Challenging Discussion

[champagne1982]

I think I can see where this might be going. And I like it. A lot.

Geisel's more "adult" art (don't get all excited - it's not like that) is very much worth seeing. You can see it here.

How bout a secondary challenge for the Slavish Imitation thread, since this would be very much that?

Seussian meter. Porn. Poems should really be fewer than ten lines, since I suspect more than that would be painful.

C'mon. You know you've always wanted to. And he'd be honored, I bet.

bijou

Saddist I am, my poem is longer. Not as long as the inspirational piece, but long.

 

[Angeline]

Written in pornified Seussian style.

Ted Hears A Clit

On the evening of Monday, near a puddle of drool,
in the soft of the bed lay a long and hard tool.
He was humming...buzzing the pussy's wet quim
when a dildo named Ted heard a soft hymn.

So Ted stopped his shaking. He pulled out of the mound
"That's lovely," mused Ted. "What's making that sound?"
It sang out again! A glorious tune.
As if a wicked woman was raising the moon.
"I hear you," said Ted. "I love the song that you sing."
He shook and he shook. Her bell he did ring
once he found the small node at the top of her thing.

"Oh yes!" gloried Ted. "I've never once smelled
the musk of an oyster like this one unshelled.
Oh darling pussy what a glorious stink... that wafts through the air
just when I nudge against that little bump there.
You must have a button that turns you on and responds
right here, at the pout of your delectable mons...

"A sexy little clit that moans when you lust
I'll bet it'll blow if I do what I do and just
glide over it's stiffness and inside you get tucked,
for a clit is a clit, that just needs to be fucked."

So, with spinning vibrations he thrust in and out
He heard the pussy splashing but then Ted heard a shout
"I'm cumming, I'm cumming! God, yes! Fuck my slit!
My god it feels good! When I rub my clit."

Ted was so happy. He'd made pussy wet
and the clit? Why the clit was as glad as a clit gets!
The dildo named Ted now rests in his drawer,
recharged and ready for when the pussy needs more.

Ahahahaha!

You beast! You couldn't resist the Ted, could you?

 

[sophieloves]

Champagne! hhhahahahaha

brilliant - i raise a toast to "Clits of the world!"

 

[champagne1982]

Well, Ange, Ted was calling out from amidst his soft cloud of panty silk.

And we all know every pussy has a song to be sung, for a clit is a clit that needs to be fucked.

 

[unpredictablebijou]

OMFGLOL, as they say. That is completely wrong and totally beautiful and if I weren't in love with you already I would be now. I may stalk you now.



bj

 

[Angeline]

Well, Ange, Ted was calling out from amidst his soft cloud of panty silk.

And we all know every pussy has a song to be sung, for a clit is a clit that needs to be fucked.

You realize that the funniest part of all this for me is that I know the real Ted, and the only pussy he wants to get next to has four paws and meows.

 

[unpredictablebijou]

Angeline, "Bijou gets Undressed" is most excellent. But then one could have predicted that I'd like it.

yum! yay!

bj

 

[Angeline]

Angeline, "Bijou gets Undressed" is most excellent. But then one could have predicted that I'd like it.

yum! yay!

bj

Thanks. I don't really know Julien Opie, but I was searching around and saw the Bijou series. How could I resist? And it was very interesting to write about something so minimal, just lines.

 

[Tzara]

Thanks. I don't really know Julien Opie, but I was searching around and saw the Bijou series. How could I resist? And it was very interesting to write about something so minimal, just lines.

Where I know him from is his portrait of the rock group Blur:

The individual prints are in the collection of the National Portrait Gallery in London. Cool stuff. He seems very Pop influenced to me.

To select the Bijou Gets Undressed series is characteristically brilliant of you, Angie. And I have to confess I was hooked just by the title.

Dunno why. Some idle fantasy, probably.

 

[Angeline]

Where I know him from is his portrait of the rock group Blur:

The individual prints are in the collection of the National Portrait Gallery in London. Cool stuff. He seems very Pop influenced to me.

To select the Bijou Gets Undressed series is characteristically brilliant of you, Angie. And I have to confess I was hooked just by the title.

Dunno why. Some idle fantasy, probably.

Thanks T-guy. I thought the same, that he seems Pop Art and Warhol influenced to me.

I was going to write about Chagall (because I love Chagall), but I thought I should go outside my little zone and try to push myself. So I looked at (even more) modern art and found him. The Bijou part was just serendipitous, but like I said: how could I resist once I found it?

PS This is a great challenge idea and one that I think will stick long past the challenge. So glad you're arond.

 

[Angeline]

It's all here
in black
.............and white
wrong
............ or right
we use it
for our own devises
our secret vices
day
........ and night
for the record
a groovy Hansard
of our sins.​

I like this, PoeTesse. And it makes sense to me now that I've looked up Hansard. And you actually used "groovy" in a way that doesn't make me wince.

 

[unpredictablebijou]

'Tesse, groovy indeed. That is way fun, especially for a font fiend like me.

In reading through our various struggles with posting art for TZ's challenge, this occurred to me: leave it to you, braniac, to invent a challenge that improves both our writing and our computer skills, as well as drawing us to explore art.

smartypants.

bj

 

[Tzara]

Thanks T-guy. I thought the same, that he seems Pop Art and Warhol influenced to me.

I was going to write about Chagall (because I love Chagall), but I thought I should go outside my little zone and try to push myself. So I looked at (even more) modern art and found him. The Bijou part was just serendipitous, but like I said: how could I resist once I found it?

PS This is a great challenge idea and one that I think will stick long past the challenge. So glad you're arond.

The very best Chagall reference in literature that I know of is the end of Bernard Malamud's story "The Magic Barrel." Bang done Chagall's The Bride, in my book. Fabulous story. Read it if you have not. You'll thank me.

Maybe.

Done? Good. Now let me humbly suggest you kick Malamud's ass. His ass could use a good kicking, particularly by a poet.

And I am not only a rond, I am the Rond, whatever that might mean.




You're entirely too nice for this place. Shouldn't you be calling someone names? What's wrong with you?

 

[Tzara]

In reading through our various struggles with posting art for TZ's challenge, this occurred to me: leave it to you, braniac, to invent a challenge that improves both our writing and our computer skills, as well as drawing us to explore art.

I thought Angie had you taking your clothes off. Shouldn't you be attending to that?

Meanwhile...

You know, I am feeling pretty green. Kind of queasy, even. This force field aura is giving me a headache like you won't believe.

 

[Angeline]

Giving You Up

All I find that matters is my dream:
succulent promises, heated
warmth against me.
That flame, buttery, sizzles,
finishes each day
while I slip inexorably,
compelled to join, to bind:
soft, red-orange flower-
blinding fire-ball.

The flame
the molten wax
whisker burn and skin burn and even sheet burn
that are offered to the Sun
spill across the sky and disappear
and I unfold to your hard grace.

My fingers tear at the sheets,
the day, and know the warmth of you,
the one that lightning struck, scarred.
We might have sparkled,
air over ice.
Unwind from the night:
you can light your own cigar.



Line 1 Remec, from Dear Clair
2 Angeline, from Caramel Suite
3 Tristesse, from Camping, Cape Breton
4 Angeline, from Caramel Suite
5 Tristesse, from Camping, Cape Breton
6 Lorencino, from Will My Sinews Loosen?
7 Tzara, from Darwinian
8 and 9 Remec, from Night’s End
10 and 11 Sophieloves, from Written while falling asleep
12 mysticmoon, from Untitled, Writing Live #909
13 The Fool, from Seasons
14 Champagne, from On Waking Up Before Dawn
15 Angeline, from Anointed
16 Champagne, from The Ecstasy
17 Champagne, from On Waking Up Before Dawn
18 Tzara, from Light of Distant Cities
19 Tristesse, from Glose
20 sophieloves, from Written while falling asleep
21 Remec, from Night’s End
22 Bronzeage, from Daddy and Little One, Ch. 20


Punctuation is my own. Line 4 was originally in past tense: "sizzled."
It's like the poetic form of "Dead Men Don't Wear Plaid"
PG I'm sorry, I was already finishing this by the time you got in here.

This is just wonderful, and I'm thrilled to be part of it. You pulled lines from two of my favorites.

 

[Angeline]

I would like to take part in this challenge. I admire the work and the authors in here. I don't have much to offer in exchange; only one essay posted so far and two poems in a thread. But here is my offering. Thank you for putting up so much good work to read.




line 1: Tess, from Exodus
line 30: Lorencino, from A Lifetime in a Moment



The gardens grown over the blood
are not for the coward or the casual hunter,
the plain man, the recreational diver.
That dragon spine baptism
is reserved for the true disciple of women.
That rough taste of copper and earth and salt
that bare animal gluttony of the darker gods
is ours: we fear no plunge into the war and surf
we will swim in the river, jungle dive
and come up proud-soaked with the paint of power
stripes from the red ritual. Fear the assay:
a sword points at your heart and the path
is riddled with serpents. Leave it to us, the ones
with enough hunger to wake that Medusa
to drive the steep road to the flowering.

Wowzers! That's some entry into the challenge. Great poem and I love "proud-soaked with the paint of power." Please be challenged again and again.

 

[unpredictablebijou]

This is just wonderful, and I'm thrilled to be part of it. You pulled lines from two of my favorites.

shucks. thanks. That's mostly just me messing around; I'm still working on the actual challenge proper.

smooch.

bj

 

[unpredictablebijou]

That's it bj; I'm cutting you off. No more drinkin' with them Irish gents.

Check this from Notes...:

You used to wish
for liquid or cloth
any soft thing
to fold into yourself
to match the shape
of the space, the empty cup
that defines you
like your own open mouth:
You carry it
to the well, carry it
back. Empty. Drink.



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You are right, of course. I was distracted by booze, Irish boys and shiny objects. I was also looking at her LAST line. My bad. Didn't notice the numbers.

In fact, you are quite literally right. Just now there were two VERY distracting Irish boys in my shop, while I was trying to focus on catching up in here. Both good friends, and both rather hot. There's a hot Irish boy synchronicity going on.

Not drunk, though. Except on a triple shot mocha.

My gratitude. I think I'm all caught up now.

bj

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

I like this, PoeTesse. And it makes sense to me now that I've looked up Hansard. And you actually used "groovy" in a way that doesn't make me wince.

Thank you - You know I love making my readers work. "Groovy" is an expression I'd never normally use but here I did because of the mention of a record. Weak word play, I know but I couldn't resist.

 

[foehn2]

no such thing as weak word play. if it frolics, it rocks.

 

[Angeline]

Thank you Remec, Tath, and Tzara for wonderful entries in the Thanksgiving Challenge thread. I once again stand ama-zed by the poetry writers on this forum produce, even when constricted by proscribed start and end lines.

And thanks Remec for using a line from Autumn in New York.


<Hark! I hear the romantic sounds of my beloved rooting through the bag of Chex mix in the kitchen (filtching all the M&Ms). I suppose I should think about starting dinner soon...>

 

[LeBroz]

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For those who want to submit their Thanksgiving challenge poems like Champs did, here is the process that Lauren outlined a couple years ago:


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The way I'm going to format my poem(s) when I submit it (them) is:

 
 
Quickened pace betrays my careful plans 1

[poem content that I'm still working on]

I'll untie me
from your cerebellum 2
 
 
 
1 in "By Night's Sweet Darkness", by JUDO ©2003.
2 in "Still", by Cordelia ©2004.

END QUOTE ~~~


Lauren then goes on in another post to further explain how to achieve the effects she achieved as follows:


QUOTE ~~~

By the way, the codes I'm using to get the results above are these:


Quickened pace betrays my careful plans¹
...
I'll untie me
from your cerebellum²
 
 
¹ <I>in <a href="http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=81241">"By Night's Sweet Darkness"</a>, by <a href="http://english.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=28543&page=submissions">JUDO</a> ©2003.</I>
² <I>in <a href="http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=126515">"Still"</a>, by <a href="http://english.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=28467&page=submissions">Cordelia</a> ©2004.</I>

END QUOTE ~~~


Hope this helps for anyone daring to try to submit their masterpieces complete with links.


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[champagne1982]

TY Leon. I was just about to post something about the coding. I simply went to my earlier challenge submission (Widow's Thanksgiving) and right clicked the screen. The drop down menu has a tab "View Source" and I scrolled through the lines until I found the links at the bottom.

I then copied and pasted the lines of code into a notepad file and substituted the new web addresses and titles in place of the ones there. Lauren's explanation could be easier ... maybe.

And in order to put those lil number thingies in a bulletin board post you can either copy and paste them from Tzed's poemie or use the char map thingie in your system tools folder in windows programming.

(that's start > programs > accessories > system tools > char map) I grabbed them from the sixth line down in the arial font chart.

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[The_Fool]

Okay Ange. I am so pissed at you. You are so on my shit list. How dare you allow me to misinterpret the rules to your Thanksgiving challenge. I am so going to go sulk in a corner until I decide to come out and write another one...

 

[LeBroz]

TY Leon. I was just about to post something about the coding. I simply went to my earlier challenge submission (Widow's Thanksgiving) and right clicked the screen. The drop down menu has a tab "View Source" and I scrolled through the lines until I found the links at the bottom.

I then copied and pasted the lines of code into a notepad file and substituted the new web addresses and titles in place of the ones there. Lauren's explanation could be easier ... maybe.

And in order to put those lil number thingies in a bulletin board post you can either copy and paste them from Tzed's poemie or use the char map thingie in your system tools folder in windows programming.

(that's start > programs > accessories > system tools > char map) I grabbed them from the sixth line down in the arial font chart.

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Learn something new everyday. Totally fascinating. I can see a possible answer to that perennial problem everyone seems to have about having blank lines following the final line of text in the poem — put in a couple breaks when pasting in the text for submission, such as
<br />
<br />
I bet that just might do the trick.

After seeing all these details, I can see why Ange only went for posting the poems in the thread. Submitting them as you did goes well beyond the challenge and the detail work required is so ... detailed!

BTW, since I'm always looking for quicker ways to do some things I'm always looking for ways to avoid cut-and-paste work. Such as holding down the Alt key while punching in 4-digit codes for certain symbols on the number pad (the codes can also be found in that character map). Such as Alt+0185= ¹ or Alt+169=© or {here's a goody} instead of doing a double hyphen when you want a long dash, go for Alt+0151= —

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