Eleanora Day
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amante viii
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*Catbabe* said:I have nothing
to offer
to fix what's wrong
no wisdom to soothe
such a quiet ache
a raw pain
that eats at you,
except to say that
you were heard
today and that
in the quiet
of the night
a stranger's tears
fell for you.
Liar said:it brought me numb
to realise...
that beside our streams
other rivers flow
when we reconstitute
reality...
night after night
we just might not know
whose night rewrites
a picture of us
to mould into
another's universe
passer byers utter
under breath
to spellcast flutter
weave a voodoo curse
to snare and seduce
and weave a web
to wait and pray...
for that burning light
it struck me blind
to realise...
someone loved me
just out of sight
perks said:
Tath's Madpoet you were just writing and writing and writing... Did you edit this? I'm interested in your process with this one. Whether it was poetic stream of consciousness, or you actually edited, redited and so on. I think everyone should write a bar poem or three. I enjoy your perspective. As a poem, I'm not sold completely. I like some of your imagery, it just feels a bit disjointed in thought to me, and not smooth and ethereal as a ghost walk should.
Tathagata said:Thanks for the mention.
If you check the " construction" thread you'll see it went through at least 4 public edits as well as at least 3 private ones.
Tathagata said:Thanks for the mention.
If you check the " construction" thread you'll see it went through at least 4 public edits as well as at least 3 private ones.
perks said:btw, that last line that you quoted from me was from someone else's critique.
neonurotic said:Long week here in the Emerald City with Sea Fair about to begin and the Bite of Seattle at the Space Needle (which is a local resturaunt smorgasbord you can get fat and nasty over.) I also see that it has been just as long on poetry here on Literotica.
Anna will be here after awhile to do her reviews, but my Sunday mentions are ready to go... earlier than usual
55-ish or so Sunday poems hit the new poems list. Quite a few good poems today and here are the ones I read, voted, and enjoyed the most (on the top half the page of course):
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Victorian Amethyst by Tristesse ©
Just a trailer of this wonderful short piece that reminds me of a scene from Cameron's Titanic
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NeoPetal 5 by WickedEve is of course 5th in the NeoPetal series to which I find to be very interesting as the work is so very different from what I usually read on the board. NeoPetal 5 is a surreal erotic addition to this superb series.
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Out of the two poems I read today by miss Angeline, Working Girl and Nailed, the latter I found to be particularly witty because I've heard my mother mentioning the same with her thick southern accent and that there is reason enough for a fight or be fed to the gators.
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At a Loss for Words tungtied2u is a excellent write that is haunting, if not chilling reminder.
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New to me, poet, DeepAsleep had several poems that I thought were excellent, but Rocks, Splash of Water was such a great visual and tactile image it caught my eye as it mentioned good drink and felt real to me
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The Letter by hippiedude is a well balanced poem with some smooth rhyme and alliteration on reflection and regret.
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RazzRajen's Loss, is it? is an interesting piece that I thought had strong visual images the poem works one's mental adaptability as do all his poems in my opinion.
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Another new to me poet, jd4george, also subimitted a few excellent offerings today. The Salad Bar Gunslinger is an entertaining poem with a great title as were all jdgeorge's poems.
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One of my favorite poets, Liar presented Precious Cargo is a thought provoking read with a tone of a hope.
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Not Alone lostandfounder was a favorite read for Sunday. Great description on the 'metaphor' got to keep idle hands playing with mischief and learn to lock doors.
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That's it folks as I see perks reviewed a portion of Sunday and what she missed, annaswirls will surely catch.
Take it easy poets, read, comment, and vote from the New List. Take the time to do a Spinner for older poems because there are some great poems from the past as well.
- neo
Not Alone lostandfounder was a favorite read for Sunday. Great description on the 'metaphor' got to keep idle hands playing with mischief and learn to lock doors.
Victorian Amethyst by Tristesse ©
Just a trailer of this wonderful short piece that reminds me of a scene from Cameron's Titanic
perks said:to the first like twenty poems that I haven't done yet, I'll probably do them tomorrow. I just got beat up by that hyperchallenge, but it's submitted, thank fucking god.
Tristesse said:Cripes! I thought it was tomorrow for submitting to appear on the 20th!
Lauren Hynde said:
It's OK, Perks. At least now you can spend the day tomorrow practising for the shoot-out.
I'm still looking forward to read all the hypersonnets.
Lauren Hynde said:Hmm-
Actually, I haven't thought of anything for it, yet, so this would be a good time to try to bribe me.