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Recidiva said:
You're going to hell for that.
Sorry, MA. *sheepish look* I'll behave.
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On my Freedom of Speech essay that was so horrible, it managed a win (fishes? 
):
and I love this answer to the above comment:
on the same essay - because I deleted a comment from my personal troll that said nothing about the essay, but that I had Down's Syndrome:
...and answered, again:
):and I love this answer to the above comment:
on the same essay - because I deleted a comment from my personal troll that said nothing about the essay, but that I had Down's Syndrome:
...and answered, again:
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MarshAlien
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Recidiva said:
Sorry. Bad night. Too much to drink. Didn't get any.
Nice feedback, though.
TxRad
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How to Pick Up Chicks in 14 Departments
absurd
04/19/07 By: Anonymous in britain
thats the stupidest thing ive read in a long time.
Another fake How to Article
05/23/06 By: Anonymous in USA
I'm getting very tired of the fake how to articles. The point of how to is to give real advice. If you want to write a funny story/article please put in in the right category which would be satire and humor.
Why?
05/19/06 By: Anonymous
You are one mother of a moron. Unfunny, uninsightful and a waste of time. Stick to wanking.
USA
05/18/06 By: Anonymous in USA
My last trip to Walmart was over two years ago. As best I can remember, the females I saw in there were not the type I would take anywhere. Unkempt, crazy hairstyles, cheap looking, maybe two steps up from skid-row. I could go on, but why.
Your little piece was amusing here and there; but, if that is your idea of How To, then get thee back to ye ole drawing board, but fast.
Bullshit, Chickenshit, Human Shit and Any Shit
05/18/06 By: XXXXXXXX in USA
There is nothing quite as bland as Wal-Mart for picking up women. The clerks and department help are either fatties or stuck up lesbians. Few customers in any department are of the ideal "frontage" or "backage", most have droopy tits and if they are not riding in some electric shoppers cart/basket, they have 2 or 3 squalling rug rats that prevents them from appreciating flirty looks from you. The ones with more kids in diapers or running around sampling all the toys, are usually Mormons or Mexicans that their Mormon or Mexican husbands keep them so fucked that they don't even have the time to look at another cock.
The other thirty comments got it. These five seemed to have missed the point. Yes, it was written tongue in cheek but it was serious. Watching shoppers in any story can tell you volumes about a person if you are observant. That's the point. Where do you find a lot of women. In stores is the number one answer. Some of these people need to get out more and open their eyes.
absurd
04/19/07 By: Anonymous in britain
thats the stupidest thing ive read in a long time.
Another fake How to Article
05/23/06 By: Anonymous in USA
I'm getting very tired of the fake how to articles. The point of how to is to give real advice. If you want to write a funny story/article please put in in the right category which would be satire and humor.
Why?
05/19/06 By: Anonymous
You are one mother of a moron. Unfunny, uninsightful and a waste of time. Stick to wanking.
USA
05/18/06 By: Anonymous in USA
My last trip to Walmart was over two years ago. As best I can remember, the females I saw in there were not the type I would take anywhere. Unkempt, crazy hairstyles, cheap looking, maybe two steps up from skid-row. I could go on, but why.
Your little piece was amusing here and there; but, if that is your idea of How To, then get thee back to ye ole drawing board, but fast.
Bullshit, Chickenshit, Human Shit and Any Shit
05/18/06 By: XXXXXXXX in USA
There is nothing quite as bland as Wal-Mart for picking up women. The clerks and department help are either fatties or stuck up lesbians. Few customers in any department are of the ideal "frontage" or "backage", most have droopy tits and if they are not riding in some electric shoppers cart/basket, they have 2 or 3 squalling rug rats that prevents them from appreciating flirty looks from you. The ones with more kids in diapers or running around sampling all the toys, are usually Mormons or Mexicans that their Mormon or Mexican husbands keep them so fucked that they don't even have the time to look at another cock.
The other thirty comments got it. These five seemed to have missed the point. Yes, it was written tongue in cheek but it was serious. Watching shoppers in any story can tell you volumes about a person if you are observant. That's the point. Where do you find a lot of women. In stores is the number one answer. Some of these people need to get out more and open their eyes.
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MarshAlien said:Sorry. Bad night. Too much to drink. Didn't get any.
Nice feedback, though.
Awwww...
I had a great night.
I'm just cruel.
Go leave me some anonymous nasty feedback, you'll feel better. And so will I, especially if your misspell some of your criticism, that always cracks me up.
scouries
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miss kitten said that????
Monsieur Alien,
I clicked open your thread last night by mistake (thinking it was mine and the lovely Gabby’s) and couldn’t believe my eyes. What have I done now I asked myself as I saw my name repeatedly used (in vain?).
I had thought my forum comment about your story was long gone, buried in both our memories. In fact I sorta vaguely remember not even identifying the story by name. Apparently not. I’m sorry it’s still bugging you. But surely this isn’t the very worst comment you’ve ever received is it?
And then you putting the comment that was posted on my brilliant opus, “Daddy”, I Whispered on your thread. I wasn’t very happy. I thought we were supposed to post comments on our own stories, not other peoples. And I can guarantee you that it definitely wasn’t the worst! You certainly could have picked a better one than the one you posted.
Anyway, I forgive you. Not because you weren’t a prick but because I went in search of the comment in question since I didn’t remember it. And so I started to read the comments posted on my story.
And started to laugh. I’d never read more than five or ten at a time over the last 18 months. It took me almost an hour to read all [size=+2]316.[/size] Reading them one after another like that I found they’re almost better than most of my stories!
The good, the bad, the ugly. The one great thing about getting this many comments is that a writer really gets a broad and varied range of opinions about his work. Add in the thousand or so e-mails the story generated and I can claim to have a pretty good understanding of the average Literotica reader. I wish all my stories could generate this kind of response. In fact I wish all of us could.
Here’s a few. But I’d suggest that your thread readers might like to go through the whole list themselves.
I’ll start off with this one – the only one I’ll include with the writers name. I’ve gotta admit I got a few chuckles from it when I saw it again.:
Another
[size=+2]02/28/06 by Daniellekitten in Michigan[/size]
masterpiece from the King of Incest. And the shameless pleading for the gratification of votes was just as impressive. Great job (and it worked sweet dani, but I little guessed then it would ever receive 8,000 votes over the following 18 months – you recognized it was a masterpiece even before I - jrs)
And this one:
This is Literotica, not Sunday morning politics
05/19/06 by Anonymous
The story was wonderful. I was expecting to read rave reviews for this talented author. But instead, I read comments from readers that must have forgotten that this is Literotica! Is it possible for someone to be so insulted by an erotic story? Negativity begets negativity. (I couldn’t have said it better myself – jrs)
The comments that follow are more humorous than critical. But rest assured there are some pretty awful comments in the 316. I’m not universally loved…But I do want to thank every reader who took the time to let me know what they thought…
These two didn’t agree! I love the first. Me, the great scouries, an author for Harlequin???
great storyline
07/26/07 by Anonymous
The storyline wasn't confusing, if you read fiction or novels at all you usually find a story has to begin it's tale and spin into the story slowly. That's what makes the story seem real and appear even more erotic. This author should write for Harlequin Romance or begin her own novel. It's the exact writing you find in a Jackie Collins or Danielle Steele. I think some people may not used to reading such 'good' material.
As someone who reads romances
07/26/07 by Anonymous
as well as other genres of writing, you are so so so wrong. If he tried to publish something like this mainstream, he'd be crucified. I don't know of an editor willing to take on someone who uses mutiple consenants to express emotions. If this is something you think of as publishable work, you need to get your nose out of Dick and Jane and try something else.
And this ONE!:
HMM...
07/03/07 by Anonymous
The fact that she had a sexy father, was good. But I would never do that with my dad. That'd be awkward for me. [ R.I.P Dad ] But It was awesome. I loved it.
on Children…
Awesome until the end....
05/22/07 by Anonymous
I loved this story, but suggesting that father and daughter went on to have children together was really gross. We all know what can happen in those instances and that was an unfortunate addition in the ending...otherwise a really great read...and yes, many women can be that manipulative. I know I am.
Kids
06/14/07 by Anonymous
Whats wrong with having Childrern Most turn out okay that I know of
Comment
06/29/06 by Anonymous
Well-written. But in seeking suspense, you tend instead to tease -- that's my only criticism. Should you choose to elaborate on your theme, making the story a generational thing (a saga, as it were), don't bring in the children, please. You'll all wind up answering charges on Court-TV.
Great reading!
03/27/06 by xxxxx
Anytime a cock can fit into a pussy and make or not make a baby, regardless of relationships, if both want it done, then it should be free to be done.
And homosexuals seemed to like it:
Incredible...
05/14/07 by Anonymous
This story was amazingly good! It was beautiful and extremely well written. Not to mention HOT!!!! I'm as gay as a guy can be and I STILL got off to this story!
WOW! HOT, HOT, HOT
04/13/07 by Anonymous
Absolutely loved your writing style. In fact, I almost lost it myself at the end. Take that as an ultimate compliment when you consider that I'm a 55 year old gay man who normally doesn't have heterosexual fantasies. Hope to see more stories ahead from you.
umm
08/09/06 by Anonymous
wow that was amazing i mostly read lezzy but wow that was the best incest story i've ever read!
Some real bitterness on the Arab question:
I was hoping...
10/15/06 by Anonymous
...that this story would turn out better then the other two of yours that I've read. Unfortunately, the nightmare about "dirty Arabs" immediately put a bad taste in my mouth. Also, nobody goes to any med school (much less Harvard) without going to undergrad first. Did you know that? I guess I'll have to chalk it up to your ignorance. Better luck with the next story. I won't be sticking around for any more.
Great but a little over the top
10/14/06 by Anonymous
I loved your story although you might have gone a little bit too far with the whole Arab raping her thing. Why was it them and not , oh i don't know, the Irish? Arabs don't hate Americans becuase they are blond and good looking. THe entire eastern nations hate us because we are very arrogant. It might have been a little much. Besides, what 18 year old goes to their daddy when they have a bad dream? I didn't do that when I was a kid let alone now. And the way he just swallowed it. That was a little over the top. This is the only complaint that I really have. Otherwise the story was beautiful and I love your writing style. Maybe do a third person omniscient story instead of a first person once in a while. Keep it up though
lol @ racism
07/17/07 by Anonymous
come on people just cause she was arrogant because of her looks and lifestyle doesn’t mean shit and the stuff about the arabs... well if you knew the ones around sydney (that sheik for example who said "women dressing provocatively deserve to be raped") its pretty close to being spot on with a lot of peoples attitudes anyway, i liked this story it was interesting, well written and seemed believable which is what makes a good story
Nice!
04/22/06 by Anonymous
I loved the story. very sexy, and well written. *a little off topic, but for anyone who said it was racist, don't dish out what you can't take. Americans take a lot of shit from you rag heads. Have some back. Not quite sure what your even on this site for anyways. shouldn't you be like highjacking planes or something
And these:
very touching
08/17/07 by Anonymous
Its rare to read something touching in a porn site. You could almost feel the father daughter love. A little weird to have them get married but to each his own! I thouroughly enjoyed your writing. I got caught up in the story and not just the sex.
It Was Not Too Long
07/12/07 by Anonymous
I liked the development of the story. It is fiction, and as such anything goes. Good writing and I would not refuse a beauty such as she.
Where to begin...
04/11/07 by Anonymous
Oh, Jeez... Hmmm... To begin with, some men can pull off writing from a woman's point of view. You're not one of them. I only read this story because I saw all of your self-advertisement on the forum. Well, there's forty minutes of my time I'll never get back. Can you say editor? I thought not. I have a hard time trying to believe the "woman" portrayed in this story is anything more than a thirteen-year old girl. Shouldn't it be banned from the site? It's not a sexy story. It's just self-serving crap.
Scienfiction
03/23/07 by Anonymous
It seems to me it's fabolous story. How you got out from law, public eyes and your own mother. If it's real nobody find out. It's illegal.
BRILLIANTLY EROTIC
03/07/07 by Anonymous
Well I must say that you are the daughter that i dreamed of, I have my own, but shes not interested. Any way, masterfully done! Masterfully done! You are an extremely erotic woman. Thank you.
i wish i had that kind of Daddy
02/24/07 by Anonymous
I dream about my daddy all the time but he doesn’t even fuck my mother, let alone me. My boyfriend is little substitute for dad! this gave me the most explosive orgasm of all time, thankyou, thankyou, thankyou!
Great story.
12/03/06 by Anonymous
Great story, but keep your math straight
description
08/13/06 by Anonymous
Like many stories, i wish there were more descriptions of of the female's. I happen to prefer 95 lb. 5.0 women/girls
And the ending:
Badass
11/19/06 by Anonymous
wow ... I really liked that. I for one thought the ending was a little corney which is why I only gave this story a 4 but either way its really good. Wish I had a dad like that growing up. Ah but somethings are better left dreams. keep it up!
It was ok
04/02/06 by Anonymous
It was a ok story, Racist yes, but I found it a little slow moving, but really good build up... but the ending seemed a bit rushed
brill ending
11/16/06 by Anonymous
good story, but the ending made it. I'm a sucker for happy endings.
And finally:
Ouch!
03/13/06 by Anonymous
Good story, but try not breaking your arm while patting yourself on the back.
twice!!!
02/21/06 by Anonymous
u made me cum twice reading the story just once
They cant hang
05/29/06 by Anonymous
I loved your story. The people that are saying your store isn't very good need to sit back and think about one thing. Can I write a story as good as this one. Being a cridic as they seem to want to be means, THEY CAN'T do better. Keep up the good work. Your doing just fine
amazing
03/01/06 by Anonymous
If that story is true I am amazed
AMEN!!!!!
Monsieur Alien,
I clicked open your thread last night by mistake (thinking it was mine and the lovely Gabby’s) and couldn’t believe my eyes. What have I done now I asked myself as I saw my name repeatedly used (in vain?).
I had thought my forum comment about your story was long gone, buried in both our memories. In fact I sorta vaguely remember not even identifying the story by name. Apparently not. I’m sorry it’s still bugging you. But surely this isn’t the very worst comment you’ve ever received is it?
And then you putting the comment that was posted on my brilliant opus, “Daddy”, I Whispered on your thread. I wasn’t very happy. I thought we were supposed to post comments on our own stories, not other peoples. And I can guarantee you that it definitely wasn’t the worst! You certainly could have picked a better one than the one you posted.
Anyway, I forgive you. Not because you weren’t a prick but because I went in search of the comment in question since I didn’t remember it. And so I started to read the comments posted on my story.
And started to laugh. I’d never read more than five or ten at a time over the last 18 months. It took me almost an hour to read all [size=+2]316.[/size] Reading them one after another like that I found they’re almost better than most of my stories!
The good, the bad, the ugly. The one great thing about getting this many comments is that a writer really gets a broad and varied range of opinions about his work. Add in the thousand or so e-mails the story generated and I can claim to have a pretty good understanding of the average Literotica reader. I wish all my stories could generate this kind of response. In fact I wish all of us could.
Here’s a few. But I’d suggest that your thread readers might like to go through the whole list themselves.
I’ll start off with this one – the only one I’ll include with the writers name. I’ve gotta admit I got a few chuckles from it when I saw it again.:
Another
[size=+2]02/28/06 by Daniellekitten in Michigan[/size]
masterpiece from the King of Incest. And the shameless pleading for the gratification of votes was just as impressive. Great job (and it worked sweet dani, but I little guessed then it would ever receive 8,000 votes over the following 18 months – you recognized it was a masterpiece even before I - jrs)
And this one:
This is Literotica, not Sunday morning politics
05/19/06 by Anonymous
The story was wonderful. I was expecting to read rave reviews for this talented author. But instead, I read comments from readers that must have forgotten that this is Literotica! Is it possible for someone to be so insulted by an erotic story? Negativity begets negativity. (I couldn’t have said it better myself – jrs)
The comments that follow are more humorous than critical. But rest assured there are some pretty awful comments in the 316. I’m not universally loved…But I do want to thank every reader who took the time to let me know what they thought…
These two didn’t agree! I love the first. Me, the great scouries, an author for Harlequin???
great storyline
07/26/07 by Anonymous
The storyline wasn't confusing, if you read fiction or novels at all you usually find a story has to begin it's tale and spin into the story slowly. That's what makes the story seem real and appear even more erotic. This author should write for Harlequin Romance or begin her own novel. It's the exact writing you find in a Jackie Collins or Danielle Steele. I think some people may not used to reading such 'good' material.
As someone who reads romances
07/26/07 by Anonymous
as well as other genres of writing, you are so so so wrong. If he tried to publish something like this mainstream, he'd be crucified. I don't know of an editor willing to take on someone who uses mutiple consenants to express emotions. If this is something you think of as publishable work, you need to get your nose out of Dick and Jane and try something else.
And this ONE!:
HMM...
07/03/07 by Anonymous
The fact that she had a sexy father, was good. But I would never do that with my dad. That'd be awkward for me. [ R.I.P Dad ] But It was awesome. I loved it.
on Children…
Awesome until the end....
05/22/07 by Anonymous
I loved this story, but suggesting that father and daughter went on to have children together was really gross. We all know what can happen in those instances and that was an unfortunate addition in the ending...otherwise a really great read...and yes, many women can be that manipulative. I know I am.
Kids
06/14/07 by Anonymous
Whats wrong with having Childrern Most turn out okay that I know of
Comment
06/29/06 by Anonymous
Well-written. But in seeking suspense, you tend instead to tease -- that's my only criticism. Should you choose to elaborate on your theme, making the story a generational thing (a saga, as it were), don't bring in the children, please. You'll all wind up answering charges on Court-TV.
Great reading!
03/27/06 by xxxxx
Anytime a cock can fit into a pussy and make or not make a baby, regardless of relationships, if both want it done, then it should be free to be done.
And homosexuals seemed to like it:
Incredible...
05/14/07 by Anonymous
This story was amazingly good! It was beautiful and extremely well written. Not to mention HOT!!!! I'm as gay as a guy can be and I STILL got off to this story!
WOW! HOT, HOT, HOT
04/13/07 by Anonymous
Absolutely loved your writing style. In fact, I almost lost it myself at the end. Take that as an ultimate compliment when you consider that I'm a 55 year old gay man who normally doesn't have heterosexual fantasies. Hope to see more stories ahead from you.
umm
08/09/06 by Anonymous
wow that was amazing i mostly read lezzy but wow that was the best incest story i've ever read!
Some real bitterness on the Arab question:
I was hoping...
10/15/06 by Anonymous
...that this story would turn out better then the other two of yours that I've read. Unfortunately, the nightmare about "dirty Arabs" immediately put a bad taste in my mouth. Also, nobody goes to any med school (much less Harvard) without going to undergrad first. Did you know that? I guess I'll have to chalk it up to your ignorance. Better luck with the next story. I won't be sticking around for any more.
Great but a little over the top
10/14/06 by Anonymous
I loved your story although you might have gone a little bit too far with the whole Arab raping her thing. Why was it them and not , oh i don't know, the Irish? Arabs don't hate Americans becuase they are blond and good looking. THe entire eastern nations hate us because we are very arrogant. It might have been a little much. Besides, what 18 year old goes to their daddy when they have a bad dream? I didn't do that when I was a kid let alone now. And the way he just swallowed it. That was a little over the top. This is the only complaint that I really have. Otherwise the story was beautiful and I love your writing style. Maybe do a third person omniscient story instead of a first person once in a while. Keep it up though
lol @ racism
07/17/07 by Anonymous
come on people just cause she was arrogant because of her looks and lifestyle doesn’t mean shit and the stuff about the arabs... well if you knew the ones around sydney (that sheik for example who said "women dressing provocatively deserve to be raped") its pretty close to being spot on with a lot of peoples attitudes anyway, i liked this story it was interesting, well written and seemed believable which is what makes a good story
Nice!
04/22/06 by Anonymous
I loved the story. very sexy, and well written. *a little off topic, but for anyone who said it was racist, don't dish out what you can't take. Americans take a lot of shit from you rag heads. Have some back. Not quite sure what your even on this site for anyways. shouldn't you be like highjacking planes or something
And these:
very touching
08/17/07 by Anonymous
Its rare to read something touching in a porn site. You could almost feel the father daughter love. A little weird to have them get married but to each his own! I thouroughly enjoyed your writing. I got caught up in the story and not just the sex.
It Was Not Too Long
07/12/07 by Anonymous
I liked the development of the story. It is fiction, and as such anything goes. Good writing and I would not refuse a beauty such as she.
Where to begin...
04/11/07 by Anonymous
Oh, Jeez... Hmmm... To begin with, some men can pull off writing from a woman's point of view. You're not one of them. I only read this story because I saw all of your self-advertisement on the forum. Well, there's forty minutes of my time I'll never get back. Can you say editor? I thought not. I have a hard time trying to believe the "woman" portrayed in this story is anything more than a thirteen-year old girl. Shouldn't it be banned from the site? It's not a sexy story. It's just self-serving crap.
Scienfiction
03/23/07 by Anonymous
It seems to me it's fabolous story. How you got out from law, public eyes and your own mother. If it's real nobody find out. It's illegal.
BRILLIANTLY EROTIC
03/07/07 by Anonymous
Well I must say that you are the daughter that i dreamed of, I have my own, but shes not interested. Any way, masterfully done! Masterfully done! You are an extremely erotic woman. Thank you.
i wish i had that kind of Daddy
02/24/07 by Anonymous
I dream about my daddy all the time but he doesn’t even fuck my mother, let alone me. My boyfriend is little substitute for dad! this gave me the most explosive orgasm of all time, thankyou, thankyou, thankyou!
Great story.
12/03/06 by Anonymous
Great story, but keep your math straight
description
08/13/06 by Anonymous
Like many stories, i wish there were more descriptions of of the female's. I happen to prefer 95 lb. 5.0 women/girls
And the ending:
Badass
11/19/06 by Anonymous
wow ... I really liked that. I for one thought the ending was a little corney which is why I only gave this story a 4 but either way its really good. Wish I had a dad like that growing up. Ah but somethings are better left dreams. keep it up!
It was ok
04/02/06 by Anonymous
It was a ok story, Racist yes, but I found it a little slow moving, but really good build up... but the ending seemed a bit rushed
brill ending
11/16/06 by Anonymous
good story, but the ending made it. I'm a sucker for happy endings.
And finally:
Ouch!
03/13/06 by Anonymous
Good story, but try not breaking your arm while patting yourself on the back.
twice!!!
02/21/06 by Anonymous
u made me cum twice reading the story just once
They cant hang
05/29/06 by Anonymous
I loved your story. The people that are saying your store isn't very good need to sit back and think about one thing. Can I write a story as good as this one. Being a cridic as they seem to want to be means, THEY CAN'T do better. Keep up the good work. Your doing just fine
amazing
03/01/06 by Anonymous
If that story is true I am amazed
AMEN!!!!!
MarshAlien
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Aww, that's so sweet. I forgive you, too, then.
As far as worst comments, though, it seems to me that the one I picked out was quite a bit worse than any of the ones you selected, none of which actually seem to fall into the topic of the thread, i.e., best "worst feedback." Still, at this point, I'd have to say you were running second behind Recidiva's "drool pot" comment, although TxRad's "mother of a moron" feedback was pretty entertaining as well.
As far as worst comments, though, it seems to me that the one I picked out was quite a bit worse than any of the ones you selected, none of which actually seem to fall into the topic of the thread, i.e., best "worst feedback." Still, at this point, I'd have to say you were running second behind Recidiva's "drool pot" comment, although TxRad's "mother of a moron" feedback was pretty entertaining as well.
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You mean Scouries is Anon?Recidiva said:
To quote Stan and Kyle, "YOU BASTARD!"
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Jenny_Jackson said:You mean Scouries is Anon?
To quote Stan and Kyle, "YOU BASTARD!"
Why, of course. He just goes on, anon, anon!
M
MzDeviancy
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BlackShanglan said:
This is some bullshit, right here. How come you get all the best flames? I just get the occasional 'You suck bitch' and 'That was rape'. Quit hogging the creative trolls to yourself! Bad pony! BAD!
M
MzDeviancy
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Here's the only one of mine that at all stands out in my mind as possibly deserving of an award:
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shallowwwwwww.....
04/03/06 By: thelonewalker in Usa
i am commenting on ur story for the first time... i have closely wathced ur stories, their development and success or fall..... the first thing one has to notice straightaway in ur stories that - ur sex scenes are great... extremely good and along with that one can't help but notice - ur female characters are only pieces of meat.... i mean, they always sound like only flesh with no mind or passionate emotion at all.... ur female characters tend us to believe that females are eligible only for mating,.... no depth in their characters, no true commitment... perhaps, it has to do with ur own characteristics.... surprisinly, though u have tried to picture most of ur central male characters in their primitive and premordial forms, even in this story with the 'dumb' Colin character, it is pretty evident that they got some strict morals and straight thoughts about mating which is nice to know.... i will hope that with ur talented hand, we will be able to see some real loving, caring and truely romantic female characters apart from the slutty and whorish ones who give us just hard-ons but no true remembering memory.....
and, if u urself are female, there is a good chance that ur character matches ur created characters..... try to redeem the true self - which is humane and eternal.....
if i intruded too much, i apologise.
adios.......
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And scouries, I remember that daddy/daughter story. The reason people called it racist was because the asinine nightmare about the 'dirty Arabs' seemed to come out of nowhere. Few people expect perfect characters - I know I actually like stories with characters that aren't perfect. I've read, and enjoyed, a lot of stories with racist characters, characters with different political/moral beliefs than mine, etc.. I enjoyed them because they were well-done; yours came off as weird and out of place.
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shallowwwwwww.....
04/03/06 By: thelonewalker in Usa
i am commenting on ur story for the first time... i have closely wathced ur stories, their development and success or fall..... the first thing one has to notice straightaway in ur stories that - ur sex scenes are great... extremely good and along with that one can't help but notice - ur female characters are only pieces of meat.... i mean, they always sound like only flesh with no mind or passionate emotion at all.... ur female characters tend us to believe that females are eligible only for mating,.... no depth in their characters, no true commitment... perhaps, it has to do with ur own characteristics.... surprisinly, though u have tried to picture most of ur central male characters in their primitive and premordial forms, even in this story with the 'dumb' Colin character, it is pretty evident that they got some strict morals and straight thoughts about mating which is nice to know.... i will hope that with ur talented hand, we will be able to see some real loving, caring and truely romantic female characters apart from the slutty and whorish ones who give us just hard-ons but no true remembering memory.....
and, if u urself are female, there is a good chance that ur character matches ur created characters..... try to redeem the true self - which is humane and eternal.....
if i intruded too much, i apologise.
adios.......
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And scouries, I remember that daddy/daughter story. The reason people called it racist was because the asinine nightmare about the 'dirty Arabs' seemed to come out of nowhere. Few people expect perfect characters - I know I actually like stories with characters that aren't perfect. I've read, and enjoyed, a lot of stories with racist characters, characters with different political/moral beliefs than mine, etc.. I enjoyed them because they were well-done; yours came off as weird and out of place.
BlackShanglan
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MzDeviancy, that is a genuine and amazing prize. I'm hard put to think of anything ... well, creepier. Ick.
Creepiness ick #1:
There is nothing I would like to hear less from this person than the observation that he or she has closely watched anything about me.
Creepiness ick #2:
English may not be the poster's first language, but repeatedly referring to sex as "mating" gives me the impression that his or her native tongue is Giant Praying Mantis Alienese.
Creepiness ick #3:
Dear poster: Please keep images of my talented hand and your hard-ons as far apart as humanly possible.
Creepiness ick #4
Ah yes, morally redemptive pleas for the improvement of my soul. The poster no doubt intends "fatherly spiritual advisor," but I read "deranged obsessive."
Creepiness ick #5 (TERMINAL):
I could have forgiven the stalkerish imagery, the bizarre word choices, even the unfortunate conjunction of hand and hard-on, but there are insults that a gentlehorse absolutely cannot brook. If a poster ever sends me a comment with such grotesque and obscene outrages upon the use of ellipses, I swear I shall hunt him down and feed them to him.
I have to confess, I'm jealous. This is a work of art, MzDeviancy! Thanks for sharing.
Creepiness ick #1:
MzDeviancy said:
There is nothing I would like to hear less from this person than the observation that he or she has closely watched anything about me.
Creepiness ick #2:
English may not be the poster's first language, but repeatedly referring to sex as "mating" gives me the impression that his or her native tongue is Giant Praying Mantis Alienese.
Creepiness ick #3:
Dear poster: Please keep images of my talented hand and your hard-ons as far apart as humanly possible.
Creepiness ick #4
Ah yes, morally redemptive pleas for the improvement of my soul. The poster no doubt intends "fatherly spiritual advisor," but I read "deranged obsessive."
Creepiness ick #5 (TERMINAL):
I could have forgiven the stalkerish imagery, the bizarre word choices, even the unfortunate conjunction of hand and hard-on, but there are insults that a gentlehorse absolutely cannot brook. If a poster ever sends me a comment with such grotesque and obscene outrages upon the use of ellipses, I swear I shall hunt him down and feed them to him.
I have to confess, I'm jealous.
This is a work of art, MzDeviancy! Thanks for sharing.
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This isn't bad
but it's not the usual comment:
but it's not the usual comment:
Rumple Foreskin
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I feel so ashamed of the inadequacy of my entry. Truth be told, I don't get many flamers. This is not, I'm convinced, due to any authorial expertise on my part so much as it is to readers not caring enough to hurl insults at my pitiful prose.
This particular PC isn't even a "bad" comment, but it was/is strange. It was generated by the first installment of my Randi Comes Home (bro/sis incest) series. Having been forced to read Great Expectations TWICE (I still cringe) I'm up to speed with the allusion, but have long since given up trying to comprehend the hidden meaning to this unsigned (even by anon) message.
Estela was a nurotic bitch.
06/14/04 By:
Poor Pip.
See what I mean?
Rumple Foreskin
This particular PC isn't even a "bad" comment, but it was/is strange. It was generated by the first installment of my Randi Comes Home (bro/sis incest) series. Having been forced to read Great Expectations TWICE (I still cringe) I'm up to speed with the allusion, but have long since given up trying to comprehend the hidden meaning to this unsigned (even by anon) message.
Estela was a nurotic bitch.
06/14/04 By:
Poor Pip.
See what I mean?
Rumple Foreskin
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Rumple Foreskin said:I feel so ashamed of the inadequacy of my entry. Truth be told, I don't get many flamers. This is not, I'm convinced, due to any authorial expertise on my part so much as it is to readers not caring enough to hurl insults at my pitiful prose.
This particular PC isn't even a "bad" comment, but it was/is strange. It was generated by the first installment of my Randi Comes Home (bro/sis incest) series. Having been forced to read Great Expectations TWICE (I still cringe) I'm up to speed with the allusion, but have long since given up trying to comprehend the hidden meaning to this unsigned (even by anon) message.
Estela was a nurotic bitch.
06/14/04 By:
Poor Pip.
See what I mean?
Rumple Foreskin
*throws crumpled up bits of paper*
I like nurotic, though.
I love misspelled feedback, it's my favorite.
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I'm finally getting back into the semi-regular writing habit. I've edited all my older stories, pulled my poetry from here completely, and have actually submitted ten stories under SSS and an alt just in the past month.
Feels better to be writing again.
Anyway, like many other author/feedback whores around here, I long for reader comments on quality or content.
Though not public, this was my latest feedback this morning -
Feedback to me
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This feedback was sent by: ######## @ yahoo.com
Comments:
Great ass, SSS.
*sigh*
Feels better to be writing again.
Anyway, like many other author/feedback whores around here, I long for reader comments on quality or content.
Though not public, this was my latest feedback this morning -
Feedback to me
show details
12:01 pm (9 minutes ago)
This message contains feedback for:
This feedback was sent by: ######## @ yahoo.com
Comments:
Great ass, SSS.
*sigh*
Jenny_Jackson
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Don't you just love it when some bozo-newbie with 2 entire posts sends you that shit thinking you are sitting around just waiting for him to cyber with?sweetsubsarahh said:I'm finally getting back into the semi-regular writing habit. I've edited all my older stories, pulled my poetry from here completely, and have actually submitted ten stories under SSS and an alt just in the past month.
Feels better to be writing again.
Anyway, like many other author/feedback whores around here, I long for reader comments on quality or content.
Though not public, this was my latest feedback this morning -
Feedback to me
show details
12:01 pm (9 minutes ago)
This message contains feedback for:
This feedback was sent by: ######## @ yahoo.com
Comments:
Great ass, SSS.
*sigh*
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Jenny_Jackson said:Don't you just love it when some bozo-newbie with 2 entire posts sends you that shit thinking you are sitting around just waiting for him to cyber with?
Some people are amazed when, at the precise moment they read one of my stories and get wood, I am not available to cyber.
As if we're somehow attuned magically and I'm available 24/7 for special services.
Anyway.
Not so sound ungrateful, as I do appreciate comments, but I was just hoping they'd be about the story.
