Comments That Make Your Day

[SimonDoom]

Commenters: getting straight to the heart chest of the matter, day in and day out.

God love 'em.

 

[SimonDoom]

This one was rather harsh, but it was so well put and reflected a genuine response to my story, so I had to include it:

What was I expecting I guess? I find one out of twenty authors here to be really talented. The man writes half decently but this was just pervy and unimaginative and smelled like the insides of one of those creepy old porn shops I've actually stepped inside on a few occasions with my significant other out of curiosity and trying to spice things up. An actual woman and wife would never write anything like this. Pure pervy fantasy by a creeper male perv whose had little true long term interaction with a REAL woman.

In case anyone's wondering, I actually HAVE had long-term interactions with real women. But I don't expect the commenter to believe that.

My question: what's wrong with "pure pervy fantasy"? Some people want to fill the world with pure pervy fantasies. What's wrong with that, I'd like to know.

 

[LustyScribe]

This one was rather harsh, but it was so well put and reflected a genuine response to my story, so I had to include it:



In case anyone's wondering, I actually HAVE had long-term interactions with real women. But I don't expect the commenter to believe that.

My question: what's wrong with "pure pervy fantasy"? Some people want to fill the world with pure pervy fantasies. What's wrong with that, I'd like to know.

There's just so much that's so telling about his comment! The haughty judgmental criticism, the willingness to label YOU as pervy" (a label I personally covet) when he discusses going into those "creepy old porn shops" himself; that's rich hypocrisy.

And as to "pure pervy fantasy," Well, Hello! I know Literotica.com is just a few letters off from WeThePuritans.com, so maybe it was an honest mistake, but...we ARE pervy! We as writers of erotica explore the crevasses and caverns of the human sexual universe, and many of those are dark places. We shine lights into these because there ARE people who want to at least peek into them. So the criticisms of those who just complain about what we show, to me at least, is fairly empty. Critique about style, technique, inconsistency, those I welcome. There are some tremendous authors here, and I am grateful for their critique and suggestions and of course their praise. Anonymous content critics, not so likely to weigh much for me.

 

[TheLobster]

What's wrong with that, I'd like to know.

What "wrong" is that if you indulge in them then you can't be haughty to others that also do it. Which is what your commenter wants to be most of all.

 

[Paddleboardpnw]

This one absolutely made my day, heck my weekend.


Nice read, haven't seen a good shrinking story on here in a while. look Forword to more. Ignore the grammar and thought police, they don't understand where this is coming from and don't have much of an imagination!

https://literotica.com/s/shrunken-state-pt-01

 

[Areala-chan]

Shout out to @THBGato whose most recent comment on "Kendra" has me floating around the house on a happy bubble-gasm.

Wow! This was a towering achievement: the way you constructed both the physical and emotional architecture here was nothing short of extraordinary. I was quite breathless by the end, which, despite being trailed all the way through, was nothing short of gut-wrenching.

(I actually started it a while ago, but didn't finish as I could tell this was one to read when I had a weekend ahead of me to recover. I think I'll need it.)

Thank you, thank you, thank you!

 

[onehitwanda]

on "Kelpie", included here for amusmement:

No wonder your psyche considered this clutter and left it unfinished for a while. It's rubbish. The locus is anyway. Thanks for giving me an example I can use for my students to see how quick, easy, and simple it is to destroy a really good, developing story and render it trash in an instant. I pretty much didn't give a shit about anything that happens after the midway point, after it comes out he's basically a selfish, inconsiderate idiot. Broken is broken, but it doesn't take a genius -- let alone a Cambridge dude -- to instinctively know not to do the prolonged cold silent thing after their first time. "I need some time and space to process this." One fucking sentence, regardless of what dumb internal turmoil he's in. That's all it takes to keep that male character viable, sympathetic, and the story going.

 

[NoTalentHack]

on "Kelpie", included here for amusmement:

I love the “your characters aren’t perfect and therefore I hate them, your story, and you” comments so much. Really makes me feel like I’ve touched someone’s heart.

 

[onehitwanda]

I love the “your characters aren’t perfect and therefore I hate them, your story, and you” comments so much. Really makes me feel like I’ve touched someone’s heart.

I think I touched his adenoids rather than his heart. Oh well. I shall sharpen my pen and try again.

 

[THBGato]

I think I touched his adenoids rather than his heart. Oh well. I shall sharpen my pen and try again.

If you get it sharp enough you could take his tonsils out at the same time as his adenoids. Might relieve some of the pressure on the NHS waiting lists.

 

[StillStunned]

I think I touched his adenoids rather than his heart. Oh well. I shall sharpen my pen and try again.

Via the stomach is the best approach, I hear.

 

[Areala-chan]

Via the stomach is the best approach, I hear.

Nay, rectally is the way to have tonsils manipulated for folk like that.

 

[Joan_R_Hastings]

I really enjoyed this thoughtful comment on my first chapter of a series:

I love how you didn't "sugar coat" anything - neither the characters nor their behaviour is in any way glamourous, not even in a "scandalous sexy" kind of way.

Even the protagonist is not entirely sympathetic (in the way she thinks about other people) but if anything that only makes her more endearing. Fun trash people all around. _Human_ people.

The part about disposing of the evidence I could not read, but that has nothing to do with your skills, that's just something I personally cannot handle in any story.

And then this very strong reaction to my latest:

What a horrible story. You forgot to mention she went viral and now everyone knows her for whom she is…what she is. She has lost touch with reality, with morality, and legality. She is a sociopath who only wants to hurt others and take from them what she wants.

Rave reviews from both ends!

 

[LustyScribe]

I think I touched his adenoids rather than his heart. Oh well. I shall sharpen my pen and try again.

I think it's his 'roids that are agitated,not his 'noids. He needs some monkey butt powder!

 

[gordo12]

Another great comment today about Wheelchair Girl:

WOW. Definitely a five star

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

From my latest, Savage Daughter.

Short and sweet...

"I’m just…… WOW! ️️️️️"

 

[StillStunned]

Not many people are reading The Dome 02: Sky Above, but the few who are have rated it and it even has a couple of encouraging comments.

@AlexFourways wrote:

Another interesting installment with a clever mix of Sci-Fi and erotica, plus a double cliff hanger (pun not intended).

And @Sildani added:

I’m enjoying these stories very much! Nice world building so far and good characters.

I hope Raurri hasn’t bitten off more than she can chew, she was a fun character. Hopefully Xero can experience a six-breast titfuck one day.

Please keep writing!

Thanks, both of you! There's more to come in this series, even if we're the only ones who care.

 

[Jalibar62]

An anonymous comment for my 750-word story, A Wedding Day Conversation: "This particular permutation of letters and whitespace is making my eyes leak. Weird. :'(

Another anon for Bad Hair Day: "That was completely unbelievable AND over the top. But damn I loved it."

 

[gordo12]

Another nice comment on Homeless last night from the same anon that liked Wheelchair Girl:

Another great story with a beautiful romantic ending. Definitely a five star

 

[THBGato]

An anonymous comment for my 750-word story, A Wedding Day Conversation: "This particular permutation of letters and whitespace is making my eyes leak. Weird. :'(

Holy fuck that's a good story. I meaning, the warning was there, but I stupidly forgot to have some tissues handy.

 

[Jalibar62]

Holy fuck that's a good story. I meaning, the warning was there, but I stupidly forgot to have some tissues handy.

Thanks so much. And that's a pretty great comment as well

 

[LustyScribe]

Holy fuck that's a good story. I meaning, the warning was there, but I stupidly forgot to have some tissues handy.

I second this! Beautiful!

 

[StillStunned]

When a comment *really* makes your day:

You once told me that you love how I add little details to the things I write which makes the world around the characters feel alive. Well, you have certainly managed that yourself with this tale, tenfold. Perhaps I am getting ahead of myself, but I think that once you're done with all of the chapters, you should strongly consider combining them and publishing the Dome as a proper, full-length book. It has that "can't stop reading" factor. The creativity is just incredible. The intro alone was worthy of 5 stars, and it only got better from there. Every character just explodes into being, a few select words and lines bringing them to life so effortlessly it's nothing short of masterful. It's like every page is a firework show, and I'm left staring in awe, blown away. Really glad you included a scene from within the Dome too, so we get a glimpse of how extreme the difference between 'the two worlds' truly is. Might be your best work yet. It's certainly up there.

Thanks, @Devinter ! You'll be credited for your input and encouragement in the hardback bestseller publication.

(On The Dome 02: Sky Above)

ETA: thank you, @djrip, for the following cryptic comment:

Flyyyin'... flyyin' in the skyyyy.... Cliff hanger fly soo hiighh...

Yes, it's a chapter full of cliffhangers. Nasty, vicious things.

 

[shakna]

This one was rather harsh, but it was so well put and reflected a genuine response to my story, so I had to include it:



In case anyone's wondering, I actually HAVE had long-term interactions with real women. But I don't expect the commenter to believe that.

My question: what's wrong with "pure pervy fantasy"? Some people want to fill the world with pure pervy fantasies. What's wrong with that, I'd like to know.

My girlfriend reads my tales. A real woman is entirely up for a bit of a dirty tale.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

From Living up to the Legacy:

“Yes

I'm crying too”

There’s a warning in the prologue.