The General Commentary Thread

[Lyricalli]

Even after all of this time
Sometimes, when I close my eyes
all I can see is her

Lev (since you didn't say I couldn't call you that), thanks for making me cry. This one touched all kinds of tender places.

 

[todski28]

Lev (since you didn't say I couldn't call you that), thanks for making me cry. This one touched all kinds of tender places.

I agree, except I didn’t cry, but I’m sure if you touched my tender places Lev, I’d probably cry though I’m happy for you to watch

 

[29wordsforsnow]

No idea, where to put that otherwise:
there's a 'COVID Vaccination' contest currently on rhymezone - yeah, I'm cheat-meat, treat me - just in case there are still some lines in you to cheer on the masses or you can't have enough poetry injected into your sane main brain membrane.

 

[iso36]

Hi I'm new how are you?

 

[Lyricalli]

Hi I'm new how are you?

Hello, and welcome to Lit

You've posted in the poetry forum. If you have an interest in poetry, take a look around and join in.

There are many forums, and many threads, so please be sure to post in the proper thread for what you'd like to discuss. Hope you enjoy your time here.

 

[Lyricalli]

I must admit I'm not sure how/if this will work but suggest the following

1. The first author posts line 1, while I expect that this would work best as free verse, the first author may specify rhyme and meter on the first line
2. the second author copies the first line adds the second and posts the 2 line work below the preceding posts
3. the process repeats until a the work is nine lines long.
4. an author can submit at most 2 lines to the 9 line work. Lines cannot be consecutive
5. the next author posts the first line of the new nonette and the cycle repeats.

.

I didn't want to interrupt the poem flow.

This sounds good, and should be fun. There are enough of us here who will play along to make it work, I think. Good idea, Piscator. Nice to have a light community non-challenge after the NaPo.

 

[Tzara]

Well, that was unexpected.

 

[Angeline]

Well, that was unexpected.

Maybe not so surprising.

Wicked Eve once said that sometimes my halo falls into the onion dip.

 

[todski28]

Well, that was unexpected.

And sometimes thats all for the best

I was thinking of a reply for that piece when it first got posted then I forgot about it and now I’m glad I did because that was well.... better

 

[Tzara]

Maybe not so surprising.

Wicked Eve once said that sometimes my halo falls into the onion dip.

It's always the quiet ones. . . .

 

[Lyricalli]

Well, that was unexpected.

Indeed


Angie, when I saw your name as the most recent post in Just Porn, I knew it was going to be something good. I didn't expect that particular sort of romp, but it was very fun reading. I quite enjoyed it.

I also enjoyed your Everyday Erotica, as well. You're certainly on a roll.


I'm a big fan of onion dip, but I don't mind your halo falling in it at all.

 

[todski28]

Indeed


Angie, when I saw your name as the most recent post in Just Porn, I knew it was going to be something good. I didn't expect that particular sort of romp, but it was very fun reading. I quite enjoyed it.

I also enjoyed your Everyday Erotica, as well. You're certainly on a roll.


I'm a big fan of onion dip, but I don't mind your halo falling in it at all.

I’d be careful lest she pop it over your head and cinch it tight, there’s whispers she quite the dominant one with a strap on...

There again well

 

[Angeline]

Indeed


Angie, when I saw your name as the most recent post in Just Porn, I knew it was going to be something good. I didn't expect that particular sort of romp, but it was very fun reading. I quite enjoyed it.

I also enjoyed your Everyday Erotica, as well. You're certainly on a roll.


I'm a big fan of onion dip, but I don't mind your halo falling in it at all.

Thank you.

Sometimes it's good to push outside my comfort zone!

I’d be careful lest she pop it over your head and cinch it tight, there’s whispers she quite the dominant one with a strap on...

There again well

Lol. Back in my childhood neighborhood they called telling people what to do being bossy.

 

[Lyricalli]

Thank you.

Sometimes it's good to push outside my comfort zone!

Agreed, though I know that can be, well, uncomfortable.

I’d be careful lest she pop it over your head and cinch it tight, there’s whispers she quite the dominant one with a strap on...

There again well

Exactly

 

[Lyricalli]

So much writing here to catch up on from the last few days. Looking forward to doing that

 

[Piscator]

Sloppy Seconds or Second Cummings?

The recent revival of the Five Senses Challenge has led to some hot interchanges and quality works. However, as Tzara noted, sometimes a great response to the Challenge is stifled because the prompts have already been used.

Should we consider starting an auxiliary thread "Sloppy Seconds" or perhaps "Second Cummings" where these works could be posted?

 

[Angeline]

Sloppy Seconds or Second Cummings?

The recent revival of the Five Senses Challenge has led to some hot interchanges and quality works. However, as Tzara noted, sometimes a great response to the Challenge is stifled because the prompts have already been used.

Should we consider starting an auxiliary thread "Sloppy Seconds" or perhaps "Second Cummings" where these works could be posted?

An excellent idea. I vote an enthusiastic "yes," although I prefer the title "Second Cummings" as those poems are far from sloppy!

 

[todski28]

An excellent idea. I vote an enthusiastic "yes," although I prefer the title "Second Cummings" as those poems are far from sloppy!

Also adds some class with a slight allusion to EE Cummings,


Your latest in all of a sudden, the last two line are a shotgun blast to the chest...

 

[Angeline]

Also adds some class with a slight allusion to EE Cummings,


Your latest in all of a sudden, the last two line are a shotgun blast to the chest...

Thanks. He was a dear friend who died suddenly (and right after a gig) in 2018. A lovely guy and fantastic musician. The other person mentioned in that poem died last November. Growing old is not for the faint of heart!

I hadn't thought of the EE Cummings connection, but you're right! Second Cummings also makes me think of the Yeats poem.

 

[Angeline]

Welcome back Fooly. It's a real pleasure to read you here again.

 

[The_Fool]

Welcome back Fooly. It's a real pleasure to read you here again.

Kisses to my virtual lover from afar...

That could be a blurt.

.....

Don't tell me her lips are...
intangible
because I felt them warm
soft on mine.
Her hair draped in our faces
as we silently spoke words
of affection
and playful desire.
I've always loved
the way she smiled
through her kisses
that trembled into laughter.
words not spoken,
either hello
or goodbye.
Wait...
never goodbye.
Until next time.

 

[The_Fool]

I's sure I broke a rule someplace about posting something I shouldn't in the wrong thread. but IDGAF.

 

[Angeline]

Kisses to my virtual lover from afar...

That could be a blurt.

.....

Don't tell me her lips are...
intangible
because I felt them warm
soft on mine.
Her hair draped in our faces
as we silently spoke words
of affection
and playful desire.
I've always loved
the way she smiled
through her kisses
that trembled into laughter.
words not spoken,
either hello
or goodbye.
Wait...
never goodbye.
Until next time.

And kisses back to you my dear friend. Remember the illustrated poem about the blues in the blue pickup truck?

I's sure I broke a rule someplace about posting something I shouldn't in the wrong thread. but IDGAF.

Sez the guy with the sestina spreadsheet.

 

[Angeline]

Calli your poem just posted in the Love Poems thread is really good. It's direct and kind of blunt but also very moving. It says a lot in an understated way.

 

[Lyricalli]

Calli your poem just posted in the Love Poems thread is really good. It's direct and kind of blunt but also very moving. It says a lot in an understated way.

Thank you, Angie. I'm in a phase where most of my writing is a collection of snippets, thoughts, and phrases that aren't coming together for me. Then, this one started writing itself, so it's nice to hear that it works and comes through well.