To keep the review thread clean...

[Lauren Hynde]

I'm still researching.

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Naked Chocolate

was a joke. I turned off feedback so folks would not try to think up nice things to say about it. Just whipped it up to play with the STC. Embarrassed by the H.

Many, many better poems yesterday and some of those were chocolate as well, and got bitter pc's.

I don't understand. Makes me feel a little sick to my stomach.

 

[Syndra Lynn]

I'm still researching.

I just asked so I could see your new AV pop up again.

PM me a link when ya get your thoughts together?

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Sure thing.

 

[champagne1982]

Sins and Mangos

Thankyou, Liar.

and all of you who support me. I value you your comments.

(an aside to YDD: I am posting these poems as I write them. I realize the styles vary. I can't imagine reading seven poems that are all the same, same style, same voice... Boring! By the way, I wasn't going to do a series on the sins until I'd found a home for my Zodiac Poems, but you inspired me when you asked about it So it's your fault these are getting written at all!)

I'm glad that people are finding something worth reading in my Sin Series. I think that once I do have them all posted I'll open a discussion thread where we all can talk about Dante and Virgil and sinning -- Oh yes! Sinning

And Naked Mango was just too much fun to write. That should be a sin in itself.

 

[Tathagata]

Thank you to JC and, I think it was Eve for the reviews
gahhhhhh
who ever
Thanks to ALL for your votes and comments and reviews and suggestions, ( yes you too YDD), thanks for the play and banter and jokes
thanks for accepting me into this madness and allowing me to accept you into mine
this is the most fun I've ever had with my pants on
: )

 

[Guest]

Naked Berry

Thank you Liar, for the mention and review of my poem, Naked Berry, yesterday. Your time and words are valued and appreciated


- neo

 

[Tathagata]

When I hold you to my breast,
tip my fingers over ridges
of your spine, turn my cheek
to flutter lashes on the thatches
of your chest, lay my dreams
against the hollow of your throat,
nothing matters

there.

All the weary days of care subside,
curled quiet as bright flores sleep,
dark, as if the Sun closed its shine to rest.

When you lay buried in the cave
of our confession, tell me what you feel.
Nothing was ever wrong that feels
like love.

Call it whatever you want.

I have seen the night
shade ochre in your eyes,
the twist of lips that pleasure,
almost a sob when hips jerk
and we tremble together,
release the only freedom
we have left.

I just want to Bow to this.........
_/\_
beautiful

who are you??
please post more

 

[tarablackwood22]

When I hold you to my breast,
tip my fingers over ridges
of your spine, turn my cheek
to flutter lashes on the thatches
of your chest, lay my dreams
against the hollow of your throat,
nothing matters

there.

All the weary days of care subside,
curled quiet as bright flores sleep,
dark, as if the Sun closed its shine to rest.

When you lay buried in the cave
of our confession, tell me what you feel.
Nothing was ever wrong that feels
like love.

Call it whatever you want.

I have seen the night
shade ochre in your eyes,
the twist of lips that pleasure,
almost a sob when hips jerk
and we tremble together,
release the only freedom
we have left.

....................atta girl.


Born Too Late - new poem......please read!

even now - ne poem......please read.

 

[Guest]

The night curved stars upon us like a veil
folded over the jagged scars of day.
Too dark to see your tongue against my pale
flesh settled soft around you where we lay
within the breathless murmurs of the breeze
and curtains barely moving in the chill
hour where lovers touch and take their ease
to strain against the need of each one's will.
O fallen like the apples of my breasts
into your desire. Move me, take me
out of this vale of life, where pain arrests
my joy, too often to forget and flee
into this petaled passion, garden soft,
beating with limbs like wings ascend aloft.

Double WOW! For this and the previous one you posted.

 

[JCSTREET]

Re: Re: I'm always on the lookout for new poems

Well, JC, I'm glad my name amused you.

I hope you mean that you wanton dim sum

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: Re: I'm always on the lookout for new poems

I hope you mean that you wanton dim sum

bada boom
thank you
JC will be here all week

 

[minsue]

Tath, I gotta tell ya. I love your new title.

 

[Tathagata]

Tath, I gotta tell ya. I love your new title.

hehehehe
thank you sweetheart
Tis truer than ya know.....

 

[Tathagata]

This world is made of opposites
and is unbalanced for now
but the wheel turns slowly
and the balance returns
the healers will always out weigh the hurters
so sit and heal, my friend
and know your own outcome
but remember to pray for the hurters;
the weak ones, the addicted ones,
the ones who can only dream of being
other than what they truly are.
You are blessed with such gifts of giving,
and sharing. Fear not the poor souls
who can only hide behind their sins
using them as crutches.
they will fade back into the woodwork
as do the roaches
when the light is shone upon them.
Remember you are loved.

shhhhhhh dont tell

 

[jthserra]

I am not sure if this is the right thread...

but I need to see if I can get someone to take over the Monday night reviews. I just haven't accomplished what I wanted to do when I started them.


thanks,

jim : )

 

[Liar]

Re: I am not sure if this is the right thread...

but I need to see if I can get someone to take over the Monday night reviews. I just haven't accomplished what I wanted to do when I started them.

Not permanently, but I have sod all to do this monday (had a party planned, but my boring friends stood me up ), so I could jump in this week.

#L

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: I am not sure if this is the right thread...

Not permanently, but I have sod all to do this monday (had a party planned, but my boring friends stood me up ), so I could jump in this week.

#L

those pricks...........
come drink with me

um
party does mean drink right??

where are you again??
some nordic country
grab a few blonde free spirited babes and head on over
we have a pool
now
wooooooooooooooooooo
impressive eh??
not to mention lots of good beer and scotch

 

[Angeline]

Neo, thanks again for the nod on Copacetic Ghosts. It's actually a major rewrite of a poem I first did last fall for the Copacetic Persuasion title challenge. Eve's poem got me thinking about it. I figured I needed to finally express why I write all those jazz poems, lol. And yes, music is I think my major influence in writing--it's certainly never out of my head.


Ange

 

[WickedEve]

Sunday Update

neo, more appeared awhile ago.
there are just under 60 poems.

For anyone checking out the reviews, make sure to check all the new poems. If neo, or some other kind poet, doesn't get an opportunity to review the rest, I'll try to do it later.

 

[perks]

Re: Sunday Update

neo, more appeared awhile ago.
there are just under 60 poems.

For anyone checking out the reviews, make sure to check all the new poems. If neo, or some other kind poet, doesn't get an opportunity to review the rest, I'll try to do it later.

I'll do it. Working on it now.

 

[JCSTREET]

I know that feeling

I'll do it. Working on it now.

when you think youre over the hump and suddenly a tsunami rolls in taking out most of the boardwalk

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Re: I am not sure if this is the right thread...

but I need to see if I can get someone to take over the Monday night reviews. I just haven't accomplished what I wanted to do when I started them.


thanks,

jim : )

Am I the only one who finds this note distressing? We are losing a brilliant poet friend, here. He does wonderful reviews and gives honest helpful feedback.

Jim, I hope you will reconsider. I always look forward to your Monday reviews.

I will miss you if you go.

Syn

 

[tarablackwood22]

Re: Re: I am not sure if this is the right thread...

Am I the only one who finds this note distressing? We are losing a brilliant poet friend, here. He does wonderful reviews and gives honest helpful feedback.

Jim, I hope you will reconsider. I always look forward to your Monday reviews.

I will miss you if you go.

Syn

Yes, Syn...I also find it very distressing. Jim's reviews and feedback (and his poetry too, of course) are always first-rate.

I second the reconsider request.


the eyes of future mornings - new poem....please read

Born Too Late - new poem.....please read.

 

[tungtied2u]

Re: Re: Re: I am not sure if this is the right thread...

Yes, Syn...I also find it very distressing. Jim's reviews and feedback (and his poetry too, of course) are always first-rate.

I second the reconsider request.


the eyes of future mornings - new poem....please read

Born Too Late - new poem.....please read.

Make that 3... please reconsider Jim. Your reviews are valued as is your poetry.