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[Tathagata]

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oh my ... think this is quite brilliant ... so many images packed in here

Thanks but it needs a lot of polish

 

[Fflow]

Sweet Marie!

Darling Marie, you have summed up what is, perhaps, the real point of all of humanities greatest efforts:

All I ever wanted to do, for heavens sake, was to tell a woman I loved her and wanted to have sex with her!

Please be sure to tell us if your poems produced the desired result!

xoxo

srw

 

[Fflow]

Ps:

FYI, Scottish women are hot! (as if you didn't know!)

 

[balmoral]

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Thanks but it needs a lot of polish

well i, for one, would love to see it with even a little bit of polish ...

 

[Guest]

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... wow ... love it

Thank you - but as Tath says about his lovely poem - it needs buffing.

"All fall down." Indeed

 

[Tathagata]

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Thank you - but as Tath says about his lovely poem - it needs buffing.

"All fall down." Indeed

 

[Ninja Nookie]

Don't let the door hit ya
where the good lord split ya,

looking for ART in poetry!

Nin~

 

[BooMerengue]

excuse me, mentions.

'cept when I feel like it. I am a happy camper, after too long an absence, seems like years, two of my clique buds are back.

Maria2394 has Bandora's Pox ( her affliction) ; I've often wondered...what was in her head

WickedEve has S a poem about neither asses nor apples...

and at the risk of imparting 1201's kiss o' death, I just want to say I like this guy Kaishaku

offering Eating Vietnamese

all three made me smile....
a frightening thing to behold

Carry on...
I know you will

Ack!! Another Mentioner????

*spins round 'n round

*falls to the floor like a round board...

*Thunk!!

 

[twelveoone]

Du Lac, thanks, I want that picture - 1201

 

[Maria2394]

Du Lac and 1201

Thanks for the mention of Bandora's Pox. It was a fun poem to write

Flyguy-- the name is an obvious play on Pandora's Box, ( well, obvious to me) but it was a slip ofthe tongue I made when talking to my daughter about Pandora for a Latin assignment she was doing. That name, Bandora, just stuck in my mind and manifested on passion thread one day. Im glad you liked it

 

[tungtied2u]

Thank you Art

for the mention of my poem "Holding My Breath". And thank you to all those who read and commented. Sometimes, I feel selfish, because I keep my joy (what I have of it) mostly to myself...too write it down it sounds sappy to me, but my pain I am able to share so easily. I question how real my joy has been as result. I know all too well how real the pain is.

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Thank you very much



I appreciate the mention on the new poems review and all the nice comments.

Yes. It was rather delicious, wasn't it? I completely enjoyed this read.

I should mention that it was born of one of my favorite orgy threads, I Need Sex! , and thank all of you who participated and inspired me there. And you know who you are.

Syn

 

[My Erotic Tale]

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Exellent ryhming
05/01/05 by My Erotic Tale
It's not all in the ryhme
it's also in the mind,
what one may not see
the others point and find

excellent poem from my angle of view
my eyes and mind must have joined with you~

Nin~

Ninja Nookie or My Erotic Tale... one in the same? Commenting on your own work, just to run up the comment count. Shame on you...


what comment count?

and if ya aint got balls enough to tell who ya are
then how in the ...blue sky... do you expect to learn?

things are not always as they seem grasshopper,
ask templeminded or ninja who left the comment
and from whose house <bigrin>
I rather enjoyed reading poetry together (~_*)

it's not the tossing of the stone that I mind
it's the hiding like a chicken in the bushes
just felt like flushing that one out for supper

 

[Kaishaku]

Thank you...

My Erotic Tale, Du Lac and 1201 for mentioning my two visits to the local Vietnamese restaurant. I have gotten a better handle on the chopsticks...


k.

 

[biggbear8]

New Poems Reviews
for Saturday 30, 2005

"Where do you find inspiration for poetry?"
the student asked the teacher

"There is poetry in every thing you see,"
the teacher replied

the student laughed
"Does that include the out house?"

The teacher smiled
"Write a poem that overwhelms the reader
like the out house aroma does you!"

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CMLseries~ Fever Idol by wanton vixxxen

a blonde piece of tail with
tits He could suck from here;
halter top- halting nada thing
as she releases the wild beasts
{double DD’s if they’re an A}
Another pole worshiper’s prayer
on tongue licked ‘fuck me’ lips;

~~~~~~~~~~~

I was held captive with this enchanting and highly erotic poem, this series has multy levels of stories in an excellent poetic write and this addition is Paramount in a gripping poem about a rock star and his fans lustful apetite. <grin> I am enjoying this series and look forward to more!

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for one by ishtat

It seems so odd to shop for one,
but shopping’s done,
and now for tea but not for two.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~

a short and sweet poem or perhaps sweet and low
for one is the loneliest number...
that's why I have a cat. Great lil poem!

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Hot-and-Sour Fish Hot Pot

by kaishaku

The rice falls from a spoon
sinks to the bottom, mixing
Hot-and-Sour Fish Hot Pot
they taste it in the steam
a place they never knew.

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I enjoyed the mix of cultures blending..
very witty and crafted writing~
a well seasoned poem!

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Sun Swamp by chezcubby1

a clever write from an erotic poetic that has
dazzeled us with many witty writes and this one
is another pearl of a poem~

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holding my breath by tungtied2u

covering ground
to return to a home
devoid of sound
or soul to greet you there,
where only letters, clothing
and scents are left

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A masterful poem, the weaving of words and mindful wit
is extrodinary in tungs poem.
The melding of thoughts from carefull or naturally
that transformed into words to paint a picture that
touches deeply...the heart!

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There is a ninja in the nook and house so my post
is quiet as a mouse but my belly roll from the laughter
these poems exposed and a tear from the touch
from words poeticly dear, my review ... for this day ... this year.

there are a few more poems in the list so please read,
vote and comment to support and encourage our poets.

My Erotic Tale Chezcubby1 didnt write sun swamp it was written by Sensuall Just thought Id let you know and it is a very good poem

 

[Angeline]

My Erotic Tale Chezcubby1 didnt write sun swamp it was written by Sensuall Just thought Id let you know and it is a very good poem

Hiya Bigg! How ya been?

 

[annaswirls]

Twenty eight new poems to review today (May 3rd). Lots of personal odes and angst but here’s my take on what I read and liked.



annaswirls presents beauty, condensed as she begins to fill the recently depleted anna shelves. A great start.

“Sex and shiver of the sexual
being that moves beauty to its side
for a clear view of its closest companion.”

thank you Tess, it is fitting that you reviewed the first one on my new shelf, you were the first to comment on my poetry here at literotica last December

you never forget your first


I can't believe that I used sex twice in one line, damn it! This is what happens when you read, edit, read again, edit.... every time I read it I want to change something new. Never finished!

 

[Guest]

thank you Tess, it is fitting that you reviewed the first one on my new shelf, you were the first to comment on my poetry here at literotica last December

you never forget your first


I can't believe that I used sex twice in one line, damn it! This is what happens when you read, edit, read again, edit.... every time I read it I want to change something new. Never finished!

Oh! I was anna's first! *skipping*

(sex X 2 in this case is fine - IMO)

 

[flyguy69]

Oh! I was anna's first! *skipping*

(sex X 2 in this case is fine - IMO)

She says that to all the girls.

 

[Miss Oatlash]

Extraction

Merci beaucoup, mon Tess chéri.

 

[annaswirls]

okay Tess, sex times two it shall remain
just promise not to shower inbetween.

She says that to all the girls.

is that Tess's AV under your umbrella?

 

[flyguy69]

okay Tess, sex times two it shall remain
just promise not to shower inbetween.




is that Tess's AV under your umbrella?

Poor lass; got the umbrella handle caught in her hair. I'm simply there to assist.

 

[Guest]

Poor lass; got the umbrella handle caught in her hair. I'm simply there to assist.

I have to wonder why you felt it necessary to squeeze my buttocks during the operation.

 

[flyguy69]

I have to wonder why you felt it necessary to squeeze my buttocks during the operation.

It's a sort of modified Heimlich Manuever. Now I have to plug your mouth with my tongue.

 

[Guest]

Anybody seen the fly paper?