Comments That Make Your Day

[ShelbyDawn57]

Just got this on my latest -- The Pulitzer. Definitely made my day.

For reading such happy stories, it always amazes me that I'm crying my eyes out two or three times when reading your work. It's a compliment, and a testament to the emotions evoked by your ability. You are a gifted writer Shelby, and your skill continues to improve with each tale. While I am inspired by your work, I'm still at the fledgling author stage I think. Thanks for sharing your stories here. I love your work!

 

[EmilyMiller]

Anonymous 24 minutes ago
Emily your writing always make everything seem as if your right there where the story is taking place. You have such a spin on words. Very nice job !!

— A Good Girl Gone Bad Ch. 02

 

[Stimtheone]

That first one made me chuckle. Reminds me of this comic

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

I guess I have to keep writing now.

A excellent story like all your ather stories. I have red most off them 3 or more time's I love that your stories have happy endings. I must say for a 55 year old man that is bedridden because of cancer and a finger fult on Google search that brought me the first story from you I can't wait for you to post the next one. Please continue to biring joy to people's lives with happy endings

 

[oneagainst]

It's strange but also wonderful to be in the middle of writing brand new adventures and then receive comments on earlier work, contrasting the characters as at one point in time with their reunion in the present story.

Alena's Game Ch. 17 comment from @goodwab (who has been kind enough to leave a breadcrumb trail of comments through the entire corpus, it seems):

"Is there anything more difficult than living consciously? Kudos to this brave and demanding author."

Yes, that was entirely the point of writing it in the first place.

 

[oneagainst]

https://www.literotica.com/s/kaylas-new-furniture-ch-06 - comment on the finale to the longest (elapsed) story in my backlog, finally closing out after being the very first thing I ever wrote. From @joy_of_cooking :

"[An] ending I have never seen in a mind control story. Fantastic. Looking forward to your next story"

I've been playing around a lot with those themes in the new epic. Go live date for Ch 1 is a week from now, as part of @Omenainen 's Pink Orchid 2024. So excited.

 

[StillStunned]

Several more comments on Too Late Not to Fuck:

From @Fatdog25:

Sal is just full of surprises. Makes me wonder what else she has planned.

You teed up the next chapter nicely, I'm looking forward to reading it. I have really enjoyed this series overall. Great work, worth more than 5️

From @newporter56:

Great story, can't wait till the next part

A particularly flattering one from Anonymous, who I think might be my mum:

God! The visuals going through my head as I read the story were so graphic and life like. You're an amazing writer, you know just how much action to sprinkle in to keep me on edge and look forward to your next sentence. I'm going to read some of your other stories next. Again, great job.

And from @Devinter:

As always, extremely well written. However, I have to say that the characters felt a bit like exaggerated versions of their previous selves. Almost like caricatures. Sal felt sort of mean this time around - much more so than the light teasing of previous chapters. And the main character seems to become less and less comfortable and - dare I say - masculine, despite having more experience with these two women. Obviously, there's an audience for that sort of thing and they will certainly find this chapter hotter than the previous three, but it unfortunately took me out of it a little bit. Not something anyone would notice unless they had followed the series closely, however. Still loved the writing, though! Your way with words is spectacular.

Thanks, all!

@Devinter: what you noted was actually deliberate, on both counts (although I'm quite willing to admit that I might not have got the balance right).

First, the narrator is mostly vanishing into the background as the stories progress. The stories are about Sal, and Big Brother is essentially just an abstract meatbag. I mean, four stories in and he doesn't even have a name, let alone any personality.

Second, Sal is teasing her brother to bond with Aisha. If you look at the scenes where it's just her and the narrator, she's a lot nicer to him, I think. I also think it's a perfectly natural dynamic where people are trying to make a newcomer comfortable. It all builds up to the point where Sal makes her move on Aisha.

Thanks for pointing it out, though. Like I said, it's deliberate, but perhaps I took it too far.

 

[Devinter]

Thanks for pointing it out, though. Like I said, it's deliberate, but perhaps I took it too far.

Barely such a thing on Literotica. And I had no idea it was deliberate. Sal is a bit nicer to him when they're alone but even there it felt like you pushed it further than in previous chapters. It's your story, and your writing is spectacular, and people seem to like the direction things are going! I find you brave for writing in the incest category and moving towards such dangerous territory as pushing the sibling out a bit, rather than the other way around. Few authors would be able to pull that off without significant backlash - but you might be one of them, honestly!

The reason I spoke up is because I thought it was accidental. And because - as silly as it may sound - for me, the first three episodes were hot, and this one just had the opposite effect on me. But that's because I am not into the kinks you're moving towards, and in general don't like stories where two people are established as 'cute together' and then a third character comes along and a switch/break-up happens, and not for any other reason - so please don't second-guess yourself or anything!

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

Several more comments on Too Late Not to Fuck:

From @Fatdog25:


From @newporter56:


A particularly flattering one from Anonymous, who I think might be my mum:


And from @Devinter:

Thanks, all!

@Devinter: what you noted was actually deliberate, on both counts (although I'm quite willing to admit that I might not have got the balance right).

First, the narrator is mostly vanishing into the background as the stories progress. The stories are about Sal, and Big Brother is essentially just an abstract meatbag. I mean, four stories in and he doesn't even have a name, let alone any personality.

Second, Sal is teasing her brother to bond with Aisha. If you look at the scenes where it's just her and the narrator, she's a lot nicer to him, I think. I also think it's a perfectly natural dynamic where people are trying to make a newcomer comfortable. It all builds up to the point where Sal makes her move on Aisha.

Thanks for pointing it out, though. Like I said, it's deliberate, but perhaps I took it too far.

Almost like the narrator isn’t really the MC. Hmmm, that would be clever.

 

[StillStunned]

Almost like the narrator isn’t really the MC. Hmmm, that would be clever.

One day people will appreciate my genius.

Or maybe I just prefer to devote my writing time to thinking about sexy intelligent women instead of men.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

One day people will appreciate my genius.

Or maybe I just prefer to devote my writing time to thinking about sexy intelligent women instead of men.

Sexy intelligent women are so much more fun than sexy intelligent men. Perhaps that's one reason I want to be one so badly...

 

[onehitwanda]

Or maybe I just prefer to devote my writing time to thinking about sexy intelligent women instead of men.

The ULA approves this message.

 

[StillStunned]

After @samhasstories made my day by being the 2000th reader to rate Too Cold Not to Fuck, he then went on to leave the following lovely comment:

Short and sweet. You somehow manage to get a good amount of character (among other things) into Sal in an impressively small window. 5 stars.

Thanks again!

 

[MediocreAuthor]

An awesome one by @WeShallUnclench:

WeShallUnclenchabout 3 hours ago
Several things I really loved about this:

- for the fight at the beginning, even if it was just the intro, I enjoy that you made the monsters reasonably smart - plently of writers would not have bothered with that and just made up some mindless horde of giant lemmings, eager to be slain. I even got the sense that some of the beasts might have been SMARTER than Stavos.

- great entry for our eldritch abomination! With the eyes and facial features apearing, while showing off that her physical form is really, well, just for show, cynically playing with the desires of our rather simple minded virgin swordsman.

- Usually, BJ and graphic descriptions of them are a big turn-off for me, but you made that bit tons of fun, weaving in the "oh shit" factor with hints at what's really going on ("thousand tongues"). What makes the scene so good for me is that it is in a way a paridy of "the perfect blowjob" as an unexperienced young man might imagine it. She is playing with the myth of the bj, basically, and even this is really about her own playtime and pleasure.

- I also enjoyed how you played with her nature as a powerful non-human by showcasting her perfect indifference towards things a mortal might find so big and important. Great quest of revenge? She just teleports and immobilizes the target, no problem. Killing women and children, why not? Impersonating a long lost love, what fun cosplay! Basically, with her power and access to infinite universes, everything is interchangeable and expendable for her. The last bit with impersonating the blind sister is a nice touch as well. Even if she is genuinely benevolent towards him because he is her favorite toy (and playing the gentle second tradwife for 30 to 40 years is nothing to her lifespan), she still plays by her own rules and her perspective on things is very different from his.

Thank you so much!

 

[Rob_Royale]

I got this one today. There was more included concerning other aspects of the story, but this part of it means the most to me. The fact that the reader liked and empathized with my characters enough to form an opinion like that makes me happy.

xxxx about 2 hours ago
These two are good together and are meant to be together.

 

[StillStunned]

Anonymous left this one on Too Late Not to Fuck:

Nicely done! Thank you.

And later this one too:

I haven't pulsed so quickly in ages, like a fish out of water.

Which I assume is a compliment, but I can't be sure.

Anyway, thank you, both anonymous readers!

 

[onehitwanda]

email:

The story Occulatation just has to be your 'magnum opus.' I think it was beautifully conceived and written. Thank you! On a more personal note, Occultation struck a chord with me, letting me feel happy that there are, of course, many overly cautious people in life. It took me forty seven years, two wives, and four other relationships to learn my lesson about not being afraid to speak up. The story captured that perfectly. And the way that the couple reconciled was exceptionally well done.

Which is nice, because I got a lot of scorn from people about how I wrote the main character's thought process in Occultation.

Which is kind of funny, because the story is my story - just with dangly bits added and names changed to protect the innocent. People refer to the main character as "painfully stupid" or "fucking dumb" or "holy fuck how can anyone be this obtuse..."

Yeah. I was. Cheers, guys. My characters got a happy ending, I got a different life trajectory. I prefer my outcome, but that doesn't make the memories any easier.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

email:



Which is nice, because I got a lot of scorn from people about how I wrote the main character's thought process in Occultation.

Which is kind of funny, because the story is my story - just with dangly bits added and names changed to protect the innocent. People refer to the main character as "painfully stupid" or "fucking dumb" or "holy fuck how can anyone be this obtuse..."

Yeah. I was. Cheers, guys. My characters got a happy ending, I got a different life trajectory. I prefer my outcome, but that doesn't make the memories any easier.

I’d offer to come hug you, but based on you location, that would involve a lot of swimming.

 

[joy_of_cooking]

People refer to the main character as "painfully stupid" or "fucking dumb" or "holy fuck how can anyone be this obtuse..."

Oh how I resemble these remarks...

 

[onehitwanda]

I’d offer to come hug you, but based on you location, that would involve a lot of swimming.

heh, thanks. I'm happy with who I am and where I am. But the one who got away was one of those Fae creatures who you glimpse maybe once and once only. She lives in Canada now and is living her best life, from what I've heard. My life would have been wildly different. But in some ways the bittersweetness of what-if is better than what likely would have been, given how unutterably immature I was when I knew her. And now she'll forever be the blue-eyed twenty-five year old I kissed; that's enough magic for me.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

heh, thanks. I'm happy with who I am and where I am. But the one who got away was one of those Fae creatures who you glimpse maybe once and once only. She lives in Canada now and is living her best life, from what I've heard. My life would have been wildly different. But in some ways the bittersweetness of what-if is better than what likely would have been, given how unutterably immature I was when I knew her. And now she'll forever be the blue-eyed twenty-five year old I kissed; that's enough magic for me.

Hang onto those memories. They truly are like a fine wine, getting better with time, flourishing with each remembrance.

 

[StillStunned]

A couple of new ones on Too Late Not to Fuck.

@Smuttyandfun wrote:

5 Stars and a favorite. Super hot, and so well written. Now I'm looking forward to see what they get up to next!

Anonymous added:

Very hot story! He should have fucked his siter more if only to be consistent with the category, Incest.

Looking back, this is probably true. I suppose I was focused too much on Sal's plan to seduce Aisha and forgot about the category. But it all leads up to the threesome in the end, so that's my defence.

And @UnquietDreams helped Fairytale of New York to maintain its high comment ratio with this kind snippet:

Wonderful little fairy tale. Out of the park, bud.

Thanks, all!

 

[samhasstories]

My old pal Anonymous commented on the latest Vacation with the Marshals entry:

I followed these series for couple years. Glad he continued it. Hope for more

Sort of a dig in there probably about such a long gap I had between entries, but it's gratifying to see someone's been sticking with it.

 

[ShelbyDawn57]

From one of my biggest fans:

--The Hundred Year Storm

I've just finished reading it for the second time and I literally had to fight to not cry when Ben gave Crissy the necklace withe the family brand. Then one more when Crissy was on the train and called Danny that she is coming back home. BTW, Ben = the best dad ever I'm planning on reading 'When wishes come true' next, but I don't know if it safe doing it at work

 

[TarnishedPenny]

I’d be embarrassed to repeat it here, but a sincere shoutout to Anonymous for his or her latest. I often cringe waiting for an Anon comment to open, but this one made me see the errors of cynicism. Merçi!