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bogusbrig said:Thanks for the comments on my poem. What id the 5/5 thread Ange?
wildsweetone said:Caress by RhymeFairy. i liked this poem but think that it could be enhanced by improved line breaks. eg i like the line break on line 4, but don't feel line 3 is right. (line 6 'destines' should be 'destiny's' i think).
Jamison said:Thank you wildsweet for the mention in your review. I don't know anything about enjambents, if I used them, it wouldn't have been on purpose. In this case, however, I call it a leading line break where the last word "does" makes you wonder "does what?" and reader goes to the next line to find out. I'm sure it has a technical name, but I don't recall what. The assonance of "forgot, shot, etc" didn't go over well for others, though I'm glad you appreciated it.
I privately emailed those who left Public Comments, but I'd like to say thank you again here as well.
I remember my mom and my grandma canning jams and vegetables. I used to help my mom when I was little. It's such a great thing and it should be mentioned in poems.ghost_girl said:Thank you, Wicked Eve, for reading and commenting on my poem.
It takes a special person to appreciate that type of humor, and when I wrote it, I couldn't help but think of your Bob poems, and your Conrad Dimple, of course
julie