"To keep the review thread clean..."

[yourlittledominatrix]

New Poems Reviews
Saturday 8, 2006

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southern charm by yourlittledominatrix

southern charm without the southern comfort!

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i cannot tell if this is a bad or good review

 

[TheRainMan]

2-14

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[annaswirls]

i cannot tell if this is a bad or good review

ah that is the joy of MET it could be taken either way -- I would take it as good, might as well

 

[annaswirls]

damn you guys are smokin' hot red black and blue groove love coming here to read the best of you peace out

 

[Rybka]

Thank you, vampiredust for mentioning the poem APPLES GROW IN NEW HAMPSHIRE in the New Poems Review thread. ~ As was mentioned in comment, the spacing does make it read almost like separate poems. It is not meant to have more than single line stanza break blank lines. I don’t know what went wrong with the coding.

Tzara commented:

The line "Wild they ripen, tame and feral" caught me up a bit, though. I know (well, think) you mean "wild" to refer to how the fruit is growing and "tame" and "feral" to contrast domesticated and native strains, but for me the line reads like both redundancy and oxymoron. I guess I'd say I think it over clever, given the "simple" style of the rest of the poem.

In the penultimate line, "breathe" is misspelled.

Very nice read.

I sent him a reply, but my computer crashed when I hit "send". ~ What I said, in case he did not get the message, was that I could not believe that I had that "wrong word" and he is the only person to ever spot it (Kudos for your editorial eye), and that my meaning when I wrote this about 30 years ago, for "wild", "tame", and "feral" was that "wild" apples are those growing from seed, deep in the woods. "Tame" are those orchard or yard grown, and "feral" are those that were planted by man, but have since been abandoned to the whims of nature. ~ Kind of like the house cats the summer people bring with them and then "forget" when their vacation is over and they go back to the city. ~ I will have to think about possibly changing some punctuation in that line.

It is fascinating that a porn site can have poets/writers of such discernment.

Thanks to all who commented, voted, or at least read!



I also submitted a poem entitled “Sundowner” at the same time, but it is still pending. I hope its spacing is not screwed up too!

Both poems were in response to poetry challenges. The threads for which I missed. I have since read the apple thread, but I still have not found the “Sundowner” thread.

 

[My Erotic Trail]

i cannot tell if this is a bad or good review

yourlittledominatrix...
I don't believe too many people mention bad poetry on this thread <grin I enjoyed the poem and the way it was relayed. (~_*)

thanks anna <grinin'

 

[wildsweetone]

my apologies for being late, i have been away for a few days. i've just gone through and commented on all the Apple Challenge poems i could find, please let me know if i've missed any.

thank you Sex&Death for the mention of my poem A Sundowner . i'm glad you enjoyed it. and thank you to everyone who commented, i have some warm fuzzies and some definate food for thought to put in my intray.

The Mystery Valiant, i appreciate your straight up critique - i might not agree with some of it, but you have given me things to think about and that's always a good thing.

 

[wildsweetone]

there is nothing like going away for a few days and coming back to catch up reading this thread.

 

[Tzara]

Thanks to Mr. Dust and TRM for mentioning my stir fry poem on the review thread, and thanks as well to you commentees (commentors? commendationalists? commendatores?) who commented.

If someone ever wonders where poets come up with their metaphors, this is where this poem started.

 

[Tzara]

Thank you, vampiredust for mentioning the poem APPLES GROW IN NEW HAMPSHIRE in the New Poems Review thread. ~ As was mentioned in comment, the spacing does make it read almost like separate poems. It is not meant to have more than single line stanza break blank lines. I don’t know what went wrong with the coding.

Did you cut and paste HTML text into the form? I've found that if your text has embedded <br /> tags, they end up being duplicated inside the poem. Apparently whatever formatting software Lit uses doesn't scan to see if any are there in the first place.

Both poems were in response to poetry challenges. The threads for which I missed. I have since read the apple thread, but I still have not found the “Sundowner” thread.

"Sundowner" is a variety of apple. These were responses to the apple thread.

I did get your response, by the way. Thanks.

 

[Sex and Death]

my apologies for being late, i have been away for a few days. i've just gone through and commented on all the Apple Challenge poems i could find, please let me know if i've missed any.

thank you Sex&Death for the mention of my poem A Sundowner . i'm glad you enjoyed it. and thank you to everyone who commented, i have some warm fuzzies and some definate food for thought to put in my intray.

You're welocme.

I enjoy the poetry reviews...both reading and writing them.

And thanks to all who have given me such kind feedback on my poem And The Walls Came Tumblin' Down.

S&D

 

[bluerains]

Monday Mid-Morning

no poems up in the list for today yet..will check back this evening unless Vampiredust , you wish to jump in ..if they come up...

 

[clutching_calliope]

A Prayer for the Writer 2-14?

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[TheRainMan]

2-15

time to edit.

 

[bluerains]

Not many poems today

I didn't find anything new and alluring to my weirding thought patterns...later...blue

 

[clutching_calliope]

Auctionhouse Afternoon

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[clutching_calliope]

interruption 2-um, 16?

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[Sex and Death]

Anyone interested...Monthly Poetry Challenge Anyone?
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[RhymeFairy]

RhymeFairy has a couple pieces out today. First up is He ... Touched Me, a rather nice piece. But she really does a good job with Silk Slip Of Nothing.

But don't stop there — give the others a read and share with us your thoughts. It's not just the rain that makes reading today's submissions such a delight.

Thanks Leon for the loverly mention today.
Been a while for me and I am plum tickled ~!!!

Also Thanks going out to the readers and commentators.
I am here to learn. I appreciate any comments or suggestions ~

 

[clutching_calliope]

Door County 2-17

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[clutching_calliope]

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[Guest]

Love this...you make me hungry!

thank you

 

[Guest]

Sodium

O, Natrium, my darling salty dream! Let
me lick at you and thus spike mm Hg!





Yeah, yeah. Some days don't work out, OK?

That's all right, your Periodic Table poems are still clever.

 

[clutching_calliope]

Flubberland 2-18?

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[clutching_calliope]

Gasoline Alley 2-19

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