"To keep the review thread clean..."

[clutching_calliope]

2-30 A Month of Sewing

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[Guest]

thanks vampiredust for the mention

 

[TheRainMan]

Congratulations at the finish line, miss 30/30.

and neo too . . . i missed neo . . . . . . and tzara, i think i missed tzara back there too . . . and . . .

oh, everyone who made it.

 

[TheRainMan]

i've a feeling you could turn every cliche in the world on its head and make each one new.

you are just about the kindest and sweetest thing around these parts.

thank you.

 

[Tzara]

the safe passage of the cavernous moon...

Congratulations, Calli! Super poems, all.

 

[annaswirls]

Congratulations at the finish line, miss 30/30.

and neo too . . . i missed neo . . . . . . and tzara, i think i missed tzara back there too . . . and . . .

oh, everyone who made it.

Yes! Congratulations! I enjoyed catching up with this thread!

Whattya say, Rainy day, you wanna go?

 

[annaswirls]

Chromium

Chromium. Shit.
All I can think of
is an electric horseman
and some Keno girl
hoovering a trailer hitch,

but if that ain't chemistry
I don't know what is.

bowing to the master

 

[flyguy69]

Catching up on this thread after considerable absence-- some really great stuff here! Congratulations to Neo and Calli, encouragement to Tzara and any others in the hunt, and welcome to arienette and any other fresh runners!

I feel like I should throw a party for ya'll! Is there a poet in the house?

 

[TheRainMan]

3-1

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[RhymeFairy]

Our song is on the radio
again, the one that sits me
in your lap, listening
as your whispers warm my ear,
as your hand cups my breast.
I don't feel the tears
falling on my cheeks
nor taste the salt
as it slips between my lips
but my heart shudders
and shrinks a little more
when I remember you
are yesterday's memory.

Great imagery here Sweets.

 

[TheRainMan]

3-2

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[arienette]

Catching up on this thread after considerable absence-- some really great stuff here! Congratulations to Neo and Calli, encouragement to Tzara and any others in the hunt, and welcome to arienette and any other fresh runners!

I feel like I should throw a party for ya'll! Is there a poet in the house?

Yay, thank you.

 

[TheRainMan]

3-3

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[Guest]

Congrats, Callie on another 30/30

arienette, good to see you trying again on the challenge

And I hear Liar is thinking about going again.


I'll try again in a couple of months, my life is about to get hectic and I don't feel like having my attempts number being higher than my poem number....like, *coughs, flyguy, coughs*

 

[arienette]

Congrats, Callie on another 30/30

arienette, good to see you trying again on the challenge

And I hear Liar is thinking about going again.


I'll try again in a couple of months, my life is about to get hectic and I don't feel like having my attempts number being higher than my poem number....like, *coughs, flyguy, coughs*

Yeah, Liar told me he may try again...How many times has he tried this?
And thank you, very very much.

 

[arienette]

3. But I made it to ten-or-so poems last time before I gave up.

So here we go...I'm gonna write title based poetry this time. I flip the New Cambridge Advanced Learner's Dictionary, and write a poem on whatever my finger lands on.

Ten isn't bad at all. I'm only at four, as you can see - I'm hoping to make it to ten!

I really like this idea, it's real cool - and you're always guaranteed to have a subject!

 

[flyguy69]

3. But I made it to ten-or-so poems last time before I gave up.




So here we go...I'm gonna write title based poetry this time. I flip the New Cambridge Advanced Learner's Dictionary, and write a poem on whatever my finger lands on.



Petri Dish

Inside the hermetic seal
of a nice and tidy CNN
syndicate cliché cast,
a nuicance grew to a skimrish,
a conflict, a crisis, a war.

The infection blooms so pretty,
because that's what a nuiscance do
in that sealed and nicely baking jar.
Perfectly prepped for maximum disaster.
But safely tucked away
in there.

Only in there,
right?

Welcome back, oh Bearer of False Witness. I'd say I missed you, but I was gone too!

What program do you use to create your graphic poems, btw?

 

[EriAliSaa]

I know you like the back of my knee
contort my body to see you
maybe once a week under foam, razor
and a rinse of warm water,
know you like the buttons
up the back of my dress

You tell me our pulse points
have been neglected I miss
that morning touch of perfume
slow down the side of my neck
and on each wrist, ear, elbow,
knee, ankle, a daily inventory
of vulnerable skin
where flesh is thin and blood runs
close to the edge of me

Do you remember how Steffi
would spray a fragrant cloud
and spin through the droplets
tossing the bottle onto the bed
with a wave right out the door?

I like that, a lot. Makes me want to go shower and get ready to go... well somewhere. Of course I would step on a errant childs toy, twist my ankle and curse cruel fate that I can not get showered and dressed like that.

 

[Liar]

What program do you use to create your graphic poems, btw?

Ah, that would be my almost legal copy of Photoshop.

 

[TheRainMan]

3-4

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[Dingus Guy]

Thanks for the mention V-Dust

Much appreciated comments too.

 

[arienette]

Big

pretty soon you will, just like me,
look down upon somebody just like you,

sprawled on a sun baked jetty, baited string in hand,
staring through her own madly dancing reflection
at tiny tracks in patches of sand,
where tiny monsters crawled to tug her trap

and wonder how it is you can't remember
the feeling of boards against your belly
or the way the beams creaked when
grown-ups passed by

pretty soon you will, just like me,
look down upon somebody just like you,
and wish it was as easy as tying bait to a string
and watching your reflection ripple
beneath a sun baked jetty

chase monsters while you can,
before they start chasing you

I'm absolutely loving this one!

 

[TheRainMan]

3-5

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[WickedEve]

one key too many
Thanks for the explanation your posted, maria!
Now it makes sense. You just need to add a little more to the poem.
I know what mean about getting the poem since you wrote it. lol I've done that before, and I ended up being the only who got it.

 

[bluerains]

me as well maria...I was total in another area ...hope you find your muse in this its really good for a start...
and ty eve for the feedback on The puppet dance..I had deleted it because it was vague as you said...but, it was posted anyway...
its about the longing and desire to find the fire while suffering the alone time waiting..until critical mass of energy felt by the universe ..kickstarts cupid...anyway I will be working on it also...thanks...

one key too many
Thanks for the explanation your posted, maria!
Now it makes sense. You just need to add a little more to the poem.
I know what mean about getting the poem since you wrote it. lol I've done that before, and I ended up being the only who got it.