What kicks you out of a story.

[Bamagan]

I certainly think if you're writing you've got to write for yourself mostly. But there are some trends that people might keep in mind while writing.

And let's be honest, there's probably at least one lurker who is eagerly scribbling notes on good ways to trigger readers, thinking, "Ooh, I haven't tried a snot fetish yet!" (for example)

 

[ChassonKnight]

And let's be honest, there's probably at least one lurker who is eagerly scribbling notes on good ways to trigger readers, thinking, "Ooh, I haven't tried a snot fetish yet!" (for example)

Two other questions related to the OP question, but from a writer's perspective, might be:

What would you like to put in a story that you're afraid would put people off.

What, if someone whinged about it, would you put in more of.

I imagine any of us who have written erotica have thought about both these things have thought about these things. If I put something in a story and someone gives me crap about it, you'd better believe I'm leaning into it for the next story.

 

[djrip]

And let's be honest, there's probably at least one lurker who is eagerly scribbling notes on good ways to trigger readers, thinking, "Ooh, I haven't tried a snot fetish yet!" (for example)

I read one that referred to cum as "dick snot," does that count?

 

[Smuttyandfun]

I read one that referred to cum as "dick snot," does that count?

Yep. I'd say that counts.

 

[EmilyMiller]

The other thing is the word 'cock', used repeatedly. That'll get me to click off faster than anything.

Particularly in a lesbian story

Em

 

[Bamagan]

I read one that referred to cum as "dick snot," does that count?

On a related note, most have probably heard a penis referred to as a baby maker or the equivalent, along with about a million other things. Not too long ago I read a story and the author used the term 'brat cannon,' which nearly killed me.

 

[madelinemasoch]

And let's be honest, there's probably at least one lurker who is eagerly scribbling notes on good ways to trigger readers, thinking, "Ooh, I haven't tried a snot fetish yet!" (for example)

 

[luv2custrip]

Exposition, especially at the very opening of a tale. I find it awkward and lazy. A huge wall of text which substitutes for actually showing where the story is taking place, the characters, or anything else of interest.

Right. If it’s a murder mystery, let’s see the body.
If it’s a sex story, let’s see some bodies!

 

[JaxRhapsody]

Taking three Lit pages to set things up and there’s been nothing erotic happening yet.

I guess you won't be reading my halloween contest story...

 

[MrPixel]

Misspelled words, wrong words - "hoar" vs. "whore", for instance - bad punctuation, and bad grammar will send me dashing for the exits. Unrealistic dialog is also one. Oh... if I get to the bottom of the first page and see >10 pages remaining, I'm out. I'm good with chapters, but one humongous read without known breakpoints, no thanks.

Truthfully, I don't spend much LitE time reading stories, just writing, and reading/writing about writing in the forum here. So aside from skipping certain genres altogether knowing they're not my cup o' tea, I can't put my finger on content that would cause me to bail.

 

[JaxRhapsody]

-"She looked exactly like [porn star/female celebrity]"
-Characters who act like the author has no idea how humans think or behave



I'd argue that while it's a cliché, this is a real thing. Think of a penis like a tire: it can be fully inflated, but you can still keep pumping it up to increase the pressure.

Like some fantasy sword, where the more it cuts, the sharper it gets?

 

[luv2custrip]

I guess you won't be reading my halloween contest story...

I’ll take that as a challenge. I’ve got one about a sexy ghost from 1933; if I get his dialogue right.

 

[SimonDoom]

Ah, string theory. The anal beads of reality.

String theory is for the birds. It's turtles, folks. Turtles all the way down.

 

[Bamagan]

String theory is for the birds. It's turtles, folks. Turtles all the way down.

You're welcome to put whatever you like in your bottom, I suppose. This is a kink-positive community, after all.

 

[JaxRhapsody]

I’ll take that as a challenge. I’ve got one about a sexy ghost from 1933; if I get his dialogue right.

Ah period dialog... am I right?

 

[luv2custrip]

Ah period dialog... am I right?

Yes. He’s from 1933 in bed with a woman in 2023. Maybe have to reread Hemingway, Fitzgerald.

 

[luv2custrip]

String theory is for the birds. It's turtles, folks. Turtles all the way down.

In my best, probably never to be finished opening, a genie is rolling on the floor, laughing hysterically over a book on string theory.
“1,349 years in the bottle— and this is the best you’ve come up with?!”

 

[StillStunned]

I'm actually reading something now that feels really klunky, and I'm wondering if the author is having a rough spot, or if I'm seeing that they aren't as good of an author as I previously thought, even though I've read works of theirs before that I enjoyed.

I can't be the only writer here wondering whether you're referring to me...

"Ooh, I haven't tried a snot fetish yet!" (for example)

Got this covered: https://literotica.com/s/the-rivals-ch-03-the-demon-hunt (The first half of page 2, for anyone who's interested, but you probably need the set-up from page 1.)

(And no, I don't have a snot fetish, I just couldn't stop myself from writing the scene.)

 

[Bamagan]

I can't be the only writer here wondering whether you're referring to me...

Got this covered: https://literotica.com/s/the-rivals-ch-03-the-demon-hunt (The first half of page 2, for anyone who's interested, but you probably need the set-up from page 1.)

(And no, I don't have a snot fetish, I just couldn't stop myself from writing the scene.)

*snorts with laughter*
*wipes up bogies apologetically*

 

[alohadave]

I can't be the only writer here wondering whether you're referring to me...

No, no one here. It's someone on the other site.

 

[StillStunned]

No, no one here. It's someone on the other site.

*Collective sigh of relief*

 

[K155]

Bad dialogue. I read one today, a couple actually that were so so bad!

 

[Smuttyandfun]

*snorts with laughter*
*wipes up bogies apologetically*

She just looked so sad and helpless with her watery blood-shot eyes, her cute little nose red and dripping, her pretty lips cracked and chapped. Which made me wonder, what the hell was wrong with me? And why was I getting hard?

 

[Blind_Justice]

Some pet peeves of mine:

- Sloppy world building. Two of my pet peeves are 20-year old (as in "created 20 years ago and kept as a fuck toy) vampires with the wealth of a small country or a secret society of rare, mythical futanari - and the strip club down by the corner has nothing but said dickgirls working the poles. Great if that's your kink, but stick to one or the other.

- Messy spelling, grammar and punctuation: I can deal with the occasional typo or missed word, but when I need to read a paragraph twice and take notes to understand who is fucking where and with what, the story would have benefited from another edit pass.

- brutal abuse, feces play, humiliation and degradation. Why exactly are all women who enjoy sex "sluts" and "whores" and men "studs" or "lucky guys" again?

 

[Trionyx]

Jumping from past tense to present and back. Annoying as hell.