"To keep the review thread clean..."

[Stella_Omega]

Just wanted to say thank you to Neoneurotic for the kind words, and Angeline's critique-- which is honest and right on the mark, and encouraging at the same time!

(And Freud would have conniptions if he tried analysing either you or me, Neo. You don't want to do that to the poor man, do you?)

 

[Tathagata]

Thank you Champ for the mention and comment on my poem.
I like your idea of shifting the verses around, I may tinker with just that in the future.
I love a review that makes me think.
( or was that drink?)


And thanks to Ange for saying I have, and being able to hear a " poetic voice"
( does it have an accent?)

Thanks to all who took the time to read.
Namaste'

 

[Angeline]

Thank you Champ for the mention and comment on my poem.
I like your idea of shifting the verses around, I may tinker with just that in the future.
I love a review that makes me think.
( or was that drink?)


And thanks to Ange for saying I have, and being able to hear a " poetic voice"
( does it have an accent?)

Thanks to all who took the time to read.
Namaste'

It sounded to me like the Lucky Charms leprechaun.

 

[Tathagata]

It sounded to me like the Lucky Charms leprechaun.

Pow Zoom to the moon Alice

 

[Angeline]

Pow Zoom to the moon Alice

I was hoping you'd offer me a pot of gold. We're a little tight after buying that bed.

 

[Tathagata]

I was hoping you'd offer me a pot of gold. We're a little tight after buying that bed.

you shouldn't mention "tight" and "bed" in the same sentence

 

[Angeline]

you shouldn't mention "tight" and "bed" in the same sentence

I considered editing it for that reason, but I figured "oh I don't need to. He can rise above it," but I suppose I shouldn't mention beds and you rising in the same conversation either, huh?

Don't make me tell Eve you're misbehaving on the poetry forum.

 

[Tathagata]

I considered editing it for that reason, but I figured "oh I don't need to. He can rise above it," but I suppose I shouldn't mention beds and you rising in the same conversation either, huh?

Don't make me tell Eve you're misbehaving on the poetry forum.

I rise above nothing
that's been made clear this week


what's she gonna do...spank my corner rat pencil dick?
( he asked hopefully)

 

[Angeline]

I rise above nothing
that's been made clear this week


what's she gonna do...spank my corner rat pencil dick?
( he asked hopefully)

Hehe. I was really just trying to tempt you and your erm writing instrument with the thought of that very thing. We understand each other all too well.

 

[Tathagata]

Hehe. I was really just trying to tempt you and your erm writing instrument with the thought of that very thing. We understand each other all too well.

scary
and " I am the walrus" just came on my Ipod

cue spooky music

 

[Angeline]

scary
and " I am the walrus" just came on my Ipod

cue spooky music

Winston O Boogie approves of our warped and wonderful mutual admiration society.

 

[champagne1982]

I was just looking through the Archival Review thread and I just have to say that WOW! Lebroz just inserted little green E icons beside all the titles of the poems that were given them. Golly. That's a lot of formatting!

 

[LeBroz]

I was just looking through the Archival Review thread and I just have to say that WOW! Lebroz just inserted little green E icons beside all the titles of the poems that were given them. Golly. That's a lot of formatting!

Nonsense! Putting in that little greenie like so,

, is much easier than retaining the formatting in a RazzRajen poem.

.
.
.

 

[champagne1982]

Nonsense! Putting in that little greenie like so,

, is much easier than retaining the formatting in a RazzRajen poem.

.
.
.

Well, yes if you take it as one entity, but there are a lot of poems on that thread, so (unless you've become mr speedy fingers) it must have taken TIME more than effort. I appreciate your taking the time.

 

[Tathagata]

Winston O Boogie approves of our warped and wonderful mutual admiration society.

Brian Epstein : "What do you think I should call my autobiography?"
John Lennon: " Why don't you call it " Queer Jew?"
Brian Epstein: "I was thinking of calling it " Cellar Full of Noise"
John Lennon: " How about " Cellar Full of Boys?"

Cruel but so dead on
I miss John Lennon for so many reasons

 

[Angeline]

Brian Epstein : "What do you think I should call my autobiography?"
John Lennon: " Why don't you call it " Queer Jew?"
Brian Epstein: "I was thinking of calling it " Cellar Full of Noise"
John Lennon: " How about " Cellar Full of Boys?"

Cruel but so dead on
I miss John Lennon for so many reasons

I remember that quote. I miss John, too. Cruel and funny and brilliant and tender and wild. My hero.

 

[Tathagata]

I remember that quote. I miss John, too. Cruel and funny and brilliant and tender and wild. My hero.

really brilliant with word play if you've ever read his two books


A Letter



......................................................Sir,

Why are there not more pidgers and writty about our
favourit group (Berneese und zee rippers). There are
thirty-nine of them, you know. We like it cause Alec
jumb about and shoes. Pleese send a stabbed undressed
envelope of Bern and Ern dancing and doing their
splendid to entertain a most deserting group and we
hope this fires you as you keeler.
An admirrer..............................



Afan
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

At the Denis



Madam: I have a hallowed tooth that suffer me grately.
Sir: Sly down in that legchair Madam and open your gorble wide - your mouse is all but toothless.

Madam: Alad! I ahve but eight tooth remaining (eight tooth left).

Sir:Then you have lost eighty three.

Madam: Impossyble.

Sir: Everydobby knows there are foor decisives two canyons and ten grundies, which make thirsty two in all.

Madam: But I have done everything to save my tooth.

Sir: Perhumps! but to no avague.

Madam: Ah! why did I not insult you sooner?

Sir: to late, it must be now or neville.

Madam: You will pull it out for me then?

Sir: No, madman, I will excret it.

Madam: but thatis very painfull.

Sir: Let me see it - Crack! there it be madarce.

Madam: But sir I wished to keep (was anxious to keep) that tooth.

Sir: It was all black and moody, and the others are too.

Madam: Mercy - I will have none to eat with soon.

Sir: A free Nasty Health set is good, and you will look thirty years jungle.

Madam: (Aside) Thirty years jungle; (Aloud) Sir I am no catholic, pull out all my stumps.

Sir: O.K. Gummy.

 

[Angeline]

really brilliant with word play if you've ever read his two books


A Letter



......................................................Sir,

Why are there not more pidgers and writty about our
favourit group (Berneese und zee rippers). There are
thirty-nine of them, you know. We like it cause Alec
jumb about and shoes. Pleese send a stabbed undressed
envelope of Bern and Ern dancing and doing their
splendid to entertain a most deserting group and we
hope this fires you as you keeler.
An admirrer..............................



Afan
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

At the Denis



Madam: I have a hallowed tooth that suffer me grately.
Sir: Sly down in that legchair Madam and open your gorble wide - your mouse is all but toothless.

Madam: Alad! I ahve but eight tooth remaining (eight tooth left).

Sir:Then you have lost eighty three.

Madam: Impossyble.

Sir: Everydobby knows there are foor decisives two canyons and ten grundies, which make thirsty two in all.

Madam: But I have done everything to save my tooth.

Sir: Perhumps! but to no avague.

Madam: Ah! why did I not insult you sooner?

Sir: to late, it must be now or neville.

Madam: You will pull it out for me then?

Sir: No, madman, I will excret it.

Madam: but thatis very painfull.

Sir: Let me see it - Crack! there it be madarce.

Madam: But sir I wished to keep (was anxious to keep) that tooth.

Sir: It was all black and moody, and the others are too.

Madam: Mercy - I will have none to eat with soon.

Sir: A free Nasty Health set is good, and you will look thirty years jungle.

Madam: (Aside) Thirty years jungle; (Aloud) Sir I am no catholic, pull out all my stumps.

Sir: O.K. Gummy.

Oh yes. I read them both, In His Own Write and A Spaniard in the Works. I also have copies of Grapefruit and Skywriting by Word of Mouth. I have a first edition copy of A Cellarfull of Noise (my grandpa got it for me when it came out). Well, I think I still have it. It's one of the things I have to pick up when I go to Philly.

I loved his poem I Sat Belonely.

I sat belonely down a tree,
humbled fat and small.
A little lady sing to me
I couldn't see at all.

I'm looking up and at the sky,
to find such wonderous voice.
Puzzly, puzzle, wonder why,
I hear but I have no choice.

'Speak up, come forth, you ravel me',
I potty menthol shout.
'I know you hiddy by this tree'.
But still she won't come out.

Such sofly singing lulled me sleep,
an hour or two or so
I wakeny slow and took a peep
and still no lady show.

Then suddy on a little twig
I thought I see a sight,
A tiny little tiny pig,
that sing with all it's might

'I thought you were a lady',
I giggle,-well I may,
To my surprise the lady,
got up-and flew away.

 

[CafeDuck]

Quack!

The duo-personality that I am will only remain a mystery if you avoid looking at my bio...

We have left duck feathers scattered around here, I'm sure a great detective like you, Ang, would have no problem getting to the feathered bottom of this.

Thanks for appreciating the fun of our illustrated entry. (the duck's made of painted coffee cans, hence the buzzed artiste!)

 

[Angeline]

The duo-personality that I am will only remain a mystery if you avoid looking at my bio...

We have left duck feathers scattered around here, I'm sure a great detective like you, Ang, would have no problem getting to the feathered bottom of this.

Thanks for appreciating the fun of our illustrated entry. (the duck's made of painted coffee cans, hence the buzzed artiste!)

I knew a few days ago when your feathered friend let me have a sneak preview of the poem.

Couple a sick quackers, you two are.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

The duo-personality that I am will only remain a mystery if you avoid looking at my bio...

We have left duck feathers scattered around here, I'm sure a great detective like you, Ang, would have no problem getting to the feathered bottom of this.

Thanks for appreciating the fun of our illustrated entry. (the duck's made of painted coffee cans, hence the buzzed artiste!)

Aha penny drops ..

 

[Guest]

Poof!
Twas' magically delicious.

 

[bluerains]

to place

Thank you Ange for the mention today in your review, but mostly thanks for the flow of kind words and encouragement you've given me over the years. I'd be happy for any suggestion you had for "Bees" or any other poem for that matter, but I do keep copies of un-merged layers on illustrated poems.


Much thanks to those who left public comments or sent them via email, bluerains in particular since something she wrote a while back on bees stuck in my head while creating my "Bees are Leaving".

the thoughts of such importance in your illustrations means more than words can say...
hopefullly you have sent powerful images of change...thanks for sharing ...blue

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Thankyou from me also excuse me if I waffle on but I am inebriated but with very good cause and its still sencere sinceer oh bum I mean it.. shall prob regret this in morning I wonder what waffle can issue from a pished head .. au revoir

 

[TheRainMan]

Thankyou from me also excuse me if I waffle on but I am inebriated but with very good cause and its still sencere sinceer oh bum I mean it.. shall prob regret this in morning I wonder what waffle can issue from a pished head .. au revoir

i want some of what you're drinkin'