"To keep the review thread clean..."

[GuiltyPleasure]

i was gonna say something . . . but i didn't.

i wanted to see how long it would take you to notice . . .

sorry. i can't help myself.

You're one of those men that notice smudged mascara, spinach teeth, or an inside-out sweater and just smiles, aren't you?

 

[TheRainMan]

You're one of those men that notice smudged mascara, spinach teeth, or an inside-out sweater and just smiles, aren't you?

pretty much.

but i make up for it tenfold, in the end.

 

[My Erotic Trail]

I was greeted early this morning with at least one comment on every poem that I had submitted Friday night. Not only did they go through the process in less than 24 hours, but then "My Erotic Tail" mentioned all three of them in the "New Poems Review" sticky. I am extremely happy and perplexed. This is such a fantastic occurance that I could never have dreamed. I feel enormously sweet!!!

You are most welcome!

I would also like to thank My Erotic Trail for mentioning and commenting on my poems. I was very excited about it.

My Pleasure

 

[DeepAsleep]

No, no, thank you. (where did your kittycat getting held up go?)

The way of the Dodo? This one feels more like me, what with the beer and cigarette and the general mood I've been in for a while. I'm a downer.

I really love your poems.

 

[Tzara]

The way of the Dodo? This one feels more like me, what with the beer and cigarette and the general mood I've been in for a while. I'm a downer.

I really love your poems.

Better watch that cigarette, kid. You're gonna drop ash in your beer.

Yeah, she's good, ain't she? So are you. Missed you, bud.

And, uh, I miss Kitty too. This av looks more like a painting by a hungover Edward Hopper. Perhaps that's appropriate, though. You bein' from the Heartland and such. Not that he was. Never mind.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

pretty much.

but i make up for it tenfold, in the end.

*rubs eyes, eats spinach salad and puts T on inside out.*

<-expectant smile.

 

[TheRainMan]

*rubs eyes, eats spinach salad and puts T on inside out.*

<-expectant smile.

lol . . .

you look perfect, dear.

 

[DeepAsleep]

Better watch that cigarette, kid. You're gonna drop ash in your beer.

Yeah, she's good, ain't she? So are you. Missed you, bud.

And, uh, I miss Kitty too. This av looks more like a painting by a hungover Edward Hopper. Perhaps that's appropriate, though. You bein' from the Heartland and such. Not that he was. Never mind.

It's actually a comic book cover, from the series now titled, "John Constantine: Hellblazer" which spawned the Keanu Reeves movie. (Which was a total bastardization of a story I really love.)

For more information about a truly great comic series:

A decent synopsis of Hellblazer

 

[Sealace]

did you call me a hat

Sealace,
really liked your work, especially falling awake. the last two lines close it wonderfully. Chapeau!

Thanks, boyvenus it feels good to be read. Hope you keep spending time in the poetry forum.

 

[TheRainMan]

2-9

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[clutching_calliope]

2-9? Too Many People in My Bed

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[GuiltyPleasure]

*given ten years of use, a mattress will weigh twice as much

I’d like to believe that dust
is moonbeam essence and intangible prisms of air
not dead skin cells
in snowflake clusters on my window ledge.

I blow

and another crowd rises to its feet.

damn! I like this.

 

[TheRainMan]

2-10

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[clutching_calliope]

2-10 Love From a Separate Room

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[bluerains]

Warm Thanks LaBroz

for the mention...that poem is really an enigma to me as I first wrote it with dolphins in the backround...what if I changed the image back on the thread..what would shift in the minds eye...it proved to me the power of visuals...
When are you going to share some of your work again!!!

 

[TheRainMan]

2-11

needed elsewhere.

 

[clutching_calliope]

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[clutching_calliope]

2-11 Start of the Heart

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[Sealace]

Thank you LeBroz for mentioning my poem yesterday, and to vampiredust for your helpful comments--

 

[TheRainMan]

I think I will quit now because I will never acheive this, this, this. Wow. This is incredible. When you revise will you put this on the construction thread? I would love to see where it goes from here.

no quiting allowed.

. . . i don't know where i'm going to put it. away, for now.

thank you for the too kind words.

 

[TheRainMan]

2-12

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[clutching_calliope]

Water and Ice

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[TheRainMan]

2-13

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[clutching_calliope]

Taxi Magic 2-13?

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[clutching_calliope]

2-14 Recycled Air

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