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Trent_Dutch
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WickedEve said:
Is that the Salemi article... I've only read his piece 'Why poetry is dying'. But he mentions in that piece that he discusses the portentous hush 'phenomena' in earlier criticism. Is there an earlier piece to this does anyone know?
Three of four poems have been removed...
Hopefully my post here won't be removed like my other one.
All of Sugarbaby4u's poems have been removed except for her "Slave" : http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=191516 which bears a considerable resemblence to the following poem copywritten to: Angelia Sparrow way back in 1991
Even worse than taking the lines... the latest version rips apart a pretty good sestina:
Slavery Sestina
I kneel before you, a trembling slave;
Not daring to look on the face of my master.
I crave the whip's burning leather kiss,
You oblige me with exquisite pain.
>From my throat is wrenched a hoarse cry,
The pain I need, I receive from you, my love.
I know you do not return my love,
I am nothing to you, just a slave.
A toy to be made to moan and cry
For the pleasure of my cruel master.
If I earn it, there is harsh pain.
If I earn it, a passionate kiss.
You seek my lips, biting as you kiss.
Heartless, harsh, there is nothing of love
In it, or you. Only the need for pain,
The inflicting of it on a wanton slave.
I submit to your pleasure, my master,
As you beat me until I cry.
Under your lash, I beg, scream and cry.
Then it is over, and you claim my lips for a kiss.
My breath back, I whisper, "I love you, Master."
Needing to declare through suffering my love.
You strike me, confirming me as a slave,
Worthy only of your scorn and pain.
"Pretty slut," you say, savoring my pain.
Running a rough hand on my back brings another cry.
Your lips descend to taste the tears of a slave;
A most revealing and condescending kiss.
You draw from me perversities made decent by love,
Violence and hurt from the hand of my master.
We know I require a severe master,
One not afraid to inflict intense pain.
One to whom I must give all my love,
Fearing no return, knowing he will make me cry
As a reward for even my very best kiss.
Even as we know you need a slave.
It is my love that permits me to cry
On the whim of my master when he grants me pain,
Or the burning kiss of leather to show I am a slave.
Angelia Sparrow...
Here is the literotica version's first two stanzas:
I kneel before you, a trembling slave; not daring to look on the face of my
master. I crave the whip's burning leather kiss; You oblige me with
exquisite pain. From my throat is wrenched a hoarse cry, the pain I need, I receive from you, my love.
I know you do not return my love; I am nothing to you, just a slave. A toy to be made to moan and cry for the pleasure of my cruel master. If I earn it, there is harsh pain. If I earn it, a passionate kiss.
Ah the formatting is off here... but the words seem similar.
Looks like 4 for 4 in poetry... have to wonder about the prose.
Trent_Dutch said:
Hopefully my post here won't be removed like my other one.
All of Sugarbaby4u's poems have been removed except for her "Slave" : http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=191516 which bears a considerable resemblence to the following poem copywritten to: Angelia Sparrow way back in 1991
Even worse than taking the lines... the latest version rips apart a pretty good sestina:
Slavery Sestina
I kneel before you, a trembling slave;
Not daring to look on the face of my master.
I crave the whip's burning leather kiss,
You oblige me with exquisite pain.
>From my throat is wrenched a hoarse cry,
The pain I need, I receive from you, my love.
I know you do not return my love,
I am nothing to you, just a slave.
A toy to be made to moan and cry
For the pleasure of my cruel master.
If I earn it, there is harsh pain.
If I earn it, a passionate kiss.
You seek my lips, biting as you kiss.
Heartless, harsh, there is nothing of love
In it, or you. Only the need for pain,
The inflicting of it on a wanton slave.
I submit to your pleasure, my master,
As you beat me until I cry.
Under your lash, I beg, scream and cry.
Then it is over, and you claim my lips for a kiss.
My breath back, I whisper, "I love you, Master."
Needing to declare through suffering my love.
You strike me, confirming me as a slave,
Worthy only of your scorn and pain.
"Pretty slut," you say, savoring my pain.
Running a rough hand on my back brings another cry.
Your lips descend to taste the tears of a slave;
A most revealing and condescending kiss.
You draw from me perversities made decent by love,
Violence and hurt from the hand of my master.
We know I require a severe master,
One not afraid to inflict intense pain.
One to whom I must give all my love,
Fearing no return, knowing he will make me cry
As a reward for even my very best kiss.
Even as we know you need a slave.
It is my love that permits me to cry
On the whim of my master when he grants me pain,
Or the burning kiss of leather to show I am a slave.
Angelia Sparrow...
Here is the literotica version's first two stanzas:
I kneel before you, a trembling slave; not daring to look on the face of my
master. I crave the whip's burning leather kiss; You oblige me with
exquisite pain. From my throat is wrenched a hoarse cry, the pain I need, I receive from you, my love.
I know you do not return my love; I am nothing to you, just a slave. A toy to be made to moan and cry for the pleasure of my cruel master. If I earn it, there is harsh pain. If I earn it, a passionate kiss.
Ah the formatting is off here... but the words seem similar.
Looks like 4 for 4 in poetry... have to wonder about the prose.
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I've been meaning to talk to you about that, at one time 50% of all jokes in America are written by eight guys in prison, all bad check artists, con men. It is part of their work release program. Three of them are out now and are operatives of the Republican Party, hence the name "neo-con". I know one of them. Don says, and I quote:Rybka said:I second the commendation! - Just be aware that if this author has a loyal coterie you may get troll-bombed for awhile. - I was when I once reported a plagiarism. A word to the prudent would be not to talk about it in the comments or in open forum, but just to report it to the web-mistress along with the documentation.
(As an aside, since I post a lot of jokes, I want to declare that I did not create them nor do I claim them as mine. I just repost them here, sometimes with a little editing. If I ever know who actually wrote/told them first I do give credit. But I do not consider retelling a joke to be the same as claiming a poem as one's own and I hope no one else does either.)
"His timing is off, he has way to many words out in front of the punchline"
I used the quotes, because, I would never ever steal anything from Don,
as he has many friendsin the IRS
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Breaking News:
From the IRS:
All poetry royalties are heretofore to be taxed at the 60%.
(in inner circles, known as the Rybka tax)
From the lawyers of a certain mouse in Florida:
The use of the double ' ' apostrophe, once known as quotation marks are a registered Trademark of said certain mouse, and I have been issued a cease and desist order.
From the IRS:
All poetry royalties are heretofore to be taxed at the 60%.
(in inner circles, known as the Rybka tax)
From the lawyers of a certain mouse in Florida:
The use of the double ' ' apostrophe, once known as quotation marks are a registered Trademark of said certain mouse, and I have been issued a cease and desist order.
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http://www.n2hos.com/acm/cult122001.htmlWickedEve said:
http://www.n2hos.com/acm/cult042003.html
Dr. Joseph S. Salemi
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twelveoone
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BTW check out this web-site; My Idol, Dan Schneider
http://www.cosmoetica.com/D21-GWP1.htm
when I grow up...
http://www.cosmoetica.com/D21-GWP1.htm
when I grow up...
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Thank you Duckiesmut for recommending my poem Bibliobliss. I wrote it over a year ago and actually had it here for a while, then I took it off Lit and promptly lost the disc it was on. When I found the disc yesterday I decided to resubmit it so I NEVER lose it again.
And you understood it perfectly. It's meant to be read aloud. Somewhere I have another disc with an audio version of it. If I ever find that, I'll submit it here as the audio version.
Thank you to those who commented, too. Reltne, you're a critical poem reader (and I mean that as a compliment), so it made my day that you didn't suggest a single change, lol.
And you understood it perfectly. It's meant to be read aloud. Somewhere I have another disc with an audio version of it. If I ever find that, I'll submit it here as the audio version.
Thank you to those who commented, too. Reltne, you're a critical poem reader (and I mean that as a compliment), so it made my day that you didn't suggest a single change, lol.
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Ooo...audio! Yes, please.
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My Erotic Tale said:
Hey Art,
Thanks for the kind words and never grow up. I'm not gonna.
And thanks to those who left PCs. Always good to here from others.
These poems wouldn't have been written without inspiration from Tath, Pat and Anna. Good to have people you can chat with, even with poetics.....
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It was an Honor,
thanks for sharing The_Fool~
(~_~)
"I poured my coffee into a white cup
and my day went black" <grin>
thanks for sharing The_Fool~
(~_~)
"I poured my coffee into a white cup
and my day went black" <grin>
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Angeline said:
I'm eeking at your Av; your butt-ercises have been working well, I see.
she's killing me, ange.
.......killing me.
WickedEve
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Ohhh. New man on the board.tolyk said:
1. is that you in the av?
2. have written a sonnet in the past 30 days?
3. do you have a picture of your butt?
4. what's the capital of north dakota?
5. do you like to do more with your belt than just wear it around your waist?
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