"To keep the review thread clean..."

[Tzara]

Well, I wasn't talking about you, silly. lol

I know. But if I don't, who is still submitting poemy things, why should anyone else do it?

I know it's hard for many of us to get around to reading and commenting. I guess I was just pleased with many of the poems today, and I was hoping more people would comment.

I do and don't. I get in the mood and comment for a while and then basically stop. No reason why, other than I'd like to be substantive than "Really great! Thanks for writing!" and that's hard to do regularly.

 

[WickedEve]

WickedEve left me a little flat when I read the first poem of her's on the list today. I need you to read her offerings in chronological order of production and you'll see why ... Looking for God. It's a poem that is solid and shows us something safe almost as if the poet were afraid to blaspheme. It takes very little risk. Then read this one, Mere Meaning and get blown away by her simple statement of what she sees in him. It's a wonderful poem. I was so pleased I found these two poems on my review day. They give us such a good example of how a poet learns to be comfortable with their art. Thanks for letting me have a WickedEve adoration moment.

Carrie, Carrie. The comments above and the feedback you left on the poems was, in my book, perfect feedback. I'm so darn tickled with it. Yeah, I see it now. I guess my writing is growing. I took a long break, came back, starting writing again, all rusty and dusty. A ways to go but, at least, I'm going.

And the part about safe and afraid to blaspheme? Wow. You're good. I have some huge religious hangups left over from my younger years. In the past year, I've grown like crazy, thanks to my Hugo. Maybe it's reflecting in my poetry?

Thanks to everyone else who commented. Thanks N.J. for a comment on Bare Gossip that I just discovered.

And another thanks to the poet who emailed me and said that he learns from reading my poems. Seriously, that's the ultimate compliment. It makes it worth while to write and share.

 

[champagne1982]

Carrie, Carrie. The comments above and the feedback you left on the poems was, in my book, perfect feedback. I'm so darn tickled with it. Yeah, I see it now. I guess my writing is growing. I took a long break, came back, starting writing again, all rusty and dusty. A ways to go but, at least, I'm going.

And the part about safe and afraid to blaspheme? Wow. You're good. I have some huge religious hangups left over from my younger years. In the past year, I've grown like crazy, thanks to my Hugo. Maybe it's reflecting in my poetry?

Thanks to everyone else who commented. Thanks N.J. for a comment on Bare Gossip that I just discovered.

And another thanks to the poet who emailed me and said that he learns from reading my poems. Seriously, that's the ultimate compliment. It makes it worth while to write and share.

I carry around a feather to tickle with. Well, it's a quill and I only use it on my review day. And I'd like to send thanks to Hugo, too. He's definitely tapped an excellent vein of poetry inducing ore in the mine called Eve; LOL, where only spelunkers like Conrad Dimple dared to go before.

 

[Safe_Bet]

I carry around a feather to tickle with. Well, it's a quill and I only use it on my review day. And I'd like to send thanks to Hugo, too. He's definitely tapped an excellent vein of poetry inducing ore in the mine called Eve; LOL, where only spelunkers like Conrad Dimple dared to go before.

I am SO not going to touch that line!

 

[WickedEve]

I am SO not going to touch that line!

Because you're a sick, sick woman? No need to answer.

 

[champagne1982]

Laurel or Manu or both of the site operators took their tech whizziness to my poem and corrected the title spelling to Repertoire. I feel so much better now... Thanks to all who've taken the time to comment on the piece. I am reasonably proud of it.

 

[WickedEve]

Although I did laugh at the phrase "Allegro, you bastard" in the other (if that be not the desired intent of the phrase, I nevertheless make no apologies).

There is often humor in my poetry. Yes, laughter was appropriate.

 

[Equinoxe]

There is often humor in my poetry. Yes, laughter was appropriate.

I had noticed, or at least thought so, but I had to include the non-disclaiming disclaimer.

 

[Minervous]

.....

 

[WickedEve]

Minervous, you're welcome.
Safe_Bet, thanks for the comments, girl! Many of my poems would just be sitting there, commet-less without you.

 

[Equinoxe]

Thank you, Equinoxe, for your graciously elliptical comment on my poem today...

You're welcome. I am elliptical.

 

[The_Frank_Black]

Liar-

Thank you for steering readers to my poem. I do appreciate it very much.

Liar and Equinoxe- Sorry to disappoint, I am not the Frank Black I think you are referring to. I haven't a Catholic bone in my body.

There is already a Frank Black registered here at Literotica so I had to improvise with my name.

Thanks again, for the interest.

cheers!

 

[Safe_Bet]

Your review today was right on the nose, Angeline. Those three poems were magnificent. I really liked "Tiny Epitaph" because that poem is REALLY "deep," if you want it to be, or it can be a witty little poem. I've read it in a couple different moods and I got completely different experiences each time.

(and NO cracks about the moods!)​

 

[Equinoxe]

Angeline, thank you so much for your mention and comments on my poem! Intertwine was, for me as well, a key word in the poem and much of the time spent writing was figuring out how best to make use of it. I shall have to think more on the and-to issue.

Thank you, also, Safe_Bet and inlovewithyourghost, for your comments on the poem. It is always wonderful to know that something resonates beyond oneself and I have been exceptionally pleased to read the responses to the poem—it has really made my day.

This space reserved for later thanks and comments on comments.

 

[WickedEve]

And do not miss either of the two little treasures from Wicked Eve. Her tongue-in-cheek Tiny Epitaph is a not so tiny narrative that will make you giggle and perhaps stop to consider how our fleeting, perhaps thoughtless, human actions can rock another, smaller world. a poem, simply is simply masterful writing and damnit where's the E? This poem cries out for an E, but it didn't get one, so here's a big old A. Means about as much.

Read a poem, simply at least five times. I promise you you'll find something new to appreciate in it with each successive read. Who is the narrator? Who's writing the poem? Look at the way each strophe can stand on its own and how each end word can be interpreted various ways. Then think about the fact that--on the face of it--absolutely nothing remarkable is happening in this poem and yet every word makes magic. Damn you publishers! Publish this woman!

That is all.

Go forth and be poetic.

Wow on the review. I don't think I'm paying you enough.
Really. It makes me feel good. I kind of needed that right now.

 

[Safe_Bet]

Safe_Bet starts us off today with all the pretty pictures of sex & love in Give me. After going through all those nice descriptions, that last strophe evokes a yuck. Though it isn't written that way, I managed to read, "old, fat, and ugly."

Hmmm. That wasn't what I meant, but I see your point. "Fat Ugly" is my 'feeling sorry for myself' term for pregnant. I guess that I am just writing too far inside my own head and need to read the lines through other people's eyes. I need to remember that poetry is to 'share' my emotions and I can't assume everyone knows what is going on in my life. Thanks LeBroz for the clarity.

 

[LeBroz]

Hmmm. That wasn't what I meant, but I see your point. "Fat Ugly" is my 'feeling sorry for myself' term for pregnant. I guess that I am just writing too far inside my own head and need to read the lines through other people's eyes. I need to remember that poetry is to 'share' my emotions and I can't assume everyone knows what is going on in my life. Thanks LeBroz for the clarity.

Ahhhh - a different perspective. I didn't see pregnancy in that. Maybe that's why the latest term is to refer to that "fat" factor in a pregnant woman as a "baby bump". I think every pregnant woman becomes cuter the bigger she gets. Knowing what you meant gives it a slightly different feel.

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[Safe_Bet]

Thank you for reviewing my poem today, Eve. Sorry for writing such a "bummer" poem, but hey, even Ms. Pollyanna Sunshine gets to feel sad once in a while.

But you know what? A willing mind can find inspiration and enjoyment in surprising places. Just today I was cruising through the "All of a sudden passion suddenly" thread and found a bit of magic that a truely wonderful and gifted poet left there to make me happy:

Rouse Afterchurch speaks
of railway sleepers — wood cross ties,
instead of stone sleepers.

He tries to explain odor
that smells,
to me,
the way licorice looks.

"Resins.
Creosote bush.
Crude coke oven tar."

I find his explanation
poetic,
as I hold my breath
past the lumber yard.

I guess I owe you a couple of "Thank Yous" today.

 

[Safe_Bet]

The subject of voting vs. reviewing poems has come up in the "New Poems Reviews" thread and I'd like to get my "vote" in.

I have no problem with people voting as long as they provide the reasons WHY they are voting as they did. Just give me a well reasoned explanation as to why you like / dislike my piece -

Oh wait! A vote with an explanation? Hmmmm, almost sounds like a review don't it!



Sorry for going all snarky. It's just that quite often the only feedback I get on a poem is from the review (and that's if I lucky enough to catch the reviews eye).

I think it is important to share our opinions of each others work. Quite frankly, I don't give a fig about what John Q thinks of my lesbian poem. I EXPECT the majority of them to dislike it, based upon content. I DO care what fellow poets have to say because that is the only way I'll ever get better. I guess I hold you "poets" to a higher standard and I know that you, based upon my experiences here so far, will consider my work on its merit, not its subject matter. I WANT that feedback, guidance and motivation.

I think we owe that to each other. I think we owe each other the courtesy of reading and commenting on each other’s work.

Okay, I'll shut up now.

 

[champagne1982]

I will give occassional applause to work I see posted on the challenge and suddenly threads here in the forum. I try to provide genuine critique to those poems offered in the circle or on the threads opened for indepth dissection and edit suggestions of specific poems posted to them. I find that many times my investment is appreciated and the poet rewards me with an opportunity to have taken part in producing a really wonderful poem. Sadly, there are times when I give honest and direct critique only to have my input go unremarked or rudely shoved off the table.

A poet who'd like more than an opinion and my quick, first impression needs to invite me specifically through private messaging or posting to the circle or a construction thread. It takes effort, interest and time to give a thorough critique and edit advice on a poem, especially when its a long or intensely personal piece. If I do decide to offer my time, I try to give it without expectation of reward but it does wear me down if reciprocation is never offered or given.

Sometimes, it would be lovely if a person, desirous of critique, opens the exchange; if they take that chance then it's very likely the more cranky and frequent posters to the forums will take notice and return the favour. For instance, if someone critiques an Angeline poem, offering constructive suggestions that really would make a difference in the poetry, then I'd feel very comfortable in handing that individual a thorough critique of a poem they offer for workshopping thereafter.

You gotta give a lot to get a bit around here. Kinda like paper training puppies.

 

[WickedEve]

Thanks, Carrie, for the mention of Wrapped Around His Wrist. It's not easy writing or titling a poem about fisting.

 

[champagne1982]

Thanks, Carrie, for the mention of Wrapped Around His Wrist. It's not easy writing or titling a poem about fisting.

I think it's really good and ... ermm ... Dast I say "delicately handled"? <snicker>

 

[bluebell]

Thank you Eve, for the review thread mention, and thanks to each of of you who commented on my poem. Your time and words are much appreciated.

 

[WickedEve]

Thank you for reviewing my poem today, Eve. Sorry for writing such a "bummer" poem, but hey, even Ms. Pollyanna Sunshine gets to feel sad once in a while.

But you know what? A willing mind can find inspiration and enjoyment in surprising places. Just today I was cruising through the "All of a sudden passion suddenly" thread and found a bit of magic that a truely wonderful and gifted poet left there to make me happy:

Rouse Afterchurch speaks
of railway sleepers — wood cross ties,
instead of stone sleepers.

He tries to explain odor
that smells,
to me,
the way licorice looks.

"Resins.
Creosote bush.
Crude coke oven tar."

I find his explanation
poetic,
as I hold my breath
past the lumber yard.

I guess I owe you a couple of "Thank Yous" today.

Rouse Afterchurch. Guess where I get all the kooky names that I sometimes use in my poems. From spam emails, usually the ones wanting me to buy viagra. lol Seriously, it's a spammy goldmine.

 

[WickedEve]

Firstly, I must comment upon WickedEve's Dust Colony. It is a wonderful poem, read it. If I may dare to be critical, the only thing I did not care for was the period at the end of the fourth stanza (although I am a little uncertain about the how well the final line of the third stanza reads—though it is of course necessary to the form; it almost evokes a different sense of voice from the rest of the poem to me, as though one were more aware of repeating oneself—though in re-reading it as I'm writing this, the final line has that same feel). I say again: read it.

Thank you for the review. I must admit that I'm upset about the poem. It wasn't suppose to be online, not yet. It was written 4 years ago and I saw a few changes I wanted to make, but it was accidently submitted. I may have to edit.