To keep the review thread clean...

[PatCarrington]

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Brothers on the Crossed Hill by PatCarrington... what do I say about a piece like this? It is filled with fresh new language, uses a flurry of images to keep the reader pulled in...another must read

...where fathers of fathers are boxed,
winding the crazy clock that punishes
your summer words, cracking
the whips of winter on your tongue...

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thank you for the kind words, maria

/ and also to those who took the time to leave feeback
and criticism

pat

 

[JCSTREET]

Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

You're such a cute little trouble maker, JC. My approach as one of the God Mods is to let those who want to comment (new poetry comments) on this (new poetry review) thread do it. Hopefully, some will use the other threads. Then every week or two, once the commenters are happy and have forgotten their posts, I'll clean the poetry review thread out. That's what I've been doing and that's why it's not a big mess there. I think it's the way to keep us all happy. We have our comments and we have a fairly clean new poems review thread for those who want to read reviews and not chat.

Now go behave, JC. God Mod 1 has spoken.

jus' jerkin' . . . uh

your chain to see if you're still with us

haven't heard from you in a few days and knew this would tease you outa your lair

heh!

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

jus' jerkin' . . . uh

your chain to see if you're still with us

haven't heard from you in a few days and knew this would tease you outa your lair

heh!

I'm like a bare in her lair. Yes, bare.
I've been busy writing a story. I read stories to Big Daddy. I enjoy writing those really nasty parts so I can read them aloud. "Oh, I would never say anything so vulgar. I'm just reading what's on the paper." Sigh... it takes so little to make me happy sometimes.

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

I'm like a bare in her lair. Yes, bare.
I've been busy writing a story. I read stories to Big Daddy. I enjoy writing those really nasty parts so I can read them aloud. "Oh, I would never say anything so vulgar. I'm just reading what's on the paper." Sigh... it takes so little to make me happy sometimes.

Eve, I like your panties in the av.

Read me a nasty story sometime?

Syn

 

[WickedEve]

Re: New Poems Reviews

Eve, I like your panties in the av.

Read me a nasty story sometime?

Syn

That gives me an idea. I could charge for it! I have a paypal account. 9.95 for a 15 minute story. 14. 95 outside the US. This has possibilities.

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

That gives me an idea. I could charge for it! I have a paypal account. 9.95 for a 15 minute story. 14. 95 outside the US. This has possibilities.

great
another way for me to blow my paycheck
so to speak

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

great
another way for me to blow my paycheck
so to speak

Yeah, yeah. But I have this all worked out. I'll send you my email addy that I use for paypal. You make the payment and send me your number. I call using a phone card. You get 15 minutes of story. I'll even send you titles to select from: Let's Do It Like Monkeys, Butt Pickin' Cuntree, Pounding Poets. Or you may just want the 5.99 special which pretty much consists of: "Oh yes, Oh God, that's it baby" with a few moans and screams thrown in, and of course, the soothing background hum of a vibrator.


(Not that I've given this much thought.)

 

[BooMerengue]

*sitting here splutterin' my coffee... Eve! What kind of coffee do you drink? I want to wake up and be like you!

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

Yeah, yeah. But I have this all worked out. I'll send you my email addy that I use for paypal. You make the payment and send me your number. I call using a phone card. You get 15 minutes of story. I'll even send you titles to select from: Let's Do It Like Monkeys, Butt Pickin' Cuntree, Pounding Poets. Or you may just want the 5.99 special which pretty much consists of: "Oh yes, Oh God, that's it baby" with a few moans and screams thrown in, and of course, the soothing background hum of a vibrator.


(Not that I've given this much thought.)

Butt Pickin' Cuntree?
I think you have a career in porn movie titles..

15 minutes?
you realize why they don't rent porn by the minute right?

You'd be saying "once upon a time" and I'd already be cleaning up and having a cigarette

 

[WickedEve]

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

Butt Pickin' Cuntree?
I think you have a career in porn movie titles..

15 minutes?
you realize why they don't rent porn by the minute right?

You'd be saying "once upon a time" and I'd already be cleaning up and having a cigarette

Okay, I don't rent porn. So, 15 minutes is too long? Maybe I should charge 19.95 for 5 minutes of moaning and heavy breathing. I could pant. No, I might hyperventilate. Hmmm... Oh, I could get a wet sponge and squeeze it really fast and say, "Listen to how wet you make me! Oh baby! Time's up."

Perhaps, I should give this more thought.

 

[WickedEve]

*sitting here splutterin' my coffee... Eve! What kind of coffee do you drink? I want to wake up and be like you!

Don't laugh, but I just turned my coffee pot on... so no coffee yet.

 

[Tathagata]

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Hmmm... Oh, I could get a wet sponge and squeeze it really fast and say, "Listen to how wet you make me! Oh baby! Time's up."

ROFL

You know what my first thought was of course....

" I gotta see if a sponge sounds like that...and if it does someones got some 'splainin' to do"

 

[WickedEve]

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ROFL

You know what my first thought was of course....

" I gotta see if a sponge sounds like that...and if it does someones got some 'splainin' to do"

You need a squishy sounding sponge. One that sounds like busy, plunging fingers. Wow, I could use sound effects over the phone. I could hang a side of beef up and slap it. "Yeah, I'm slapping my ass. Oh, baby, wish you here smacking this rump for me!" On second thoughts, it would be easier to slap my own butt.

 

[BooMerengue]

Don't laugh, but I just turned my coffee pot on... so no coffee yet.

uh oh... are you on meds? or off them?

(I wrote the wet sponge thingy in my notebook- good idea!)

 

[WickedEve]

uh oh... are you on meds? or off them?

(I wrote the wet sponge thingy in my notebook- good idea!)

I'm on meds but not for my head, surprisingly. lol

 

[Tathagata]

Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: Re: New Poems Reviews

You need a squishy sounding sponge. One that sounds like busy, plunging fingers. Wow, I could use sound effects over the phone. I could hang a side of beef up and slap it. "Yeah, I'm slapping my ass. Oh, baby, wish you here smacking this rump for me!" On second thoughts, it would be easier to slap my own butt.

My whole world has just been consumed by doubt

 

[BooMerengue]

I'm on meds but not for my head, surprisingly. lol

well whatever you're doing, don't fix it!

 

[WickedEve]

doubt

My whole world has just been consumed by doubt

Oh, poor, poor monkey.


hee hee hee

 

[Tathagata]

Re: doubt

Oh, poor, poor monkey.


hee hee hee

Oh that just Drips with sympathy

 

[BooMerengue]

You can wash a baby bottle for that nice squishy in and out sound...

 

[Tathagata]

You can wash a baby bottle for that nice squishy in and out sound...

 

[WickedEve]

You can wash a baby bottle for that nice squishy in and out sound...

Maybe clean the toilet. That could work if you want a guy to think you're like splashy wet.

 

[Tathagata]

Maybe clean the toilet. That could work if you want a guy to think you're like splashy wet.

any one that wet doesn't need me adding to the problem,....
so to speak

 

[WickedEve]

any one that wet doesn't need me adding to the problem,....
so to speak

You're not excited by the thought of causing crashing waves of... umm... water?
Okay, enough wetness! Dry off and check out the challenges I just posted!!! Yeeeehaw! (4th cup of coooffffeeee)

 

[Tathagata]

You're not excited by the thought of causing crashing waves of... umm... water?
Okay, enough wetness! Dry off and check out the challenges I just posted!!! Yeeeehaw! (4th cup of coooffffeeee)

Yeeehaw??