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JOnceTwo said:Thank you Angeline for your comments on "Ember" in your review today, and especially for the criticism as well. Though re-reading it now, I see how you arrived at the theme that you carried away from the poem, it was not the idea that I was trying to convey.
I'd like to ask if anyone else also got the theme of rebuilding passion that Angeline did, or something else?
Also, I feel a little odd asking for an editor for poetry since it is generally so short, but do many of you out there use it for poetry? In general I don't like wasting peoples time, but I do know an extra few eyes can help polish a piece.
Also thanks to swalloedscream, and champange1982
normal jean said:does anyone know how a person can have poems on the new poem list, yet when I go to their bio page, and click submissions, all I get is " this user has no submissions yet"?
just wondering... it is this poet- kitschx
and I didnt know where to wonder for a question like this,, so I wandered in here to wonder....
Everything in life is degrading and offensive--to someone.KOLKORE said:[QUOTE="...... blakesilverman[/URL] is worth a read for the language....."
Wildsweetone, I love what you write when it comes to poetry. Not so when it comes to at least your recommendation to the rap poem I quoted from your review. When recognized rappers acknowledge the eroding effects of the barrage of beaches and hoes in reference to women in rap lyrics it’s disappointing to see that no one speak up and say: enough is enough! This is not only degrading and offensive to women but it has been used endlessly in similarly unoriginal lyrics. If this is OK why shouldn’t we re institute other inflammatory adjectives that are now ‘not ok’ to be uttered and/or written? So all that remains legit now is to degrade women? Not blacks not Jews Not Native Americans –but its ok with women. I find myself repulsed by this crap - as a man; no as a human being. I find myself bothered (not for the first time) by the apathy of others.
KOLKORE said:[QUOTE="...... blakesilverman[/URL] is worth a read for the language....."
Wildsweetone, I love what you write when it comes to poetry. Not so when it comes to at least your recommendation to the rap poem I quoted from your review. When recognized rappers acknowledge the eroding effects of the barrage of beaches and hoes in reference to women in rap lyrics it’s disappointing to see that no one speak up and say: enough is enough! This is not only degrading and offensive to women but it has been used endlessly in similarly unoriginal lyrics. If this is OK why shouldn’t we re institute other inflammatory adjectives that are now ‘not ok’ to be uttered and/or written? So all that remains legit now is to degrade women? Not blacks not Jews Not Native Americans –but its ok with women. I find myself repulsed by this crap - as a man; no as a human being. I find myself bothered (not for the first time) by the apathy of others.
WickedEve said:KOLKORE said:Everything in life is degrading and offensive--to someone.
I don't know a thing about rap, but I agree with WSO. This poem is still worth a read.
But please, stop calling me at work
Because that shit's embarrassing,
When the telephone rings
And you're saying Billy needs braces,
But like Bowie I'm going through changes,
Of address, that is,
Cuz I gotz to keep my biz-
Ness on the DL
So I'll see you in hell
Before you get a dime from me
What do you do with a poem in which parts sound good and others are offensive. You say so. In my comments to the poem I said that I liked parts of the poem but the offensive terms he used sour it
You are the first I am hearing from who implies that there could be any controversy about the implications of ‘Ho’ and ‘bitch’ sprayed in rap lyrics. Moreover, I find it difficult to believe you would not feel offended if someone called you a whore, or described you as a whore, or claimed that all women are whores, which is in fact what this poem does.
Would you still hold the same relativistic view if expletives such as: ‘Nigger’ or ‘dirty Jew’ were splashed in poems (in a non critical context)? Somehow I doubt it.
Elsewhere both the public and rappers have distanced themselves and similarly protest any such expletives as found in this poem. Not so in this forum.
wildsweetone said:KOLKORE said:did you just call me sexist and apathetic too? i guess you don't know me very well.
i recommended the submission for the language, not for the theme, nor for the poet who wrote the submission. i purposely made no comment on the submission except to recommend that others read it for the language because i felt that the way words were used were different to the normal run of the mill writing we see here in the new poems on Literotica.
this website is based in a country that allows free speech. it is not up to me to decide who should be allowed to say what about any given subject. nor is it up to me to decide how they should say it, though i often give my own opinion on suggested improvements for a submission that has been accepted here and i leave it up to the poet themselves to decide whether they take my suggestions on board or not.
Laurel and Manu have allowed that submission to be published on their website. i'd say they were the ones you should take this up with, not me.
i note in your own personal comment on this submission, you write 'I liked a lot in there.' at the beginning of your comment. perhaps you saw some language usage that i saw and thought interesting, unique, different.
for further information, in this poem the lyrical subject's 'you' is the whore, not all women. perhaps it says more about the lyrical subject than anyone or anything else.
thank you for your comment on my own poetry. i also would like you to know i enjoy reading your comments on poetry. you often give a perspective that is different to my own and that's good for me.
I was fully aware of the nature of your recommendation (language is culture and meaning and values it's all one; there is no language in the abstract). Recommending this poem or it’s language, without making any exception for the expletives included there is in my opinion, and even if unintentionally, an acceptance of a blatant sexist and offensive poem.
It has nothing whatsoever to do with freedom of speech! I never complained about the right of a hateful person to embarrass himself in writing this kind of poem. It is every one's civil duty though to protest against hate speech. Protesting against this kind of hate speech in rap is done everywhere but in this forum.
You are right; I don't know you (except from the poems). I was upset about the lack of any reservation on account of the expletives. You are allowed of course to the narrow interpretation of a single particular whore the poem is presumably alluding to, although in my opinion the text in this poem does not support it. You can read as an additional reference the other poem in the same venue with the same "whores"). This use of "whores" is generic to women in this context as it is with other rappers. Ignoring it is wrong. Look around you as to how women are being treated. Every thing is connected.
For all I know it could have been an omission on your part. Anyway, I don't judge people just specific actions.
KOLKORE said:wildsweetone said:I was fully aware of the nature of your recommendation (language is culture and meaning and values it's all one; there is no language in the abstract). Recommending this poem or it’s language, without making any exception for the expletives included there is in my opinion, and even if unintentionally, an acceptance of a blatant sexist and offensive poem.
It has nothing whatsoever to do with freedom of speech! I never complained about the right of a hateful person to embarrass himself in writing this kind of poem. It is every one's civil duty though to protest against hate speech. Protesting against this kind of hate speech in rap is done everywhere but in this forum.
You are right; I don't know you (except from the poems). I was upset about the lack of any reservation on account of the expletives. You are allowed of course to the narrow interpretation of a single particular whore the poem is presumably alluding to, although in my opinion the text in this poem does not support it. You can read as an additional reference the other poem in the same venue with the same "whores"). This use of "whores" is generic to women in this context as it is with other rappers. Ignoring it is wrong. Look around you as to how women are being treated. Every thing is connected.
For all I know it could have been an omission on your part. Anyway, I don't judge people just specific actions.
i understand your meaning and believe you have every right to disagree with my recommendation.
i have no idea how i can recommend a poem for the way the words are used that will not include my agreement with the theme...
on further thinking, i could say, 'i disagree with the theme, but the use of language in this poem is interesting.' i feel however, that that would also not meet with your agreement. and suffice it to say, i don't believe any topic should be banned from being written about. all of life is the muscle for our messages. perhaps it is a good thing that somebody writes like this and somebody protests, loudly. it brings public awareness front and foremost and is that not something we are all easily able to achieve with our writing?
i am not here as a reviewer to make everyone agree with my reasoning or my intent. i am simply here to share my thoughts, or to help.
one other thing we might be able to agree upon, our emotions change when reading this submission. that's a sign of interesting writing.
i should have said i recommended the submission for its 'use of language'.I was fully aware of the nature of your recommendation (language is culture and meaning and values it's all one; there is no language in the abstract).
that was my mistake and i apologise.
wildsweetone said:KOLKORE said:i understand your meaning and believe you have every right to disagree with my recommendation.
i have no idea how i can recommend a poem for the way the words are used that will not include my agreement with the theme...
on further thinking, i could say, 'i disagree with the theme, but the use of language in this poem is interesting.' i feel however, that that would also not meet with your agreement. and suffice it to say, i don't believe any topic should be banned from being written about. all of life is the muscle for our messages. perhaps it is a good thing that somebody writes like this and somebody protests, loudly. it brings public awareness front and foremost and is that not something we are all easily able to achieve with our writing?
i am not here as a reviewer to make everyone agree with my reasoning or my intent. i am simply here to share my thoughts, or to help.
one other thing we might be able to agree upon, our emotions change when reading this submission. that's a sign of interesting writing.
i should have said i recommended the submission for its 'use of language'.
that was my mistake and i apologise.
Actually, making a distinction would have made the whole difference. The problem with the use of this jargon is that it claims to have entered the lexicon and gaining a new and neutral meaning. Asking women - they deny it of course. Any ways -good exchange, and thanks for being open minded!
champagne1982 said:This isn't about the poems anymore...
wildsweetone said:no, and i apologise for that too. also to the Mods who will have to move the discussion out to the chit chat thread.
but it was something that needed clearing up. and i am glad to have learnt from the discussion.
wildsweetone said:no, and i apologise for that too. also to the Mods who will have to move the discussion out to the chit chat thread.
but it was something that needed clearing up. and i am glad to have learnt from the discussion.
Angeline said:I think we'll let it stand as a monument to your (all of you) unruliness.
Oh, boy, are you talking to the wrong woman.KOLKORE said:Moreover, I find it difficult to believe you would not feel offended if someone called you a whore, or described you as a whore,
WickedEve said:Oh, boy, are you talking to the wrong woman.
WickedEve said:Oh, boy, are you talking to the wrong woman.
KOLKORE said:Meaning? A. of course you would mind OR B. I am talking to the wrong woman because you will not mind . . .
KOLKORE said:. . . it's not any persons's particular level of sensitivity or style that I was bothered by. . .
KOLKORE said:. . My default assumption is that when someone is writing in open forum, insulting by expletives a whole group of people for what they are - AKA engaging in HATE speech, I feel that it is MY JOB to say: hey, this is NOT OK and I am still bothered by the fact that more people apparantly don't feel that they should do so here, as they do in other fora.
Maybe because there is enough political commentary elsewhere on other boards, that everyone (not just poets) can post views on. I don't think you'd see this (whatever it is) in the Story Discussion Circle forum and I don't think you need that kind of statement about content, unless you're analyzing the poetry, on the PF&D. It's all personal opinion and sometimes, in a review, personal feeling should stay out of it.KOLKORE said:Meaning? A. of course you would mind OR B. I am talking to the wrong woman because you will not mind. If you do care about hate speech against women (or any group of people for that matter) more power to you. If you don't let it bother you - it's fine too. I was not assumig any personal knowledge.
Regardless, it's not any persons's particular level of sensitivity or style that I was bothered by. My default assumption is that when someone is writing in open forum, insulting by expletives a whole group of people for what they are - AKA engaging in HATE speech, I feel that it is MY JOB to say: hey, this is NOT OK and I am still bothered by the fact that more people apparantly don't feel that they should do so here, as they do in other fora.