbo. It's been ages again since anything went up.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

It's not there at all now...........the vagaries of cleaning house, some things get accidentally chucked.

 

[butters]

https://forum.literotica.com/threads/april-2022-poem-a-day-thread.1563609/#post-94990929

i absolutely adore these two lines from 29wordsforsnow's piece in post 6

my hand just borrows it
leafing through 'healing'

 

[butters]

Guilty Pleasure... "poetic bimbo" *applause*
entirely relatable

 

[butters]

moochie's latest in Poem-a-day for April... love the concept of these lines, never seen this expressed before so it came across as striking to me:

Pressing his tongue into her
to understand the texture
of her soft whimpering moans

the texture of her (soft whimpering) moans

it invites contemplation

 

[Piscator]

29 word'sl atest work in April - Poem a Day has a synesthetic quality - I'd love to see it paired with an ilustraiton. And a fascinating link the link to the work of Mary Gartside

 

[29wordsforsnow]

29 word'sl atest work in April - Poem a Day has a synesthetic quality - I'd love to see it paired with an ilustraiton. And a fascinating link the link to the work of Mary Gartside

Your wish is my command, even though not even close to Madame Gartside's non-figurative painting.

 

[Piscator]

Moochienanu's We are nurses in the April - Poem a Day thread sucinctly encapsulates the frustraion of health care provivers with this ongoing covid pandemic.

 

[todski28]

Congrats on those that went through the NaPoWrimo I tried and barely scraped together a whimper.

Not sure what doing on but couldn’t write to save my life at the moment,

Appreciate the reads all of you!

 

[Lyricalli]

I wish I'd had the time to keep up with the NaPo thread, and I would like to catch up on all I haven't read yet, eventually, because there was good stuff in what I've read so far. Congrats to those who got through it. I know what a challenge it can be.

 

[Piscator]

Sincere thanks and congrats to all who took part in this April folly. By my count only Moochienanu filled the full 30 poems. followed by 29 and me at 28, River Maya at 12, Winter Fire at 12,and Butters at 5.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

Sincere thanks and congrats to all who took part in this April folly. By my count only Moochienanu filled the full 30 poems. followed by 29 and me at 28, River Maya at 12, Winter Fire at 12,and Butters at 5.

and Moochie has, by far, outdone all of us in making it a poem a day, well done!

 

[butters]

Sincere thanks and congrats to all who took part in this April folly. By my count only Moochienanu filled the full 30 poems. followed by 29 and me at 28, River Maya at 12, Winter Fire at 12,and Butters at 5.

some wonderful reads in there, P... just sorry i didn't get to contribute more. real busy time of year for us here, getting the ground ready and planting. country life, eh?

 

[Moochienanu]

Re: the April thread

So glad I got to share the space again this year. I’m always in awe reading other people’s compositions and learning about them and how they are the world.

It’s a beautiful thing, to be able to share this. Thank you, everyone.