TheRainMan
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vampiredust said:I love you all
don't you want to hedge that?
. . . maybe, just a little?
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vampiredust said:I love you all
TheRainMan said:it’s 5 a.m. and still I do not sleep,
still I linger
at the spot where you try to travel
from one place to the next,
but you cannot choose the destination.
I have been here alone,
and lying after love, and always
I feel like I’ve broken into pieces
and entered every corner
of the city—I want to know them
prior to my arrival, to count myself
wise before the fact—
as the world is changing its look,
moving from one face to the next,
before it’s too late, I want them all
to hear me say
I know your suffering. It is my own.
I can't blame you for loving me...vampiredust said:I love you all
HotKittySpank said:hey-
new on this block.
this spot seems to rock.
I can be a bit silly,
a little willie-nillie,
and I might even give you a shock!
ok- don't be mean I was just having fun : )
yes, another lurker had come out of the woods...
--HKS
Feathers_And_Cream said:Thanks to champagne1892, I have been redirected here to introduce myself.
I hope to learn more about an aspect of writing that I had never previously experienced. If you have time to give me feedback, please be honest. I hope to contribute ideas both for and about writing, and I hope to read (and help critique) some great poetry. My writing is just starting to explore erotic possibilities. My Xanga site is at <www.xanga,com/shealawind> I only post poetry there occasionally, but you may or may not learn something about me if you visited. I haven't submitted anything to Literotica yet, so... there you have me.
Neteru said:Neteru here, was told about this site on another forum. Poetry is my life and my life is my poetry. I may see a phrase or a passage in a book, and the muse speaks to me , the poem flows around said phrase or passage. There are some amazing poets on this board, I can only hope to measure up.
poppy1963 said:Hello...I'm kinda new here as a poster but I, too , have lurked a while off and on over the last couple years. I've recently decided to start writing again...for pleasure...but here is a couple samples of my work from a few years back. I have some stories to add here eventually I think in other sections...but this is a sample of my poetry. Comments/criticisms/suggestions are welcome.
I read here because I have come to appreciate the "imagining" of things too often much more than the actual reality of them...lol. Words are very powerful for me...even more than pictures at times...as my mind can conjure both wonderful and horrific images on it's own. So that's why I am here!
The Beast (Addiction)
I danced with the Beast and tasted deadness
Of my spirit. It smelled so sweet....I was deceived.
I embraced with a fool the futility of the hopeless.
My faith was altered (had faltered) and the beast crept in.
I pranced with the Dragon and touched the rotting flesh
Of wicked. It felt so warm.......I was deceived.
I grasped the golden ring and was confused to feel it burning.
My faith resisted (was twisted) and the beast crept in.
I writhed with the Serpent and heard the wailing
Of the charmer. I thought he sang...I was deceived.
I glorified the discord of the Father of ALL Lies.
My faith was reason (was treason) and the beast crept in.
I glanced at my shoulder and saw the tearful eyes
Of *Heppa. My angel cried...and I was grieved.
I prayed for understanding. I asked and did receive.
I saw with terror, my error, but the beast would not LET go.
I cried out to the Lamb and found the Light of Love
Within me. He touched my heart. ALL sin relieved.
My Mother smiled gently streaming strength into my spirit.
My faith revived (I am Alive!) and the beast crept away.
Before it Left it turned it's heads
I caught my breath in fear and dread
Before it Left I heard it say:
"I will be back someday some how some way..."
I pray each day: God grant me the serenity to accept the things I cannot change, the courage to change the things that I can, and the wisdom to know the difference...
poppy (10/90)
*Heppa: my "guardian angel" since childhood
The Serenity Prayer of AA and all 12 Step Programs in italicized bold type.
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PRISMS: A ONE KNIGHT STAND
The prismic man sighed softly
Cooing pleasure from the pain
For you, he hushed, this rainbow
Sensations and a game.
Don't hurt me please (in shadows)
Muted roses, teals and seas
Don't hurt me, echoed echoes...
Please don't hurt me please.
He teased and pleased in earnest
What marvelous sorcery!
My tears and fears he banished
Surrender sweet and free.
The prismic man sighed deeply
Murmured another's name......
My spirit wept in silence
Small pleasures for the pain.
poppy
vampiredust said:Bullet by Aurora Black is a harrowing write. Go read.
bluerains said:Am always a fan of the sea....and
Thalassa
by Aurora Black has made a splash with a light hearted tribute...
wildsweetone said:i swear RainMan just mentioned the word soul in a poem... and not just any soul, but a satisfied soul to boot.
wow
It's not just your take on it. I think anyone who basically understands poetry knows that. I actually commented on two "soul" poems today. In one comment I said, "I get a little freaked out over the word soul in a poem, unless it's used brilliantly or in some bizarre or cool way." Maybe saying it has to be brilliant is a bit much.TheRainMan said:lol.
ALL words are fair game. words are just words.
IMO, anyone who says there are words (soul, heart, love, etc.) that are off-limits, are not quite right. i think they should be saying that those words are easy to use in cliched and uninteresting ways, so care must be taken to make them fresh and new.
it's not the word itself, but the words that surround it, that determine its legitimacy . . . that's my take on it, for what it's worth.
and that Calli's cue to attack.
WickedEve said:It's not just your take on it. I think anyone who basically understands poetry knows that. I actually commented on two "soul" poems today. In one comment I said, "I get a little freaked out over the word soul in a poem, unless it's used brilliantly or in some bizarre or cool way." Maybe saying it has to be brilliant is a bit much.
WickedEve said:It's not just your take on it. I think anyone who basically understands poetry knows that. I actually commented on two "soul" poems today. In one comment I said, "I get a little freaked out over the word soul in a poem, unless it's used brilliantly or in some bizarre or cool way." Maybe saying it has to be brilliant is a bit much.
WickedEve said:It's not just your take on it. I think anyone who basically understands poetry knows that . . .
TheRainMan said:yes, maybe, "brilliant" is a bit much.
some of the best advice i ever read on poetry was from Ezra Pound.
"make it new," he said.
annaswirls said:Welcome Poppy! Glad you are bringing us some samples of your work! I am not in poetry mode right now, but I will try to give you comments later if you wish.... hope to see more of you on the boards and some more poetry submitted!
Welcome, stick around awhile!
~as