To keep the review thread clean...

[champagne1982]

It's Tuesday again already? How'd that happen?!?!?

I'll likely be working late again tonight, but I see the lovely Miss Swirls has already popped in with a couple of must reads. Anna, how could that bother anyone?

I'll be by eventually with my two cents...

Thanks for the little piece of a penny that mentioned my poem "Lounge Lizard", didn't expect another sin poem, did ya?

Now that I have all seven, I suppose I should put together that discussion thread I've been thinking about.

All seven sins are linked in my signature..

 

[Angeline]

well you just made me feel something, kiddo. Wow! I was almost there. Thanks for sharing, Ange

 

[lostandfounder]

Thanks

It's Tuesday again already? How'd that happen?!?!?

I'll likely be working late again tonight, but I see the lovely Miss Swirls has already popped in with a couple of must reads. Anna, how could that bother anyone?

I'll be by eventually with my two cents...

Thanks for mentioning "Depression and Damnation" Minsue. How you folks can keep up with the flood of poems is beyond me. Must be the abilities of a superior mind....




PS I adore your avatar!

 

[Randi Grail]

A big hug to annaswirls for mentioning my two poems yesterday. There were so many good ones there that I was sure I'd drown in the flood of them. Good job everyone! I just wish I had the time and patience to tell you all in person how much I love what you guys write.

 

[tarablackwood22]

originally posted by Minsue

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fell in love with tarablackwood22's the ghosts of daddy's pool hall . I've never been there, but somehow I still miss it after reading this. Simply lovely.

later,
out of habit,
the blue barkeep toweled rings
from the pine top and tables
for the new day
that never came.
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Thank you, Min.

 

[fawnie]

I was drawn right into the nightmares infawnie's Through The Eyes Of A Child. A poem that is as difficult to read as it is well-written.

pungent words, too foul
for young ears, cutting
and mincing
raw heart
for the stew.




thank you min!

 

[tarablackwood22]

I was drawn right into the nightmares infawnie's Through The Eyes Of A Child. A poem that is as difficult to read as it is well-written.

pungent words, too foul
for young ears, cutting
and mincing
raw heart
for the stew.

thank you min!

Fawnie...those are the best words you've written!!

........mincing raw heart for the stew......!! what a striking image! That's POETRY, girl!


the ghosts of daddy's pool hall -new poem......please read!

 

[fawnie]

Fawnie...those are the best words you've written!!

........mincing raw heart for the stew......!! what a striking image! That's POETRY, girl!


the ghosts of daddy's pool hall -new poem......please read!

thanks tara, ..and thank you too for your help in editing it, i have learned so much from listening to you.

"can't teach an old dog new tricks" this bitch begs to differ.

really though i'm so glad for you taking the time to give advice!
with felt affections, fawnie



through the eyes of a child ...for your reading pleasure!

 

[tarablackwood22]

loitering for dawn

EDITED off ......wrong board.......sorry Anna.


the ghosts of daddy's pool room -new poem.....please read!

 

[lipsticksunset1984]

THANKS SYNDRA LYNN !

originally posted by Syndra Lynn

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the eyesight of evening by lipsticksunset1984, one of our newest poets, offers wonderful phrases and images.

she stares
at the genius
of October orange,
tangerine tingles,

the jingles
of a long-lost lover
returning
with color and song.

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Many thanks for mentioning my poem, Syndra Lynn.

 

[Guest]

not trying to show off but

I have been known to change matter
with my thoughts
and words
unintentionally


like the time I saw a wire floating thin
in the pool
"snake" I cried
feigning fear

then bravery as I treaded closer
closer and Janet said
"don't!"

and I said "Janet, it is just a wire!"

"Dont!"

come on look it is just a wire

reaching out to touch it

swimming like
well like a snake in water!

I think I might have peed


and the time I saw the cows in the meadow
on our midnight slumber party walk to the bridge over the Macoby

"oh my god there is a person down there"
I feign fear again

knowing it is only sleepy bovine
trying to reel friends into a frenzy

I grab the flashlight
shine it down into the meadow


it lands on the face
of a man!

a Senior!

in my meadow


and look there is another
and another

we scream knowing full well it is just
the boys from the team
who have a crush on this that and the other
slumber party goer


this is not a poem

I am just trying to find something to do with my evening

it is Thursday

I u sed to do laundry on thurday night
and watch friends and something and er


I have not watched tv in 7 months

but if I saw say that enough times I am sure
I will be sitting in front of the box
willing it to happen

god or somebody help me

Pssst! It's Wednesday.

 

[Angeline]

Re: PART I - THURS REVIEWS TO PLEASE AND DELIGHT THE EARLY BIRDS

REVUJ24

Annaswirls is pensive in Nothing

At the funeral home
grandma threw herself on your coffin.
Maybe you weren't named right.
Death was confused, should have come
for her, for any of the old ones.
She pounded her head on the brass,
sobbing. The men had to pull her off,
and I felt nothing.

The reader feels a sense of foreboding because numbness
in the face of death can lead to guilt and trauma later

In verse two the poet reveals that it is her sister
who died, but verse three provides tangential relief
from the tension of the scene

It was cold in the synagogue,
I think, and the Rabbi said we
are all children of Israel, but Daddy
paid him after the burial and he left
for the train to New York.

But then--metaphorically--like the refrain of a blues lyric

I felt nothing anyway.

and finally

They said I cried then, just the once,
but the blessing of not feeling
is a gift in hardship, and now
when I finger that frayed black grosgrain,
I still feel nothing

Though the poet asserts that "not feeling is a gift in
hardship" there can be an aeful price to pay for that
in future years.
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more poetry bulletins as they happen throughout the day
--stay tuned

Nothing is my poem, JC, but I kinda like being confused with the very talented Ms. Swirly

 

[WickedEve]

JC: "and yet another apparent fuck poem from Wicked Eve--actually
filed late the day before Minute Maid

but it's actually not"

Okay, it's not. Glad you pointed that out. lol
But what I take offense to is the word "another." It's as if I slap fuck poems on lit on a regular basis. My poetry is mostly non erotic and if there is a fuck poem or two in the mix, it's damned fucking good. Now bite my fine fucking ass. Oh, you have me so riled up! Yet another apparent fuck poem!!!

By the way, if I misunderstood, then ignore what I said above.

 

[WickedEve]

Syn and Anna, thank you for the recent mentions. I appreciate it.

 

[Liar]

Tomorrow is midsummer night's eve, and I'll be out in the countryside, getting seriously drunk and preform pagan rituals, including the raicing of a seven meter symbolic cock...
(some kind of Viking heritage, see pic)
...and probably my own un-symbolic one, due to all the gorgeous, scaintly summer (un-)clad people who are gonna be there.

So if someone not prone to such hedonistic drivel could take the friday reviews tomorrow, I'd be glad. If not, I'll just pop back on Saturday and give them my most hung over best.

#L

 

[Angeline]

Tomorrow is midsummer night's eve, and I'll be out in the countryside, getting seriously drunk and preform pagan rituals, including the raicing of a seven meter symbolic cock...
(some kind of Viking heritage, see pic)
...and probably my own un-symbolic one, due to all the gorgeous, scaintly summer (un-)clad people who are gonna be there.

So if someone not prone to such hedonistic drivel could take the friday reviews tomorrow, I'd be glad. If not, I'll just pop back on Saturday and give them my most hung over best.

#L

I've got a few things I must do tomorrow, but I'll try do at least some of them for you.

 

[JCSTREET]

OH--DEAR LADY

Nothing is my poem, JC, but I kinda like being confused with the very talented Ms. Swirly

quelle bummer

all fixed now and you've been raised to prominence Angeline

California poets are prolly not even out of their beds yet so at lest THEY have not seen this solecism

sowwy

assumes da position

 

[Angeline]

Re: OH--DEAR LADY

quelle bummer

all fixed now and you've been raised to prominence Angeline

California poets are prolly not even out of their beds yet so at lest THEY have not seen this solecism

sowwy

assumes da position

Ten lashes with the OED buddy.

 

[Liar]

I've got a few things I must do tomorrow, but I'll try do at least some of them for you.

Ah, you do honor to your Lit name, angelic one.

 

[SeattleRain]

JC: "and yet another apparent fuck poem from Wicked Eve--actually
filed late the day before Minute Maid

but it's actually not"

Okay, it's not. Glad you pointed that out. lol
But what I take offense to is the word "another." It's as if I slap fuck poems on lit on a regular basis. My poetry is mostly non erotic and if there is a fuck poem or two in the mix, it's damned fucking good. Now bite my fine fucking ass. Oh, you have me so riled up! Yet another apparent fuck poem!!!

By the way, if I misunderstood, then ignore what I said above.

omh what an honor to have gotten credit for Ange's poem even for a moment.

I think that JC was thinking about Seattle when he said another fuck poem....




You guys, if you have not read Eve's Machievellian poem, it is the fucking best non-fucking poem of hers I have read. It is freaking hilarious.

I can't seem to self-promote but when it comes to promoting others, I am all over it. This is really a cool poem.

~


perks Minsue Neo JC Syndra -- thank you all for reviewing my poems (anna&seattle) this week-- I apologize for not sending thank yous personally, I am having a really hard time keeping track of anything lately, including who posted what poem.... on what day.

I apologize and I thank all y'alls who are all so generous.



damn I feel like I am making an acceptance speech for an award that does not exist.....whats that? do I hear the music playing....

 

[SeattleRain]

Tomorrow is midsummer night's eve, and I'll be out in the countryside, getting seriously drunk and preform pagan rituals, including the raicing of a seven meter symbolic cock...
(some kind of Viking heritage, see pic)
...and probably my own un-symbolic one, due to all the gorgeous, scaintly summer (un-)clad people who are gonna be there.

So if someone not prone to such hedonistic drivel could take the friday reviews tomorrow, I'd be glad. If not, I'll just pop back on Saturday and give them my most hung over best.

#L

Ange, it is my baby's 3rd bd tomorrow, but I should have time if he decides to nap, give me a pm if you would like a hand, okay?

 

[WickedEve]

I think that JC was thinking about Seattle when he said another fuck poem....


You guys, if you have not read Eve's Machievellian poem, it is the fucking best non-fucking poem of hers I have read. It is freaking hilarious.

I can't seem to self-promote but when it comes to promoting others, I am all over it. This is really a cool poem.

I think I misread it. It was early. I'm on the verge of PMS. I had not yet had coffee.

Thanks for mentioning the mach poem.

 

[tarablackwood22]

Thanks JC

originally posted by JCStreet
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TARA BLACKWOOD is a diarist in

the wails of witch hazel

a rich videotape of morning vignettes -
folks out and about on their lawful occasions--caught in the
camera's eye--frozen for a moment we
see their caught faces and then
hear their talk, laughter, joshing, earnest
discussions.....she personalizes it - brings it into our own experience - just change the names - slap on a bit of mutatis mutandis and it's OUR town too.

Why isn't this woman a columnist for the Chi Tribune?? (does that paper still exist?? - 100s don't)

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Thank you, JC

 

[Tathagata]

I think I misread it. It was early. I'm on the verge of PMS. I had not yet had coffee.

That was on the verge ?!?!

Jaysus

 

[JCSTREET]

Re: Re: Re: I am not sure if this is the right thread...

Yes, Syn...I also find it very distressing. Jim's reviews and feedback (and his poetry too, of course) are always first-rate.

I second the reconsider request.


the eyes of future mornings - new poem....please read

Born Too Late - new poem.....please read.

I never got the background to this dilemma and not knowing what has happened is finally pissing mje off

whgat has happened to Jim

he was one of the more cerebral above the battle people in here and you could take his opinion to the bank

CarlieBear