To keep the review thread clean...

[wesleyann]

Thanks Deep Asleep for the kind words. Sorry about the disclaimer, just as I was about to post it I realized that it might be misconstrued. Most of my poetry is fairly positive and upbeat and I didn't want my first submission to go there. It's really about rest.

As for the capitals and such, Damn thee MS Word and shame on me for not being more patient and tweaking it right before I submitted.

Patience has never been my virtue.

WA

 

[flyguy69]

For some reason I just now noticed this post. It was the way Thing beckoned, right?

For some reason Thing reminded me of my first girlfriend.

 

[flyguy69]

darnit, i waned the wry commentary job. i'm good at that.

you can do rye commentary.

"rye commissary" would be a good name for a deli.

 

[annaswirls]

"rye commissary" would be a good name for a deli.

rye commissonary position would be a good name for a thread ​

 

[flyguy69]

rye commissonary position would be a good name for a thread ​

try compulsory poison would be good advice for this thread!

 

[annaswirls]

try compulsory poison would be good advice for this thread!

I prefer confectionary poison



spoonful of sugar and the color war

 

[Angeline]

For some reason Thing reminded me of my first girlfriend.

I imagine that'd be true for a lot of guys.

 

[twelveoone]

A comment on the comment

There are 30 new submissions on this first Thursday of March, and I have one non-erotic "spinner" from the past.

For today's spinaroony I bring a poem from June of last year.

First spin luck! It took only one spin to find this poem by Wicked Eve. I am told by the poet that the surface level is all there is. Frost said something like, "Anything beyond the sound of the words belongs to you." Well, I can go a lot deeper, especially with the last two lines. I wonder if the subconscious makes poets say things they don't know they mean? Anybody got thoughts on that? Think about it and read:


Now on to some of the poems I found most interesting today. (Note the emphasis on "I".)

Of the 30 poems listed today, more than half were posted by one author.
such fecundity requires mention if only for pertinacity.

Well done Rybka! This is excellent, I like this feature, this comparison. I agree, like it or not, the truth comes out (buried) in the words, Eve's shading of words is masterful.
Your shading has shown a bit of improvement also. Honest.
1201

 

[perks]

what? no one put in a bio for me? I'm shocked and dismayed.

 

[Maria2394]

what? no one put in a bio for me? I'm shocked and dismayed.

Yaaayyyy!!!! I missed you so much!!! hugs& kisses, damn girl---I wrote apoem for you on the passion thread just last week, i hope you dont disappear again

maria

 

[perks]

Yaaayyyy!!!! I missed you so much!!! hugs& kisses, damn girl---I wrote apoem for you on the passion thread just last week, i hope you dont disappear again

maria

hey babyla, thank angeline for finding me, and linking me to your poem. I reciprocated, if that's even a word

 

[Guest]

Du!

More neonurotic

My poem of the day....
So much to say.. first simple, just like intimate desires should be. Spiritual for it speaks so strong of more than a physical question... Powerful, in the union of the genders strengthening each other... Stunning in all its simplicity.
thank you for the inspiration...

Thank you for the mention and good words, it is appreciated (and does wonders for my poet's ego!)

 

[LadyJeanne]

Japanesse red maple <grin>

Erotic Poem
A Seduction in the Dark

by LadyJeanne

clip~
Our trembling bodies softly stilled; heart
beats lazy in the hush.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~`

This poem is inspirational, I find good erotic
poetry not easily written or read but this
read was smoothe as silken skin and soft
as a trailing finger, very very good poetry.
I like a Ryhming poem that reads well and
a topic that's juicy <grin>

I'm humbled and honored and deliciously amazed
to see my poetry so beautifully praised.

Thank you, sweets!

A japanese maple swaying in the moonlight..

Dance Lesson LadyJeanne
Wonderful contrast of lesson learning.. this is a song, I can hear it song with a haunting beautiful female voice. I loved the imagines here and this part is wonderful...
Quote:
You were teaching me to trust
on that roughly polished floor
in that casino bar.

"Just look in my eyes and follow me."

I tried, I did,
and there was all this spinning and dipping...
and your eyes subtly guiding...

Life lessons on a smooth worn floor..

Your kind and thoughtful words inpsire
me to sway and sing as you desire.

Grateful hugs and kisses for you!

Thank you both for you wonderful reviews. I'm thrilled my words made an impression.

 

[duckiesmut]

If someone could cover Monday's reviews for today, I would be grateful. Not feeling so hot, and bed is sounding like a very good idea. Thanks in advance, whoever helps out.

 

[Angeline]

VilleSonnet: Grasshopper's song
by My Erotic Tale ©

(VilleSonnet, an idea sparked by The_Fool and Angeline (grasshopper))

Grasshopper's song

I sat and listened to the grasshopper,
not far from me I heard her chirping song.
It filled me with peace as if I belonged.
Her tranquil melody rang a heart throbber.

Want to know the thrill of a villesonnet? Then go read one.

They're even more thrilling to write. Chirp.

 

[Angeline]

duckiesmut posted on the thread...
to keep the review thread clear ...
that they were ill and needed assitance doing
Mondays reviews,

I read them all and I will let democracy rule, two poems
had a staggering amount of comments and those two poems
are ...

NEW POEMS REVIEWS
for Monday 07, 2005
duckiesmut's Reviews (relief effort)


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Some Days by Angeline

clip~
Some days were wild dances,
a variegated festival of senses
where the ferris wheel creaked
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
There is so much to like about this poem, a jolt
back to ferris wheels, balloons and craker jacks
there is nothing this poem lacks <grin>

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

<snip>

Thank you Art for recommending my poem and thank you those who commented. I especially appreciate the critical comments, even if some of you can't agree on what I need to change, lol. I am going to edit it, but I'm keeping "lasso." I like it and it has a sentimental meaning for me--cause I wrote a story about my son lassoing the clouds.

 

[Du Lac]

kind regards to Sophia

Thank you very much!!!!!!!
for the mention of my poem Tellus Kissed!
And to all who commented on it I so appreciate your kind words!
Du Lac~

 

[duckiesmut]

Thank you for covering on Monday, My Erotic Tale. Bed was definitely a good idea.

 

[Guest]

Thank you so much to those who commented and gave feedback on my
new poem Snafu. To HOPE!!

A to you all!

 

[twelveoone]

Jim,
I know, I shouldn't do this. You back doing reviews? You are one of my favourites.
Just had to say.

 

[Du Lac]

RE: Thursday's Reviews...

Rybka,

I have read all of the new poems posted today and, of the 20, I cannot find one I want to recommend as a "must read". None, in my opinion, rise above the others sufficiently to warrant a specific mention.

I do not mean to be rude.. but that was a horrible critique of the day. You came across as superior and that those who wrote poems were not worth your effort or time. Now.. there were some decent writes today... we all can not be Emily Dickenson, Poe, Stevens, cummings.. etc.. but the review today was a slap in the face to so many who need encouragement to learn, open up and explore writing.

For me.. I know my poem of the day was mediocre.. it is old and a learning poem in the path of my own education.... I find that if we make the time to help each other see what is good and what is bad in our writing we grow.

IS THERE A MEAN STREAK THAT RUNS RAMPANT IN THIS FORUM????? I FIND SO MANY HERE SO WILLING TO PUT DOWN PEOPLE AND THEIR WRITING AND SO MANY LACKING THE TRUE UNDERSTANDING OF A FORUM SUCH AS THIS.... If you can not make the time to at least comment on a poem or two of the day.. don't do it.

While I know I will be bombarded with 1 votes, nasty PM's and all out rudeness.. most likely put on an ignore list.. LOL.. I could care less.. one must voice when a wrong is done...

You encourage others to encourage the poets.. but your reviews do just the opposite.. a rhetorical contrast....

You are entitled to your voice.. but you got it right on your Avatar.. a crappy critic..

Du Lac

 

[Syndra Lynn]

Rybka,




I do not mean to be rude.. but that was a horrible critique of the day. You came across as superior and that those who wrote poems were not worth your effort or time. Now.. there were some decent writes today... we all can not be Emily Dickenson, Poe, Stevens, cummings.. etc.. but the review today was a slap in the face to so many who need encouragement to learn, open up and explore writing.

For me.. I know my poem of the day was mediocre.. it is old and a learning poem in the path of my own education.... I find that if we make the time to help each other see what is good and what is bad in our writing we grow.

IS THERE A MEAN STREAK THAT RUNS RAMPANT IN THIS FORUM????? I FIND SO MANY HERE SO WILLING TO PUT DOWN PEOPLE AND THEIR WRITING AND SO MANY LACKING THE TRUE UNDERSTANDING OF A FORUM SUCH AS THIS.... If you can not make the time to at least comment on a poem or two of the day.. don't do it.

While I know I will be bombarded with 1 votes, nasty PM's and all out rudeness.. most likely put on an ignore list.. LOL.. I could care less.. one must voice when a wrong is done...

You encourage others to encourage the poets.. but your reviews do just the opposite.. a rhetorical contrast....

You are entitled to your voice.. but you got it right on your Avatar.. a crappy critic..

Du Lac

With all due respect, Du~ the proper way to chide Rybka would be to choose 2 or 3 of today's poems and remark on them, encourage their writers. There were plenty of times when I did the reviews that I read 47 poems and felt like just printing, "All of today's poems suck. I have no review."

Her only commitment to her day's review is to read all posted poems and give her opinion. She did.

So jump in there and encourage some of today's writers. Go writers go!

Respectfully,

Syndra Lynn

 

[flyguy69]

Rybka,

I do not mean to be rude.. but that was a horrible critique of the day.
...
.. a crappy critic..

Du Lac

I have to side with Syndra, here. I do not see the role of reviewer as cheerleader-- that role is ours. If the reviewer is to comment on every poem they will lose their value (to me) because I look there for recommendations on the more remarkable offerings of the day. I, frankly, don't care what Rybka (or anyone else) thinks about every single poem-- I am perfectly capable of forming my own opinions and if I want to know the contents of every submission I know where the "New Poems" link is.

As Syndra (and Rybka) point out, there is no monopoly on the review thread. If I want to cite a poem that I particularly enjoyed, whether the reviewer for the day agrees with me or not, I am free to do so (and have).

Finally, thank you Du, for your efforts in review. It is a great deal of work, and I appreciate your willingness and effort.

 

[BooMerengue]

I read Ryb's post, and then I went and read the New Poems, and I agree w/ Rybka. There was nothing outstanding. And he's entitled to say so. He didn't say they all suck... just that he saw nothing worthy of mentioning. Thats the reviewers priviledge- it's what I did when I did my Mentions.

I think he did the writers of todays poems a favor. If they want to be mentioned in the New Poem reviews, they'll have to try harder next time. Thats a whole lot kinder than what some reviewers do.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

The New Poetry thread isn't a vanity thread, nor was it created for the poets' sake. It was started because of the readers who don't have time to read all the poems of the list every day. If a reviewer doesn't see anything worth recommending, then so be it.