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Reading your poetry caused me to hallucinate.normal jean said:people are scared of my poetry...
unapologetic said:skittles_lm, has given us another good piece with untitled.
TMV said:. . . remember what we were given according to the author's of the bible. We will be given the domain to rule over the Angel's And yet . . .
TMV said:Wildsweetone: Again the abhorance of punctuation. You know I have nothing but praise for you. But as to punctuation tearing a poem to peices (I know you didn't say that, but it is the impression I get with comments like these) Instead of period meaning "stop", it has other uses as well. I am bearing on the thought that maybe sometimes people would like a chance to slow down and think things out. I am not the cleanest writer here, but I do wiegh myself heavily on the many different powers of a single word. And I get the feeling that some here are confined to a single form of word interpretation. Is there a single species of flower in the world? Just one frangrance to breath as we walk down the street? Give the power of poetry more credit than that. You can bend..., just don't break.
TheRainMan said:i see you're still using apostrophes on plurals.
speaking of punctuation, perhaps you should be studying up on that punctuation, eh, old bean?
unapologetic said:Here are the ones that caught my eye:
Reocurring Dream [sic] by brand new poet mysticstranger is a bit wordy, and there is some inconsistency with the capitalization of the word "I", but there is something here.
skittles_lm, has given us another good piece with untitled.
Newer poet LittleJade gave us a powerful piece with Sacrilege.
Finally, I found Thehiddenredhead's piece Marks was wonderfully erotic.
See ya next week, kiddies.
TMV said:When I was in school old bean, I was taught that apostrophies are to be used for plural usage . . .
champagne1982 said:As I said earlier, there are 40 or so, new poems for Friday, May 25, 2007. The poems mentioned here were ones that grabbed my particular attention and that I felt could be of particular interest to you poetry reading Litizens out there. Please remember that anything offered in critique in this post is of my opinion only, the poets are free to accept or refuse any offering I may have given.
Interrupted by jessy19 is a poem with the promise of being a really fine piece. I think you should read and comment with an eye to helping her realize the work's full potential. jessy19 has been submitting to Literotica for over 4 years and is a popular prose writer with a substantial list of poems on her personal story index. This poem is a pretty good one to start the reading with.
SoftlyWhisper offers a really pretty word landscape of the Black Hills of South Dakota. Through including a bit of variation in line length the rhymes start to flow into speech a little less obviously, I'd like to see different breaks that de-emphasize the rhyme even further. I know how hard that can be to accomplish though, but sometimes a little work carries huge dividends. It's a lovely poem and worth the moment it takes to read.
My pick of the day:
Oh, what a wonderful surprise and gift I've been given. Tristesse2, one of my favourite Lit Poets (and yes, she's out there in the real world of poetry, too), treats us to a superb jazz poem and sets it in the heart of pre-flooded New Orleans. The Ghosts of Storyville [redux] is a poem with the same bluesy riffs that many of the artists she features in the poem once used to explore sound and rhythm, you can hear it in phrases like:
that Morton wrote before
he blew town
spices the air
still not making much sense.
and then there's the alliteration that sounds like she's singing scat to some great bass beats in the back:
his hanky stark
against his big, black face;
he and Batch never were
After reading this poem, I'm gonna go back and read it again. This time with a bit of whiskey and a cigar burning in an ashtray (not for me to smoke sillies! Just to get that smokey bar smell). You should give it a moment too.
Something different on the lists. ramonathompson shares a lyric with her It Ain't Gonna Be Me submission. It's catchy and shares a universal theme with so many songs, but I'd still like to hear it. Lyrics don't need to avoid cliche, they are designed to get a response that is heightened by combining them with music. Check it out and see if you'd like to listen to the song too.
Don't let the title put you off of reading iqespresso's Small Clit Girls. It's a straightforward poem that uses earthy language to bring us a vignette full of humour and realistic frustrations that are shared with more people than only the girls he glorifies in his title. You'll be chuckling at the end, it's worth the moment.
UnderYourSpell writes poems not always to my taste, with too much rhyme and in being too metrical for some of the subjects in her poems, this time her techniques all work. A big One! explores all of the aspects that the title implies with a gentle humour and absolutely no vulgarity. It's wicked and funny and not disappointing in the least.
Think you're ready for summer? hmmnmm volunteers a little pep talk in A Summer Snapshot. I think the second, more poemishly formatted, half of the poem is much better than the first prose-style block of the opening strophe. Go read and let Tihmmnmm know what you think.
3spirited1 has a healthy number of poems on the list from Friday. peer pressure is a pretty fine poem that explores the type of insecurities everyone has as new situations present themselves for judgement. It's the best effort by this author, I think.
In the spirit of submitting many poems on the same day, Ds Padawan keeps the faith. However, this poem My Trespasses, even though its rhyme and structure are slightly off-putting, carries a treasure at the end. Read through and understand the story, then decide for yourselves. I think this is a very good poem that with some kind attention could develop into something even better.
Don't hesitate to go to read, vote and comment everyone. It is far more encouraging to gain notice than to feel you're being ignored out there. Have a great Saturday and my apologies for missing yesterday. I hope this makes up for it.
TMV said:But then human nature always gives us away doesn't it.